https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-story 2022-03-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/visually-i-enjoyed-the-animation 2022-03-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/visually-i-enjoyed-the-characters 2022-03-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/visually-i-enjoyed-the-ilustration 2022-03-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/illustrations-are-easy-to-interpret.--transition-words-could-be-better-thought-out-as-to-placement-%26-size.--finding-his-friend-under-a-bush-is-somewhat-far-fetched-and-could-be-more-plausible-if-it-was-in-a-real-venue-in-the-real-world. 2022-02-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/video-presentation-was-very-choppy-and--rough-draft-ish.-story-has-right-idea-in-beginning-but-fails-to-satisfy-his-need-for-others.-do-friends-from-far-away-stay-near-him-now%2C-so-he-is-not-alone%3F--yes-he-is-cured-of-cancer%2C-but-is-he-accured-of-loneliness-in-some-way%3F-%E2%80%9Cand-then%E2%80%9D-way-too-overused.-figures-in-drawings-need-to-be-bigger-%26-easier-to-interpret-in-some-cases.- 2022-02-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/video-presentation-was-very-choppy-and--rough-draft-ish.-story-has-right-idea-in-beginning-but-fails-to-satisfy-his-need-for-others.-do-friends-from-far-away-stay-near-him-now%2C-so-he-is-not-alone%3F--yes-he-is-cured-of-cancer%2C-but-is-he-accured-of-loneliness-in-some-way%3F-%E2%80%9Cand-then%E2%80%9D-way-too-overused.-figures-in-drawings-need-to-be-bigger-%26-easier-to-interpret-in-some-cases.- 2022-02-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/forgot-to-mention-the-ending-moral-to-the-story-did-not-flow-from-the-story.-how-is-the-happily-ever-after-bit-resolved%3F-- 2022-02-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/loved-the-illustrations-that-one-needs-to-interpret-from-the-sparse-renderings.--voice-was-difficult-to-understand-with-music-background%3B--needed-to-be-easy-to-hear-%26-understand.-i-had-to-replay-ending-for-moral! 2022-02-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/loved-the-story!-yes%2C-we-all-need-to-be-open-to-others-ideas.-well-animated! 2022-01-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wonderful!--i-really-enjoyed-the-illustrations-and-the-way-the-animation-worked.--great-story-line-and-lovely-narration.--i'm-impressed! 2022-01-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-was-the-happy-ending-in-a-story-with-human-eating-monsters.-very-wholesome.-5-pizzas-out-of-5.-%F0%9F%8D%95%F0%9F%8D%95%F0%9F%8D%95%F0%9F%8D%95%F0%9F%8D%95 2021-12-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-was-the-happy-ending-in-a-story-with-human-eating-monsters.-very-wholesome.-5-pizzas-out-of-5.-%F0%9F%8D%95%F0%9F%8D%95%F0%9F%8D%95%F0%9F%8D%95%F0%9F%8D%95 2021-12-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-was-the-wholesome-pizza-shop-that-opened- 2021-12-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-well-made%2C-and-the-narration-is-good-too%2C-with-little-stuttering-or-hesitation. 2021-12-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-absolutely-love-this-story.-i-saw-the-second-story-board-for-this-one-and-thought-it-was-a-really-great-idea.-i-love-how-this-story-grew-to-be-something-even-better!-it-couldn't-have-though-with-out-the-imagination-and-talent-poured-onto-it-though! 2021-12-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-you-story-concept-and-art!-i-would-have-liked-to-see-more-of-brewing-potions-and-such-though.-but-otherwise-very-good. 2021-12-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-really-cool-that-you-were-able-to-make-the-drawings-of-the-characters-constant-throughout-the-video.-great-job! 2021-12-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-so-unique!-the-attention-to-detail-you-put-in-when-illustrating-is-amazing!-the-use-of-color-for-the-human-world-is-great%2C-and-making-the-shadows-opaque-is-so-well-done.-the-way-the-illustrations-go-with-the-storyline-really-makes-it-stand-out.-very-impressive! 2021-12-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-great-story!-i-love-that-the-two-groups-were-able-to-put-aside-their-differences-and-work-together.-the-story-has-a-great-beginning%2C-middle%2C-and-end.-really-good-job! 2021-12-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-you-used-sound-effects-that-matched-the-pictures-really-good-and-i-like-how-your-pictures-were-animated. 2021-12-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-poignant-and-wonderful-submission!--you-are-very-talented-and-have-a-great-future-ahead-of-you%2C-keep-creating!- 2021-12-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/saucy-young-englishman-let's-goooooooooooooo!!!!-ugh%E2%80%94why-are-all-of-y'all-so-good-at-roping-me-in-with-these-titles%E2%80%94they're-incredible.-anyways%E2%80%94super-cool-stuff%E2%80%94i-love-the-setting%2C-and-it's-always-fun-messing-with-the-idea-of-corruption.-add-to-that-the-magic-and-hot-dang-that's-one-fun-story.-now%2C-i-do-have-some-reservations%2C-namely%2C-this-is-not-a-5-minute-short%E2%80%94it%E2%80%94it's-just-not-gonna-happen%E2%80%94the-summary-itself-was-basically-5-minutes%E2%80%94this-honestly-might-not-even-be-a-movie%E2%80%94i'm-getting-series-vibes.-that's-in-no-way-a-bad-thing%E2%80%94save-this-idea-for-those-kinds-of-stuffs.- 2021-12-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/aw-man%E2%80%94i-really-just-typed-%22incredibly-work%22%E2%80%94gosh%E2%80%94i-blame-you-for-leavin'-me-floored.-i'm-literate%2C-i-swear. 2021-12-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/incredibly-work%E2%80%94hats-off-to-you-for-givin'-it-the-full-foley-treatment%E2%80%94the-sound-design-was-top-notch%2C-and-i-loved-how-the-story-was-for-the-most-part-void-of-dialogue.-finding-good-sound-effects-is-already-hard-enough%2C-so-i-can't-imagine-the-endeavor-you-all-went-through-to-make-them-yourselves.-as-for-the-story%E2%80%94it's-just%E2%80%94it's-very-nice-and-subtle%E2%80%94it's-nuanced-in-an-everyday-life-kind-of-way.-like%2C-this-is-something-that-could-feasibly-occur-in-reality%2C-but-there's-still-something-a-bit-magical-about-it.-super-good%E2%80%94i-don't-really-know-how-the-judging-stuff-works%E2%80%94but-i-hope-you're-up-on-the-podium. 2021-12-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-finally-figured-it-out%2C-you-used-the-song-from-from-the-youtube-short-children-in-the-middle.-love-it! 2021-12-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-it's-very-detailed-and-has-a-lot-of-thought-put-into-it.-i-also-love-the-dialogue-its-very-interactive.-- 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-its-simple-and-shows-a-lot-of-detail.-i-like-the-idea-of-giving-them-abs%2C-personally-think-its-funny. 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-the-story.-i-like-how-the-drawings-are-nice-and-simple.- 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-story-but-why-were-electronics-banned-and-i-feel-like-the-story-kinda-changed-its-point-halfway-through-the-video. 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-your-story-was-great!-i-also-think-you-maybe-could-have-added-sound-effects. 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-good-and-interesting-but-how-did-he-slip-and-who-exactly-were-the-friends. 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-audio-adds-a-nice-touch-where-it-explains-the-story-without-any-narration.-i-also-think-the-artwork-is-nice.-good-job! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-work-is-very-cute-and-the-story-is-simple-in-a-good-way.-you-guys-have-something-great%2C-keep-at-it! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/loved-your-sound-design-and-film-grammar%2C-well-done.-the-story-is-solid-i-only-wish-it-was-fleshed-out-more-as-i-was-enjoying-it-a-lot.-loved-the-vibrant-colors-as-well. 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-was-really-well-done!-the-artsy-toe-was-upper-cool-and-i-really-enjoyed-all-of-the-character-designs-and-the-colors-you-used.-i-think-there-could-have-been-some-dialogue-or-sound-effects-but-overall-you-did-a-fantastic-job! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-was-extremely-unique-and-interesting.-you-artwork-was-really-great-too-and-it-really-engaged-me-into-the-plot.-sometimes-i-felt-like-the-images-could-have-shown-off-the-story-a-little-better-but-overall-you-did-a-great-job! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-was-great.-it-had-a-lot-of-comedic-elements-they-i-loved.-i-enjoyed-how-the-story-was-very-unique-and-outlandish-and-how-you-were-able-to-make-it-work-well. 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-fantastic!-it-went-a-nice-and-beyond-expectations.-at-first-when-i-saw-the-video-was-12-minutes-i-couldn%E2%80%99t-believe-my-eyes%2C-and-you-filled-all-that-time-with-great-drawings-and-a-really-engaging-story.-great-job! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-voice-acting-but-i-think-some-parts-of-the-story-are-a-little-unclear.-for-example%2C-why-was-all-of-a-sudden-scared-of-the-monster%3F-did-the-monster-do-something%3F-what-had-changed%3F 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-idea-maybe-the-storyline-can-be-a-bit-more-clear.- 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-but-maybe-the-drawings-can-be-more-clear-for-the-audience-to-understand-better. 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-style! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-style! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-story-came-full-circle-at-the-end.-visually%2C-i-enjoyed-how-your-drawings-established-setting-and-worked-well-to-communicate-your-story! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-what-the-amazing-use-of-dialogue-and-voice-acting.-visually%2C-i-enjoyed-the-character-expressions%2C-which-in-combination-with-the-voice-acting%2C-made-for-a-very-emotional-story! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-you-used-the-sakura-tree-as-a-symbol-of-friendship.-visually%2C-i-enjoyed-the-amazing-character-art-style-and-expressions! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-the-most-interested-about-your-story-is-the-plot-arc-and-the-concept-of-using-origami-in-general!-visually%2C-i-enjoyed-the-expressions-of-the-characters-and-the-simple-art-style- 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/bro-this-was-actually-funny-this-was-my-favorite-out-of-all-of-them-and-there-is-no-competition-whatsoever%2C-publish-this-to-youtube-or-sum-bruh-this-was-funny-and-deserves-to-win 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-overall-really-enjoyed-this-story!-the-art-style-was-cool-along-with-the-actual-storyline-itself.-i-would-like-to-see-this-as-a-movie-or-maybe-even-a-series-one-day!-cool-project! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-storyboarding-and-visual-storytelling%2C-i-loved-the-moment-when-the-cat-touched-his-face.-i-also-appreciate-your-attempt-to-remove-narration-as-much-as-possible.-the-drawings-really-brought-your-world-to-life.-also-it-was-well-edited-and-paced.-bravo! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-loved-the-moral-of-this-story%2C-well-done-on-the-delivery-as-well. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-really-fantastic-artwork-and-animation%2C-this-was-very-well-done.-you-should-be-proud-of-this-work.-also-loved-your-delivery-of-the-narration 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work%2C-super-clear-and-engaging.-i-loved-your-use-of-perspective-especially-in-certain-shots.-also-great-expression-on-the-faces%2C-felt-like-i-was-watching-characters-that-were-real.-well-done! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/well-done-pulling-this-story-together.-i-loved-the-original-concept-and-the-way-you-added-details-to-your-drawing-to-bring-it-to-life.-love-the-human%2Fdog-transitions-as-well.-the-pacing-was-a-tiny-bit-slow-but-that's-my-only-critique. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fun-and-funny-story%2C-lots-of-detail.-i-liked-the-characters-and-the-message-in-the-end.-the-animations-are-really-cute-and-fun-to-watch.-- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-cool-story%2C-i-loved-how-his-work-ended-up-on-the-news.-the-plot-device-of-the-sun-burning-was-really-neat.-the-drawings-were-well-done-and-good-at-communicating-the-story.-vocal-delivery-was-a-little-flat-but-i-was-still-engaged. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-loved-the-drawing-style-in-this-and-the-way-you-edited-to-build-tension.-it-was-short-and-sweet%2C-well-done 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story%2C-i-like-how-hopeful-it-is%2C-in-a-very-unexpected-way.--your-drawings-are-cool%2C-they-draw-out-sybil's-personality.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-fun-and-great-vocal-delivery%2C-i-also-noticed-your-improved-the-clarity-of-your-story-over-the-program...the-drawings-were-well-done-and-communicated-the-ideas-effectively.-bravo 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-really-funny-and-has-a-great-moral-at-the-end.-i-like-the-cats'-personalities.-the-drawings-are-really-cool-and-bring-the-story-alive.-- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-your-story-really-came-alive-with-the-drawings%2C-they-are-so-dynamic.-i-liked-also-how-you-only-sometimes-used-color%2C-so-that-made-the-point-stand-out-more.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-really-cool...it-felt-abstract-and-meditative.-i-just-loved-it....i-wasn't-bothered-by-the-vagueness-of-it%2C-in-fact-i-enjoyed-having-to-think.-well-done! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-is-so-much-in-this-story-that-i-absolutely-love.-first-off%2C-i-love-the-premise-that-steve-is-treated-kindly-by-everyone-else%2C-but-he-doesn%E2%80%99t-actually-have-anybody-that-he-considers-a-friend.-i-also-like-that-james-isn%E2%80%99t-trying-to-take-advantage-of-steve-and-his-power.-the-premise-of-a-super-school-is-very-intriguing%2C-and-that-just-because-you-have-a-superpower-doesn%E2%80%99t-mean-you%E2%80%99re-automatically-admitted-into-super-school.-i-found-it-very-interesting-that-steve-winded-up-where-he-started%2C-but-that-he-has-changed-and-grown-from-his-adventure.-i-would%E2%80%99ve-liked-to-know-what-the-other-rare-powers-were%2C-but-everything-else-is-fantastic. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-have-followed-your-story-the-last-couple-of-weeks-and-you've-done-a-wonderful-job-of-tightening-the-story-to-play-more-succinctly.-your-use-of-music-was-well-executed-to-heighten-the-emotion-at-the-climax-of-your-story.-well-done-overall! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-it-was-a-very-good-story-and-the-drawings-were-great!-you-guys-did-a-very-good-job-on-your-story! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-when-aster-goes-to-the-old-dead-tree-and-make-lies.-i-loved-your-drownings-they-where-really-good--and-they-have-a-lot-of-details- 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-liked-most-was-how-she-saved-the-earth-and-became-its-hero.-visually-i-enjoyed-all-the-detail-put-into-it. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-this-was-a-really-good-story-and-i-liked-the-drawings-- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-idea-of-the-mushrooms-mind-controling-the-lumberjack-visually-i-enjoyed-the-tree-opening-the-door 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-drawings-could-be-better 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-liked-most-was-how-steve-didn't-get-expelled-because-he-was-helping-the-other-students.-i-visually-enjoyed-all-the-pictures. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-well-done.-your-artwork-has-just-the-right-level-of-detail%2C-and-your-music-choices-support-the-story-line.-this-feels-like-the-first-chapter-in-an-epic-story%2C-and-i-look-forward-to-seeing-the-rest.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-this-was-a-meaningful-story-and-i-really-liked-the-twist-that-intelligence-was-looked-down-upon.-i-wanted-to-understand-more-about-why-that-was-the-case.-the-dialogue-and-narration-was-very-clear-and-easy-to-understand.-i-thought-that-the-emotions-of-the-boys-felt-very-authentic. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawings-are-incredible-and-add-such-a-strong%2C-visual-element-to-your-storytelling.-i-was-drawn-into-your-story-from-the-beginning-shots-showing-the-snake-sisters'-eyes-opening-and-am-left-wanting-to-hear-what-their-next-adventure-is-with-their-new-friend-sheri.-well-done! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-idea-of-a-tree-who-loves-drinking-tea!-the-artwork%2Fstoryboards-are-really-strong.--they-are-simple-and-clear-and-really-help-the-viewer-know-where-to-look-and-what-is-important-in-the-story.--i'd-like-to-know-more-about-the-mushrooms-and-their-role-in-the-story. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-story-and-drawings.-i-like-the-portal-scene.-maybe-consider-putting-in-more-sound-effects-to-go-with-the-background-precussion. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-story-and-drawings.-i-like-the-one-person-narration.-does-the-part-where-he-goes-to-the-shop-to-eat-push-the-story-along%3F-it's-a-cool-part-but-maybe-consider-that-be-the-part-where-he-thinks-and-then-learns-how-to-save-the-bees. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/my-favorite-story 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story-but-try-thinking-of-a-story-without-copying-someone-else 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-your-video-it's-great.-do-the-sound-effects-after-you-talk-so-it-add-spice 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-story-but-make-sure-you-make-it-obvious-that-they-live-in-california. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/loved-this-original-story-and-the-elements-you-added-to-bring-it-to-life%2C-the-frame-of-the-arm-slice-was-awesome.-it-felt-like-a-whole-world-i-was-entering-when-i-hit-play...really-good-use-of-film-grammar%2C-clearly-a-lot-of-work-went-into-this. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/loved-this-original-story-and-the-way-you-pulled-it-together.-i-also-loved-the-attention-to-detail-in-some-of-the-art.-the-dinner-scene-was-my-favorite-part%2C-loved-the-voices!-well-done 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-work.-i'm-in-love-with-this-teddy-character%2C-they-way-you-drew-him-in-the-drawer-with-his-little-eyes-was-my-favorite-image-in-the-story.-your-artwork-looked-professional-and-your-story-was-very-clear%2C-concise-and-well-edited.-i-think-this-would-make-a-fantastic-children's-book...you-should-be-very-proud-of-this-achievement 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-very-moving-story%2C-i-enjoyed-every-second-of-it.-i-found-it-very-creative-how-you-wove-your-moral-into-the-story-and-backstory...the-story-was-well-paced-and-held-my-attention.-most-importantly-it-felt-like-an-honest-story-and-so-thank-you-for-sharing-this. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/loved-the-creativity-of-this-story-and-the-work-you-put-into-the-art.-i-loved-the-%22lions%2C-tiger-and-bears%22-part-%3A))-it-really-felt-like-an--original-world-you-pulled-me-into-which-says-a-lot.-i-was-satisfied-with-the-ending%2C-well-done!! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-good-work%2C-loved-the-sound-effects-and-clarity-of-your-story.-it-was-simple-but-effective%2C-i-only-wish-it-were-longer-so-i-could-get-to-know-your-characters-more.-well-done! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-must-say-i'm-impressed-with-how-your-group-evolved-during-the-program%2C-your-story-improved-each-week.-this-was-by-far-your-best-version-and-i-was-really-thrilled-with-your-vocal-delivery-and-attention-to-detail.-your-art-%26-story-worked-together-very-well%2C-it-felt-polished.-your-moral-is-fantastic-and-you-did-a-great-job-trying-to-bring-it-to-life-bravo! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/beautiful-artwork-and-an-original-concept%2C-you-should-be-proud-of-this-work.-i-loved-the-calm-tone-and-pacing-of-the-story-as-well%2C-the-music-was-well-chosen. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-story-and-the-characters-you've-created.-it's-rare-that-in-2min-i-can-grow-attached-to-a-character-like-this.-very-well-done...it-was-short%2C-clear-and-to-the-point.-my-favorite-part-was-when-they-burst-out-of-their-shells.-i-was-also-very-moved-i-think-because-of-how-well-you-drew-the-eyes. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-incredible.-well-crafted%2C-thoughtful-and-creative.-the-part-when-the-plane-crashed-really-hit-me...the-music-suited-the-images-so-well.-the-pacing-was-picture-perfect...you-must-be-very-proud-of-this. 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-awesome%2C-i-had-so-much-fun-watching-this.-your-vocal-delivery-really-brought-the-story-to-life-and-made-my-laugh-multiple-times%2C-and-the-art-was-well-done-(especially-liked-the-over-the-shoulder-shots).-most-importantly-i-loved-your-story%2C-the-two-story-points-that-really-grabbed-me-was-%231)-when-the-client-disrespected-her-((many-people-can-relate-to-this!!))-and-%232)-when-she-decides-to-stay-small-at-the-end.-that-really-hit-me.-really-glad-i-watched-this-one.-thank-you! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-did-a-very-good-job-using-this-story-to-tell-such-an-important-lesson.-the-story-was-well-paced-and-easy-to-follow.-great-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-you-should-be-very-proud-of-this-work.-your-story-was-clear%2C-well-paced-and-delivered-the-moral-effectively.-your-art-was-very-engaging-and-showed-a-strong-command-of-color-and-perspective-(especially-when-you-showed-the-recording-studios).-i-also-loved-the-variety-of-voices-you-wove-into-the-video-it-made-it-come-to-life.-i-really-felt-for-your-characters-by-then-end-and-was-thrilled-to-see-them-with-their-children%2C-which-says-a-lot-as-you-did-all-this-in-%3C-5min.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/learning-confidence-and-how-to-stand-up-for-yourself-are-great-lessons-to-learn.-good-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-a-main-character-having-to-overcome-a-moral-struggle.-its-pretty-cool-that-while-he-starts-out-as-a-villain%2C-he-still-has-a-conscience-and-feels-remorse.-it's-inspiring-that-by-the-end%2C-he-uses-his-love-of-cereal-to-take-what-used-to-be-an-evil-organization%2C-to-create-something-he-loves. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-that-the-grandmother-took-it-upon-herself-to-solve-her-problems-and-did-not-give-up.-the-fact-that-you-made-her-strong-and-capable-was-really-cool.-great-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-of-strings-controlling-people-is-interesting.-i-found-it-inspiring-when-jade-learned-to-lead-people%2C-and-stop-using-them-for-her-own-gain.-good-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/all-of-the-obstacles-in-this-story-were-very-real-and-relatable. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-plot-of-this-story-is-both-sad%2C-and-thought-provoking.-it-inspires-us-to-be-kind-and-accept-and-support-others-who-have-differences.-great-message! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-drawings-stood-out-and-were-composed-for-each-story-beat.-i-found-it-interesting-that-the-resolution-was-a-lot-darker-and-the-ending-wasn't-happy. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/steven-is-a-very-sympathetic-character-and-i-like-that 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-a-really-interesting-idea-to-use-a-messy-room-as-an-obstacle-the-character-has-to-overcome.-the-lesson-learned-at-the-end-is-also-great.-good-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/frist-off%2C-your-drawings-were-amazing!-great-job!-i-loved-your-story-as-well-and-it-was-obviously-very-well-thought-out-and-detailed.-amazing-job!- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-3d-elements-were-really-interesting-and-made-this-project-stand-out-more. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-so-good!-the-drawings-were-so-beautiful-and-the-story-was-clear-and-detailed%2C-great-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-growth-the-character-experiences-throughout-this-story-is-well-done.-by-the-end-i-was-rooting-for-him.-great-job. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-just-insanely-good.-i-looked-forward-to-watching-your-story-play-out-every-week-and-it-did-not-disappoint.-your-drawings-were-amazing-and-you-showed-so-much-with-so-little-color.-the-story-was-so-clear-and-didn't-even-need-words-to-understand.-seriously-amazing-job 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-how-detailed-your-story-was%2C-and-how-steeky's-growth-through-the-story-didn't-feel-rushed. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-of-an-awful-human-being-changed-into-something-he-does-not-value-is-great!-i-enjoyed-that-the-main-character-had-to-experience-life-as-a-chicken-and-the-experience-taught-him-compassion.-good-job! 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-was-so-well-done-and-easy-to-follow-and-your-art-and-style-of-drawing-were-amazing!-i've-loved-to-see-the-progression-the-last-few-weeks%2C-great-job 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-fun-to-watch!-you-did-a-really-good-job-making-the-character-likeable%2C-and-put-them-into-situations-where-he-has-to-grow.-the-narration-and-sound-effects-were-also-well-done.-great-job%2C-i-enjoyed-watching. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-story-but-maybe-you-should-make-some-of-the-scenes-quiet-because-it's-pretty-loud.-great-sound-effects 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/when-i-watch-this-story-i-was-just-wowed-by-how-good-this-was-great-work-i-just-have-1-suggestion-give-your-edited-a-raise-he-or-she-did-better-than-the-other-weeks-so-great-job-editor 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-story-it-is-very-well-organized-i-noticed-that-you-used-the-story-spine-what-i-found-most-intresting-about-your-story-is-the-drawings-very-good-i-understand-this-story-it-is-very-good 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-good-drawings 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-plot-of-this-story-is-fantastic!-it-has-multiple-layers%2C-and-morals-to-it.-really-well-done! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-a-very-cute-story-with-great-artwork.-great-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-idea-was-really-interesting!-the-challenges-the-characters-overcome-were-compelling.-great-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-time-traveling-watch-is-a-unique-plot-device.-i'm-a-little-confused-why-the-dad's-in-a-black-ops-fbi-prison.-it-would-have-been-cool-to-see-the-monsters-pulled-out-of-the-portal-and-into-the-fbi-facility-as-part-of-the-climax. 2021-12-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-art-work.-also-your-voice-is-very-clear 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-was-really-entertaining!-the-idea-of-the-wall-being-alive-and-helping-the-main-character-was-really-original.-great-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-work.-your-story-was-exciting%2C-creative-and-moving-which-is-a-rare-combination.-i-was-hooked-from-end-to-end.-the-visuals-worked-well-and-in-act-3-they-really-helped-build-tension.-loves-the-pov-shots.-you-should-be-proud-of-this-work. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-underlying-moral-of-this-story.-what-i-took-from-it-is-that-money-does-not-solve-our-problems%2C-but-working-together-gets-the-job-done.-great-story! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-a-story-with-a-cliff-hanger%2C-this-really-felt-like-the-beginning-of-a-series-of-movies.-you-did-really-well-building-up-the-characters-and-explaining-their-fears.-and-anxieties.-great-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-journey-alex-went-on%2C-going-from-being-uncomfortable%2C-to-feeling-safe-and-accepting-herself-was-well-done.-its-always-nice-when-a-story-has-a-happy-ending! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-loved-how-you-introduced-your-character.-the-illustrations-are-amazing-and-very-easy-to-understand.-your-story-is-fantastic-and-the-way-you-all-voiced-the-characters-was-truly-fantastic!!! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this.-this%E2%80%94is%E2%80%94this-is-perfect.-you've-done-it.-it's-amazing.-i-have-no-qualms.-the-characters-are-so-appealing%E2%80%94the-design-is-so-simple-yet-striking.-uwu-cute%E2%80%94they're-like-if-birds-were-those-low-effort-halloween-ghost-sheet-costumes.-it-reminds-me-of-all-of-the-storybook-animations-by-weston-woods-studios%E2%80%94i'm-particularly-reminded-of-i-want-my-hat-back%2C-this-is-not-my-hat%2C-and-we-found-a-hat.-also%E2%80%94the-concept%E2%80%94just%E2%80%94the-top-hat%E2%80%94the-moral-choice-of-saving-the-hat-or-the-bird-(i-wish-we-could-do-a-spiderman-save-both-option)%E2%80%94him-putting-on-the-lady-bird's-hat-while-rescuing-her.-literally%E2%80%94if-y'all-took-first-place-i-would-not-be-mad-in-the-slightest%E2%80%94on-the-contrary%2C-i'd-be-elated.-clearest-story.-most-appealing-character-design.-100%2F10.-5%E2%98%85.-i-only-wish-i'd-come-up-with-this.-if-ever-you-find-an-animated-short-in-the-future-with-an-identical-plot-and-characters%E2%80%94know-it-was-plagiarized-out-of-love-and-not-malice.-best-birb. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/yoooooooooooo%E2%80%94tha's-big-attractive.-incredible-art%E2%80%94but-moreover-incredible-storytellin'%E2%80%94i'm-all-about-the-non-verbal-ness%E2%80%94very-subtle-yet-clear%2C-which-is-particularly-impressive-considering-the-extreme-levels-of-detail-in-the-drawings.-you-established-the-ability-of-tum-tum-to-shape-shift-super-effectively-and-in-a-striking-and-visually-eye-catching-manner.-a-lot-of-the-musical-timings-and-pacing-reminds-of-the-olympics-animated-short%2C-%22tomorrow's-leaves%22-(check-it-out).-speaking-of-which%E2%80%94i-really-enjoyed-the-choice-of-music%E2%80%94's-the-kind-of-music-that-immediately-prompted-me-to-get-out-the-good-ol'-shazam-for-answers%E2%80%94i-wasn't-familiar-with-hiroaki-tsutsumi's-music%2C-nor-the-dr.-stone-anime%2C-but-i'll-have-to-look-into-both.-anyways%2C-i-really-loved-the-%22origin%22-feel-of-it%2C-and-it-left-me-wanting-more-lore-and-more-story%E2%80%94which-is-pretty-much-my-only-gripe-with-this%E2%80%94it's-an-amazing-5-minute-short-(again%2C-props-for-the-amazing-pacing)%2C-but-rather-than-being-a-self-contained-story%2C-it-feels-like-an-introductory-episode-or-an-opening-sequence-of-a-movie.-that-alone-isn't-an-issue%2C-but-you-left-me-with-very-little-to-complain-about%2C-so-i'm-gonna-nitpick%E2%80%94i'm-not-entirely-sure-what-moral-to-derive-from-this.-of-course%2C-not-everything-needs-a-moral%2C-and-i-don't-think-this-short-would-benefit-from-having-a-message-shoehorned-in%2C-but-again%E2%80%94i-had-very-little-to-judge.-that-out-of-the-way%E2%80%94i'm-left-with-only-questions%E2%80%94i-want-more%E2%80%94please-tell-me%E2%80%94what-happens-to-tum-tum%3F%3F%3F-what-happens-to-that-village-chief-girl%3F%3F%3F-how-did-tum-tum-even-get-his-name%3F%3F%3F-why-wasn't-the-human-he-first-encountered-scared-of-him%3F%3F%3F-feed-me-more-please-i'm-shivering-in-the-cold-streets. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-really-interesting-that-the-story-seemed-like-a-sad-ending-with-the-characters-parting-but-they're-actually-pursuing-what-they-actually-desire.-the-images-could-be-a-more-clear-but-overall-it's-really-cool!- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story's-really-interesting!-i-think-the-images-could-be-more-clear%2C-but-the-fact-that-the-siblings-went-from-enemies-to-a-double-win-situation-was-really-cool!- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-creativity-in-the-character-design.-i-think-this-would-be-super-interesting-if-further-developed. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-great!-the-art-and-storytelling-were-on-point-and-i-love-that-there-was-music-included! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-enthusiasm-in-the-story-telling! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-a-very-cute-story!-i-love-the-message-of-friendship. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-plot-of-the-story-to-be-a-little-confusing-and-wished-that-it-was-more-secriptive-in-some-places%2C-overall-i-liked-the-drawings-but-sometimes-they-were-hard-to-see 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-amazing! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-art-and-story. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-film-went-slow-and-steady%2C-eventually-leading-to-a-hilarious-ending-and-a-great-moral.-i-also-love-the-shading-and-details-in-your-drawings.-one-thing-i-would-recommend-for-next-time-is-to-check-your-spelling%2C-as-you-spelled-%E2%80%9Cpanic%2C%E2%80%9D-%E2%80%9Cpannick.%E2%80%9D 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoyed-the-progression-of-the-story-and-the-story-line-a-lot%2C-visually-i-thought-that-the-drawings-were-very-good! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-this!-the-concept-is-pretty-creative-and-unique%2C-along-with-the-characters-just-looking-so-adorable.-the-art-is-great%2C-with-the-shading-and-lining-really-making-the-story-pop.-the-story-is-beautiful%2C-with-the-moral-being-a-great-one-that-stands-tall.-the-only-thing-i-would-recommend-to-do-next-time-is-to-be-a-bit-more-consistent-with-the-size-of-your-frames%2C-but-other-than-that%2C-great-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-enjoyed-the-most-was-the-story-line-however-toawrds-the-end-of-the-story-line-i-felt-like-there-were-gaps-in-the-plot%2C-visually-i-thought-the-drawings-were-awesome! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-most-interesting-the-%22war-between-the-two-lands%22%2C-i-wished-i-understood-that-better-visually-i-enjoyed-the-drawings-of-the-shark-tooth%2C-and-turtles 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-did-a-great-job-of-developing-your-characters-so-that-we-could-understand-them-well.-i-love-the-creativity-in-this-story! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-connection-alex-made-with-arlo%2C-and-his-journey-in-the-story.-it-took-an-expected-turn-and-there-is-no-real-antagonist-or-bad-guy.-i-also-like-what-you-were-able-to-do-with-your-drawings.-one-thing-i-would-say-you-should-do-better-with-your-video-is-be-a-bit-more-consistent-with-your-audio%2C-as-at-multiple-times-there-is-either-filler-in-the-background-or-the-volume-is-too-low.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/so-many-important-themes-in-this-story. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/pretty-impressive. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-very-creative-and-well-developed.-great-job! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work!-you've-told-an-amazing-story-that-was-easy-to-understand-and-your-use-of-music-helped-to-highlight-each-important-moment.-i-really-loved-the-character-progression-of-ray-and-thought-that-his-lesson-that-you-need-to-love-yourself-before-you-can-love-others-came-out-wonderfully!-continue-to-do-great-work-and-good-luck-on-future-projects! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-themes. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/art-was-very-good.--definitely-helped-to-convey-the-story. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-different-drawings-you-had-in-your-story%2C-the-twist-ending-with-the-clown-twerking-and-the-editing-done-for-your-narration.-i-was-pretty-curious-where-the-story-would-go-next-and-the-ending-was-pretty-interesting-and-clever.-one-thing-i-would-suggest-is-that-maybe-you-should-cite-where-you-got-your-music-from-as-i-don%E2%80%99t-think-it-is-public-domain. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-your-story-surrounding-music-and-the-creative-turn-you-took-in-the-plot-to-include-a-snake.-i-would-say-the-sound-effects-did-seem-a-bit-out-of-place-and-distracting-though.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-premise-of-the-story-and-the-build-up-however-i-think-you-can-close-it-out-by-connecting-the-conclusion-stronger. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-good-start-but-maybe-the-submission-is-incomplete%3F 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/seems-like-just-a-first-act%2C-with-no-second-and-third-act. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-finishing-up-the-story!-evan-was-such-an-engaging-character-and-i-could-easily-understand-his-character-progression.-good-luck-on-future-projects-and-your-short-was-absolutely-great! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-your-characters-and-their-adventure! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-were-several-places-where-things-moved-too-fast-for-me-to-follow. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-little-unclear-why-bodi-was-able-to-reconnect-with-bulk.-maybe-because-the-narration-was-hard-to-understand. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/top-notch-in-both-story-and-art! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-liked-the-story-and-some-of-the-final-illustrations!-i-thought-the-character-design-for-the-online-avatar-was-great-and-i-could-really-sense-that-she-is-a-diva.-great-job-finishing-the-final-story-and-good-luck-on-future-projects! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-characters-you-created.--i-had-a-difficult-time-following-the-arc-of-the-story-or-the-flow-of-the-story-spine-but-i-think-this-can-develop-into-an-awesome-story. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-adventure-stories-and-this-seems-like-this-could-be-great-if-you-continue-to-develop-the-story.--it-introduced-into-characters-and-transitioned-into-scenarios-quickly-that-threw-me-off%2C-but-i-do-think-you-have-the-base-of-an-exciting-adventure-if-you-continue-to-revise-and-develop-this-story. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow.-what-important-themes-in-this-one. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/well-depicted%2C-and-a-good-story. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-admire-how-everyone-contributed-to-the-story-and-i-like-the-style-of-your-characters. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-your-story-emphasized-siblings-working-together. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-how-he-changed-after-he-thinks-of-needing-others-in-his-life-after-experiencing-what-it-was-like-to-live-in-a-place-all-alone.-i-feel-that-this-has-great-development-in-terms-of-character-building-when-he-at-first-began-giving-up-on-himself-and-others%2C-to-then-realizing-that-he-cannot-simply-push-others-away.-visually-i-really-enjoyed-the-settings-and-scenery%2C-as-well-as-facial-expressions. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-how-he-changed-after-he-thinks-of-needing-others-in-his-life-after-experiencing-what-it-was-like-to-live-in-a-place-all-alone.-i-feel-that-this-has-great-development-in-terms-of-character-building-when-he-at-first-began-giving-up-on-himself-and-others%2C-to-then-realizing-that-he-cannot-simply-push-others-away.-visually-i-really-enjoyed-the-settings-and-scenery%2C-as-well-as-facial-expressions. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cute-story 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-he-wakes-from-his-sleep-near-the-end.-it-did-confuse-me-initially%2C-as-i-could-only-interpret-it-as-a-dream-that-he-awoke-from-to-then-realize-what-he-should-appreciate-in-his-life.-visually%2C-i-was-fond-of-his-facial-expressions. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-fact-that-jerry-was-tired-of-car-transportation.-this-stuck-out-to-me-because-his-vision-of-transportation-was-through-the-use-of-portals.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-appearance-of-the-portals-that-jerry-and-his-brother-created-together. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-idea-of-attending-this-magic-academy-and-his-powers.-it-made-me-wonder-and-love-how-he-had-those-powers.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-presentation-and-story-telling-of-how-the-events-unfolded-and-flowed-together.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-story-quite-intriguing.-i-was-definitely-interested-to-see-what-happened!-the-story-teller-spoke-with-a-lot-of-character. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-was-great!-the-concept-of-your-story-also-greatly-interested-me!-i-found-how-arlo-grew-from-a-fetus-plant-to-be-especially-well-thought-out.-glad-to-see-that-arlo-learned-to-balance-their-personal-endeavors-and-human-interaction.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-imaginations-and-this-story-idea.--i-also-liked-the-way-you-explored-a-different-kind-of-visual-storytelling. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-going-on-the-adventure-with-steeky.--you-told-a-complex-but-well-organized-story-with-a-very-appealing-character.-- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-storytelling.--it-was-very-interesting-to-see-the-different-relationships-develop-and-evolve.--even-though-it-was-difficult-subject-matter-the-story-has-a-lovely-tenderness-to-it-also. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-concept-of-this-story-and-also-really-enjoyed-the-perspective-of-the-14-year-old-boy-character.--you-did-a-good-job-connecting-the-beginning-issue-and-the-resolution-in-the-end.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-and-the-art-!! 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job.--your-story-is-clear-and-concise.--the-art-work-is-simple-yet-supports-the-storytelling.-i-like-the-music-that-you-added-as-well. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-you-added-sound-effects-and-the-story-is-really-cool 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-moral-of-the-story-and-the-drawings 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-sound-effects-added-a-lot-of-ambiance-and-made-the-video-much-more-interesting.-the-drawings-and-different-art-styles-were-quite-nice%2C-however%2C-i-feel-that-some-of-them-could-use-a-little-added-detail.-overall%2C-it-was-an-entertaining-project%2C-and-i-feel-that-it-has-room-for-positive-improvements. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-this-story-and-the-relationship-between-the-girl-and-the-tree.-i-also-like-the-different-styles-of-art-work-and-in-particular-how-the-one-color-image-is-the-one-of-the-cherry-blossom-tree. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/everything-was-amazing!!-the-story%2C-the-drawings-%2C-the-sound-was-verry-goood 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wonderful-story-and-artwork.--the-set-up-and-structure-of-your-story-work-very-well.--i-enjoyed-the-added-music-also.-- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-wonderfully-original-and-intriguing-story-idea.--i-love-the-art-work-and-the-clear-way-that-the-story-unfolds. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wonderful-work.--this-is-a-well-told-and-beautifully-drawn-story.--your-clear-line-drawings-and-specific-use-of-a-little-color-really-support-the-visual-storytelling.--i-also-appreciated-your-use-of-sound-effects-to-heighten-the-emotion. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-moral-of-the-story-and-felt-like-you-did-a-great-job-emphasizing-that-through-the-plot.-i-liked-the-story-outline-but-would-have-liked-to-see-a-little-bit-more-detail-within-each-event.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story-just-need-to-crop-the-photos-and-more-drawing 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-story-alot%2C-the-art-is-amazing-%2C-great-story-10%2F10 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-sound-effects-are-really-interesting.-but-maybe-the-volume-of-the-video-should-be-controlled-at-a-consistent-level-so-it-won't-be-too-loud-or-too-quiet-at-different-times.-great-job!- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-moral.-keep-reaching-for-your-goals.-i-think-that-is-a-good-moral.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-different-pictures.-good-job!- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-detail-in-some-of-the-drawings-and-i-liked-the-consistent-color.-i-thought-the-plot-was-kind-of-confusing%2C-and-i-don't-know-what-happened-with-the-snake.-i-also-really-liked-the-sound-effects%2C-they-added-a-lot-to-the-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-definitely-the-most-fleshed-out-video-i-have-seen-so-far.-i-really-like-how-the-drawings-look%2C-and-the-voices-are-really-clearly-recorded!-it-was-definitely-a-treat-to-watch%2C-and-i-want-to-see-even-more-elaboration-on-the-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/w-drawings-but-the-first-person-speaking-could-be-a-little-louder 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-the-tory-i-do-wish-that-his-pet-rat-was-a-bit-more-in-the-story%2C-but-other-than-that-this-story-is-great 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-characters-are-cute-and-colorful!-i-suggest-maybe-some-transitions-could-be-added-on-the-video-so-the-story-scenes-switches-smoothly.--the-pictures-bring-a-smile-to-the-face-%3A) 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-very-cute-and-colorful-and-was-definitely-very-visually-appealing%2C-although-i-wish-there-was-a-little-more-consistency-between-drawings-as-i-got-confused-which-characters-were-which.-despite-that%2C-i-thought-the-art-was-very-neat!-the-story-seemed-interesting%2C-but-to-be-totally-honest%2C-i-think-there-was-a-lot-of-untapped-potential.-either-way%2C-i-like-the-way-things-were-headed-and-would-love-to-learn-more-about-the-story-and-it's-characters 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-the-best-story-ive-ever-seen-and-heard-amazing-voice-acting-amazing-drawings-and-amazing-editing.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-visually%2C-the-part-where-bede-and-her-friend-where-at-the-lake.the-colors-used-in-the-dream-sequence-was-used-very-well-and-really-set-the-tone-of-the-story! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-audio-in-the-video%2C-as-well-as-the-artwork! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/w-vid-ong-omm 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-moral.-i-think-always-being-yourself-is-a-good-moral.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-drawings.-good-job! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-story-it-was-interesting-it-seems-a-but-familiar%2C-the-sounds-where-a-but-off-though-other-that-that-its-a-alright-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-video%2C-but-i-think-it's-a-little-hard-to-hear-the-video-because-of-the-music.-i-also-liked-the-simple-drawings 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-didn't-really-understand-any-of-this-at-all.-i-was-however-able-to-grasp-some-of-the-story-from-the-comments.-i-did-like-your-art-though%2C-it-was-pretty-clean.-%3B) 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-most-of-the-art-was-pretty-good-looking-and-visually-appealing%2C-but-i-wish-some-drawings-had-much-more-detail.-there-was-quite-a-contrast-between-some-of-the-early-drawings-which-had-lots-of-detail-compared-to-some-of-the-later-drawings-which-were-black-and-white.-i-also-thought-the-story-was-cool%2C-but-it-felt-like-something-i-had-sort-of-already-seen-in-another-existing-animated-movie.-despite-that%2C-i-was-definitely-intrigued-by-how-the-story-was-heading%2C-and-the-art-definitely-complimented-the-story-very-well 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-character-designs-and-i-think-that-the-moral-is-very-sweet!-i-noticed-the-audio-cut-off-early-sometimes-though%2C-which-made-it-a-little-hard-to-follow-the-story.-i-also-loved-that-you-added-color%2C-it-made-it-very-fun-to-watch. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-moral.-i-think-that-is-a-good-moral.-visually-i-enjoyed-all-the-creative-pictures-throughout-the-story.-good-job! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-your-story-was-verydifferent. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-story-was-very-nice%2Frelaxing-to-hear%2C-but-i-wish-there-was-a-little-more-conflict-and-explanation.-it-follows-a-formula-a-little-too-closely%2C-and-i-wish-it-branched-out-more-and-got-a-little-more-exciting.-i-do-like-the-premise%2C-and-i-think-it-has-a-lot-of-potential!-the-art-was-cute-too%2C-but-i-wish-there-was-a-little-more-detail!-overall%2C-i-thought-it-was-pretty-neat-and-definitely-want-to-see-it-more-fleshed-out! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-your-drawings-they-look-very-good!-the-only-thing-i-would-say-is-that-it-got-a-little-confusing-in-the-middle-with-the-school-project-and-being-sucked-iinto-a-black-hole-over-food.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-her-imaginary-friend-was-her-past-life-and-learned-to-be-a-better-person. 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-drawings%2C-the-story-line%2C-and-the-sound-affects.-nice-work-%3A) 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-music-and-story! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story!-please-crop-the-images-though-%3Ap 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-this-whole-plot-line-you-made-and-the-town.-i-think-you-guys-really-got-creative-with-how-you-wanted-to-lead-up-to-the-moral. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-this-story.--it-is-entertaining-and-intriguing-and-made-me-feel-happy-at-the-end%2C--i-think-there-are-some-sections-that-feel-a-little-long-and-could-probably-be-trimmed-down-to-the-most-essential-points%2C-but-overall-i-really-like-the-idea-and-the-drawings. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-great 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-a-really-good-film-and-it-was-entertaining- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-how-you-lead-up-to-the-moral.-i-think-that-the-way-you-took-the-photos-could-use-a-bit-of-improvement%2C-maybe-crop-them-better-so-theres-more-image-instead-of-background. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing!-the-art-was-sublime!-character-development-astounding!-story-was-remarkable!-the-twist-at-the-end-was-extraordinary!-you-guys-have-earned-my-respect! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-style-and-the-story-always-reminds-me-of-myself-during-class-very-shy-and-never-talks-during-class-but-i-play-roblox-sometimes-to-just-at-least-be-social-and-if-i-make-a-mistake-i-just-leave-the-server-i-will-never-see-those-people-again 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing!-the-art-was-sublime!-character-development-astounding!-story-was-remarkable!-the-twist-at-the-end-was-extraordinary!-you-guys-have-earned-my-respect! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/try-to-add-more--color- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-art-work--and-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-so-stunning!-i-can't-even-put-it-into-words.-the-story-is-easy-to-follow-and-it's-very-creative.-you-have-a-bright-future-ahead-of-you%2C-i-wish-you-luck. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-moral%2C-it-is-something-many-people-can-relate-to. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-story%2C-the-storyline-had-a-good-flow-to-it.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-moral-of-the-story.-this-story-is-sad-but-i-am-glad-jamal-found-mark-again. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-makes-me-want-to 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-ideas%2C-i-think-your-story-was-a-little-drawn-out-and-could-have-reaped-from-having-something-lese-happen-and-cut-out-a-little-of-the-unnecessary-bits.- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-look-so-clear-i-really-like-them.-the-story-is-good-too 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-story-art-and-music- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-drawings-they-are-cute-but-i-think-you-should-make-the-story-a-little-bit-understanding-and-maybe-add-how-they-became-friends-that-fast.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-and-art-are-really-good 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-art 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-character-design!-%3A0 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-artwork-and-the-moral-of-the-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-amazing.-i-would-love-to-see-this-as-a-pixar-movie.-i-love-the-moral.-i-live-by-this-everyday 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-the-detail-you-put-into-the-artwork.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-art.-its-so-goooooooooood!!!!!!!-everything-was-in-color-which-was-super-impressive-and-amazing.-i%E2%80%A6-i-don%E2%80%99t-even-know-what-to-say.-but-the-story-could-sue-a-little-work.-the-part-i-was-unclear-about-was-after-the-lift-off.-it-very-jarring-but-the-overal-story-is-good.-amazing-work. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-and-the-story-has-a-great-moral-i-think-it-is-amazing- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-but-in-some-scenes-the-fx-were-too-loud 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-color-palette-and-the-storyline.-the-drawings-look-very-good-and-the-details-are-very-cool. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-dog 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/they-story-is-very-creative-and-i-love-the-art-style.-the-colors-are-very-bold-and-make-the-characters-pop-out-nice. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-character-development.-was-throughout-the-story.-i-think-you-should-add-color. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-your--storyline-i-visually-enjoyed-your-art-work 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-great-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-and-the-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-music-you-added-and-the-storyline-that-relates-to-real-life. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-and-drawings 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-there-could-have-been-more-detail-in-the-drawings-because-there's-one-that-just-says-%22work-in-progress%22.-the-story-is-good-though. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-drawings-and-the-moral-of-the-story.-it-was-a-bit-confusing%2C-i-was-confused-about-the-snake-part.-why-did-she-decide-she-didn't-like-music-anymore%3F-- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-transitions-make-your-story-seem-even-more-exciting.-the-drawings-are-really-pretty-and-it-looks-like-you-took-your-time%2C 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings-theyre-very-nice. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-music-is-nice-and-the-drawing-are-cool. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-moral.-i-think-that-it--is-very-creative-how-you-showed-that-its-more-better-with-friends.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-different-pictures.-it-was-very-colorful-and-neat.-good-job!- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/lovely-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-and-the-message!-very-good-%3A) 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-plot%2C-i've-been-following-this-story-for-a-while-and-i-like-how-you-had-resolve-in-the-end-instead-of-the-before-ending. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-just-love-the-story!-i-think-everything-is-amazing-and-the-sound-effects-are-great.-i-think-the-drawings-started-out-amazing.-all-over-great. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-animation-and-type-of-style-of-the-drawings. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-music 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-amazing-moral.-i-like-that-she-had-a-struggle-making-friends-in-real-life-and-you-chose-a-problem-that-is-a-real-life-problem.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-moral-was-pretty-clear%2C-and-the-art-style-was-amazing.-i-really-liked-your-storyline%2C-and-your-story-all-together 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-it!-great-moral!-good-art!-it-is-really-good! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-music-and-the-drawings. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-really-cute-artwork-and-i-love-the-style--and-the-animation-is-so-good! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-had-always-loved-this-story-and-the-art!!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/seirisly-love-it-this-is-by-faaaaaaar-my-favrite!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-absolutely-stunning!-the-story-also-is-easy-to-follow. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-mc-and-its-kinda-like-the-real-world.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-was-the--picture-that-little-ball-was-so-cute-and-made-me-sad-when-i-saw-it-sad-what-i-think-you-should-change-is-the-audio-i-was-not-able-to-understand-anything-with-out-hearing-the-voice- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/woah!-your-music-is-perfect-and-i-loved-your-drawings.-i-vote-this-as-my-favorite%2C-and-i-love-the-motion. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-creative-and-i-like-the-story-line. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-music-and-drawings!-everything-is-super-well-done-%3A) 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/10%2F10%2C-love-the-sounds-and-drawings.-%3A) 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-dannny-overcomes-his-problems.-this-story-is-very-inspirational-and-should-be-an-actual-movie! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-did-this-and-the-anumashin- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-and-sound-effects. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/use-your-phone-to-take-a-photo-and-crop-it-too- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-drawings-that-you-did-it-looks-good- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-can-tell-your-team-took-your-time!-the-art-is-amazing-and-the-storyline-makes-sense. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-was-your-artwork-what-i-visually-enjoyed-was-the-story- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-all-the-sound-effects-and-the-drawings 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/honestly-the-drawing-is-cool-but-it-scared-me-a-little-and-her-emotions-are-all-over-the-place-but-overall-a-vrey-good-short-film 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-and-the-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-moral-of-the-story.-music-is-amazing.-that's-a-cool-story%2C 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/try-to-speak-louder-when-you-narrate- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work!--i-think-you-should-add-more-detail-about-how-he-found-his-friends-again-and-what-his-loss-of-memory-has-to-do-with-his-friends.-i-like-your-dinosaur-drawings.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story-and-drawings!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-love-this!!-the-story-is-so-amazing!-and-the-art-is-really-good-too!-it-is-flalis 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-looks-pretty.-%3A) 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-i-love-the-story-and-the-drawings-are-cool.-just-don't-forget-to-crop-so-you-don't-see-the-background- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-on-the-aninations-looks-good 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-good!-the-idea-needed-a-little-work.-sound-effect-use-was-good.-drawings-needed-work.-overall-pretty-good! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art!-i-would-say-for-experience%2C-erase-sketch-lines-so-it's-cleaner%2C-but-overall-i-really-like-the-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-crop-the-photos 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-moral-and-good-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-unicorn-dinosaur. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it-exept-the-narrator-should-have-been-louder 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-art-stiyel--and-the-story-was-amazing 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings.-its-a-great-art-style. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-the-characters-are-not-human-and-are-animals-and-the-message-but-it-would-be-better-if-you-crop-the-photos.-but-it-is-very-good! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-that-you-did-it-looks-great- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-idea%2C-i-saw-this-story-board-for-part-two-and-i-liked-how-it-grew.-the-story-was-a-bit-confusing-on-why-a-feather-or-a-leaf-was-needed. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-amazing- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-you-zoom-in-on-the-pictures 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good.-i-love-that-you-chose-a-comedian-thats-a-dinosaur.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-plot%2C-drawings-and-characters. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-dinosaur-drawing%2C-and-the-effort-that-went-into-the-story- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-how-ajax%E2%80%99s-personality-is-showed-throughout-the-story%2C-it%E2%80%99s-super-clear-what-kind-of-person-he-is.-also%2C-the-art-is-amazing%2C 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-charcters-are-cool-and-i-have-chowder.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-but-you-need-to-crop-the-photos 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-colored-the-main-character-its-shows-a-lot-of-attention-to-the-character. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/story-is-interesting-and-the-what-if- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-love-your-art-style-and-its-clear-that-you-put-a-lot-of-effort-in-this-film.-the-story-is-good-as-well%2C-good-job.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-story-it-is-so-fun-and-interning-one-thing-you-guys-should-do-is-edit%2Fcrop-the-photos 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-loved-the-characters-personality-and-the-moral-of-the-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-only-colored-in-the-main-character.-it-really-brings-attention-to-the-character.-i-think-that-you-could-crop-out-your-hand--and-finger-out-the-frame. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/these-are-the-best-drawings-i've-seen-yet.-however-the-story-was-incredibly-confusing.-there-was-no-narration-or-dialogue.-captions-of-the-beats-would-have-been-an-easy-way-to-add-context. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-your-story-incorporates-science.--the-story-has-a-good-flow-and-pacing-and-is-clear.-i-was-just-confused-about-one-thing.--when-lawney-rescues-his-mom-but-leaves-one-person-outside---why-was-that%3F-what-happened-to-that-person%3F 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-the-girl-changed-herself-to-get-friends. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-sound-effects. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-way-you-used-sound-effects-and-no-narration.--it-is-very-effective.--i-thought-the-pacing-of-the-story-was-great-and-build-with-excitement.--i-am-a-little-confused-by-the-beginning-and-think-that-could-be-a-little-slower-and-clearer.--i-love-when-the-main-character-wakes-up-and-sees-the-other-being-in-their-bedroom.--it-made-me-laugh-out-loud. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-colors-you-used-for-ajax-and-his-cloths.-its-very-inspiring.-it-make-me-want-to-accomplish-my-dreams-too. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-transitions-and-the-angle-of-the-scenes.-also-i-like-the-characterization-of-ajax%2C-it-is-super-interesting.-the-art-style-is-amazing.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-very-engaging-and-entertaining-story.--i-love-the-way-you-added-music-at-the-climax.--it-really-added-to-the-excitement.-i-like-the-art-work-a-lot.--i-think-that-adding-either-some-bits-of-color-or-darker-lines-in-some-of-the-more-complicated-drawings-might-help-direct-the-viewer-where-to-look.--i-think-the-character-of-alistair-is-well-described.--nice-job. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-this-idea-and-art-work.-the-part-after-take-off-was-a-bit-fast%2C-but-otherwise-it-was-amazing. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-character-artwork-and-the-struggles. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story!-the-interaction-between-people-without-electronics-is-always-a-big-topic-and-you've-done-it-so-well.-also-i-love-your-art-style! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-art-style-so-much!-i-love-all-the-colours-you-used-to-colour-your-caracters-and-background.-it-is-so-beautiful.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-organize-your-works-and-the-colours-used-for-the-caracter-chowder.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-found-this-story-exciting-and-interesting.--i-love-the-art-work-and-the-way-the-narrator's-voice-changes-to-show-emotion.--the-only-thing-i-am-confused-by-is-the-title-of-the-story.--raging-bomb-does-not-seem-to-describe-the-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-was-interested-in-your-story-right-away-from-your-first-sentence.-chowder-is-such-a-creative-character.--i-love-the-design-of-chowder-as-well-as-the-rest-of-the-art-work.--you-have-made-a-very-relatable-story-with-a-lovely-moral.-nice-work.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-way-you-integrated-sounds-into-your-storytelling.--i-think-the-idea-of-music-being-banned-and-how-that-effects-people-is-very-interesting.--i'd-like-to-understand-why-at-the-end-they-changed-their-minds-and-un-banned-music%3F-the-story-would-feel-more-complete-if-we-knew-more-about-how-music-affected-people-badly-and-what-lesson-they-learned.-even-though-at-the-end-the-main-character-does-not-need-music-anymore---does-she-still-love-it-and-listen-to-music%3F--i-hope-you-keep-working-on-and-developing-this-idea-because-it-is-really-good. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-concept-of-people-needing-to-remember-how-to-interact-in-person.-i-also-think-you-did-a-good-job-describing-what-so-many-people-go-through-with-bullying-and-trying-to-make-friends.--the-are-work-does-a-good-job-supporting-the-story.-- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-impressed-by-how-much-you-fit-into-a-short-storyreel.--i-really-liked-the-way-the-story-began-with-the-sounds-of-school.-the-art-work-is-very-dynamic-and-beautiful.--it-really-supports-the-storytelling.-there-are-a-few-places-in-the-story-that-need-some-more-explaining.--i-did-not-understand-how-ajax-got-sent-to-the-new%2Fother-world.-i'd-like-to-hear-more-about-his-relationships-with-his-fellow-astronauts.-overall%2C-i-think-it-is-an-interesting-and-well-told-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-music-gets-banned.--visually-i-enjoyed-the-art-style-and-the-colorfulness-to-the-pictures. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-all-electronics-are-banned.--visually-i-enjoyed-the-art-style-and-the-colorfulness-to-the-pictures. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-john-hired-a-dog-walker-so-that-blue-wouldn't-be-sad-and-alone-anymore.--visually-i-enjoyed-the-pictures. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-ajax-is-trying-to-prove-that-a-hand-grabbed-the-moon.--visually-i-enjoyed-the-art-style-and-the-colorfulness-to-the-pictures. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-story.-great-drawings.-maybe-consider-doing-different-sound-effects-and-make-it-more-obvious-that-he-and-his-friend-live-in-california. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-great-story%2C-love-the-sound-effects%2C-but-maybe-speak-first-then-do-the-sound-effects%2C-because-if-you-put-em-right-as-you-talk-it-sounds-a-bit-disordered.-other-than-that%2C-however%2C-it-was-really-good.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/also%2C-please-take-out-the-last-scene%2C-because-it-doesn't-make-the-story-run-along. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-story-but-maybe-you-should-make-some-of-the-scenes-quiet-because-it's-pretty-loud.-also%2C-you-should-add-a-bit-more-detail-to-some-of-the-pictures.-great-sound-effects 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-ajax%E2%80%99s-personality-is-showed-throughout-the-story%2C-it%E2%80%99s-super-clear-what-kind-of-person-he-is.-also%2C-the-art-is-amazing%2C-i-thought-it-was-from-another-source-like-a-character-creator-or-something!-it%E2%80%99s-super-well-done 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-bland-and-cliche.-i-like-the-idea-but-it-wasn't-executed-to-its-full-potential.--i-would-like-to-see-more-effort-in-the-drawings. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-bland-and-cliche.-i-like-the-idea-but-it-wasn't-executed-to-its-full-potential.--i-would-like-to-see-more-effort-in-the-drawings. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-moral-of-the-story-is-good-and-the-drawings-show-potential. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-story-but-could-you-add-how-the-person-died-and-how-the-person-comes-back-to-life. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-but-the-sound-affects-is-too-loud-to-hear-the-narration 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-ending%2C-and-the-art-gives-a-great-visual.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-i-dont-see-any-thing-that-need-inprove-ment- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-moral-and-i-like-the-drawings-but-i-got-a-bit-confused-about-the-story%2C-it's-a-lot-at-one-time. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liike-the-drawings%2C-my-only-suggestion-is-to-turn-down-the-music-a-little-bit%2C-its-just-a-tad-too-loud. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-interesting-but-why-are-mark-and-jamal-such-good-friends. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story--ut-i-think-you-added-a-little-but-to-much-sound-affects-and-on-some-of-them-the-sound-affects-are-to--loud--u-can't-hear-your-voice- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-plant-ignores-the-people-who-do-not-accept-him-and-call-him-names. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-art-and-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-good%2C-having-a-great-story-line-and-drawings%2C-although-you-need-to-speak-louder-and-probably-add-a-few-more-details. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-you-need-to-speak-up-a-bit-more 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-was-very-good-and-striaght-forward.-just-make-sure-to-talk-louder-because-sometimes-the-audio-was-muted. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-did-a-very-good-job-drawing--the-pictures!-good-job.-i-really-like-how-the-narrators-voice-went-with-the-emotion-of-the-short-film. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-good-but-you-say-every-day-too-many-times-and-it-says-until-finally-instead-of-until-one-day- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-story-but-the-art-could-have-a-few-more-details-and-i-couldn't-hear-the-narration-well 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-the-story-and-the-drawings-are-simple.-something-i-think-that-could-be-added-is-more-sound-effects. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-detailed-the-drawings-are!-they-look-like-they-had-a-lot-of-work-put-into-them.-however%2C-i-feel-that-there-is-some-holes-in-the-plot.-from-between-the-part-when-she-decides-that-she-doesn't-want-all-the-attention-that-they-are-reviving%2C-and-them-getting-revived%2C-to-be-specific.-however%2C-i-think-something-that-would-really-better-drive-this-story-is-finding-out-why-connie-wants-to-be-revived.-and-even-better-why-others-can-see%2F-interact-with-her.-i-also-think-that-while-the-moral-is-a-amazing-lesson%2C-i-think-that-it-doesn't-exactly-fit-with-the-theme-of-your-story.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-guys-did-amazing-on-all-the-drawings-and-story-but-the-sound-effects-made-it-kinda-hard-to-hear-you-guys.-maybe-if-the-sound-efefcts-were-quieter-that-would-be-better 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-guys-did-amazing-on-all-the-drawings-and-story-but-the-sound-effects-made-it-kinda-hard-to-hear-you-guys.-maybe-if-the-sound-efefcts-were-quieter-that-would-be-better 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-visuals%2C-it-really-got-you-rooting-for-the-main-character!-good-job! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this!-its-pretty-funny-and-the-art-looks-so-good!!-i-love-the-sound-effects. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-you-added-a-bunch-of-sound-effects-and-did-them-with-your-real-voices. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-sound-effects-and-the-drawings 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-the-evil-ai-thing-was-interesting-but-could-you-add-more-background-to-the-evil-ai.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-the-idea-of-the-story-and-how-it-goes%2C-it-just-needs-a-bit-more-detail-of-how-the-watch-turns-on-and-other-stuff-about-the-watch. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/be-louder-pls 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-pictures-be-louder 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-very-nice 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-nice-and-simple-but-i-think-the-story-could-have-been-a-bit-more-detailed.-in-the-beginning%2C-i-think-that-you-guys-could-have-introduced-nick-so-the-audience-could-learn-about-him-a-bit-more.-good-job! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-your-guys'-story%2C-it-was-defiantly-something-to-reflect-on-or-learn-from-and-also-helped-me-look-at-myself-and-how-i-treat-others.-i-also-like-the-artwork-as-well. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-video-is-kinda-of-confusing%2C-because-i-thought-that-the-dad-was-dead%2C-because-the-character-went-to-his-dads-funeral%2C-but-the-boy-uses-the-watch-that-travels-into-time-to-save-the-dad%3F- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story-and-the-art-but-i-got-lost-in-the-middle-of-act-1-and-2 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/soooooo-hawt 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-art-and-how-you-put-the-story-together- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-good-story-love-the-art-but-you-need-to-speak-louder-on-all-of-it. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-a-lot-and-it's-cool-how-she-gets-her-very-own-store-and-then-they-expand-in-other-cities-too.-the-voiceover-was-kinda-quiet-so-it-was-a-little-hard-to-hear. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-it's-based-on-real-life-problems%2C-but-i-think-you-could-add-more-description-on-the-part-were-they-found-mark-in-the-bush.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this!!-the-story-is-so-amazing!-and-the-art-is-really-good-too!-%5E-%5E 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-he-cares-for-bees-since-many-people-ignore-the-fact-that-bees-a-dying.--it-spreads-awareness-to-people-about-what-would-happen-if-bees-suddenly-disappeared. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/speak-louder.thats-all 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/uh 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/hi 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story-maybe-add-more-conext- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-idea-for-the-story-but-could-you-add-detail-to-the-watch-and-how-it-transported-him. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-sound-effects-but-a-suggestion-is-to-crop-your-photos 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it!!-the-drawings-are-good%2C-the-story-is-good-but%2C-if-you-want-some-of-the-scenes-are-quieter-than-others- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-needs-more-detail. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-it's-not-about-a-person-but-a-plant.-i-also-like-how-he-wants-equal-rights-since-he's-treated-differently-because-he's-a-plant.-it's-kind-of-like-racism-and-ableism. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-good-story-but-i-think-you-need-to-speak-louder-its-hard-to-hear-with-the-music. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a--very-good-story-had-a-lot-to-relate-to-but-also-hard-to-hear-maybe-if-you-can-adjust-the-volume-or-speak-loader-a-very-good-story! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-good-drawings- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/need-to-speak-more-loud-or-more-clear. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-racism-and-how-it-isn't-wrong-for-two-different-races-to-be-friends. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-need-to-talk-louder-but-the-art-looks-great 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-color-and-the-art-style.-i-looks-really-good. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-has-a-very-cute-art-style-and-i-got-the-gist-of-the-story-without-any-audio.-i-think-someone-narrating-the-storyboard-might-help-more-people-understand-the-story-and-more-of-the-details.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-good-i-like-it-but-not-really-it-could-use-some-work-in-the-story-telling-otter-than-that-is-goodn't 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-voice-acting-and-sound-effects%2C-the-video-is-more-interesting-this-way 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-cute-and-i-like-the-story-as-well. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-voice-acting%2C-its-funny 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-and-where-it-is-at-right-now. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-and-sound-effects.-i-think-you-should-edit-out-some-of-the-awkward-pauses.-overall-i-think-the-storyline-is-really-good! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/they-story-is-very-creative-and-i-love-the-art-style.-the-colors-are-very-bold-and-make-the-characters-pop-out-nice. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-kind-of-hard-to-hear-what-you-were-trying-to-say%2C-but-it-was-a-good-story-still. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-i-wish-that-you-had-another-member-on-your-team-to-help-with-either-thinking-out-the-story-or-drawing-but-i-like-what-i-see. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-very-cute!-also-really-sad%2C-but-i-really-liked-your-art-style 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice%2C-the-aesthetic-is-something-i-haven't-seen-in-others-stories.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-and-the-character-design.-the-characters-are-very-cute.-it-would-be-cool-to-see-this-with-a-little-more-finish. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-color-palette-and-the-storyline.-the-drawings-look-very-good-and-the-details-are-very-cool. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-it-is-an-original-story-and-how-unlike-others-it-drawn-on-paper.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-transitions-were-a-nice-touch-and-the-story-was-interesting. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-loved-the-art-and-the-story-it-seems-very-well-thought-out-and-planned!- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-art-style-and-its-clear-that-you-put-a-lot-of-effort-in-this-animatic.-the-story-is-good-as-well%2C-good-job.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/visually-i-enjoyed-the-expression-on-the-dogs-face-each-drawing. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-line-and-the-small-animations. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-you-made-for-this-are-really-pretty!-the-story-is-also-simple-but-gives-an-important-message.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-style-and-the-finished-feeling-with-this-animation.-it-looks-very-flushed-out-and-great. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/an-all-around-w 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-quite-literally-the-best-story-i-have-ever-heard%2F-will-hear-in-my-life.-thank-you-for-blessing-me-with-this-experience 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-couldn't-hear-the-narration-very-well.-the-art-could-use-some-work. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-and-the-story! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-voice-acting-and-it-sounds-really-good.-the-vid-was-fun-to-watch.-the-story-is-really-interesting.-i-really-like-it-and-i-would-like-to-know-what-happens-next.-the-drawings-are-all-amazing-and-tells-the-story.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/visually-i-enjoyed-the-drawings-they-were-probably-my-favorite-part-*thumbs-up* 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-looks-pretty-nice-overall%2C-and-it-represents-many-different-concepts-give-throughout-the-program.-the-audio%2C-however%2C-felt-artificial-and-the-sound-effects-overpowered-part-of-the-story.--overall%2C-nice-art-and-story-to-drive-it-forward. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-story-is-really-good-just-some-of-the-background-noises-could-have-been-toned-down. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-have-no-idea-what-that-has-to-do-with-sci-fi-but-i-loved-the-story-and-the-narration-was-great.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-great-art-work-i-really-liked-the-story-i-understood-is-clearly-and-the-character-wants-and-needs. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-love-the-animation!-there-are-so-many-drawings-for-every-part-in-the-story-which-probably-took-sooo-much-time.-overall-i-loved-your-reel.-great-job-%3Ad 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-was-good.-i-think-it-could-have-been-fleshed-out-a-lot-more-and-added-some-dialogue.-good-job-though. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/artstyle-is-fantastic%2C-i'm-jealous.-the-story-is-kind-of-awkward-to-try-to-understand-but-i-liked-to-watch-it-anyway. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-and-wouldnt-change-anything-btw-i-love-you-jayden 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-amazing-and-the-audio-was-very-clear-but-the-music-was-very-loud-and-hurt-my-eras-a-little.-the-narration-and-dialogue-was-very-good-and-i-understood-everything-because-you-mentioned-everything-that-needed-to-be-mentioned. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-clear-and-clean!-i-want-to-learn-more-about-the-world-in-the-mirror-%3A)- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-good! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-where-nice-but-they-didn't-tell-the-story-very-well-without-narration-or-dialogue. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-am-confused-how-did-he-know-his-father-was-in-the-hg-headquarters.-but-the-drawings-go-well-with-the-story-and-i-enjoyed-the-story.-i-also-like-the-music-that-goes-on-for-the-whole-video.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-very-good-i-like-it-i-also-really-like-the-story-it-makes-sense-and-its-good%2C-maybe-the-narration-could-use-a-little-work-because-i-couldn't-really-hear-you-because-of-the-music-but-other-than-that-very-good-job- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-moral-is-very-good%2C-and-the-artwork-is-very-nice. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-introduction-of-the-characters-in-the-beginning-of-the-story%2C-but-i-think-if-you-could-have-different-people-talking-for-greg-and-andrew.-i-also-like-the-ending-of-your-story-when-andrew-went-to-get-revenge-for-his-brother.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-and-your-art-was-really-good.-sometimes-the-sound-effects-made-the-dialog-hard-to-hear%2C-but-other-than-that-i-think-it-was-really-good. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-incredibly-charming-and-simple.-the-story-was-a-bit-hard-to-understand-but-i-loved-to-watch-it-nonetheless. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-style-and-the-drawings-match-the-story-telling-really-well 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-you-should-add-more-context-or-narration-so-that-you-can-understand-the-story-better.-i-really-like-the-drawings-and-underlying-idea. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-a-little-short%2C-i-don't-necessarily-know-what-is-going-on%2C 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-scene-at-the-table.-i-liked-the-drawings-and-the-sounds.-good-job 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-it- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-confusing 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-and-edits-was-amazing%2C-the-only-improvement-i-can-think-of-is-getting-rid-of-a-few-words-that-are-scribbled-out. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawing-style-and-the-story! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-story-and-the-narrative.-the-art-itself-was-perfectly-fine-just-a-little-hard-to-see-(but-i-could-still-follow-along).-i-think-i-would-be-better-if-you-took-pictures-of-your-frames-and-put-them-in-like-a-slideshow- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-amount-of-dialogue-is-amazing.-also-the-different-sound-effects-are-really-good-and-fits-the-story.-the-art-is-simple-and-clean-so-overall%2C-this-is-a-really-well-done-story-and-video.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-clear-the-drawings-are 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there's-a-lot-of-background-noises-in-your-narration.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-really-straightforward-and-it-was-really-enjoyable-because-of-it.-the-use-of-dialogue-was-really-great-too.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-this-story-very-confusing.-if-plants-are-illegal%2C-there-would-be-no-oxygen-for-humans-to-breathe-and-everyone-would-be-dead.-i-don't-understand-why-he-runs-away.-what-is-a-%22they%22%3F--why-would-he-want-to-be-one%3F-also%2C-i-think-this-story-could-use-a-lot-more-dialogue-or-narraration.-there-were-very-few-words. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-was-a-lot-happening-and-i-think-it-could-be-dialed-down-a-bit-and-maybe-some-more-explanation-as-why-certain-events-are-happenings-like-why-the-mirror-lady-left-or-why-she-hates-making-the-dresses%2C-or-why-the-mirror-lady-likes-making-dresses. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-artwork%2C-the-artwork-is-amazing%2C-the-voice-narration-is-also-very-nice-and-the-story-in-general-is-very-interesting-and-makes-sense-good-job.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-story-is-very-good.-but-the-art-could-be-better.-but-i-really-like-it-overal 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-a-lot-and-i-found-that-for-the-most-part%2C-i-could-follow-it-easily.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-portrayed-everything-going-on!-the-music-is-a-bit-loud-and-some-blocking-is-confusing-but-this-is-a-really-great-snip-of-what-seems-like-a-very-complex-and-intriguing-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-kyra-%26-her-doppelganger-get-what-they-want-even-though-they-had-to-go-through-so-much-to-get-there.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-great-and-i-think-they-work-really-well.-the-issue-is-the-lack-of-narration-which-makes-it-hard-sometimes-to-tell-what-it-is.-but-it's-story-is-really-well-done. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-soooo-good-man 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story.-the-art-is-clear-and-easy-to-interpret.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-dialogue-and-the-sound-effects.-very-clear-and-really-adds-on-to-the-overall-story.-the-art-is-so-good-even-though-it's-rough.-you-are-still-able-to-understand-what's-going-on-and-it-definitely-has-potential-for-improvement-in-the-future.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-don't-know-what's-happening%2C-could-you-please-clarify%3F 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-cant-really-understand-the-character%2C-but-the-art-is-really-cool. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-way-you-drew-this-story- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-cats-and-this-story-is-adorable.-the-drawings-are-so-cute-and-i-love-how-the-story-was-told-and-how-it-unfolded.-c%3A 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/both-the-art-and-story-is-amazing-it's-just-the-dialogue-and-narration-are-quiet-so-please-raise-the-volume 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-how-you-used-my-little-pony.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-art.-the-sounds-were-a-bit-loud-and-the-story-was-kind-of-confusing. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings-and-the-the-way-you-guys-made-the-video-it's-awesome-and-impressive-that-you-guys-did-this-much. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-style-of-drawing-i-think-its-very-cool-and-unique 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-art-and-the-story.-this-is-high-quality-work.-i-really-like-it. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-good%2C-but-it-could-use-some-narration%2C-as-some-parts-i-was-confused%2C-like-near-the-end%2C-great-music-voice. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-fantastic%2C-it's-a-little-hard-to-understand-but-overall-brings-great-interest-to-me.-the-drawings-feel-really-consistent-as-well-and-i-like-the-style. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-picture-they-are-very-good-and-clear.-you-could-make-them-darker-tho-because-it-looks-like-a-lot-of-lines.-i-did-not-know-what-is-happing-most-of-the-time-you-need-to-add-more-dialogue-and-context.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-did-a-great-job-drawing-the-environment-even-if-it-was-a-little-messy%2C-what-i-would-suggest-for-you-to-improve-on-is-adding-narration%2C-because-it-was-difficult-for-me-to-follow-along-the-story-without-it.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-sound-effects-especially-the-beginning-the-clock-tower-sound-which-gives-the-vibe%2Fmood-of-the-setting.-i-enjoyed-watching-this.-but-it-was-hard-to-know-what-was-happening-without-a-bit-of-context%2Fdialogue.-but-overall-the-drawings-with-colors-helped-give-off-mood-of-the-scene-which-is-nice-because-it-kinda-tells-what's-happening.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/too-long%2C-good-story-though 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-choice-of-your-music-and-the-art-is-really-cool.-character-design-is-really-nice-and-unique-and-overall-just-really-easy-to-follow. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-like-super-good-and-the-story.-i-also-like-the-background-lot-and-it-was-interesting-to-watch.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-telling-the-art-style-also-match-the-story-telling.-i-also-like-the-different-types-of-camera-shots-as-well. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-watching-the-story-unfold%2C-drawings-were-amazing-as-well 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-the-art-and-character-design-throughout-the-story-but-it-was-really-difficult-to-follow-along-without-any-narration-or-dialogue.-i-couldn't-really-tell-what-was-happening-except-when-looking-at-the-facial-expressions-but-even-during-that-the-story-was-really-vague- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-concept-and-art-is-so-intriguing!-it's-a-bit-hard-to-follow%2C-but-i-think-you-can-do-so-much-with-this!-great-job! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-usage-of-the-sound-effects%2C-for-example-when-you-switched-the-scenes-with-the-main-character-opening-and-entering-the-room%2C-you-add-a-door-close-sound-effect. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-tone 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-very-clear-and-seems-pretty-interesting-develop.-the-art-sometimes-gets-iffy%2C-but-it-has-nice-shot-types-and-detail.-the-audio-sometimes-was-cut-out%2C-but-the-dialogue%2Fnarration-could-be-heard.-overall%2C-an-interesting-concept. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-very-clear-and-seems-pretty-interesting-develop.-the-art-sometimes-gets-iffy%2C-but-it-has-nice-shot-types-and-detail.-the-audio-sometimes-was-cut-out%2C-but-the-dialogue%2Fnarration-could-be-heard.-overall%2C-an-interesting-concept. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-was-good-and-i-liked-how-you-included-sound-effects.-also%2C-the-story-was-cool%2C-but-didn't-make-sense-at-some-places.-the-voice-acting-was-also-a-bit-off.-the-voice-actors-suited-the-characters%2C-but-it-just-sounded-like-there-was-no-emotion-in-the-voices-at-all.-also%2C-the-audio-wasn't-clear.-it-was-very-hard-to-hear-it.-everything-else-was-good%2C-though.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings%2C-the-art-style-is-just-amazing.-the-drawings-really-went-well-with-the-story-and-how-each-drawings-shows-the-part-of-the-story-you're-telling.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoyed-the-drawing-sadly-i-didn't-understand-the-story-because-there-was-no-narration-and-or-dialogue-but-it-was-really-great-the-drawings-- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-good%2C-need-to-be-a-bit-clearer-and-less-clunky.-good-artwork 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story%2C-but-the-music-is-way-too-loud.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-intro-to-your-story%2C-but-i-can't-really-understand-what-the-character-is-saying-because-of-the-echo.-i-also-really-like-all-the-drawings-of-the-characters.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-intro-to-your-story%2C-but-i-can't-really-understand-what-the-character-is-saying-because-of-the-echo.-i-also-really-like-all-the-drawings-of-the-characters.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-really-good-and-the-story-was-pretty-good. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-no-dialogue-or-narration-and-telling-the-story-with-the-drawings%2C-however-it-would-help-a-lot-if-the-drawings-where-more-clear-as-to-what-was-happening-in-the-story.-some-of-the-drawings-where-very-cluttered-and-messy-and-it-would-help-a-lot-if-they-where-more-clear 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/rip-greg-bro%2C-this-was-awesome-to-watch%2C-good-for-andrew.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-and-visual-effects-was-amazing%2C-i-think-that-narration-would-help-express-the-story 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-well-thought-the-story-is-and-it-seems-like-you-guys-put-a-lot-of-effort-overall.-the-art-definitely-has-potential-and-could-be-more-detailed-but-so-far-it-is-pretty-good-and-is-easy-to-understand.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-moral-of-the-story!!!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-watch.-i-think-it-could-have-been-explained-a-little-better-though.-does-the-watch-let-him-travel-through-time-or-teleport%3F-what-i-enjoyed-visually-were-the-well-drawn-fbi-agents-and-the-funeral-scene.-great-job-guys!!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-bells-at-the-beginning.-it-is-really-hard-to-tell-what-is-happening-without-narration-and-i-could-not-follow-the-story-at-all.-i-could-not-see-the-people-since-they-were-only-outlines-and-eyes.-the-beginning-graphics-are-really-detailed-and-fulll. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-style-and-how-detailed-it-is.-it-kind-of-reminds-me-of-mona-or-lisa-from-genshin.-the-story-is-also-clear-and-how-the-drawings-match-the-story-so-well. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-plot-is-pretty-interesting.-the-lighthearted-mood-works-pretty-well-for-it%2C-and-i-really-like-the-narration-as-well.-the-ending-also-feels-unexpectedly-rewarding.-i-think-perhaps-the-art-could-be-cleaned-up-more%2C-and-the-speakers-also-sound-as-though-they-are-leaning-in-too-close-to-mic. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/while-the-artwork-is-ok-i-feel-like-the-narrator-was-reading-the-script-for-the-first-time%2C-and-i-was-missing-a-lot-of-context%2C-and-i-dont-know-what-him-walking-to-school-has-to-do-with-the-plot 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-admire-the-use-of-the-camera-shots%2C-such-as-the-birds-eye-view-one-of-the-main-character's-room.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-art-and-your-story-but-sometimes-the-sound-effects-were-too-loud.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-this-is-amazing%2C-i-iteraly-dont-think-theres-anything-wrong-with-that. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-really-funny-and-it-was-really-interesting-to-watch.-i-really-liked-the-drawings-and-the-character-designs.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-artwork%2C-i-really-like-the-way-you-expressed-the-moral-through-a-cool-time-travel-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story%2C-it-was-easy-to-follow.-i-would-make-your-artwork-a-little-more-clean-(get-rid-of-past-drawings-on-the-paper-and-make-lines-darker).- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/omg-the-art-is-so-good.-i-love-it.-but-i-dont-have-any-clue-as-to-whats-happening. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-picture-they-look-like-what-i-think-they-are-supposed-to-look-like.-i-would-recommend-that-you-add-in-then-beginning-what-they-have-worked-so-hard-on.-you-can-also-make-the-picture-in-the-beginning-show-what-it-is-because-it-looking-like-you-are-flipping-a-page-to-another-city.-everything-else-is-good.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-really-good-and-the-story-was-very-clear-and-the-music-and-effects-fit-with-the-story-really-well 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-how-she-got-to-end-up-doing-what-she-likes%2C-combining-it-with-her-buisness%2C 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-your-art-does-a-good-job-setting-the-scene-and-that-the-narration-is-at-the-right-times-in-the-right-amount. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-artwork%2C-i-think-you-could-work-a-little-more-on-the-narration%2C-it-just-seems-very-dry-and-not-very-much-enthusiasm%2C-but-other-than-that-great-work.-- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/review-the-story-before-submitting- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-very-well-made%2C-and-while-the-visuals-do-work-well-with-expressing-what-is-going-on-in-the-story%2C-i-think-that-they-could-use-a-bit-of-an-overhaul-in-some-places. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-artwork-is-really-amazing.-however-your-story-auto-is-a-bit-off.-but-i-really-like-your-story-idea. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-was-the-sound-effects.-visually-i-enjoyed-how-some-of-the-scenes-showed-the-characters-emotions.-it-was-hard-to-understand-the-story-so-i-didn't-know-what-was-going-on.-the-art-is-good! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-good-but-the-art-needs-some-work%2C-because-you-can-still-see-past-line-mistakes-and-eraser-marks 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-art-is-really-fun-and-i-like-the-diolouge. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i'm-sorry-but-i-did-not-understand-the-story-other-then-a-boy-running-for-something-he-has.-other-then-that-i-did-not-hear-narration-and-barley-heard-dialogue%2C-but-the-art-was-very-understandable-to-show-that-his-parents-did-not-like-what-he-liked-because-of-his-choices- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-work-but-you-could-bearly-hear-the-diolog-over-the-loud-music. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-story%2C-it-has-dialogue%2Cnarration%2Cand-good-artwork 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-blown-away.the-drawings-are-amazing-and-really-captures-the-story.-i-can-tell-a-lot-of-hard-work-was-put-into-this-and-the-story-is-so-pulling-it-makes-me-want-more.-and-the-background-was-so-well-done.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-its-was-interesting-to-watch-and-i-also-like-the-characters-design.-the-ending-was-really-good. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-drawings.-however-there-is-no-narration-so-i-have-no-idea-what-the-story--so-i-would-add-some-of-that-.-i- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-though-the-art-and-dialogue-worked-together-really-well-and-the-story-was-really-cohesive-(it-was-a-little-confusing-because-we-didn't-really-get-any-lines-form-the-other-character-in-the-end-but-overall-it-was-great) 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-was-very-good-and-i-liked-how-used-visual-perspective.-also%2C-the-intro-was-very-good-and-cool.-i-liked-how-you-had-music-throughout-the-entire-video-and-the-story-actually-made-sense%2C-too.-the-story-was-so-cool%2C-especially-since-it-was-a-unique-idea.-also%2C-i-really-liked-the-audio.-the-echoing-in-the-back-very-nice%2C-as-well.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-and-how-the-story-seems-planned-out-well.-i-think-its-really-cool-overall 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-art%2C-but-a-lot-of-the-plot-points-in-the-story-come-out-of-left-field-if-they-were-better-explained-why-they-happened-the-story-would-make-more-sense%2C-other-than-that-it-is-good. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-style-and-how-much-emotions-is-shown-on-the-character's-face. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-really-cool-and-the-story-was-sick. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this%2C-but-i-think-it'll-look-better-if-the-lines-from-the-pencil-was-not-there.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-art-is-very-good-and-goes-with-the-story.-i-would-recommend-that-you-take-out-the-music-at-the-end-because-you-can't-hear-what-you-are-saying.-i-would-recommend-that-you-add-more-voices-to-show-who-is-who.-i-love-your-story-it-makes-sense-and-had-me-attached-to-it.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-drawings-are-set-up-in-this 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-really-interesting%2C-as-the-mirror-kyra-was-an-interesting-plot-thread-i-feel-could've-been-used-more%3F-i-love-the-illustrations-here%2C-as-they-clearly-show-emotion.-i'd-suggest-fixing-some-of-the-grammar-mistakes-though%2C-like-changing-some-'your's-to-'you're'.-i-also-felt-a-bit-confused-at-the-resolution%2C-as-it-involves-kyra-pleasing-her-mom-rather-than-fully-sticking-to-who-she-is%2C-and-her-mom's-apology-feels-out-of-nowhere. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/no-narration-and-dialogue-makes-hard-to-understand-whats-happening-artwork-is-good.-work-on-context-and-storytelling. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thought-process-that-went-into-this-is-amazing-to-me 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-story-and-art-is-good%2C-although-i-couldn't-hear-the-narration-because-of-the-music-in-the-background. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-should-add-dialogue-so-the-story-is-easier-to-follow.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-well-made-but-i-didn't-understand-the-story-itself-there-was-no-narration-to-help-me-understand-the-story-i-liked-the-sounds-implanted-in-the-story.-next-time-make-it-a-bit-longer-and-more-narration. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-and-how-well-everything-was-executed 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-the-intro-for-your-story%2C-but-i-think-you-could-make-the-background-sounds-quieter-and%2C-the-art-looks-great. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-great-and-the-art-and-there-is-a-lot-of-detail. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-and-how-the-story-changes. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-had-no-clue-what-was-going-on-i-think-it-needs-dialogue-and-narration%2C-or-at-least-something-other-than-the-art-to-keep-me-engaged 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-creativity-that-was-used-in-this 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-is-an-amazing-job!-great-work 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-is-so-cool.-i-like-the-colors%2C-the-%22animation%22%2C-very-interesting.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-art-was-amazing-i-mean-it-is-very-impressive%2C-the-only-trouble-i-had-with-your-video-was-the-story%2C-i-just-think-some-dialogue-could-have-helped-with-some-scenes 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-overall-was-kind-of-hard-to-understand%2C-it-has-a-nice-aesthetic-with-the-silence-and-sfx%3B-however%2C-the-lack-of-narration-made-it-hard-to-understand-without-context.-the-art-was-nice%2C-but-hard-to-differ-sometimes-as-it-sometimes-wasn't-the-most-refined.-even-throughout-some-of-the-mishaps%2C-it-looks-very-interesting-and-has-a-nice-flow-to-it. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-was-how-it-flowed-and-developed-throughout.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-emotions-the-characters-portrayed.-this-is-a-well-written-story-good-job! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story-it-is-cool.-your-pictures-could-use-some-work.-the-sound-effects-are-really-cool-and-a-bit-more-narration-might-help-move-the-story-along. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-story-and-the-character-development%2C-and-the-art-was-amazing.-it-could-be-improved-by-making-the-background-noises-a-bit-quieter-because-it-was-hard-to-hear-the-dialog%2Fnarration.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-putting-text-bubbles-was-a-good-idea-so-that-we-would-have-a-good-idea-of-whats-going-on-without-narration. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ohh-this-is-really-cool-%3A0-i-guess-the-story-is-a-little-bit-confusing-at-some-parts-(for-me-i-was-mostly-confused-with-the-ending-though)-but-i-feel-like-the-art-gives-a-decent-amount-of-clarity.-despite-the-lack-of-dialogue-(which-really-suits-the-story-imo)%2C-the-protagonist-is-incredibly-easy-to-empathize-with.-the-music-selection-works-extremely-well-and-the-pencil-sketches-are-just...-also-very-gorgeous.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-message-and-the-cool-idea-and-the-nature-of-the-story.-also-the-visuale-was-very-good-and-fun. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-art-and-the-music-was-nice-but-the-story-was-unclear-without-dialog. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-really-bad-but-the-story-is-really-long-and-well-thought-out. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-could-probably-use-a-little-work-and-the-narration-could-be-clearer%2C-but-the-story-is-pretty-cool 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-gave-the-character-text-bubbles-so-the-audience-cold-easily-portray-what-was-going-on. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-your-art-was-very-good-but-the-story-was-hard-to-understand.-i-think-it-would-have-helped-if-you-added-narration-to-make-the-story-more-clear. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-in-this-story-is-good-but-i-think-that-you-should-narrate-the-story-and-also%2C-why-are-the-scenes-so-prolonged%3F-but-overall-this-story-looks-very-good%2C-just-needs-some-narration-and-dialogue. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-story-is-good-however.-the-drawings-were-not-very-good-but-i-think-you-could-improve-on-the-drawing. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-art-and-it-was-very-good-music%2C-but-i-did-not-hear-dialogue-or-narration%2C-other-then-that-everything-was-well-also-i-kind-of-did-not-understand-the-story.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-in-your-story-would-s-kylie-coming-out-of-the-reflections.-i-feel-like-it-would-have-been-much-better-if-you-would-have-had-a-real-person-needs-rating-though.-it-sounded-too-robotic. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-intro-for-your-story%2C-but-i-think-you-could-make-the-background-sounds-a-little-quieter-so-we-can-hear-what-the-characters-are-saying.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-art-is-amazing-and-it-shows-the-story-well%2C-but-i-was-confused-by-your-story-because-of-the-lack-of-dialogue.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-and-story-is-good-but-i-just-can't-hear-the-narration-well 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-relatable%2C-but-the-narration-and-drawings-are-rough-and-bad-at-telling-everything.-the-narrator-is-not-clear-with-their-voice-and-some-story-points-come-out-of-nowhere.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-camera-moved-front-and-back-so-it-looked-cool. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-you-used-the-story-spine-i-really-like-the-drawings-they-are-beatifull-this-story-is-very-intresting- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-can-add-more-to-it.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-good-but-the-camera-work-is-off-as-it-wouldn't-be-centered-on-the-drawing-but-the-art-is-nice 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-little-past-the-middle%2C-the-dialogue-gets-blurry-and-hard-to-understand.-there-are-a-lot-of-plot-holes-in-the-story%2C-and-it's-hard-to-follow.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-in-this-story-is-great-but-i-think-that-you-should-narrate-the-story-so-it-is-easier-to-tell-what-is-going-on 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-graphics-are-incredible%2C-the-drawings-look-great.-at-the-beginning-it-was-hard-to-tell-what-was-happening%2C-it-looked-like-something-falling-but-i-didnt-know-what.-also-near-the-ending-when-the-main-character-realizes-that-the-person-in-the-water-was-trying-to-help-them-it-seemed-very-sudden%2C-like-the-person-gave-no-reason-and-the-main-character-just-decided-to-like-them.-the-dialogue-and-sound-effects-really-help-the-story-and-make-it-a-lot-better.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-glad-kyra-got-to-chase-her-own-dreams-without-her-mother-corrupting-them 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-pictures-are-amazing-and-the-color-is-super-cool.-however-you-really-could-benefit-from-using-a-bit-more-narration-.-i-really-like-the-sound-and-really-cool-choices.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-art.-the-audio-was-kinda-hard-to-understand.-the-ending-was-sweet. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-cinematic-your-story-is%2C-every-second-was-on-the-edge-of-the-seat! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/probably-add-more-dialogue%2C-but-the-sound-effects-and-drawings-are-pretty-cool 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-was-a-little-unclear-about-the-plot-but-the-art-was-very-good. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-it-needs-narration-and-dialogue%2C-and-the-video-needs-to-be-a-bit-longer.-but%2C-i-think-the-story-looks-interesting. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-of-the-story-is-interesting%2C-but-the-silence-and-quiet-narration-make-it-hard-to-understand-the-story.-along-with-barely-any-context-without-looking-in-the-description.--another-issue-is-the-art%2C-it's-good-but-sometimes-hard-to-tell-what-is-going-on.-other-than-that-criticism%2C-it-would-seem-that-the-story-would-be-a-really-cool-idea. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-good-and-the-story-makes-sense. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-was-honestly-very-confused-on-what-your-story-was-about-but-the-art-is-very-well-done 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-videos-but-it-was-hard-to-know-what-the-story-was-about-and-their-was-barely-no-dioluge-and-the-whole-story-had-music-and-no-narration.-but-you-had-good-drawings. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-you-had-a-lot-of-artwork-so-it-was-clear-that-was-going-on.-overall-this-was-awesome. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-genuinely-incredible%2C-the-art-is-beautiful%2C-the-story-is-extremely-well-told-(especially-with-the-whole-no-narration-thing)-and-it-really-feels-like-these-characters-went-of-a-journey. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-the-concept-is-very-intresting-something-i-would-change-is-making-the-story-longer-because-the-time-is-short-and-its-supposed-to-be-4-minutes- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-the-best-i-have-seen-and-music-is-very-calming-but-some-narration-would-be-good-because-i-don't-have-a-clue-whats-going-on 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-could-use-more-dialogue-but-the-are-and-sound-effects-are-good. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-wish-the-story-had-a-diolog.-i-like-the-drawings-and-the-colors. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/some-dialog-would-be-nice-so-i-could-tell-whats-going-on-at-all.-besides-that-i-think-the-artwork-was-really-good-and-im-sure-the-story-was-awesome-if-i-understood-it. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-but-i-cant-hear-the-narration-at-all.-i-was-a-little-confused-with-the-story-because-i-couldn't-hear-the-narrator.-- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-sick-but-was-lost-without-narration- 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-audio-is-not-very-clear-and-it-makes-it-really-hard-to-understand-the-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-art%2C-but-needs-narration%2C-dialogue-alone-is-not-enough%2C-it-is-confusing-without-any-explanation.-the-sound-effects-are-good-too. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/make-the-story-longer-add-more-narration-and-dialogue-make-drawings-better-- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-drawings-are-very-good-and-the-sound-effects-are-at-the-perfect-times%2C-but-the-video-was-supposed-to-be-under-5-minutes.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/without-narration-i-found-myself-being-lost%2Cthe-art-was-very-good-though 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/without-narration-i-found-myself-being-lost%2Cthe-art-was-very-good-though 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/without-narration-i-found-myself-being-lost%2Cthe-art-was-very-good-though 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/without-narration-i-found-myself-being-lost%2Cthe-art-was-very-good-though 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/without-narration-i-found-myself-being-lost%2Cthe-art-was-very-good-though 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/without-narration-i-found-myself-being-lost%2Cthe-art-was-very-good-though 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-you-used-very-good-drawings-i-noticed-that-you-also-followed-the-story-spine-what-i-like-the-most-of-your-story-is-the-drawings-and-how-did-you-think-of-coming-up-with-snakes-having-superpowers- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/without-narration-i-found-myself-being-lost%2Cthe-art-was-very-good-though 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-used-contrast-and-colors-to-show-the-depth-of-the-story- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-all-music-it.-i-can-barly-hear-the-narration- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-some-of-the-color-but-i-thought-the-drawings-were-unclear-and-i-didn't-really-understand-the-plot.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/these-are-some-amazing-drawings 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-and-story-is-phenomenal%2C-but-the-lack-of-narration-and-dialogue-hurts-the-context.-i-dont-know-whats-happening 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-great%2C-and-the-story-is-good-it-seems-like-a-comic-book-which-is-cool. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-really-great-and-the-sound-matched-really-well-but-it-was-hard-to-follow-along-without-some-type-or-narration-or-more-dialogue- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-drawings.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-should-maybe-add-some-narration-because-the-story-was-hard-to-follow.-you-should-make-the-sound-effects-more-quiet-than-the-dialogue-so-it's-easier-to-understand.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-art-style.-the-story-was-a-bit-confusing-with-the-little-amount-of-dialog.-i-did-like-the-sound-effects. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-couldn't-hear-a-lot-of-the-dialogue-but-the-premise-of-your-story-is-very-interesting.-- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-are-is-awesome-but-i-don't-really-understand-the-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-art-is-very-good-i-can-really-tell-what-it-is.-i-would-recommend-that-you-add-what-is-happening-because-it-would-go-dark-then-a-sound-affect-but-we-wouldn't-know-what-is-happing.-you-should-add-what-is-happing-not-just-sound-effects.-i-love-the-dedication-to-the-sound-effects.-- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-was-kind-of-hard-to-follow-because-there-was-no-context-to-your-images.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-couldn't-really-tell-what-the-story-was-about-because-the-art-wasn't-that-in-depth-and-there-was-also-no-dialogue. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-ominous-vibe-that-this-video-gives-off%2C-but-some-of-the-slides-are-a-bit-too-messy-to-actually-tell-whats-going-on.-also-its-hard-to-hear-the-dialog 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i--think-your-pictures-looked-really-good%2C-but-the-story-was-hard-to-understand.-i-think-it-would-have-helped-if-there-had-been-more-narration-or-dialog. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings%2C-very-good.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-rather-interesting%2C-however-it-lacks-vital-narration-to-explain-the-world-and-the-main-character.-maybe-consider-adding-even-just-a-bit-of-that%2C-it-would-help-the-story-incredibly. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-just-that-half-of-the-story-is-music-and-has-no-narration-- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-seems-like-it-could-be-interesting-based-on-the-ending%2C-though-i-feel-as-though-the-story-could-be-conveyed-more-clearly---perhaps-with-more-narration-or-a-bit-more-cleaned-up-artwork.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-story-it-is-very-well-organized-i-noticed-that-you-used-the-story-spine--what-i-found-most-intresting-about-your-story-is-the-drawings-very-good-i-understand-this-story-it-is-very-good 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-story-goes-in-depth-with-the-drawings-but-i-couldn't-understand-what-was-going-on. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-this-was-a-good-storyline%2C-but-i-think-the-drawings-could-have-been-more-in-depth. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-can-add-more-into-the-drawings.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-unique-and-the-story-seems-interesting-i-just-wish-i-could-have-heard-the-voices-more. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-sound-effects-and-the-drawings.-however%2C-i-can't-really-understand-what's-happening-in-the-story-so-maybe-you-can-have-some-narration.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-sound-effects-and-the-drawings.-however%2C-i-can't-really-understand-what's-happening-in-the-story-so-maybe-you-can-have-some-narration.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-fantastic%2C-and-that-opening-scene-with-the-bells-was-really-intense%2C-and-while-i-really-do-like-this-more-%C2%A8chaotic%C2%A8-artstyle%2C-i-think-it-would-be-a-little-easier-to-understand-if-the-lines-were-closer-together. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-idea%2C-these-drawings-are-really-good-as-well%2C-awesome 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-the-sounds-but-i-would-add-some-background-sounds-like-soft-music- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-can-add-more-to-the-drawing.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-there-is-no-narration%2C-but-you-can-still-tell-whats-happening-from-the-narration-and-the-dialogue. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-it-so-fun-%2C-but-got-lost-due-to-no-narration 2021-12-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-and-the-background-sound-effects%2C-but-i-don't-really-understand-the-story.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-and-the-background-sound-effects%2C-but-i-don't-really-understand-the-story.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-this-is-amazing!-your-story-and-drawings-are-very-clear-and-very-well-done.-i-found-myself-wanting-to-know-more-as-the-film-went-on.-i-was-rather-intrigued!-your-drawings-and-music-make-sense-with-the-world-you've-built-and-i-could-understand-which-emotions%2Fthoughts-you-wanted-to-put-across.-excellent-job-with-that!-your-characterization-was-also-on-point-for-the-main-character-and-their-reflection.-bravo!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-concept!-i-find-it-interesting-that-kyra's-reflection-has-a-different-personality-than-kyra.-it-adds-a-little-twist-to-the-story.-to-help-your-audience-better-understand-your-story%2C-you-could-clarify-the-link-between-the-fashion-aspect-of-the-story-and-the-part-where-kyra-wants-to-play-tennis.-good-job-on-your-film! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/aww...-i-felt-so-sad-for-tumtum!-nice-characterization-for-this-creature-who-just-wanted-to-explore-and-make-discoveries.-although-the-drawings-were-sometimes-unclear-near-the-beginning-of-the-story%2C-they-were-very-well-done.-great-job! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/aww...-i-felt-so-sad-for-tumtum!-nice-characterization-for-this-creature-who-just-wanted-to-explore-and-make-discoveries.-although-the-drawings-were-sometimes-unclear-near-the-beginning-of-the-story%2C-they-were-very-well-done.-great-job! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/so-cute!-i-love-the-idea-behind-your-story.-it-seems-that-that-the-prohibition-of-plants-could-be-viewed-as-a-metaphor-for-something-else-which-is-great!-your-drawings-are-fairly-clear-to-understand-although-there-could-have-been-more-variety-with-the-angles-and-shots-used.-also%2C-i-think-your-minor-beats-could-use-a-tiny-bit-more-clarification.-overall%2C-i-love-this-story-about-a-person-who-just-wants-to-be-themself.-great-job! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-amazing-impressions-of-the-artwork.-i-also-liked-how-the-story-had-a-good-ending-in-which-the-character-found-supportive-friends-and-beat-cancer.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story!!-the-transitioning-in-the-story-kept-me-interested-throughout-the-video%2C-it-felt-like-the-story-was-based-on-a-true-story-at-first-then-transitioned-into-something-interesting.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-both-the-drawing-and-the-story.-i-like-how-you-added-different-characters-and-transitioned-them-well-into-the-story! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/visually-i-enjoyed-the-drawings.-i-like-the-voice-over-and-the-ending-of-him-beating-cancer.-additionally%2C-the-impression-of-the-characters-was-spot-on! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-characters%2C-the-colors%2C-and-the-impression!!-the-story-was-also-good.-i-love-how-the-story-had-sound-effects-and-many-different-characters%2C.-the-best-part-was-the-voice-acting%2C-it-was-amazing. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-characters%2C-the-colors%2C-and-the-impression!!-the-story-was-also-good.-i-love-how-the-story-had-sound-effects-and-many-different-characters%2C.-the-best-part-was-the-voice-acting%2C-it-was-amazing. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-atmosphere-and-story-really-interesting.-visually-i-enjoyred-the-art-%3A) 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-trophy.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-arwork. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-attention-to-detail-in-the-art.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-art. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-that-was-amazing!-voice-acting-was-on-point-and-the-sound-effects-were-a-big-plus.-visually-i-enjoyed-everything.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-your-story!-visually-i-enjoyed-the-art-%3A) 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/visually-i-enjoyed-the-girl's-happy-dance-at-the-end. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-dave-is-a-loner. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/visually-i-enjoyed-the-artwork. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/visually-i-enjoyed-how-the-film-felt-fun-and-lively.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/voice-acting-10%2F10 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-story-is-so-great!-i-love-the-way-you-have-used-vibrant-colors.-what-i-found-interesting-is-how-you-voiced-all-the-characters-in-the-story-and-the-usage-of-sound-effects-which-only-enhanced-the-story!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-how-you-animated-most-of-the-clips.-your-story-has-developed-nicely!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-video-started-(in-the-computer)%2C-establishing-the-setting-of-the-story-clearly. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-story-has-developed-and-the-protagonist-too.-adding-few-connectors-in-the-middle-(interim-frames-to-show-movement-of-characters)-would-help-enhancing-the-video.-rest-everything-is-great%2C-especially-the-sound-effects-and-soundtracks-used. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/all-the-four-characters-in-this-story-are-very-well-created-and-their-environment.-it-would-have-been-better-if-you-would-have-avoid-using-a-stick-figure-while-drawing-basil. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-absolutely-gorgeous.-the-visuals%2C-the-story%2C-the-music%2C-just-everything-was-so-amazing.-the-way-you-used-lighting-in-this-story-was-so-powerful-and-the-pacing-was-perfect.-the-music-added-so-much-emotion-to-it-and-this-is-probably-one-of-my-favorites.-i-absolutely-adore-the-ending.-amazing-job!!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-how-you-were-able-to-tell-a-story-without-narration-or-dialogue-and-the-music-added-such-a-great-layer-of-emotion-and-ambiance-to-it.-i-loved-the-artwork-and-the-characters-so-much!-the-story-has-its-own-unique-charm-to-it-and-i-loved-how-you-played-around-with-vibrant-and-muted-colors. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-wholesome-partner-pizza-shop-that-opened-in-the-end%2C-what-a-lovely-ending%2C-hope-human-and-monster-relations-improve-in-the-coming-years.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-depictions-of-monsters-and-humans%2C-monsters-are-cute%2C-humans-have-a-nice-level-of-detail.-also-everything-was-clearly-drawn-so-you-could-see-what-was-happening.-also-sick-sound-effects. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-ending%2C-an-unexpected-but-nice-ending-about-learning-the-old-ways-of-resource-management%2C-sick.-visually-i-enjoyed-all-the-art-it-was-nicely-drawn-and-colored-and-very-clear-in-it's-storytelling.-well-done. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-was-pretty-funny-ngl.--what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-twists-and-turns-it-took%2C-the-kraken-being-pretty-instead-of-scary%2C-and-the-donkey-falling-in-love-with-them-was-a-lovely-surprise.-great-moral%2C-great-storytelling.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-nice-illustrations%2C-everything-was-clearly-and-nicely-illustrated%2C-i-always-could-clearly-see-what-was-going-on.-good-character-designs-too. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-entire-plot-is-set-within-a-computer%2C--the-characters-being-digital-art-coming-alive.-within-the-story%3F-very-cool-and-creative..-visually-i-loved-the-animation%2C-you-went-above-and-beyond-in-finishing-and-entire-animated-short.-the-colors-are-vibrant-and-the-scenes-convey-a-lot-of-emotion.-i-wish-some-of-the-scenes-were-just-a-bit-more-clear-with-their-storytelling%2C-but-love-it-nonetheless. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-of-all-i-really-loved-this-story%2C-real-nice-use-of-dramatic-irony%2C-and-there-was-a-real-charm-to-the-daring-adventure-we-see-from-the-perspective-of-mo.-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-audience-gets-nearly-the-same-information-as-mo-does%2C-but-comes-to-a-different-conclusion.-besides-mo's-misreading-of-the-zoo-sign.-visually-i-enjoyed-how-cohesive-the-drawing-style-was-throughout%2C-and-how-i-could-clearly-tell-what-was-happening-in-each-scene.-very-well-done-for-storytelling%2C-and-very-lovely-and-clean-art.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-phenomenal%2C-and-it-kinda-gives-me-avatar-the-last-air-bender-vibes.-but-it's-still-original%2C-unique%2C-and-has-such-a-fairy-tail-aspect-of-it.-the-only-thing-i-have-to-say-is-that-the-pacing-is-a-little-off%2C-but-it-doesn't-take-away-from-this-amazing-story. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-so-cute! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-sound-effects-and-it-was-a-fun-plot-twist!- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-story-and-idea.-i-like-how-at-the-beginning%2C-everyone-was-exactly-the-same-color%2C-but-the-very-last-scene-shows-more-diversity-and-color.-in-other-words%2C-you-attention-to-detail-is-impeccable.-your-story-is-interesting-and-unique%2C-and-really-shows-real-world-issues. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-pictures!!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawings-are-super-cute-and-i-like-the-colors!- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-is-interesting%2C-but-the-story-has-quite-a-bit-of-fluff%2C-if-you-removed-most-of-that%2C-it-would-flow-better.-the-drawings-are-clear%2C-but-a-bit-messy.-i-enjoyed-seeing-your-work. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-visual-of-an-apartment-complex-of-snakes-and-how-they-navigate-inside-it-and-i-found-the-concept-of-the-snakes-having-powers-really-interesting 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-don't-really-understand-the-story.-some-stories-are-better-without-narration%2C-but-the-first-rule-of-story-telling-is-to-never-confuse-your-audience.-i-am-confused.-the-art-is-awsome%2C-but-you-need-that-bit-of-clarity-that-really-brings-a-story-to-life. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-art-very-much%2C-it-really-communicates-the-idea-of-the-story%2C-which-is-also-very-creative.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-of-your-story-reel%2C-it-really-shows-the-dynamics.-the-story-is-also-very-interesting%2C-but-i-think-talking-to-people-on-a-computer-won't-necessary-change-things-for-her.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-interesting-story.-i-really-liked-the-art-especially-when-it-went-all-pink-and-glitchy%2C-that-was-excellent.-the-concept-also-is-great%2C-i-think-so-many-people-can-relate-to-this.-i-only-with-it-was-longer....bravo! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-art-and-your-story!!!-the-idea-of-water-and-fire-falling-in-love-with-each-other-is-amazing-and-your-story-reel-is-perfect!!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work%2C-it's-a-creative-%26-moving-story.-i-was-rooting-for-him-to-find-his-brother-and-was-happy-with-how-you-ended-it.-the-visual-of-the-portal-was-also-really-neat%2C-you-clearly-put-a-lot-of-work-into-this.-well-done! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/when-i-first-watched-this-i-saw-great-potential-and-now-look-how-far-you-have-gotten-it-so-far-i-cant-wait-to-see-it-in-your-exhibition 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-your-drawings-and-your-story-is-very-easy-to-follow.-i-liked-the-moral-of-your-story%3A-standing-up-and-fighting-for-what-is-right.-the-camera-shots-are-also-used-very-well.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work%2C-the-sounds-effects-were-awesome.-it-was-also-a-very-strong-opening-act-1%2C-i-was-rooting-for-him-when-he-got-the-job.-i-really-loved-the-part-when-he-first-went-into-the-computer-world%2C-i-was-wishing-he-would-spend-more-time-there.-your-team-should-be-proud 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/when-i-watch-this-story-i-was-just-wowed-by-how-good-this-was-great-work-i-just-have-1-suggestion-give-your-edited-a-raise-he-or-she-did-better-than-the-other-weeks-so-great-job-editor- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job%2C-loved-the-concept-and-the-way-you-rendered-the-virus.-i-relate-to-the-moral-and-think-it's-a-great-one.-you-really-improved-from-last-weeks-submissions%2C-your-hands-didn't-bother-me-only-saw-them-once.-i-hope-you-keep-up-the-great-work. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/gorgeous-non-verbal-story-telling.-very-sweet-and-compelling.-it-takes-a-lot-of-skill-to-convey-that-much-with-just-expression-and-gesture.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this.-is.-amazing.-i-feel-like-it-could-be-an-actual-short.-the-art-is-so-simple%2C-but-it-tells-a-clear-story%2Cand-the-story-it-tells-is-utterly-amazing.-i-can-tell-you-put-a-lot-of-work-into-this%2C-and-it-shows. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-well-done%2C-your-story-was-clear%2C-creative-and-engaging.-my-favorite-part-was-when-the-cat-drank-the-glowing-milk%2C-it-was-a-great-frame.-i-was-also-very-moved-at-the-end-when-she-rekindled-with-her-mother.-thank-you-for-sharing- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-pretty-good%2C-but-a-little-disjointed.-the-art-is-adorable%2C-simple%2C-and-really-captures-the-scenes.-having-them-climb-a-mountain-just-to-meat-each-other-doesn't-make-a-lot-of-sense%2C-but-it-works%2C-and-i'm-not-sure-you-connected-what-blue-wants-to-what-they-need%2C-but-it-was-still-fun-to-watch. 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i'm-a-fan-of-horror-movies-so-i-really-loved-the-dream-scene-it-was-ambitious%2C-creative-and-scary!-the-art-was-unique-and-really-original%2C-i'd-honestly-put-it-up-on-my-wall-if-i-had-a-frame.-you-clearly-put-a-ton-of-effort-into-this-story-and-you-should-be-very-proud-of-this-work.-i-was-only-a-little-confused-at-the-ending-of-the-dream%2C-otherwise-i-really-liked-the-final-table-scene.-great-use-of-music-too- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-snakes-so-much-and-so-i-loved-this-story%2C-great-job.-your-vocal-delivery-really-brought-the-character's-to-life-that-was-a-nice-touch.-your-music-was-also-well-chosen-and-really-created-a-world-i-felt-like-i-was-visiting.-thank-you!! 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wonderful-work.-the-moral-i-took-from-the-story-is-that-plants-have-feelings-too.-we-really-enjoyed-watching-this-story%2C-the-music-supported-the-mood-very-nicely.-bravo 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-turned-into-such-a-fun-adventure-story.-i-saw-your-early-ideas-in-week-2-and-was-so-excited-to-see-more.-i-love-the-direction-you-took-it.-the-rivalry-creates-nice-interpersonal-conflict%2C-while-the-magic-plague-is-a-good-main-conflict.-and-your-artwork-is-just-fantastic.-amazing-work.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-time-traveling-watch-is-a-unique-plot-device.-i'm-a-little-confused-why-the-dad's-in-a-black-ops-fbi-prison.-it-would-have-been-cool-to-see-the-monsters-pulled-out-of-the-portal-and-into-the-fbi-facility-as-part-of-the-climax.- 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-you-planned-out-jeff's-background-and-the-timeline-in-your-world-building.-however%2C-it-was-very-hard-to-follow-your-story.-the-audio-was-very-uneven%2C-and-the-sound-effects-obscured-the-narration-on-some-slides.-it-was-just-really-difficult-to-understand-the-narration.-your-drawings-made-the-story-seem-very-exciting%2C-i-just-wish-i-could-have-understood-it-better.- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-king-makes-her-do-something-that-she-doesn't-want-to-do%2C-but-then-she-does-it-and-regrets-it.-the-moral-was-very-clear-when-she-stood-up-for-what-she-believed-was-wrong.-i-love-the-way-you-depicted-the-characters-and-scenes%2C-great-art-style. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-magic-grocery-store-aisle-is-such-a-fun-idea.-and-milk-that-gives-a-cat-the-ability-to-talk-is-wonderful-and-exciting.-i-like-the-picture-of-the-cat's-concern-when-he's-starting-his-new-job-as-a-therapist.-i-was-expecting-a-bit-more-adventure-when-the-magic-grocery-store-aisle-showed-up%2C-but-a-better-relationship-with-her-mother-is-a-good-outcome-for-the-character.- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-the-story-about-the-stork-bonding-with-the-baby%2C-and-i-love-the-theme-of-what-you-can-do-has-a-purpose.--the-ending-was-so-sweet-and-i-loved-it! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-how-you-explained-the-situations%2C-but-i-was-wanting-to-know-more-about-how-the-cat-helped-them-talked-things-out. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-flows-nicely%2C-and-i-like-the-theme-of-working-with-what-you-can-do%2C-and-not-focusing-on-what-you-can't-do.-i-also-like-how-you-connected-the-beginning-and-end-of-stocky's-career.- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow!!-the-character-driven-plot-was-great%2C-the-visuals-were-great%2C-and-i-love-the-moral-of-treat-others-how-you-want-to-be-treated.--good-job! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoyed-the-message-about-how-important-it-is-to-have-a-balanced-connection-to-people-and-nature!--and-visually%2C-i-enjoyed-the-part-plant%2C-part-human-storyline.--well-done! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-interesting-and-unique%2C-i-find-myself-wondering-about-the-world-stocky-is-living-in.-your-drawings-are-adorable%2C-but-depth-could-make-them-more-interesting.-i-really-like-the-story-overall%2C-and-the-formatting-is-fun.- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-setting-of-the-story-is-very-interesting%2C-and-i-like-how-you-develop-your-character-through-a-series-of-events%2C-rather-than-just-telling.-the-drawings-are-pretty-and-i-really-like-the-ending-of-the-story!-one-thing-that-you-could-improve-is-to-maybe-add-some-music-and-sound-effects-to-better-show-us-the-vibe.-%3Ad-overall%2C-the-storyreel-is-good! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-reel-is-phenomenal%2C-100%25-the-best-by-far!-from-the-music%2C-to-the-conversations%2C-to-the-art%2C-to-the-end-credits.-it-feels-like-an-actual-movie!-the-plot-feels-a-bit-like-i%E2%80%99ve-seen-it-before-many-times%2C-but-the-way-it-was-presented-made-it-unique-and-outstanding! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-opening-makes-me-very-excited!-at-first%2C-the-story-is-easy-to-follow-and-i-like-all-the-sound-effects-that-you-added.-it's-just-that-near-the-end%2C-everything-went-so-quickly-that-i-have-to-go-back-and-re-watch-the-whole-thing.-maybe-next-time%2C-you-could-add-more-psychological-development-and-add-more-details-into-the-story%2C-just-to-make-it-more-fun-and-easier-to-follow! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-present-your-main-character-through-the-drawings-that-you-did.-the-camera-angles-are-nice-as-well%2C-especially-when-she-shows-her-magic.-the-moral-of-the-story-is-clearly-presented-to-encourage-people-to-stand-up-for-what-they-think-is-right.-the-whole-thing-is-very-easy-to-follow.-good-job! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-was-how-she-was-able-to-stand-up-for-what-was-right-and-tell-them-what-the-king-did-even-though-she-was-involved-and-had-followed-the-king%E2%80%99s-orders.-i-loved-the-art-style%2C-i%E2%80%99ve-been-excited-to-see-this-story-unfold-since-the-beginning.-great-work. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-absolutely-love-this-video!-the-music%2C-the-voice-and-the-drawings-weave-together-to-form-a-great-story!-your-animals-are-all-sooo-cute-and-each-character-has-its-own-personality-and-development!-good-job!--the-only-thing-i-am-a-little-bit-confused-is-why-she-suddenly-disappeared-in-the-end%2C-but-that's-not-a-big-deal!-overall%2C-this-is-an-amazing-storyreel!-%3Ad 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/hi!--i-like-the-setting-and-sybil's-character-design!--the-beginning-is-very-captivating%2C-and-made-me-want-to-know-more-about-the-story!--the-animation-also-made-the-story-interesting.-%3A)-- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-plot-of-this-story!-the-way-you-drew-the-characters%2C-the-narwhals%2C-the-starfishes%2C-etc%2C-are-so-cute!--plus%2C-we-can-see-development-in-each-character%2C-great-job!-- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-was-how-she-went-to-a-digital-world%2C-was-she-physically-in-the-world-or-just-on-her-computer%3F-what-i-enjoyed-most-visually-was-the-few-colored-bits.-they-really-added-emotion-and-feeling. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-really-interesting-and-i-love-the-character-designs.-it-was-a-lot-to-soak-up-but-overall-the-story-line-was-amazing.- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/hey!--i-liked-the-moral-of-your-story%2C-it-is-very-sweet-and-heart-warming.-the-setting-is-also-great-for-the-story!--the-way-you-were-scrolling-through-the-story-was-also-interesting.-%3A)--if-the-narration-could-have-a-bit-more-emotions-it-would-add-a-lot-more-to-the-final-video.- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/as-someone-else-who-did-the-whole-thing-independently%2C-great-work!-the-story-is-interesting-and-the-artwork-goes-really-well-with-the-story. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/heyy!-you-did-a-great-job-of-explaining-the-situations-of-the-characters-and-the-settings-of-the-story!--however-it-would-be-interesting-to-hear-dialogues-and-the-mother's-point-of-view.--also%2C-the-end-seems-a-bit-rush%2C-it-would-be-great-if-we-get-to-know-more-details-of-how-the-problem-was-resolved!- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/creative-use-of-various-picture-styles-and-pictures-for-different-parts-of-like-the-%E2%80%9Cevery-day%E2%80%9D-and-%E2%80%9Cuntil-one-day%E2%80%9D 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-and-the-art-a-ton!!!-there-isn%E2%80%99t-any-voice-acting-or-sound-effects-but-i-think-the-story-is-still-great-without-it%2C-it-would-be-cool-to-actually-hear-the-conversation-though! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/o-h-m-y-gosh-that-was-so-good%3F%3F%3F%3F-that-was-like-a-actual-movie-or-something-like-seriously-that-should-be-a-movie-im-so-attached-to-the-characters-already-(minus-the-old-lady)-and-the-art-is-so-good-too!!!-i-love-the-moments-where-they-bonded-and-when-they-first-met-and-i-love-te-overall-storry-and-plot-and-every-thing-the-voice-acting-is-super-good-too!!!-im-still-very-invested-in-their-story-give-me-a-sequel-or-something-somehow-i-dont-know-i-love-them 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-art-work.-also-your-voice-is-very-clear-- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-confusing-but-i-like-the-music-and-art!-i-think-you-could%E2%80%99ve-used-some-sound-effects-or-voice-acting-or-something-but-other-then-that-it%E2%80%99s-great!! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-was-amazing-i-love-the-roomba-and-the-sound-effects-oh-my-gosh-that-was-amazing-i-was-pretty-confused-but-it-was-amazing-regardless 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-was-amazing-i-love-the-roomba-and-the-sound-effects-oh-my-gosh-that-was-amazing-i-was-pretty-confused-but-it-was-amazing-regardless 2021-12-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-work.-your-story-was-exciting%2C-creative-and-moving-which-is-a-rare-combination.-i-was-hooked-from-end-to-end.-the-visuals-worked-well-and-in-act-3-they-really-helped-build-tension.-loves-the-pov-shots.-you-should-be-proud-of-this-work. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-a-lot!- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-the-story-and-the-art-was-very-good! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art%2C-but-the-part-where-she-escaped-went-by-really-fast. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings! 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-drawings%2C-but-maybe-talk-with-more-enthusiasm%2C-so-the-story-feel-more-alive. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-background-noises-and-the-art%2C-but-i-couldn't-here-you-guys-talking-that-much-because-the-sound-effects-were-so-loud. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-good!-i-like-the-art-work.-maybe-just-speak-up-a-little-more- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-speak-up-a-bit 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-confection-of-duty-and-morals-and-i-think-this-made-a-strong-lesson.-i-also-love-fully-developedness-of-the-story%2C-with-a-clear-plot-to-follow.-visually%2C-i-enjoyed-the-detail-in-the-drawings%2C-which-enhanced-the-mood-and-conveyed-emotion. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-harper-achieved-what-she-wanted%2C-friendship-and-belonging%2C-but-still-recognized-there-was-something-missing-and-chose-to-end-what-had-given-her-joy-in-order-to-be-true-to-herself.-i-like-that-you-used-a-less-common-plot-and-it-made-for-a-very-interesting-story.-visually-i-enjoyed-that-the-art-was-done-in-many-different-styles%2C-yet-it-did-not-create-confusion-or-detract-from-the-story.-in-fact%2C-i-think-that-the-difference-in-style-also-highlighted-a-difference-in-mood-in-the-story. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-that-someone-who-was-very-competitive-and-stuck-up-found-humility-by-being-forced-to-work-with-their-biggest-competitor-for-the-common-good%2C-which-also-made-them-a-better-person.-the-whole-story-in-fact%2C-seems-to-me-to-point-to-this-message-with-them-being-expelled-from-the-guild-and-needing-work%2C-etc.-and-i-think-incorporating-a-moral-this-closely-benefited-your-story-immensely.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-clearness-and-definition-of-all-the-scenes%2C-i-could-see-what-was-going-on-at-all-times.-i-also-liked-the-way-that-you-showed-magic-coming-out-of-potion-bottles. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-chip-goes-on-a-mission-so-he-will-make-friends-in-his-world%2C-but-instead-finds-a-better-friend-in-the-human-world.-i-love-the-message-that-anyone-can-be-friends-and-about-the-importance-of-friendship.-visually-i-enjoyed-the-way-values-make-the-sunset-pop-out%2C-as-well-as-the-framing-techniques-used-in-the-film. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-such-a-cute-story.-love-the-happy. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/omg-ahhhh.!!!i-love-all-the-drawings-and-the-flow-of-the-story.-the-story-is-amazing-and-so-cute.- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-and-story-is-very-good.-i-see-that-you-used-animation-as-well-(like-mine)%2C-very-cool.- 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-and-story-is-very-good.-but-i-can%E2%80%99t-help-to-think-that-your-character-basil-is-super-similar-to-basil-in-omori.-idk-if-you-knew-this-game-prior-to-it.-but-it-did-catch-me-off-guard.-anyways%2C-great-story. 2021-12-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-character-designs! 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-is-so-much-in-this-story-that-i-absolutely-love.-first-off%2C-i-love-the-premise-that-steve-is-treated-kindly-by-everyone-else%2C-but-he-doesn%E2%80%99t-actually-have-anybody--that-he-considers-a-friend.-i-also-like-that-james-isn%E2%80%99t-trying-to-take-advantage-of-steve-and-his-power.-the-premise-of-a-super-school-is-very-intriguing%2C-and-that-just-because-you-have-a-superpower-doesn%E2%80%99t-mean-you%E2%80%99re-automatically-admitted-into-super-school.-i-found-it-very-interesting-that-steve-winded-up-where-he-started%2C-but-that-he-has-changed-and-grown-from-his-adventure.-i-would%E2%80%99ve-liked-to-know-what-the-other-rare-powers-were%2C-but-everything-else-is-fantastic. 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-moral-of-your-story%2C-as-it%E2%80%99s-super-important-and-relevant-to-the-times-that-we-live-in-today.-i-also-love-that-in-some-of-your-drawings%2C-all-the-background-people-are-just-silhouettes-because-it-really-puts-emphasis-on-jamal%2C-mark%2C-and-their-story.- 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-your-story-was-very-interesting%2C-and-i-love-that-in-the-ending%2C-emerson-decides-to-play-soccer-because-it-connects-her-to-her-father.-did-she-time-travel-by-touching-the-trophy%2C-and-what-was-the-significance-of-paris%3F-did-her-dad-play-in-a-match-there%2C-and-that%E2%80%99s-where-he-won-the-trophy%3F-that-was-really-my-only-question%2C-everything-else-was-really-good.- 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-your-story.-i-thought-the-art-style-was-really-good%2C-and-i-love-that-the-ring-had-a-sound-effect-to-emphasis-that-it-had-power.-i-was-a-little-confused-why-she-turned-back-into-her-alien-form-when-she-ate-human-food-because-if-she%E2%80%99s-still-wearing-the-ring-wouldn%E2%80%99t-she-stay-in-her-human-form%3F-that-was-the-only-question-i-really-had%2C-everything-else-was-really-good%2C-and-i-love-that-tiilan-and-neo-compromised-in-the-ending.- 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-moral-is-so-important-for-everyone-to-remember-visually-i-loved-how-the-characters-emotions-and-their-faces 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-a-great-moral-it's-super-important-in-our-world-today.-visually-i-enjoyed-how-you-represented-personalities-to-your-illustrations 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-how-your-character-found-a-trophy-out-of-the-bookcase 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-way-how-your-character-turned-into-a-human-i-didn't-think-she-met-planet-earth 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-and-idea-was-very-good.-reminds-me-of-harrison-bergeron.-anyways-i-want-to-learn-more-about-nick-himself. 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story%2C-art-and-morals.-the-only-part-i-was-confused-about-was-act-2.-the-progression-was-a-little-wonky.-i-also-want-to-learn-more-about-character.-why-he-needed-to-not-socialize.-ik 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-very-interesting-a-surreal.-it%E2%80%99s-a-like-van-gough-type-of-thing%2C-it%E2%80%99s-very-interesting%2C-it-really-made%2Fwant-me-think.-unfortunately-though%2C-i-was-confused-on-what-he-discover.-elaborate-on-the-end-pls. 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-good.-i-see-your-trying-to-make-a-actual-reel%2C-which-is-really-good.though-it-would-help-to-explain-the-timeline-a-little-better.-for-example%2C-having-a-time-stamp-for-what-john-age-is-or-how-much-time-passed.- 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-good.-it%E2%80%99s-the-story-that-seemed-a-little-dark.-i-did-not-understand-the-moral-of-the-story%2C-it-seemed-like-there-was-more-to-the-story-when-ended. 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-of-the-midas-touch-was-very-good-and-interesting.-you-can-definitely--go-wild-with-an-idea-with-that.-but-i-had-hard-time-connecting-the-moral-to-the-story.-the-story-went-a-little-to-fast-for-me%2C-i-wish-could-elaborate-on-some-parts-of-the-story. 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-art.-its-so-goooooooooood!!!!!!!-everything-was-in-color-which-was-super-impressive-and-amazing.-i%E2%80%A6-i-don%E2%80%99t-even-know-what-to-say.-but-the-story-could-sue-a-little-work.-the-part-i-was-unclear-about-was-after-the-lift-off.-it-very-jarring-but-the-overal-story-is-good.-amazing-work. 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-very-good.-even-though-some-frames-feature-the-girl-as-a-stick-figure%2C-her-head-isn't.-overall%2C-the-drawing-is-very-good-and-the-little-effects-on-the-art-is-very-good%2C-as-well.-i-also-really%2C-really-liked-the-story.-sure%2C-it-was-a-bit-short%2C-but-the-point-came-across-very%2C-very-well.-there-was-a-moral-to-the-story-and-that-was-moral-was-depicted-very-well.-the-pacing-of-the-story-was-also-good-and-i-liked-the-idea-of-the-story-in-general.-it's-a-very-unique-idea.-overall%2C-great-story-with-great-pacing-and-even-better-art. 2021-12-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ok-ok%2C-there's-so-so-much-to-say-about-this.-the-art-is-actually-crazy-and-insane.-this-video-is-the-only-video-that-features-art-in-every-single-one-of-the-drawings.-oh-yeah%2C-did-i-mention-that-the-art-is-actually-crazy-and-insane%2C-especially-since-it-has-color%3F-also%2C-this-is-the-first-video-that-i've-seen-so-far-that-is-actually-long%2C-since-it's-a-full-story.-the-videos-that-i've-already-seen-are-not-fully-fleshed-out%2C-well-written-stories%2C-but-this-video-changes-that.-the-story-is-so-good.-the-pacing-is-amazing%2C-the-story-is-amazing%2C-and-the-characters-are-amazing.-there-are-actual-consequences-for-everything.-to-be-honest-though%2C-the-absolute-best-part-of-this-video-is-how-realistic-it-is.-it's-so%2C-so-realistic%2C-especially-the-part-where-her-social-anxiety-makes-her-black-out-and-she-wakes-up-in-a-hospital.-although%2C-i-do-have-to-say-that-i-was-hoping-for-more-than-one-voice%2C-especially-since-the-girl's-brother-was-a-main-character-in-the-story.-her-brother-should've-obviously-had-a-male-voice-actor.-also%2C-her-brother-looks-like-a-girl.-it-took-me-2-whole-minutes-to-realize-that-her-brother-was-actually-her-brother.-at-first%2C-i-thought-that-it-was-one-of-her-female-friends%2C-since-he-looks-like-a-girl-and-there's-no-male-voice-actor.-although%2C-this-is-the-most-clear-audio-and-i-wonder-if-the-reason-for-why-there-was-only-one-voice-actor-was-because-she-had-the-most-clear-voice%2Faudio.-either-way%2C-that's-the-only-issue-that-i-have-with-this-story.-everything-else-is-perfect.- 2021-12-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ok%2C-so-there-are-a-lot-of-things-that-i-liked-about-your-video.-i-liked-how-you-included-the-story-spine-and-the-sound-effects-and-music-were-absolutely-awesome.-although%2C-to-be-honest%2C-for-a-story-that's-this-good%2C-i-was-expecting-it-to-be-longer%2C-but-still%2C-the-entire-story-was-told-and-that's-good%2C-although-the-ending-felt-like-it-had-nothing-to-do-with-story%2C-which-is-what-confused-me.-in-the-end%2C-he-woke-up-and-wanted-to-be-comforted-by-his-parents.-to-be-honest%2C-it-just-seems-a-bit-random%2C-especially-for-an-ending.-also%2C-why-would-he-go-back-home-and-just-sleep%3F-the-people%2Fbullies-could-just-go-to-his-home.-after-all%2C-they-chased-him-around-the-whole-city%2C-right%3F-speaking-of-that%2C-i-doubt-that-they'd-be-able-to-cover-a-whole-city%2C-even-if-it-is-the-smallest-one-in-the-world.-anyways%2C-i-liked-how-you-included-color%2C-sound-effects%2C-and-music%2C-but-the-audio-was-a-bit-unclear-for-most-of-the-video%2C-but-besides-all-of-that%2C-the-story-itself-is-very-good-and-absolutely-has-a-lot-of-potential-to-be-even-better-and-cooler.- 2021-12-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-is-a-really-great-act-2!-it-leaves-both-of-the-characters-in-a-losing-situation-where-they-will-be-able-to-come-back-in-act-3.- 2021-12-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-is-a-really-great-act-2!-it-leaves-both-of-the-characters-in-a-losing-situation-where-they-will-be-able-to-come-back-in-act-3.- 2021-12-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/super-nice-sketches.-cool-story.-the-pacing-was-just-right.- 2021-12-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-drew-shadows-for-the-character.-makes-it-3-dimensional 2021-12-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-drawings%2C-lots-of-detail-and-movement! 2021-12-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-this-story.-it-made-me-super-happy-to-watch-it.-i-think-it-is-such-an-interesting-idea-that-you-could-explore-it-even-more-and-develop-it-further.--i'd-like-to-know-more-about-how-they-get-the-shadow-world-to-change-their-laws%3F-why-did-they-make-that-law-in-the-first-place%3F-what-were-they-afraid-of-if-humans-knew-they-could-be-friends-with-their-shadows%3F--does-a-human-ever-not-get-along-with-their-shadow%3F--i-also-like-how-simple-and-clear-the-storyboards-are.-nice-work. 2021-12-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-cool-idea!-i-was-very-intrigued-by-the-idea-that-shadows-have-their-own-world.-do-the-two-kids-who-are-lonely-ever-meet-and-become-friends%3F-great-job! 2021-12-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-was-good%2C-but-also-really-sad!!!-i-feel-very-bad-for-the-main-character-in-act-2!-the-moral-is-perfect-and-overall-it%E2%80%99s-pretty-great!-i 2021-12-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-was-very-cool!!-it-was-a-bit-difficult-to-understand-due-to-how-fast-you-talked%2C-and-i-didn%E2%80%99t-really-understand-the-start-of-the-story-but-archie-is-a-really-good-character-and-i-love-the-art! 2021-12-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-was-very-cool!!-it-was-a-bit-difficult-to-understand-due-to-how-fast-you-talked%2C-and-i-didn%E2%80%99t-really-understand-the-start-of-the-story-but-archie-is-a-really-good-character-and-i-love-the-art! 2021-12-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-amazing!!!-i-love-bee-and-bob-so-much!--there%E2%80%99s-much-crazy-action-in-the-story-but-it%E2%80%99s-fine-because-the-adorable-ness-makes-up-for-it!!- 2021-12-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it-is-a-good-story--but-would-prefer-it-in-a-first-person-view.-i-was-confused-about-the-cousin-being-so-willing-to-help-when-he-works-at-the-company.-the-story-moved-too-fast-to-me-at-the-end--there-didn%E2%80%99t-to-be-more-conflict--and-explanation-of-resolution.-plus-not-sure-if-the-uncle-just-turned-himself-in-or-if-him-making-friends-in-jail-is-a-good-thing.-the-art-is-great!- 2021-12-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-milk-carton.-i-think-that-is-a-really-creative-idea.- 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-heroes-defeat-the-cyber-space-world.--i-was-confused-because-i-don't-know-what-happened-in-acts-1-and-2. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-were-the-pictures.--i-don't-understand-the-story. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-parents-don't-seem-to-have-any-creativity.--i-wasn't-confused-about-the-story-and-i-thought-it-was-well-paced. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-kid-makes-friends-by-learning-origami.--i-wasn't-confused-about-the-story%2C-but-i-think-the-part-where-the-kid-is-in-the-origami-world-goes-to-fast. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-all-of-the-people-are-milk-cartons.--since-there-was-no-sound%2C-i-could-not-understand-what-was-going-on-in-the-story. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-archie-only-cares-about-himself.--i-wasn't-confused-and-i-thought-the-story-was-well-paced. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-apollo-is-incredibly-smart-at-age-5.-it-was-unclear-why-he-wanted-to-have-friends-because-it-seems-like-a-person-like-himself-wouldn%E2%80%99t-want-friends.-i-felt-the-pace-of-the-story-was-great-though. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-well-thought-out-storyline.-the-main-characters-story-arc-is-well-done-and-by-the-end%2C-you-had-me-rooting-for-him.-i%E2%80%99m-wondering-if-all-the-growing-and-change-he-goes-through-enables-him-to-become-the-leader-he-always-strived-to-be.-great-job! 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-just-love-this-character-and-can't-wait-for-your-final-submission-with-audio-included 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-great-work%2C-i-just-love-the-texture-and-energy-in-your-drawings.-my-only-pacing-note-is-to-slow-down-and-let-the-images-breath-a-bit-(this-could-easily-be-2min)%2C-i-would-go-about-half-the-speed-so-you-don't-sound-rushed.-for-example-when-the-sand-storm-is-approaching-i'd-pause-for--~5-seconds-and-let-us-take-in-the-image-of-the-storm-before-moving-on.-can't-wait-for-the-final-submission! 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-main-character-learns-to-live-offline%2C-make-new-friends-and-meets-her-online-friend.-i-think-you-should-add-color. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-a-cat-can-make-a-bakery.-i-also-like-how-even-though-they-are-cats-they-fight-and-act-like-humans.--i-think-you-should-add-more-colors. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-parents-effected-apollo-life.-it-is-sad-but-i-am-glad-that-the-parents-have-changed-and-so-had-apollo.-i-think-you-should-add-more-color-though. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-art-is-amazing!!-i-like-how-the-story-is-magical.-the-audio-wasn%E2%80%99t-clear-though-so-i-couldn%E2%80%99t-hear-some-parts. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-art-is-amazing!!-i-like-how-the-story-is-magical.-the-audio-wasn%E2%80%99t-clear-though-so-i-couldn%E2%80%99t-hear-some-parts. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-detail-in-the-drawings.-you-should-add-sharpie-and-color.-in-some-recordings-there-was-a-lot-of-noise-and-it-was-harder-to-hear-what-you-guys-were-saying. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-story-is-about-a-ghost-and-how-they-become-human.-i-think-you-should-add-color-and-pen-because-it-has-hard-to-see-the-drawings. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-story-is-about-a-ghost-and-how-they-become-human.-i-think-you-should-add-color-and-pen-because-it-has-hard-to-see-the-drawings. 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-off-i-love-apocalyptic-stories-and-i-believe-this-story-is-very-relevant-with-all-of-the-modern-advancements-in-artificial-intelligence-and-robotics.-the-drawing-are-very-well-done.-a-few-things-in-the-story-do-seem-like-they-could-have-been-adjusted-to-fit-the-scenario-better.-for-example-in-a-post-apocalyptic-world-why-would-he-think-ordering-a-pizza-is-a-good-idea%3F-is-it-because-the-pizza-shops-are-fully-automated%3F-if-so-wouldn't-they-run-out-of-ingredients%3F-or-wouldn't-it-be-obvious-that-the-robots-are-evil-and-ordering-a-pizza-from-robots-would-definitely-not-be-good%3F-overall-i-like-it-but-some-things-in-the-story-do-raise-questions.- 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-sound-effects-flow-well-with-the-story-and-narration.-the-illustrations-are-detailed-and-understandable.-some-of-the-images-were-cut-off-and-some-of-the-narrations-could-have-been-a-little-more-rehearsed-to-make-it-clearer.-the-story-is-well-thought-out-but-a-few-things-could-have-been-a-little-more-motivated-%22she-is-holding-a-snake%22-i-didn't-understand-why.-overall-good-job.- 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-very-detailed-illustrations-that-made-the-story-very-clear-to-understand%2C-it's-a-little-dark-but-i-like-that-quality-in-a-story.-i-enjoyed-the-idea-of-a-story-about-a-puppet-that-needs-to-cut-their-strings.-i-would-like-to-know-more-about-the-puppet-master-and-how-they-were-defeated-besides-simply-cutting-the-strings.- 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-clear-and-concise%2C-i-also-think-the-story-is-original-and-creative.-i-would-like-to-have-seen-a-little-more-of-what-he-has-to-struggle-with-in-the-climax-of-the-story.- 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-drawings-and-i'm-still-able-to-decipher-the-story-however-you-should-add-in-some-audio%3F- 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-illustrations-however-this-video-is-missing-the-other-acts-which-made-it-confusing.- 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-it-interesting-how-wild-the-story-is%2C-there-is-a-lot-going-on.-i-was-unclear-about-the-organized-structure-of-the-story.-i-actually-really-liked-the-visuals-of-stacking-books-as-a-kid-and-stacking-boxes-as-a-store-clerk.- 2021-12-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-really-like-the-drawing- 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawing-i-love-the-creativity-here- 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-i-find-them-very-good-and-i-really-love-this-story 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-it-is-very-intresting-and-how-did-you-come-up-with-this-story- 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-story-it-is-very-intresting-i-love-the-drawing- 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-story-very-intresting-and-i-wonder-what-is-going-to-happen- 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story-it-is-very-intresting- 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-idea-is-so-creative!-i-can-imagine-it-being-the-storyline-of-a-video-game.-it-would-be-really-interesting-to-see-the-challenges-the-character-faces-while-in-the-world.-i%E2%80%99m-also-curious-if-when-a-%E2%80%9Cbad-kid%E2%80%9D-gets-sucked-through-a-portal-in-this-world-if-the-challenges-are-tailored-to-things-they-need-to-learn%3F-great-job! 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-of-someone-not-having-an-imagination%2C-and-how-that-effects-their-everyday-life-is-really-interesting.-i%E2%80%99m-curious-if-while-apollo-struggles-in-the-area-of-imagination%2C-he-has-more-abilities-in-others-such-as-problem-solving-or-math.-really-well-done! 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-similarities-between-jon-and-john%E2%80%99s-experiences-to-be-interesting.-it-seems-that-the-experiences-of-one-reflect-in-the-other-in-the-future.-i-noticed-that-john-enjoys-stacking-objects-(blocks%2C-textbooks-etc)-and-this-piqued-my-interest.-it-will-be-awesome-to-see-how-this-story-ends.-good-job! 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/hey-great-work-i've-been-looking-forward-to-this-story%2C-i-just-emailed-you-(from-help%40storyxperiential.com)-asking-if-you-intended-to-submit-a-silent-reel.-let-me-know-and-i-can-swap-in-the-correct-version. 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-voice-acting!--it-made-it-more-engaging-to-watch.--however%2C-if-there-were-a-bit-more-detail-added-to-the-drawings%2C-i-think-things-would-be-clearer.--i-was-a-little-confused-about-what-was-going-on%2C-and-i-think-ajax-getting-accepted-to-training-was-kind-of-glossed-over-too-quickly. 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-the-music!--what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-well-built-this-character-is%2C-and-how-she-experiences-denial-surrounding-the-death-of-her-best-friend.--i-got-chills!--that-was-fantastic. 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-was-a-little-confused-since-this-video-was-missing-the-earlier-parts-of-the-story-reel.--sky's-dad's-funeral-kind-of-seemed-to-come-out-of-nowhere. 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-this-kid-is-motivated-solely-by-boredom.--however%2C-things-seem-to-be-a-little-flat-and-one-dimensional-%E2%80%94-so-if-there-could-be-a-bit-more-backstory-to-this-character%2C-it-might-help! 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-way-that-this-child-was-born.--i-loved-the-art%2C-too!--i-was-a-bit-confused-about-the-stages-that-this-child-went-through. 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-you-defined-apollo.--i-was-confused-about-why-exactly-apollo-doesn't-have-an-imagination.--the-story-had-a-great-pace.--i-liked-the-way-it-was-built-up. 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/incredible-achievement-in-visual-storytelling 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-like-the-story-and-i-think-it-would-look-even-better-if-you-add-color. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-how-you-made-the-world-a-place-that-has-always-been-the-same-and-that-a-boy-had-found-something-unique-that-he-was-scared-to-present-outside-because-he-was-afraid-of-change-but-it-ended-up-making-him-happy. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-that-the-moral-was-very-clear-in-the-story-and-the-moral-itself 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-good-job-with-your-drawings%2C-they-look-really-good.-i-like-the-moral-of-the-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-the-story-but-i-think-you-could-edit-out-your-hands-or-take-the-pictures-without-your-hands-in-them.-great-job! 2021-11-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-ideas.-however%2C-it-was-very-hard-to-understand-the-narration%2C-because-the-music-was-so-much-louder-than-the-narration.-i'd-like-to-have-more-detail-on-how-chowder-found-his-friends.-did-he-need-to-make-new-friends%3F-where-did-he-meet-them%3F-what-did-they-bond-over%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-think-the-art-and-idea-of-the-character-are-very-creative. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-me-%F0%9F%91%8D--ps%3A-this-is-my-video 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-great-i-love-the-art-work!! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/we-would-like-you-to-draw-for-us-because-its-super-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-storys 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-drawings!-they-really-show-how-and-what-is-happening.-however%2C-i-wish-there-was-more-story-line-or-plot.-for-example%2C-the-main-character-feels-flat%2C-and-doesn't-seem-to-face-any-challenges.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/backround- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawings- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-great 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-your-characters-interact-with-each-other-%3A) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-couldn't-hear-the-audio%2C-but-the-drawings-look-interesting.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-work-is-good-and-the-story-is-interesting- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-think-the-art-and-idea-of-the-character-are-very-creative. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-have-found-me-really-enjoying-watching-the-process-of-this-story-come-along.-however%2C-i-feel-like-the-ending-is-a-little-incomplete.-we-are-left-off-on-the-part-where-we-find-out-that-people-applying-will-have-to-participate-in-a-extra-class-before-the-final-say-if-they-can-continue-on.-this-needs-to-be-changed.-i-would-hate-to-see-such-a-great-story-go-to-waste.-keep-up-the-unbelievably-outstanding-work! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-good!-keep-up-the-good-work!-i-would-say-that-maybe-you-could-talk-about-the-journey-from-the-planet-back-to-earth-because-it-could-be-a-very-pivotal-moment-in-the-story.--i-would-also-recommend-talking-about-how-far-she-walked-to-her-house%2C-what-type-of-terrain-did-she-walk-on%3F-did-her-body-hurt%3F-another-thing-to-consider-is-whether-she-was-alone-the-whole-time%3F--did-she-meet-people-when-she-was-away-from-earth%3F-were-there-extraterrestrials%3F--i-would-also-recommend-that-you-draw-more-scenes-of-her-house%2C-or-maybe-add-more-character-to-the-house-in-the-pictures-that-you-have-of-it%2C-because-when-she-misses-home%2C-she-doesn't-necessarily-miss-earth%2C-she-misses-her-house-and-her-mom.--does-she-miss-her-room%3F-dos-she-miss-cooking-in-the-kitchen-with-her-mom%3F-what-does-she-miss%3F-- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-very-nice-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-jobe- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/add-sound-efexs-and-are-the-other-puffins-coffie-names-too- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-she-was-attached-with-the-computer-and-avatar.-when-the-avatar-trapped-her-in-her-room-i-feel-like-that-went-fast.-i-think-she-should-talk-with-the-avatar-more-and-maybe-even-convince-the-avatar-to-let-her-leave. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-so-cute--i-love-it 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-drawings%2C-and-i-like-how-you-use-different-poses-for-the-characters-so-they-don't-look-so-stiff.----------%F0%9F%98%B6%F0%9F%91%8D 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-the-drawings-are-simple-and-yet-have-so-much-value.-just-from-something-that-simple-you-can-say-so-much-about-it. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-story-boarding-and-artwork-%3Ad 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-dark-it-sounded-i-also-like-your-drawings- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-great-and-also-artwork-and-the-intro-was-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-but-maybe-add-more-detail-to-your-pictures. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-art-because-it-fits-really-well-with-the-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-maybe-you-could-add-more-detail-to-the-drawings. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawings-- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-appreciate-this-flawless-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-with-your-drawings%2C-they-look-really-good.-i-like-the-moral-of-the-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-happened-to-act-1- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-music. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting-story-i-really-like-the-pictures-and-the-narration-was-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-but-you-should-speak-louder-and-and-a-bit-slower-because-it's-kind-of-hard-to-understand.-but-other-than-that-your-drawings-are-great-and-so-is-your-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-feels-like-this-story-starts-in-the-middle%3F-can-you-give-more-context-before-the-funeral%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/woah-the-drawings-are-super-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-a-lot!--i-think-music-and-sound-effects-will-help-a-lot---the-pacing-felt-a-little-slow 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-your-drawings-and-i-love-how-creative-you-got-on-the-sock-story.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-don%E2%80%99t-happened-to-the-voice-over-but-i-really-liked-the-drawings 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-really-confusing- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-ghost-dog-really-interesting-by-am-confused-about-how-he-bought-it-when-nobody-else-could-see-it. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-lov-the-story-but-you-should-add-more-motion- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-story-and-drawings.-how-exactly-did-the-virus-start%3F-and-what-started-it%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-details-and-the-story-line%2C-i-also-like-how-you-used-multiple-drawings-for-one-scene-while-you-were-talking.-maybe-just-center-your-photos-more. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-went-very-clear-because-you-were-moving-them-and-its-hard-to-understand-the-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-to-storyline-goes-and-the-effort-you-put-into-the-drawings. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story%2C-but-i-would-say-to-add-some-more-drawings-or-motion-so-it-isnt-as-long-for-one-part.-and-to-add-more-detail. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story!-but-if-you-are-going-to-have-dialogue-add-more! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-faces-of-each-robot-is-matching-with-what-is-happening-in-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-little-hard-to-understand-what-your-saying%2C--the-audio-could-also-be-better-but-i-really-like-the-style-of-the-drawings. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-artwork%2C-i-would-just-say-to-blow-it-up-a-bit-so-we-can-see-more.-but-very-unique-story-line. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/danny-had-one-idea-and-everyone-forgave-him-i-think-that-danny-should-contribute-more-before-they-forgive-him 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting-story-i-liked-the-drawings- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-much-detail-you-put-in-each-drawing!-i-also-like-the-sfx-and-screen-transitions. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice%2C-story-i-like-how-it-runs.--how-do-the-bees-suddenly-leave-new-york%3F-do-the-just-go-out-because-there-is-nothing-left-to-polinate%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-were-a-few-drawings-that-could-have-been-worked-on-a-little-bit-better-but-i'm-sure-that-you-guys-can-figure-out-what-you-need-but-the-thing-that-i-will-say-is-the-cover-of-the-story-that-needs-better-detail-but-other-than-that-this-story-looks-clean.--)%3D%3D)%3D(%3A) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-sound-effects-and-how-ripped-the-grandma-is. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawings-and-story-line-i-would-just-say-to-fix-your-audio-so-its-more-consistent-with-the-volume.-and-at-some-more-to-your-drawings...-maybe-some-motion. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-plot 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-i-wish-it-had-some-color-but-it-is-so-cute. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-line-because-it-is-really-interesting.. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/some-of-the-voice-clips-are-gone.-and-a-couple-of-others-are-repetitive%2C-but-the-bit-i-understood-was-decent.-though-the-idea-of-a-'perfect-life'-at-the-end-doesn't-seem...-reasonable%3F-i'm-not-sure-what-the-right-word-is. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-how-the-character-progressed-in-the-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-art-style-so-much%2C-the-art-looks-really-good!- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it%E2%80%99s-amazing-%3A( 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-pictures-but-i'm-still-trying-to-figure-out-what-your-story-is-mainly-about.-just-add-more-details-on-the-background-story.-the-art-is-really-good-and-i-love-the-name-ms.girl.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story-it-has-a-lot-of-meaning-and-people-can-defiantly-relate-to-it.-your-drawings-are-also-so-good! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-sound-effects-and-the-voices- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/like-the-art-design 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-awesome%3B-the-art-really-progresses-and-adding-some-digital-(%3F)-lines-to-the-piece-really-make-it-'pop'.-when-you-possibly-add-color%2C-it'd-make-the-art-look-more-finalized-and-detailed--good-job.-%3A) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-you-story-plot-but-i-think-this-story-could-be-a-little-cleaner-and-more-organized. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/in-a-futuristic-society%2C-we-still-don't-have-a-cure-for-cancer%3F-it-feels-more-like-present-day-than-the-future.--this-is-a-real-struggle-that-families-go-through%2C-so-thank-you-for-turning-it-into-a-thoughtful-story.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story!-but-some-of-the-narration-cut-out 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-very-good%2C-i-like-your-illustatrations- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-flow-and-the-photos%2C-i-would-just-say-to-%60talk-louder. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-she-went-to-another-world-when-she-died. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-story%2C-nice-drawings.-but-why-does-he-finally-use-the-map-when-he's-already-has-it%3F-does-he-just-go-by-his-own-direction-or-does%2C-he-finally-realize-how-to-use-one. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-is-that-the-girl-who-can-see-color-is-special-and-has-a-lot-of-money-from-he-dad-and-never-leaves-the-house.-what-i-was-confused-about-is-the-part-where-they-both-say-special-i-am-confused.-it-was-not-fast-nor-slow-so-it-was-good.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-good-but-it-lacks-explanation-for-the-virus-that-builds-mystery-and-suspense 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/xiadani-was-the-bully-lol 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawing-are-very-nice-but-i-think-you-could-add-more-audio-so-i-can-relate-to-the-story-more.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-just-love-this!-it-makes-me-laugh-and-has-a-great-moral.-everything-is-just-right.-keep-going-strong- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-story-is-good-you-just-have-to-crop-the-photos%2C 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-style-of-art%2C-but-they-are-a-bit-blurry.-can-you-re-upload-them-with-a-higher-res%3F-also%2C-can-you-talk-a-little-bit-more-slowly-(first-speaker)%3F-your-story-is-very-silly-and-i-smiled.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-short- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/everything-was-awesome-but-other-than-the-small-details-you-could-add-this-story-looks-clean- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-but-maybe-turn-down-the-music-so-that-your-voices-are-a-little-louder. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/little-confused-on-the-story-wish-the-pics-where-a-little-bigger-but-i-like-the-art-hear. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-trial-is-very-interesting.-i-am-confused-about-why-they-struggle-to-have-kids 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-interesting-but-i-think-you-should-make-it-neater-and-more-color-respectfully.. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it-was-really-well-put-together-the-only-thing-is-i-think-you-can-add-a-little-more-drawing-instead-of-cramming-a-bunch-into-one-drawing-each-time.-but-i-think-you-have-a-great-story!-keep-it-up! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-cuts-from-the-audio-were-very-sloppy. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-and-liked-your-story-very-much-i-feel-like-everyone-can-each-relate-to-your-story-in-different-parts-of-your-story-great-job! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work%2C-next-week-try-to-crop-your-hands-our-of-the-picture 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-detail-that-i-can-see-but-the-frame-is-kind-of-blurry-so-it-would-be-better-if-you-could-clear-it-up-so-i-can-see-all-of-your-detail. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-moral-of-the-story-and-i-think-that-its-important-to-a-lot-of-people. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-where-you're-going-with-the-story%2C-i-like-how-the-story-unfolds.-however%2C-it-was-hard-to-follow-when-audio-was-cutting-out.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-name-and-the-ending-you-were-talking-really-fast-tough. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-sorry-was-amazing-it-was-so-funny-and-the-art-was-good-and-i-heard-you-clearly 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-well-your-character-progressed-through-the-film 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-that-the-moral-was-very-clear-in-the-story-and-the-moral-itself 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-good-story- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-main-character-is-a-tree-and-i-also-love-the-drawings.-they-r-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-is-really-interesting-how-he-is-so-devoted-to-the-bees 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-setting-you-created!-your-image-details-(the-rat%2C-broken-windows%2C-etc)%2C-really-help-build-that-world!-can-you-teach-the-moral-of-the-story-without-directly-saying-it%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-was-when-the-people-died-that-became-a-ghost.-what-i-was-a-little-confused-on-what-where-the-ghost-was%2C-was-there-were-so-many-names-i-didn't-even-know.-the-story-was-not-fast-and-not-slow-either-so-it-was-good-and-i-love-it- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/like-the-story-i-think-it-would-look-even-better-if-you-add-color. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-story-great-amount-of-sound-effects-and-detail. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-you-story--is-how-the-drawing-and-nice-but-maybe-in-the-begging-you-can-go-somewhere-more-quit- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/super-detailed-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/super-detailed-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-very-nice-story.-maybe-you-should-put-the-moral-at-the-very-end%2C-and-the-other-minor-beats-before-it.-also-make-it-a-little-longer-because-the-ending-was-cut-off. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-need-to-add-more-narration-and-tell-rayden--hes-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/oh-my-gosh!-this-story-is-incredible.-amazing-details-and-drawing.-i-love-how-you-outline-the-same-points-with-pen-or-marker-and--blend-the-rest-of-the-body-with-crayon-of-some-sort.-it-really-brings-out-the-charterers-strong-points. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-short-is-great-and-i-love-the-drawings-but-how-did-her-father-get-the-power-to-see-ghosts%3F--its-never-explained. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-roomba-part 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/alot-of-background-noise-try-to-record-in-a-quite-space-if-possible-(i-get-its-hard-to-find)-really-cool-though-%3A) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-make-more-pictures-throughout-each-sentence 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-story-but-i-think-you-should-add-some-color-respectfully%2C.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-is-interesting-that-a-monster-could-live-so-long!-i-am-confused-how-he-is-that-old 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-should-have-added-a-drawing-to-illustrate-when-johnny-was-knocked-to-the-floor.-also%2C-why-did-his-relative-become-evil%2C-and-why-did-he-give-them-the-house%3F-i'm-not-sure-what-to-make-of-his-motives.-the-person-who-drew-these-did-do-a-good-job%2C-though.-(not-to-be-rude%2C-i-genuinely-think-it's-a-good-idea%2C-i-just-don't-understand-some-of-it.) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-realy-good-i-realy-wanna-know-what-happens-next-and-i-love-how-you-and-someone-else-make-the-conversation-between-them-both 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-style-but-maybe-you-could-crop-out-the-table-to-make-it-look-more-presentable.-but-it-looks-really-good. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-he-didn't-know-what-to-do.-one-thing-was-you-were-talking-really-fast. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/story-is-good-it-just-went-a-little-too-fast- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-and-i-like-the-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-pictures-but-maybe-you-could-add-the-moral-of-the-story-at-the-end-so-it's-a-bit-more-clear. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-with-the-story-line-and-the-moral 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/are-there-other-robots%2Fprinters-in-this-world%3F-is-this-normal-or...%3F-do-people-not-want-to-talk-to-him-because-he-is-awkward-and-weird-or-because-it's-terrifying-that-he's-alive-at-all%3F-if-he-is-a-printer%2C-why-does-he-need-to-go-to-a-printer-store%3F-i-like-the-use-of-dialogue!-it-definitely-adds-some-humor.-- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-are-pretty-alright 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/try-and-make-one-big-clip-of-talking-if-possible-it-would-sound-more-put-together.-i-like-the-story-though. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-and-the-drawings-just-try-not-to-get-the-background-when-taking-photos-of-your-drawing-but-other-than-that-i-think-it-was-great!- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-so-pretty-and-nice-to-look-at-i-can-tell-that-you-took-your-time. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-that-you-chose-to-have-the-subject-on-plants 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-color-blue-makes-your-main-character-pop.-you-also-chose-a-topic-that-is-very-relatable-(social-anxiety%2Ftrying-to-fit-in).-did-she-know-she-was-setting-her-reflection-free%3F-can-you-drop-a-hint-before-hand-that-that-is-a-thing-that-can-happen-in-this-world%3F-- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-voice-acting-and-the-art-is-15%2F10 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/add-dialogue!-it-needs-sound-effects-to-otherwhise-its-really-good!!!!!!! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-it-was-a-little-quiet.-over-all-great-job! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawings-i-also-like-your-story%2C-with-the-drawing-i-would-say-maybe-add-some-color-or-outline-the-drawing-to-make-the-drawings-more-clear- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-can-maybe-add-more-to-the-drawings- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-character-and-the-moral-of-the-story.-i-wonder-what-happens-did-they-win%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-steve-had-a-difficult-time-even-tho-hes-powerful---and-it-made-it-interesting. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-your-story.-i-think-this-could-even-be-like-a-marvel-movie-or-something.-it-is-so-cool.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-story-but-are-those-just-small-drawings%3F-i-think-it-would-fit-alot-better-with-bigger-pictures-or-croping-the-photos 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing-and-your-story- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-amount-of-detail-to-the-story-and-drawings-just-prove-how-dedicated-you-are-to-this-project. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-artwork.-the-second-frame-with-the-hallways-bending-and-looming-is-particularly-striking.-your-story-flows-well-and-everything-is-logically-connected.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-really-neat-and-nice-make-sure-the-table-is-not-showing.-ps-love-the-story-thing-it's-great. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-voice-acting-its-clear-and-all-members-participated 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-super-imagitinive-- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-super-imagitinive-- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/uhhhhhh-what%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-think-you-could-edit-out-your-hands-or-take-the-pictures-without-your-hands-in-them.-great-job! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job-with-your-drawings%2C-but-i-suggest-making-your-audio-consistent-and-adding-motion-to-your-drawings.-%3A) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-creature-but-add-more-detail 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-drawings-they-had-good-detail-and-i-also-liked-the-transitions-of-each-picture 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-moral-of-the-story-but-some-parts-of-the-audio-got-cut-off. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-short-felt-more-like-a-2-part-episode-rather-than-a-short-film 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-very-good-story-with-the-narration-i-liked-the-moral-a-lot-- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-it-was-revealed-as-a-fictional-story-at-the-end-(or-i-think-it-was%2C-not-quite-sure-about-that).-it's-a-unique-idea%2C-and-the-story-itself-was-engaging.-some-parts-were-a-bit-confusing%2C-but-i-think-the-message-still-gets-across-quite-well.-it's-a-wonderful-story%2C-and-i-sincerely-enjoyed-it. 2021-11-29 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-really-like-the-plot-of-the-story.-i-go-through-a-lot-of-that-same-stuff-like-how-you-do-something-not-right-so-your-family-will-be-proud-of-you.-but-the-truth-is-they-will-always-be-proud-of-you-but-not-when-you-do-bad-things.-overall-nice-good-i-really-liked-your-detail-and-color-choice. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-the-voice-acting-was-great. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-this-story-is-cool-and-i-like-the-format 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawings-are-beautiful-and-there-is-so-much-motion.-i-love-the-fitting-colors-as-well.-i-like-how-your-story-is-detailed-and-is-consistant.-awesome-job-team-%3B) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-but-i-think-you-could-add-more-background-in-some-of-the-scenes.-great-job!- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-moral-of-the-story-and-the-drawings 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-drawings-tells-the-story--but-maybe-you-can-add-how-did-the-winches-get-there-powers- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/holy-cow-thats-great-defintely-the-best-ive-seen-so-far-great-job. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-him-being-rejected-every-time-was-interesting.-i-was-confused-because-he-was-getting-rejected. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-i-heard-background-noise-here-and-there-but-overall-amazing-job- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/add-more-detail-to-ur-drawing-but-i-like-the-voice-acting 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-and-the-moral-of-the-story!-it's-really-well-made-too 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-she-kept-trying-to-overcome-her-anxiety.-its-also-cool-that-the-reflection-comes-to-life 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-ideas-but-i-think-you-might-want-to-edit-your-photos-so-they-are-clear-and-no-backround.-great-job-%3A) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-mushroom-hat-is-so-cute-i-love-it.-i-can-also-see-the-amount-of-detail-you-put-to-the-drawings. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/%22she-is-on-a-newspaper%22.-i-think-i-need-more-context-before-that-first-sentence.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-this-story-is-cool-and-i-like-the-format 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-work.-but-sorry-i-couldnt-hear-what-you-are-saying-can-you-be-more-clear-or-louder. 2021-11-29 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-your-story%2C-and-i-love-your-character's-name.-i-like-the-music-in-the-beginning-part-when-she's-listening-to-music%2C-but-once-the-music-is-banned-the-background-audio-isn't-needed.-maybe-at-the-ending-once-music-is-unbanned%2C-the-background-music-could-return.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-and-the-drawings- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool.... 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-kinda-slow-but-it-liked-the-noise-of-the-background 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-way-the-story-shows-the-ups-and-downs-of-battling-with-mental-disorders.-that's-a-real-thing-and-the-story-really-captures-it.-however%2C-because-of-the-ups-and-downs%2C-you-don't-have-the-simple-story-arc-that-is-easy-to-communicate.-instead%2C-you-have-a-rollercoaster-ride-of-good-and-bad.-it-would-flow-a-little-better%2C-and-be-easier-to-follow-if-you-can-emphasize-one-major-up-and-one-major-down.-and%2C-like-a-roller-coaster%2C-let-people-off-on-a-flat-portion-of-track.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-and-the-drawings- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-that-you-did-and-how-you-made-diffrent-things-and-the-people- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-this-story-is-cool-and-i-like-the-format 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story.-i-like-that-a-business-man-turned-into-a-mighty-adventurer 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-music-and-sound-effects-and-i-think-it-is-awesome-that-you-chose-to-add-shading.-the-only-thing-i-have-to-say-is-maybe-considering-adding-some-more-dialogue. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-mc-but-add-more-detail 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-and-the-drawings.-i-think-you-can-add-a-little-bit-more-of-detail-to-the-drawings 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it's-an-interesting-idea%2C-but-i-do-have-a-question---that-is%2C-i-don't-think-people-pass-out-because-of-poor-mental-health-going-'untreated'.-this-may-confuse-some-people%2C-so-maybe-say-he-had-a-panic-attack%2C-or-something-similar%3F-otherwise%2C-it's-a-good-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-this-story-is-cool-and-i-like-the-format 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/why--was-it-happy-to-a-kid-getting-kidnap-over-all-you-should-add-why-do-the-people-want-to-kidnap-the-kid 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-but-make-sure-to-not-get-your-hands-and-background-when-you-take-the-photos- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-should-crop%2Fzoom-in-on-your-photos-so-there's-no-background.-i-like-how-everyone-helped-to-read-the-script%2C-but-the-sound-cut-out-a-little-in-the-middle.--why-did-a-black-hole-lead-to-a-paradise%3F-there's-a-lot-going-on.-how-does-he-get-back%3F-you-have-a-lot-of-drawings%2C-which-is-nice%2C-but-maybe-help-connect-the-ideas-a-bit-more%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-is-how-a-bot-made-a-robot-to-move-the-moon-to-have-sun.--what-i-was-confused-about-was-how-did-the-robot-turn-evil.-it-story-moved-a-little-too-fast-so-maybe-make-it-a-little-slower.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-short-feels-like-an-ad-but-it-still-was-original-and-addressed-mental-health-issues-which-is-pretty-nice 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/like-the-drawings-that-you-did-theres-a-bit-of-backround-but-thats-ok 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ok..-cool 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-loved-this-entire-story-because-it-was-very-funny-and-has-a-good-moral. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-cool-and-i-like-the-format- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ok-............. 2021-11-29 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2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/grate 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ok....-uh-oki-um-cool 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-distinct-art-styles.-i-appreciate-the-message-of-mental-health-being-important.-next-time%2C-i'd-like-to-hear-you-add-some-dialogue!-i-want-to-hear-what-alexander-says%2Fthinks! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-did-this- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ok...-uh-cool 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/grate 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-very-good.-i-like-the-post-apocalyptic-setting%2C-and-the-first-drawing-of-the-apocalyptic-setting-is-really-well-done.-i-was-a-little-confused-about-who-will-was-so-maybe-just-a-brief-explanation-if-the-main-character-knew-him-or-not-would-probably-help.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/grate 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ok.. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-drawings-looks-cool 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/um-cool 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-moves-well%2C-and-is-very-unique-with-lots-of-action.-the-only-thing-i'm-a-little-confused-about-is-how-johnny-learned-magic-so-fast.-when-did-he-have-time-to-learn-a-spell-to-make-%22good%22-magic-walls%3F- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-that-this-was-really-well-done%2C-the-set-up-was-good%2C-and-the-pay-off-was-good-as-well.-the-story-arc-was-simple-and-easy-to-understand%2C-yet-there-were-deeper-undertones-to-the-story.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fun-idea.-i'm-a-little-confused-how-everyone-knew-how-many-seats-were-left-on-the-spaceship-before-they-got-there.-wouldn't-that-argument-take-place-with-the-person-at-the-gate-letting-people-on%3F-would-it-be-possible-to-take-the-robot's-memory-core-with-them-to-the-new-planet%3F-i-also-wish-i-knew-more-about-the-project-that-the-mom's-were-working-on.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-my-first-favorite-short.-i-could-watch-it-over-and-over.-good-job- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-ur-story- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-noice-story- 2021-11-29 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawings-are-really-cute.-however%2C-i-think-there-was-a-technical-problem-with-your-voiceover%2C-i-only-heard-two-sentences.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/not-too-bad!-it'll-be-cool-to-see-it-finished.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/not-too-bad!-it'll-be-cool-to-see-it-finished.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/go-to-seven-eleven. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-in-dept-timmy-is-as--a-character. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-story-and-the-art-is-amazing.-when-the-little-guy-starts-to-lose-petals%2C-im-gonna-be-honest-i-felt-that. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-ideas.-however%2C-it-was-very-hard-to-understand-the-narration%2C-because-the-music-was-so-much-louder-than-the-narration.-i'd-like-to-have-more-detail-on-how-chowder-found-his-friends.-did-he-need-to-make-new-friends%3F-where-did-he-meet-them%3F-what-did-they-bond-over%3F- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-maybe-add-more-detail-to-your-pictures. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-but-can-you-add-more-background-story- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/hm-just-hm 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ok.-i-love-this.-the-story-is-simple%2C-and-sweet.-we-see-that-even-though-we-may-feel-that-we-don't-fit-in%2C-we-need-each-other-more-then-we-may-want-to-admit.--but%2C-as-much-as-we-can-really-see-the-story-coming-to-life-through-the-pictures%2C-i-really-think-they-could-use-some-work.-using-pen-or-color-could-do-just-that.-possibly-even-using-bigger-paper-could-benifit-the-amount-of-detail-possible-that-would-really-make-this-spectacular.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-and-the-pictures-but-maybe-add-more-background-like-was-the-owner-of-the-dog-ever-worried-that-she-was-missing%3F-or-what-happened-with-the-owner-after%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-giving-me-%22how-to-train-your-dragon%22-vibes-%5E-%5E- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-feel-like-the-story-is-confusing-and-you-need-to-be-more-clear 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-care-about-their-friendship-and-the-storyline-is-really-good! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/terribly-amazing! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that's-a-very-nice-story-you-have-here.--you-have-very-nice-drawings-and-a-good-story-line.-is-will-one-of-the-school-boys%3F-what's-his-story%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-good-but-you-can-add-more-detail. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-ur-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-is-a-little-confuseing-and-the-pics-look-vary-onfinished. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good!-i-like-your-story-but-maybe-if-you-have-time-finish-more-of-the-drawings-otherwise-it-looks-really-good- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/some-of-the-pictures-are-confusing 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-but-can-you-add-background-to-your-character-- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-so-cool!-wow!!-%3Ad 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-characters- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-cool-but-i-would-add-more-detail 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-emily 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-could-have-more-effort- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/horrid 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-concept-seems-awesome%3B-i'd-suggest-adding-tone-and-shading-to-your-drawing-for-added-depth.-in-addition-a-tip-with-digital-art-is-using-a-stabilizer-for-cleaner-lines-%3A)- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-storyline-and-am-excited-to-see-it-with-color 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-agree-with-lilly%2C-it-could-use-a-little-more-to-the-background-but-other-then-that%2C-keep-up-the-good-work!- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/awsome-love-the-name 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wonderful-drawings-and-acts.-good-job- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-so-good!-one-thing-that-stood-out-was-definitely-the-background-to-the-second-picture.-its-amazing!!! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-story-is-really-good-overall-and-the-drawings-are-so-good-to! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-wonderful-short-story! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loke-the-story--wish-there-was-more-color-and-some-of-the-small-drowlings-where-bigger-but-other-then-that-its-nice. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-story-and-the-photos-but-i-think-some-of-them-were-confusing. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it-the-story-was-good-but-it-is-kind-of-confusing-with-the-change-between-all-the-different-styles-of-drawings-some-look-unfinished-and-some-look-like-they-have-too-many-lines- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-story-is-cool-but-could-you-add-more-to-why-they-hated-eachother 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-but-i-have-ligma.. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-simple-yet-stunning-story-this-is.-we-are-shown-that-even-in-our-daily-life%2C-we-need-to-be-humbled-to-see-the-true-meaning-of-life.-the-drawings-are-amazing%2C-and-the-story-line-is-clearly-shown-by-simple-terms.-i-am-curious-how-your-story-is-going-to-look-after-dislodge%2C-as-i-hope-we-don't-lose-the-amazing-simplicity-of-this-outstanding-story-about-a-world-that-actually-isn't-far-from-our-modern-world.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-pictures- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-your-character-can-see-ghosts.--maybe-you-can-go-more-in-depth-of-the-home-schooling.--what-did-she-do%3F-hoe-she-felt-about-it%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story%2C-and-your-drawings-are-so-detailed! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-gives-me-how-to-train-your-dragon-vibes.-way-to-go!! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-main-character-is-trapped-in-her-home-then-runs-away.-that-part-reminds-me-of-aladdin. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-good-but-how-does-she-turn-into-a-human%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-art-work-and-the-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-pictures 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-keep-it-up 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/woah!-i-love-how-the-shadows-were-make%2C-they-really-just-stand-out-from-everything-else-%3Ao 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wonderful-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-and-how-it-was-executed-the-drawings-could-be-better.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-pictures-and-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-pictures 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-good-job 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-your-character-is-the-only-person-the-sees-color-and-shape.-my-question-is-that-why-couldn't-she-go-outside-of-the-gate-of-her-house%3F-is-there-a-specific-reason%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-it-was-clear-and-good-but-i-think-you-are-supposed-to-have-acts-1%2C2-and-3- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-story-spine-is-great!!-but-maybe-you-could-add-a-bit-more-to-the-background%3F-other-than-that%2C-its-amazing-%3A) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-pretty-good-and-how-did-the-father-become-rich%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-really-good-and-it-moves-along-very-smoothly.-i-didn't-really-care-for-any-of-the-characters-though-because-i-just-couldn't-relate-to-any-of-the-problems-they-had. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-yall's-storyline-but-i-think-some-of-the-pictures-are-confusing 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-with-all-the-poses-looks-awesome%2C-i-like-how-it's-simple-yet-has-a-lot-of-detail%3B-good-job-on-all-your-act's. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-drawings-amazing-job 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-you-did-an-amazing-job 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-style!!-its-so-unique-%3A) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-have-one-question-about-her-friends%2C-can-they-see-color%3F-if-so-that-would-explain-why-they-are-on-the-run-you-should-also-tell-us-that-if-they-are.-if-not-then-you-should-state-that-they-cant-see-shapes-or-colors-and-say-why-they-are-on-the-run. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-storyline-and--i-think-once-you-finish-coloring-it-will-be-great 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-story-is-very-creative-and-the-art-work-is-really-good. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-marks-devotion-to-save-the-bees%2C-which-tells-a-lesson-about-the-importance-of-conservation. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-lesson-that-too-much-of-something-can-be-a-bad-thing.-i-was-a-little-unclear-about-why-people-didn%E2%80%99t-want-to-talk-to-danny%2C-but-i-loved-the-dialogue. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-main-character-lost-their-memory.-i-was-a-little-confused-about-what-answers-joe-was-searching-for%2C-and-the-ending%2C-which-seems-cut-off. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-represented-your-story-based-on-people-judging-others-looks%2C-and-how-they-found-each-other-with-similar-difficulties-and-became-friends 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-your-anti-music-idea.-the-music-is-too-loud-and-dosnt-fit-the-video-(especially-because-the-video-is-about-anti-music)%2C-also-there-is-no-dialogue.-the-perspective-drawings-are-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-main-character-wanting-to-find-a-departed-loved-one%2C-which-relates-to-many-people.-i-was-unclear-about-the-moral-of-the-story%2C-and-what-the-main-character-learned-because-of-the-challenges-they-faced. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-artwork%2C-the-artwork-is-extraordinary%2C-i-like-how-the-characters-move-throughout-the-film-.-you-can-definitely-tell-the-amount-of-effort-that-was-put-into-it.-what-i-also-like-about-your-short-film-is-the-fact-that-theirs-no-back-round-noises-when-you-filmed-your-short-film.--maybe-make-it-a-little-longer-but-other-than-that-great-job%2C-i-love-it 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-story%2C-it-delivers-a-strong-message. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-drawings-and-the-narroration-and-also-liked-the-dialogue.-i-also-noticed-action-noices-to-describe-what-they-are-doing- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-video-is-probably-my-favorite-one-and-i-know-that-no-other-video-can-ever-come-close-to-this-one.-do-i-even-need-to-mention-the-humor%3F-the-humor-is-top-notch-and-the-narrating-surprised-me%2C-let-alone-the-fact-that-this-story-is-somehow-good-with-actual-good-pacing-and-art%2C-too!-almost-everything-in-this-video-is-good%2C-except-for-the-fact-that-i-wished-it-was-longer-and-that-you-fleshed-out-the-story-a-bit-more%2C-but-that's-about-it.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-music-blocked-out-some-of-your-speaking%2C-but-danny's-story-was-very-interesting-%26-how-he-progresses. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting-story.-i-love-that-granny-is-committed-to-her-workout-routine%2C-just-like-me. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-artwork%2C-the-artwork-is-extraordinary.-you-can-definitely-tell-the-amount-of-effort-that-was-put-into-it.-what-i-also-like-about-your-short-film-is-the-fact-that-theirs-no-back-round-noises-when-you-filmed-your-short-film.--maybe-you-could-improve-your-artwork-but-other-than-that%2C-great-job.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-intro%2C-nice-sound-effects%2C-story-a-little-dark. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-your-story-is-based-on-a-snake-getting-kicked-out-and-his-friends-following-him-and-helping-each-other-survive-on-the-outside 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-great%2C-along-with-the-sound-audio.-the-ending-all-though-is-a-bit-unclear-and-hard-to-understand.-but-it-works-pretty-well-and-it's-solid. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/solid-story%2C-nice-job. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-artwork%2C-the-artwork-is-extraordinary%2C-i-like-how-the-characters-move-throughout-the-film-.-you-can-definitely-tell-the-amount-of-effort-that-was-put-into-it.-what-i-also-like-about-your-short-film-is-the-fact-that-theirs-no-back-round-noises-when-you-filmed-your-short-film.--maybe-you-could-make-it-a-little-shorter-but-other-than-that-your-film-is-great-i-love-it-great-job.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-a-bit-hard-to-hear-the-narrators-sometimes%2C-but-the-story-was-well-made%2C-and-i-really-like-the-artwork%2C-10%2F10 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story-i-think-the-pictures-could-maybe-be-a-bit-more-clear-but-other-than-that-really-good-job. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-story!!!- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/%C2%A8alex-had-a-mental-breakdown%C2%A8-was-the-greatest-line-i-have-ever-heard%2C-100%2F10 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story-and-i-think-you-drew-your-picture-really-well 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-steve-has-a-hard-time-even-though-he-has-powers-that-are-able-to-mimic-other-peoples.-i-also-liked-your-dialogue. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-and-how-the-story-was-plotted-and-loved-how-alex-was-very-hard-working. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-was-the-art-and-the-dialogue!-this-story-was-amazing!-i-love-how-it-reflects-on-real-life-problems%2C-it's-very-well-written!-nice-job! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-your-character-progresses%2C-but-your-audio-was-hard-to-hear- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-pictures-and-it-really-amazing-your-story-is-great-maybe-adda-bit-more-dialogue- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-art%2C-good-moral%2C-but-the-ending-was-cut-off. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-story-relates-to-the-real-world-by-showing-how-people-focus-too-much-on-things-that-would-be-fun-over-things-that-they-need-to-do.-it-could-be-improved-by-being-a-bit-more-clear-at-the-beginning. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-was-interesting%2C-but-there-were-points-where-i-didn't-quite-understand-what-was-supposed-to-be-happening.-i-think-if-you-added-more-dialog-or-narration-it-could-help-make-your-story-more-clear. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-very-good-and-the-pacing-of-the-story-is-done-surprisingly-well.-the-story-is-also-very-realistic-for-most-people.-that-scream-around-the-end-of-the-video-is-hilarious.-the-audio-is-off-for-certain-people-and-the-moral-of-the-story-at-the-end-of-the-video-cuts-off%2C-but-the-story-itself-is-actually-super-realistic-and-very-good.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job%2C-very-strong-character-building. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-and-the-story!-could-you-explain-her-avatar-and-how-it-trapped-her%3F-does-it-trap-her-emotionally-as-well-as-physically%3F 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-feel-like-your-pictures-could-use-some-more-work--add-more-dialogue- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-best-horror-movie-i-have-ever-seen%2C-15%2F10--also-genuinely-good-dialogue 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-made-the-world-a-place-that-has-always-been-the-same-and-that-a-boy-had-found-something-unique-that-he-was-scared-to-present-outside-because-he-was-afraid-of-change-but-it-ended-up-making-him-happy. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-art-is-pretty-good%2C-and-i-like-the-idea 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-and-and-it-felts-funny-and-serious-and-i-liked-the-washer-part-and-him-going-into-a-portal.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-you-set-the-scene-very-well.-i-think-that-you-should-talk-more-about-how-they-found-the-aliens.-i-think-you-could-describe-the-argument-more.-i-really-like-how-the-drawings-set-the-scene. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-couldn't-understand-what-your-story-is-or-what-the-moral-is%2Cbut-i-hiope-the-final-version-will-be-great. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-art-is-pretty-good%2C-and-i-like-the-idea 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the--art-is-super-good.-the-story-was-kinda-fast.-maybe-add-dialog. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-clear-and-the-narration-is-good%2C-but-it-could-use-some-dialogue-and-it-should-have-included-acts-1%2C-2%2C-and-3.-other-than-that%2C-good-video-and-a-nice-touch-answering-quetions. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-draws-and-story.-i-would-appreciate-that-you-turn-your-drawings-so-that-it-is-better-to-see.-i-would-appreciate-that-you-take-away-the-background-voices.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-main-character-is-a-monster.-it-was-unclear-about-the-rest-of-the-story.-the-story-seemed-like-it-was-moving-at-a-good-pace-until-the-end. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-art-is-pretty-good%2C-and-i-like-the-idea 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-style-and-animation-are-well-done%2C-and-the-concept-is-well-done.-the-only-piece-of-criticism-i-have-is-that-the-video-is-really-long-and-hard-to-stay-focused-on.-so-if-you-make-it-entertaining%2C-i-feel-like-it-will-make-it-better.-other-than-that%2C-i-feel-like-its-really-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story%2C-fun-theme%2C-creative-narrations%2C-very-good-drawings. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-in-a-very-interesting-style.-the-music-is-way-too-loud-and-dosnt-fit-the-scene%2C-also-who-is-%22he%22-and-when-did-he-fall-asleep.-when-did-%22he%22-loose-his-memmory.-i-like-that-you-used-color-in-your-video 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-video-was-great.-i-liked-how-it-looked-like-it-could-be-a-real-cartoon 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-style.-it-could-be-improved-by-making-it-longer-and-having-more-of-a-slower-story-line-and-follow-the-story-spine-template. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-style.-it-could-be-improved-by-making-it-longer-and-having-more-of-a-slower-story-line-and-follow-the-story-spine-template. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-idea-is-hilarious%2C-and-the-whole-story-was-really-well-made-(also-congrats-on-managing-to-record-these-huge-parts-in-one-go%2C-i-cant-image-how-many-takes-that-must-have-taken) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-very-good-and-the-audio-is-super-clear%2C-which-is-a-rare-find-throughout-all-of-these-videos.-the-pacing-is-done-well%2C-but-could-be-better.-i-also-liked-the-typical-trope-of-two-people-that-hate-each-other%2C-but-have-to-stop-fighting%2C-in-order-to-work-together.-the-story-could-be-longer-and-you-could-flesh-out-more-scenes-to-be-better%2C-but-the-main-story-and-the-concept-were-pretty-good-actually.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-the-best-thing-i-have-ever-had-the-pleasure-to-watch-i-thank-you-for-blessing-my-eyes-- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-intercit%2C-very-well-writen. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-your-pictures-amazing-and-your-story-has-really-developed-.--your-pictures-are-really-cool--and-you-can-tell-you-put-alot-of-work-into-it- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-ocean-theme%2C-and-having-a-character-who-is-on-a-sinking-ship.-i-had-a-hard-time-understanding-the-story-due-to-the-lack-of-narration.-i-think-that-the-drawings-are-good-at-conveying-emotion%2C-however. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-so-good-i-like-the-plot-of-it-a-lot-and-i-also-like-the-drawings-they-are-very-cute- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-art-is-pretty-good%2C-and-i-like-the-idea 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-was-the-amazing-art!-i-was-a-bit-confused-because-this-story-didn't-have-an-introduction-so-i-couldn't-tell-what-was-going-on.-the-story-was-at-a-good-pace. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-audio-could-be-more-clear.-the-dialog-is-nice.--the-most-interesting-part-was-the-night-of-the-full-moon.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/take-away-the-music.-add-more-background-story-like-what-happened-to-the-mom.-make-your-draws-more-clean.-good-story.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-basic-idea-but-the-audio-is-impossible-to-hear-so-i-would-work-on-that-also-the-pictures-where-very-out-of-focus.-also-it%C2%B4s-so-posed-to-be-your-hole-story-not-just-the-final-part 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-based-your-story-around-a-friend-trying-to-research-and-find-a-cure-for-her-friend.-you-even-added-the-aspect-of-a-family-relationship-effecting-the-situation-which-is-creative 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-very-good-and-i-really-like-how-it-looks-like-it's-on-a-google-paint-app-in-the-beginning.-the-art-later-on-even-looks-good.-i-will-admit%2C-the-story-is-pretty-good-and-it-has-to-be-the-most-unique-story-i've-ever-seen%2C-but-i-can't-stop-myself-from-laughing.-the-fact-that-you-guys-are-trying-to-make-the-story-sound-serious-makes-it-even-more-funnier%2C-which-is-a-very-good-thing.-the-pacing-is-done-very-well%2C-too.-the-story-was-engaging%2C-since-it's-mainly-a-unique-one.-it's-also-a-bit-weird-how-some-of-the-art-has-color-and-some-of-it-doesn't-and-how-some-of-it-is-on-paper-and-some-of-it-isn't.-again%2C-i-really-like-how-you-were-able-to-make-a-story-like-%22this%22-so-good%2C-serious%2C-and-engaging%2C-all-while-making-sure-that-the-story-had-a-good-moral-going-for-it.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-and-story-are-nice%2C-but-all-throughout-you-can-hear-a-clicking-sound. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-good-and-the-story%2C-but-maybe-put-the-pictures-on-a-table-instead-of-holding-them-up. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-and-it-has-very-good-narration-and-dialogue.-i-also-really-liked-the-story-line-of-the-ai-invasion- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-art-and-the-story-line%2C-it-could-be-improved-by-being-more-clear. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-style-is-fun%2C-and-the-story-was-easy-to-understand-(also-the-voice-acting-was-top-notch%2C-12%2F10) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-super-interesting.--the-art-is-nice.-maybe-add-dialog. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-appreciates-that-you-added-the-words-to-make-the-story-flow.-i-would-recommend-that-you-slow-down-the-story-go-more-into-what-his-happening-once-in-a-while.-i-would-recommend-that-you-find-a-quiet-place-to-record-because-the-background-noice-is-distracting.-i-appreciate-that-your-story-flows-very-while-and-that-the-underlying-message-is-touching.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-art-is-pretty-good%2C-i-like-the-style.-and-the-idea.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-show-through-the-drawings-that-they-are-triumphant-and-are-happy.-i-think-that-you-should-add-what-the-team-name-ends-up-being.-i-think-that-you-should-have-a-less-clear-cut-victory.-i-think-that-your-story-is-great-and-can-show-that-moral-really-well 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-was-confused-in-the-beginning%2C-but-i-really-like-what-your-moral-is. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/absolutely-immaculate. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-very-detailed.-and-i-really-like-the-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-and-your-character-but-i-wish-the-audio-was-a-bit-louder%2C-kind-of-hard-to-hear.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-good-and-the-story-is-also-good%2C-i-just-wish-there-was-more-color 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-and-i-think-your-pictures-look-good.-i-noticed-that-your-story-was-completely-narration.-make-sure-to-add-some-dialog-to-your-final-draft 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-drawing-and-detail-into-the-narratorion-but-i-noticed-no-dialogue- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-story%2C-it-has-many-ups-and-downs%2C-but-a-great-lesson. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-seems-like-it-is-interesting%2C-but-i-can-not-really-understand-it-without-any-narration-and-dialogue%2C-really-good-art-though. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-good-but-i-wish-the-conflict-didn't-resolve-itself.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-audio-could-be-more-clear.-some-of-the-art-is-really-good.-the-story-is-super-nice. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-cool-and-all%2C-but-you-only-included-act-3%2C-where-are-the-other-2-acts%3F-the-story-was-so-confusing-and-it-took-me-a-couple-of-seconds-to-realize-that-the-other-2-acts-weren't-included.-thus%2C-i-had-no-idea-what-was-happening-in-the-story.-it-sounds-cool-and-the-art-looks-good%2C-but-the-description-explains-way-more-about-the-story-than-the-actual-video-does-itself.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-masterpiece-of-a-story-and-is-incredible-in-every-way%2C-the-characters-have-so-much-depth-(especially-ernest-khalimov)-and-i-am-sure-it-will-make-the-front-pages-on-every-article-in-the-usa 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-guys-added-colors-to-all-your-drawings-and-i-especially-like-the-drawings-of-the-people.-the-only-issue-with-the-drawings-is-that-every-other-scene-has-different-ways-of-drawing-people-so-maybe-you-can-have-1-person-draw-all-the-people.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-voices-and-the-sound-affects-also-the-acting-was-really%2C-really-good.-i-like-the-pace-of-it-and-the-great-dynamic-between-the-carters.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-art.-i-was-a-bit-confused-on-what-was-happening-in-the-events-towards-the-middle.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-art-and-story-development.-the-narration-could-be-improved-by-being-more-clear. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-unique-art-style%2C-love-the-concept. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-style-is-beautiful%2C-but%2C-as-i%C2%B4m-sure-you-are-aware%2C-there-is-no-narration-or-dialogue. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawings-your-pictures-could-be-a-bit-more-clear-but-the-story-is-really-there.-love-your-story-. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story!-i'm-excited-to-see-what-it-will-look-like-in-the-final-draft. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-set-the-scene%2C-it-gives-emotion-to-the-story.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-to-the-middle-of-the-story-and-describe-more-of-how-jade-is-being-controlled.-i-really-like-your-story-idea-and-how-it-turned-out. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-drawings-and-story.-i-would-recommend-that-you-have-added-what-happens-to-the-parent-when-she-dies.-i-would-recommend-that-you-take-out-the-part-were-you-get-interrupted.-you-story-flows-very-easily-witch-is-nice.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--how-the-story-is-soild-and-it-goes-well-with-the-drawing.-however-i-think-that-you-could-add-more-detail.-but-the-drawing-are-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-wasn't-any-audio-for-your-video-so-i-couldn't-understand-what-was-involved%2C-but-from-what-your-drawings-looks-like-a-great-short-film 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-the-drawings-where-very-good-and-realistic.-this-is-great! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-actually-pretty-good-and-it's-one-of-the-few-videos-that-has-color-on-the-drawings.-the-story%2C-however%2C-was-obviously-way-too-short-and-it-was-so-rushed.-although%2C-the-story-is-pretty-good-and-i-like-the-idea-of-a-shy-kid-mustering-up-the-courage-to-join-the-debate-club.-although%2C-the-ending-was-just-so-random-and-confusing.-the-kid-randomly-joined-a-bunch-of-other-clubs-and-then-the-video-abruptly-ended.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-super-nice-and-kinda-helped-the-story-be-more-clear.-but-narration-and-dialog-would-help-it-more. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-art-and-the-dialogue-but-i-heard-no-narraration%2C-but-i-also-liked-the-voices-and-the-acting-to-your-characters.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--how-the-story-is-soild-and-it-goes-well-with-the-drawing.-however-i-think-that-you-could-add-more-detail.-but-the-drawing-are-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-adding-dialogue-or-narration-to-your-story-would-make-me-understand-the-story-better.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-short-and-sweet%2C-and-really-easy-to-follow. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-picture-and-the-depth-is-really-nice-and-amazing-really-put-together-art.-your--voiceover-could-use-some-work--and-depth-is-really-amazing-the-color-is-pretty-cool-to-it-would-be-nice-to-maybe-work-on-your-shadowing-a-bit-but-other-than-that-your-story-is-really-amazing. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--how-the-story-is-soild-and-it-goes-well-with-the-drawing.-however-i-think-that-you-could-add-more-detail.-but-the-drawing-are-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoyed-this-immaculate-masterpiece-of-a-story.-this-truly-brings-tears-to-my-eyes%2C-thank-you-for-blessing-my-eyes-in-such-way.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-storm-sound-effects-which-added-to-the-story%2C-i-would-just-improve-the-art-and-it-would-be-good.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-very-good-and-the-story-is-good-but-it-is-a-little-all-over-the-place. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-the-drawings-were-super-fun-and-they-showed-a-lot-of-emotion.-nice-job. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-you-story-seemed-interesting%2C-but-the-audio-was-hard-to-hear-and-the-pictures-were-blurry.-i-also-noticed-that-your-video-was-only-one-minute-long.-i-think-the-final-drafts-are-supposed-to-be-longer%2C-so-you-will-probably-need-to-make-your-video-longer. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--how-the-story-is-soild-and-it-goes-well-with-the-drawing.-however-i-think-that-you-could-add-more-detail.-but-the-drawing-are-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art%2C-i-liked-the-story-but-i-feel-like-it-went-really-slow-then-really-fast-so-maybe-try-to-make-it-more-of-a-steady-pace%2C-besides-that-it-got-a-great-story-line-and-art. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--how-the-story-is-soild-and-it-goes-well-with-the-drawing.-however-i-think-that-you-could-add-more-detail.-but-the-drawing-are-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-very-well-writen.-and-that-the-art-is-creative. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-simple-the-drawings-was-and-the-music-fits-the-story-really-well. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-story%2C-very-nice-drawings. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-concept-%26-the-whole-unethical-or-ethical-situation%2C-as-well-as-how-the-uncle-could-grow-from-going-to-prison. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-cool.-i-really-like-the-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-great-artists-in-your-group!-i-would-add-more-depth-to-your-main-character-in-order-for-the-audience-to-connect-with-the-character-more.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--how-the-story-is-soild-and-it-goes-well-with-the-drawing.-however-i-think-that-you-could-add-more-detail.-but-the-drawing-are-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-good!-but-the-story-was-a-bit-confusing-and-hard-to-follow.-it's-missing-some-parts-of-the-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-you-added-color-to-your-pictures%2C-it-helped-with-making-the-story-flow.-i-would-recommend-that-you-had-added-a-title-to-the-first-slide.--i-would-recommend-that-you-had-other-voices-to-your-story.-some-of-you-have-some-real-talent-drawings.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/such-a-good-idea%2C-everything-adds-up.--is-there-a-way-you-could-make-it-so-the-outlaw-doesn't-suddenly-become-a-good-guy.-i-love-all-of-the-futuristic-concepts-and-ideas. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-nice%2C-but-the-story-feels-incomplete%2C-like-how-the-introduction-feels-like-it-happens-after-the-introduction%2C-or-that-the-resolution-could-use-some-work.-but-the-concept-is-interesting. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-artstyle-and-the-story-is-so-interesting-i-really-wanna-see-your-movie 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--how-the-story-is-soild-and-it-goes-well-with-the-drawing.-however-i-think-that-you-could-add-more-detail.-but-the-drawing-are-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-immediate-world-building%2C-and-i-really-like-the-art-style. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story%2C-how-the-music-fits-the-story%2C-and-how-you-managed-to-captivate-everything-that-you-said. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-it-was-very-cool-and-clear-i-liked-all-the-sound-effects.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-amazing-and-i-really-like-how-you-used-the-story-boarding-sheets.-this-is-also-the-best-story-that-i've-seen-so-far.-i-felt-like-i-was-actually-watching-a-real-pixar-film.-one-thing-that-was-a-bit-confusing-was-how-he-went-to-a-pharmacy-which-just-happened-to-have-new-legs-and-arms.-sure%2C-it's-in-the-future%2C-but-i-highly-doubt-that-pharmacies-would-just-have-arms-and-legs%2C-but-that's-just-a-nitpick.-the-story-has-a-surprisingly-good-amount-of-pacing-and-the-narration-was-done-as-well.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/truly-an-exquisite-piece-of-art%2C-my-eyes-are-watering-right-now-duo-to-the-mastery-of-this-peice. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--how-the-story-is-soild-and-it-goes-well-with-the-drawing.-however-i-think-that-you-could-add-more-detail.-but-the-drawing-are-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-cool-but-the-naration-is-laggy%2C-you-can-fix-this-next-week 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-idea-and-the-live-filming-and-the-time-traveling-element-in-it.-i-wish-that-you-could-have-added-a-little-more-minor-beats 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-narration-i-thought-it-was-super-clear.--some-parts-were-a-confusing-when-the-narration-stopped-and-it-was-just-showing-pictures.-the-overall-story-was-super-interesting. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-your-drawings-set-the-scene-very-well.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-to-the-start-of-your-story-with-how-she-didn't-fit-in.-i-think-that-you-should-use-a-more-consistent-art-style.-i-really-like-how-you-add-details-to-the-characters-and-it-isn't-simple. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--how-the-story-is-soild-and-it-goes-well-with-the-drawing.-however-i-think-that-you-could-add-more-detail.-but-the-drawing-are-very-good 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-for-the-scenes-are-very-good%2C-but-i-especially-like-the-plot-of-the-story.-i-couldn't-really-hear-you-talking-so-maybe-you-could-remove-the-background-music-or-just-lower-it.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-drawings-and-the-plot.-i-thought-it-was-very-clear-but-still-fun. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-decent%2C-though-i-think-it's-quite-strange-how-the-conflict-seems-to-resolve-itself.-the-protagonist-doesn't-do-anything-but-apologize.-perhaps-the-mother-should-actually-care-whether-the-protagonist-wants-to-be-a-fashion-designer%2C-and-the-protagonist-and-doppelganger-have-to-work-together-to-change-her-mind%3F- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-was-the-voice-acting-and-the-background-noises.-they-compliment-the-story-well-and-help-the-watchers-stay-interesting.-the-pace-and-story-was-clear-and-well-done-(love-the-comedy)!-great-job! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story%2C-but-i-think-you-should-remove-the-background-music.-i-feel-like-you-should-add-music-when-its-an-actual-part-of-the-story%2C-but-it-can-be-a-little-distracting-when-its-just-constantly-in-the-background 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-drawings-but-all-i-heard-was-diologe.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/--what-i-liked-about-the-story-is-having-low-sef-esteme 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-your-drawings%2C-i-think-your-audio-could-have-been-a-little-louder%2C--and-i-like-the-story-line. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story%2C-little-profanity%2C-but-a-great-story-and-lesson. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story%2C-the-art-is-very-colorful.-i-like-how-descriptive-it-is. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-good-maybe-add-some-color.-i-also-like-the-story-line. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-good-and-the-story-as-well%2C-but-it-would-be-better-if-you-used-your-own-voice-instead-of-a-robots. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-voices-you-used-for-your-characters%2C-especially-robs-voice.-i-would-have-liked-that-the-pictures-matched-the-audio-but-i-understand-that-you-had-a-problem.--i-would-have-liked-that-you-had-taken-away-the-voices-that-are-repeated.-i-love-your-story-and-how-it-flows-very-nicely.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story%2C-nice-resolution%2C-the-only-thing-is-on-the-art-i-noticed-that-there-is-some-marked-bleeding-though-from-the-other-side. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-sophie's-social-anxiety-is-the-complete-opposite-of-what--her-town-is%2C-but-also-how-she-was-able-to-overcome-this-%26-be-able-to-achieve-what-she-wanted. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story-and-your-art%2C-but-i-wish-there-was-a-little-bit-more-dialogue.-other-than-that%2C-you-did-a-great-job!- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/such-a-cute-story!-the-only-issues-are-the-music-is-too-loud%2C-and-there-are-some-stutters-in-the-narration%2C-but-the-artwork-and-moral-are-very-good! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-character-development%2C-it-really-shows-how-people-can-change-depending-on-what-happens-to-them%2C-it-could-be-improved-by-adding-more-full-shots-to-give-more-expression-to-whats-happening-in-the-scene.-cool-art-good-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-the-drawing-were-cool-but-it-was-a-little-hard-to-see. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-that-you-had-a-story-that-wasn't-straightforward-this-person-is-good-and-this-person-is-bad.--i-think-that-you-should-add-more-to-the-start-of-the-story.-i-think-that-you-should-give-the-outlaw-more-emotion-other-than-wanting-revenge-or-money.-i-think-that-your-story-is-really-fun. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-and-idea%2C-but-it-is-a-little-long. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job%2C-well-written-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-resolution-was-really-well-done%2C-and-i-liked-the-moral-of-the-story. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow%2C-i'm-very-impressed-on-what-the-story-line-was-about-i-really-liked-the-art-and-how-you-guys-moved-the-scene-around%2C-i-also-liked-the-main-characters-life-decision.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-adding-more-dialog-would-make-it-a-bit-more-interesting.-but-the-dialog-that-was-there-was-super-nice-and-i-liked-how-you-kind-it-was-like-actual-acting.-the-art-was-super-nice. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-audio-quality-wasn't-that-good%2C-making-it-hard-to-hear-and-the-pictures-were-very-blurry.-i-also-noticed-that-your-story-was-moving-a-bit-too-fast%2C-as-the-main-plot-point%2C-the-fact-that-the-animals-can-communicate-with-humans-and-even-turn-into-humans%2C-came-way-too-fast.-it-kind-of-felt-like-there-was-no-rising-action-to-support-the-story.-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-main-plot-point%2C-because-i-really-like-the-idea-of-animals-having-human-forms-and-being-able-to-communicate-with-them.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-the-story-sounds-pretty-good-but-the-audio-is-a-little-unclear-and-the-pictures. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-there-is-color-and-sound-effects%2C-it-seems-like-a-real-cartoon. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-reel-looks-great%2C-from-the-illustration-to-the-storyline!-great-work-done-here!! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-voices-are-very-funny.--i-thought-that-the-music-was-a-little-loud.-but-other-than-that-i-really-enjoyed-the-plot. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-work-i-like-it-cool-story 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-really-like-the-drawings-of-the-characters%2C-but-i-think-you're-supposed-to-have-narration-for-every-single-scene-so-you-guys-could-add-that.-(you-don't-need-dialogue-for-every-scene-though) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-colors-the-monkey-has-and-how-everything-behind-it-so-the-viewer-can-focus-on-the-characters-more-than-the-background 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-great.-and-the-story-is-interesting%2C-but-there-are-a-lot-of-plot-points. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-your-drawings-and-how-it-captivated-what-you-were-saying.-the-story-is-very-interesting-and-really-had-me-wanting-to-know-more.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-cool-an-the-story-is-interesting. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-style-of-the-characters%2C-you-can-really-see-the-emotions-of-the-character-and-it-tells-the-story-really-well. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story%2C-speak-ore-clearly-and-take-better-quality-photos%2C-the-narration-was-nice-but-incoherent 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-how-detailed-the-art-style-is 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/my-favorite-part-of-this-story-is-the-action!-i-always-felt-like-there-was-something-interesting-going-on-and-i-enjoyed-the-way-the-characters-interacted.--one-thing-i-was-confused-about-was-the-relationship-between-the-wall-and-the-wizard.-the-wizard-and-the-wall-both-felt-connected-to-the-evil-curse%2C-however-their-goals-contradicted-each-other's.-the-wall-seemed-like-it's-intentions-were-to-get-the-boy-to-go-into-the-portal%2C-but-the-wizard-seemed-peeved-once-the-boy-had-come-through.-this-raised-a-few-questions-about-the-curse-and-how-the-walls-were-affected%2C-but-not-the-most-noticeable-detail.-the-story-felt-well-paced%2C-taking-it's-time-with-many-details-at-some-parts-but-had-quick-action-in-others.-i-wish-the-moral-was-more-clearly-shown-in-the-ending-but-i-loved-the-story-overall%2C-great-job! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-really-cute!-the-story-doesn't-drag-on%2C-has-a-lot-of-charm%2C-and-the-artwork-complements-the-narration-well.-the-only-minor-complaint-i-have-is-i-don't-think-the-animals-should-work-with-chocolate.-if-the-food-is-only-meant-for-humans-i-don't-think-you-need-to-change-this%2C-but-i-just-kept-thinking-about-how-chocolate-is-poisonous-for-cats.-otherwise%2C-great-work! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-how-you-ended-your-story!-the-ending-is-realistic-and-gives-a-good-moral-for-those-struggling-to-break-out-of-their-anxiety.-the-only-problem-i-have-is-that-the-destroying-of-the-computer-seems-a-little-glossed-over.--if-you-could-add-some-drawings-of-her-destroying-the-computer%2C-contemplating-her-actions-in-silence%2C--and-then-opening-the-curtains-to-look-at-the-beauty-and-light-of-the-outside-world-it-would-add-a-lot-of-meaning-to-your-ending.-otherwise%2C-great-work-and-i-really-like-your-art-style!- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-it!-there-are-no-problems-that-i-see-story-wise-and-i-believe-that-you-have-put-everything-together-very-well!-i-didn't-know-it-was-possible-to-use-music-so-well-in-adobe-spark!-one-minor-concern-i-have-is-the-two-sunflowers-leaning-on-each-other%2C-even-though-they-have-never-spoken%2C-seems-a-little-sudden.-is-there-any-way-you-can-make-it-seem-like-a-first-meeting-with-both-sunflowers-having-a-nice-conversation-and-looking-at-each-other-very-intently%3F--otherwise%2C-you-have-done-a-great-story-i-feel-like-you-should-be-proud-of-it! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-work-you-did!-the-story-and-drawings-flow-well-and-nothing-feels-like-it's-out-of-place.-the-only-suggestion-i-have-is-during-the-moment-where-russel-and-sybil-talk-to-the-deceased-grandmother-to-make-sybill-say-something-about-how-she-has-gone-through-a-similar-trauma-of-losing-loved-ones-and-won't-let-him-go-through-the-same-pain-she-has-gone-through-alone.-great-work! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-and-story-you-have-done-are-amazing!-the-only-thing-that-i-am-confused-about-is-the-sudden-tone-shift-when-the-water-element-reluctantly-agrees-to-follow-nuri.-if-you-could-give-the-water-element-more-motivation-to-make-friends-it-would-clear-up-the-sudden-shift.-for-example%2C-they-don't-have-any-friends-in-the-water-tribe-so-they-decide-to-break-the-rule-out-of-desperation%2C-or-somehow-the-fire-and-water-spirits-have-to-become-friends-because-they-are-in-a-dangerous-situation.-the-first-option-could-easily-be-fit-in-with-a-bit-of-narration-saying-%22they-never-had-friends-before-and-decide-to-take-this-sudden-opportunity%22-and-you-wouldn't-have-to-do-additional-drawings.-also%2C-i-am-a-bit-concerned-you-put-too-much-content-in-for-just-your-first-and-second-acts.-i-don't-think-you-will-have-to-change-anything-if-you-decide-to-have-a-very-short-third-act.-otherwise%2C-the-hard-work-you-have-put-into-this-is-very-impressive%2C-good-work! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/everything-in-the-story-is-well-put-together-and-the-ending-makes-a-lot-of-sense.-i-don't-see-anything-really-needed-to-improve-it.-great-work! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-drawings-they-are-very-well-done%2C-great-storyline-and-understood-everything.- 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-pictures-are-so-good!-even-though-there-are-only-a-few-colors-it's-so-effective-i-really-like-it-and-really-makes-the-yellow-stand-out.-the-story-is-very-well-done-and-understandable-%3A) 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-story%2C-i-could-totally-see-this-being-a-pixar-short-%3A)-really-cute-and-there-wasn't-anything-i-would-change-or-fix!-awesome-job 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-super-interesting-story.-i-loved-all-the-different-voices-it-really-helped-distinguish-the-different-characters!-great-job 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-idea-of-a-plant-turning-into-a-human.-the-one-part-i-am-confused-about-is-at-1%3A34%2C-the-main-character-is-now-all-of-sudden-lonely-with-no-friends.-but-literally-at-the-start-he-has-a-friend 2021-11-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-are-the-first-one-to-add-no-dialogue-or-narration%2C-and-it-is-done-super-well.-it%E2%80%99s-really-freaking-good. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-wish-i-had-a-black-hole-in-my-house 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-idea-of-debate-club-being-his-way-of-getting-out-of-comfort-zone.-though-i-am-unclear-on-the-ending-of-the-short-film.-i-don%E2%80%99t-if-you-intended-the-ending-to-be-a-bad-one%2C-but-burnout-definitely-seems-bad.-i-think-clarity-on-why-even-wanted-to-join-a-club-and-more-about-main-character-would-be-great.- 2021-11-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/if-i-had-a-roomba-i%E2%80%99d-be-afraid 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-are-the-other-puffins-names-are-they-all-coffee-themed-cause-that-would-be-awesome 2021-11-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/can-i-be-a-samurai-wannabe-too 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-just-happened- 2021-11-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-reel-is-fantastic...i-really-liked-the-font-of-the-title-(ray). 2021-11-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-illustrations%2C-you-make-your-story-slow-very-well. 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-real-is-a-perfect-example-of-a-no-word-movie-and-shows-the-power-of-sound 2021-11-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-illustrations-are-very-capturing-i-would-love-to-see-your-movie! 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-lines-and-the-sound-effects 2021-11-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-did-a-great-job-of-connecting-your-story.-beats-and-your-illustrations-are-amazing 2021-11-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-illustrations-and-sound-effects.-you-do-a-great-job-of-showing-the-scared-emotion-in-your-character 2021-11-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-test 2021-11-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-you-have-a-really-interesting-concept-here%2C-but-it-might-do-you-well-to-elaborate-further-on-what-is-going-on-exactly. 2021-11-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-it-interesting-how-specific-your-plot-was.--this-is-a-character-that-has-a-lot-of-room-for-development.--good-luck-%E2%80%94-i'm-excited-to-see-what-comes-of-it. 2021-11-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-music-and-your-narration-a-lot!--it-really-got-the-vibe-across-well.--the-drawings-were-fantastic%2C-too. 2021-11-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-creative-characters-that-you-have%2C-but-didn't-really-follow-the-story-very-well. 2021-11-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-way-that-it-was-highlighted%2C-but-i-couldn't-really-understand-what-was-going-on-because-i-couldn't-hear-you-very-well. 2021-11-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-your-very-simple-concept%2C-highlighted-in-a-very-interesting-way.--i-can-definitely-see-how-it-might-work-out. 2021-11-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-nice-drawings-and-also-i-wonder-how-did-the--reflection-had-a-mind-of-its-own 2021-11-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-good-story!!-tho-i-wonder-if-her-mom-is-not-a-big-fan-about-kiera-(-sorry-if-i-speddled-it-wrong-)-playing-tenis 2021-11-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-find-raelly-interesting-is-why-did-the-neackles-started-to-glow 2021-11-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-have-always-wanted-to-know-where-the-lost-socks-go-and-can't-wait-to-hear-more-about-the-lost-sock-portal-and-what-he-learns-there. 2021-11-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/glows%3A-i-love-the-drawings-of-evan-and-how-detailed-he-looks.-i-also-like-the-simplistic-look-of-the-backgrounds.-grows%3A-next-time%2C-i-feel-like-some-of-this-story-information-could-be-separated-a-bit-more-into-different-acts%2C-as-it-is-a-lot-being-thrown-at-us-with-the-story-in-just-a-few-minutes. 2021-11-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/glows%3A-i-like-the-different-drawings-and-the-mystery-behind-the-family-disease%2C-with-rae-trying-to-find-out-about-it.-grows%3A-next-time%2C-you-should-be-a-bit-more-consistent-with-your-audio%2C-as-at-some-points-it%E2%80%99s-too-loud-and-sometimes-it%E2%80%99s-not-loud-enough. 2021-11-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/glows%3A-i-like-the-variety-of-colors-in-your-drawings-and-his-journey-through-high-school.-grows%3A-next-time%2C-i-feel-like-you-could-explain-more-on-how-he-was-pushing-himself-to-the-limit-and-what-he-was-planning-to-debate-about. 2021-11-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/glows%3A-i-like-the-character-arc-the-character-goes-through-throughout-the-story%2C-making-her-a-more-sympathetic-and-more-relatable-character.-the-story-is-very-detailed-and-pretty-cool.-grows%3A-next-time%2C-you-should-put-a-little-more-energy-into-your-voice%2C-just-so-it-could-sound-a-bit-more-emotional-and-heartfelt. 2021-11-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/glows%3A-i-like-all-of-the-different-details-about-%E2%80%9Cjeff-wayne%E2%80%9D%2C-even-including-when-he-was-born-and-the-date-for-when-this-takes-place.-i-also-like-the-different-drawings-of-the-robot%2C-and-that-you-even-included-credits-at-the-end.-grows%3A-next-time%2C-you-shouldn%E2%80%99t-cut-off-your-audio-recordings-so-fast%2C-as-it-would-make-your-final-video-feel-a-bit-unfinished.- 2021-11-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/glows%3A-i-like-the-overall-story-of-your-video%2C-with-it-being-pretty-unique-with-its-twist.-grows%3A-next-time%2C-though-this-has-nothing-to-do-with-the-story%2C-you-should-record-in-a-quieter-space.-knowing-this%2C-your-final-video-would-be-easier-to-understand-and-hear. 2021-11-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-illustrations-including-character-expressions-and-your-camera-moves-are-so-great!-you-have-also-created-a-nice-structure-for-your-story-and-i-can't-wait-to-find-out-what-happens-to-sophie%2C-did-she-faint%3F!-and-what-is-she-going-to-learn-about-herself-throughout-your-story%3F-you-may-want-to-get-to-the-fainting-incident-faster-and-pair-down-the-number-of-beats-you-currently-have%2C-as-its-running-a-little-long.--the-entire-storyreel-should-be-under-5-mins-if-possible.-really-good-work-%26-keep-going! 2021-11-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-a-sweet-and-emotional-story!-you've-picked-a-universal-theme-that-anyone-can-connect-with-and-it-really-makes-you-feel-for-stocky-and-the-lost-baby.-i-can't-wait-to-see-what-happens-with-the-baby-and-what-obstacles-stocky-encounters-and-what-he-learns-along-the-way.-hopefully-you-can-submit-your-entire-story-and-storyboards-by-friday-nov-26th-so-that-you-can-get-feedback-from-others-and-know-what-final-notes-to-address.-can't-wait-to-hear-more---nice-work! 2021-11-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-work%2C-fantastic-story-and-images.-i-really-like-the-moment-when-the-teacher-challenges-her-to-explain-why-she's-interested-in-dance.-that's-a-strong-story-point.-love-the-tension-you-build-to-at-the-end...can't-wait-to-see-what-happens-next.---for-anyone-looking-here-is-act-1-(https%3A%2F%2Fwww.storyxperiential.com%2Fvideo-submissions-week-5%2F7ade1d2c-0cff-430c-97b3-696fb09e5dd9)- 2021-11-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/aww%2C-i-love-this-story.-i-can't-wait-to-see-what-happens-with-baby...does-he-help-him-learn-to-fly%3F-you've-set-up-your-story-points-very-clearly.-i-hope-next-week-you-can-use-a-video-editor-to-make-it-into-a-storyreel.-bravo! 2021-11-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-hills-with-all-of-the-signs-because-they-look-very-realistic- 2021-11-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/loe-the-3d-skyline-in-the-city-scene 2021-11-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-realistic-skyline-in-the-city 2021-11-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-detailed-drawing-and-i-also-love-the-interesting-story-line 2021-11-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-drawing-and-love-the-story-line 2021-11-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-a-great-concept-of-turning-a-human-into-a-chicken-and-you've-setup-your-story-to-draw-your-audience-in.-it-makes-me-want-to-know-more-and-i'm-curious-if-joe-will-stay-as-a-chicken-or-whether-he'll-return-to-human-form-and-whether-it-will-change-who-he-is.-your-story-allows-for-great-opportunities-to-tell-moments-either-visually-or-through-character-dialog.-the-part-that-i-was-confused-by-is-when-jimmy-appears-suddenly-without-introduction.%2C-so-be-sure-to-clarify.-also%2C-make-sure-that-all-beats-in-your-act-2-are-intentionally-there-to-support-your-story.-nice-work-%26-keep-going! 2021-11-17 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoy-the-suspense-that-you've-built-up-with-your-story-structure-and-can't-wait-to-find-out-about-mo's-past-life.-i'm-curious-how-your-story-would-play-if-you-held-off-on-sharing-that-mo-was-kidnapped-until-the-moment-that-his-teacher-put-him-in-the-car-and-mo-remembers-at-the-time%3F--everything-is-very-clear-and-your-character-development-is-great%2C-along-with-your-clear-drawings.-excellent-work-and-can't-wait-to-hear-more! 2021-11-17 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-so-great-watching-the-evolution-of-your-story-and-the-wonderful-structure-you've-established-in-act-2.-your-illustrations-also-do-an-excellent-job-telling-yoru-story.-there-is-wonderful-opportunity-to-replace-a-few-of-your-narrated-shots-with-either-character-dialog-or-sound-effects-paired-with-visuals%2C-ie.-perhaps-when-the-%22trouble-animals%22-first-discover-the-humans-in-cages.-i-also-wonder-if-you-could-try-not-revealing-that-alistar-is-the-bad-guy-in-act-1%2C-but-wait-until-the-animals-discover-that-in-act-2---perhaps-you-could-setup-an-%22innocent%22-alistar-in-the-beginning%3F-the-only-area-i-am-unclear-about-is-whether-there-are-rabid-animals-in-cages-along-with-the-humans-as-you-say-that-the-exploring-animals-let-the-%22animals%22-out-of-the-cages%2C-so-just-clarify-that-moment.-excellent-work-%26-i-can't-wait-to-watch-your-next-iteration! 2021-11-17 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/such-a-wonderful-and-creative-idea-to-bring-a-wifi-character-to-life.-i-love-how-you've-taken-this-concept-and-used-it-as-a-metaphor-for-the-most-important-lesson-a-person-can-learn.--and-your-character-design-is-endearing-too.-i-am-curious-what-meaningful-obstacles-you-are-going-to-have-your-character-encounter-in-act-2-to-demonstrate-the-moral-of-your-story.-i-look-forward-to-seeing-your-story-evolve.-please-try-to-submit-a-rough-draft-of-your-entire-storyreel-on-fr-nov-26%2C-so-you-can-receive-guidance-on-what-to-address-in-your-final-submission.-great-work! 2021-11-17 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-idea%2C-the-character-design-is-really-working-well.-i-wonder-how-he-learned-that-being-appreciated-isn't-all-that-matters-(what-did-that-person-show-him%3F)...perhaps-there-is-some-kind-of-conflict-which-creates-that-realization%3F-can't-wait-to-see-more 2021-11-17 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-hat-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-one-of-your-character-has-the-ability-to-draw-good.-i-think-this-adds-good-detail-to-the-character-and-your-story.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-your-character-has-super-powers.-i-think-this-adds-good-detail-to-steve.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-middle.-i-like-that-it-said-that-joe-turned-into-a-chicken.-i-think-that-is-a-good-twist-to-your-story.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-beginning%2C-jade-sounds-like-a-good-person-because-she-wanted-to-make-her-community-better.-i-think-that-is-a-good-beginning.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-was-that-ruben-is-a-milk-cartoon.-i-thought-that-was-pretty-cool.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-idea-so-far!-i-am-wondering-why-the-owl-decided-to-attack-and-cage-all-the-humans%2C-how-long-ago-this-happened%2C-and-how-allister-keeps-them-locked-away.-the-time-travel-threw-me-for-a-loop%2C-but-i%E2%80%99m-excited-to-see-more! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i%E2%80%99m-interested-in-seeing-if-joe-gets-to-be-a-human-again.-i-am-also-excited-to-see-if-he-learns-to-be-a-better-chicken%2Fhuman.-great-job! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-creating-an-intriguing-story-that-makes-me-want-to-keep-watching-and-learn-more.--i-have-so-many-questions-about-who-mo-is-and-how-he-ended-up-in-the-situation-he-is-in-and-i-am-excited-to-see-how-the-story-develops-and-you-tell-the-story.--i-also-really-appreciate-your-simple-but-clear-drawings. 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-there-are-humans-and-monsters-trying-to-be-accepted-and-live-amongst-themselves.-you-cut-off-at-the-end%2C-so-i-didn%CA%BBt-quite-catch-that-ending%2C-and-i-personally-had-a-hard-time-figuring-out-what-was-happening%2C-and-watched-it-a-second-time%2C-maybe-needing-a-third.-i-think-it%CA%BBs-just-because-you-left-out-act-1.-well-done! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-it-comes-together%3A-it-kind-of-feels-like-a-sad-lonely-story-to-an-intriguing-story-with-like-devil%2Fangel-coworkers-trying-to-help-daniel-make-up-his-mind%2C-and-opening-doors-into-the-future-some-things-just-don%CA%BBt-click-and-transition-smoothly%2C-like-when-the-two-people-started-arguing-and-why-they-started-arguing-about-daniel-and-how-he-got-to-the-two-doors.-well-done! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-it-is-very-interesting!-with-the-soldiers-taking-away-mark-from-jamal%2C-i-wonder-what-the-backstory-and-the-setting-of-the-world-they-are-both-in.-would-love-to-see%2Fhear-it!-your-voice-cut-out-at-the-end-of-the-video%2C-so-i-didn%CA%BBt-quite-hear-what-you-said-at-the-end.-i-don%CA%BBt-really-understand-how-jamal-got-closer-to-finding-jamal-after-he-found-the-map%2C-and-i-want-to-know-what-helped-him.-well-done! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-your-drawings-are-nice-and-that-i-can-clearly-tell-what-they-are-and-what-they-are-presenting.-i-feel-like-it-could-have-been-smoother%2C-but-i-don%CA%BBt-know-how%2C-maybe-adding-some-music.-i-think-you-missed-a-because-of-that%2C-but-overall-well-done! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-innocence-of-your-character%2C-that-her-crisis-is-so-easily-followed-and-her-want-is-so-easily-there.-there-was-no-digging-and-fogginess-that-left-me-puzzled%2C-it-was-straightforward-and-clear.-well-done!-love-your-voice-and-how-you-narrate-the-story! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-person-is-in-a-hospital%2C-dreaming-and-imagining-he-is-fighting-this-monster-with-his-blade-and-the-joy-that-he-gets-from-real-people-in-real-life%2C-help-him-in-his-imaginary-world-when-he-is-alone.-i-just-didn%CA%BBt-know-how-he-got-in-a-hospital-in-the-first-place%2C-probably-because-it-wasn%CA%BBt-said-in-act-2%2C-but-your-drawings-help-me-understand.-well-done! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-start%2C-but-there-needs-to-be-more-story-here.--they-need-to-change-because-of-what%3F-why-did-848-already-decide-to-be-different%3F-what-happened%3F-why-is-he-ok-to-be-different-and-not-scared-like-847%3F--what-would-cause-847-to-make-such-a-change%3F- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-bird-developed-a-close-bond-with-the-top-hat.-i-think-that-is-the-best-part.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-drawings.-i-think-the-drawings-are-cool. 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/such-a-fantastic-and-creative-idea-of-the-dog-alexis-transforming-into-a-human-with-human-like-desires%2C-but-with-alexis-navigating-a-world-in-which-s%2Fhe-doesn't-understand.-i'm-really-curious-to-find-out-what-the-low-point-or-climax-of-your-story-will-be-and-what-transformation-both-alexis-and-the-little-girl-will-go-through-because-of-it.-does-your-girl-character-have-a-name%3F-make-sure-you-clarify-which-moments%2Fscenes-include-the-girl-so-your-audience-follows-along.-next-week%2C-be-sure-to-remove-the-temporary-music-and-add-sound-that-you-intentionally-want-included-to-tell-your-story.-also%2C-i-love-the-design-of-your-musician-and-the-way-that-you've-annunciated-your-narration.-great-work-%26-keep-going! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/awesome-job-with-this-art!-i-love-your-background-info-and-real-work-connections!-%3B)) 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-%3A)-maybe-you-could-add-a-little-more-info-on-the-cat%3F%3F 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-your-story-weaves-in-and-out-of-reality-and-his-dreams.-i-especially-like-the-details-you-use-which-helps-the-audience-visualize-your-world.-i'm-curious-if-your-character's-dreams-are-an-alternate-reality-where-he-hopes-to-accomplish-or-learn-something-that-he-can-bring-back-to-his-real-life%2C-i.e.-a-transformation-he-hopes-to-make-or-a-confidence-he-hopes-to-gain.-also%2C-think-about-how-you-can-distinguish-the-2-worlds-whether-it-be-visually-or-through-change-in-narration-or-character-dialog.-now-that-we've-learned-about-character-dialog-and-voice-over%2C-it-would-be-great-to-see-moments-where-dialog-or-visuals-can-tell-your-story-in-moments-in-place-of-narration-too.--nice-work-%26-keep-going! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-the-most-creative-video-that-i-have-seen-yet!-i-love-the-ideas%2C-character-development%2C-and-conflict. 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-find-it-interesting-that-he-goes-from-being-very-shy-to-joining-the-debate-club.-what-inspires-this-decision%3F-i-would-like-to-see-more-detail-about-why-he-makes-this-decision-and-how-that-changes-him.-your-pictures-are-great!-good-job!- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-the-relationship-between-people-and-elves-in-the-story.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-one-person-rules-the-human-race.-how-does-this-work%3F-does-this-cause-lots-of-problems%3F-it-is-interesting-to-focus-on-this-person's-son-because-i'm-sure-they-are-in-a-crazy-position.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-part-of-the-story-is-the-ruben-took-over-when-the-janitor-quit.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-how-happy-the-character-was-with-his-sister.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-when-the-dog-becomes-a-human-she-likes-music.-this-is-such-a-creative-story-idea!-that-is-such-an-interesting-character-to-be-a-human-but-think-like-a-dog-in-some-ways.- 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/as-a-member-of-this-team%2C-sorry-about-there-being-no-audio.-we-could-not-get-the-microphone-to-work-for-a-very-long-time-and-we-just-had-to-submit-it.-hope-y'all-enjoyed-the-story-though.-thanks-for-the-feedback! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-this-story.-the-watch%2C-the-settler%2C-the-vengeance.-all-of-it.-i-can't-wait-to-see-what-happens-next.-also%2C-you-did-a-great-job-with-the-drawings! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-this-story-a-little-confusing.-i-think-y'all-did-an-okay-job-with-this-but-i-wonder-if-you-could-add-her-family-in-somewhere-and-what-their-beliefs-are. 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-have-different-art-styles-and-i-am-better-at-some-than-others 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-a-living-milk-carton!-what-causes-the-prices-to-go-up-and-the-wages-to-go-down%3F 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-loved-the-idea-of-shapeshifting-and-i-love-your-voice!!!-when-does-the-little-girl-notice-alexis-is-missing%3F-there-are-so-many-ways-you-can-go-with-this.-i-love-it!!! 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-loved-the-idea-of-the-avatar-and-becoming-attached-to-the-computer.-who-sent-the-email-thoughl 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-two-people-that-don%E2%80%99t-get-along-have-to-help-each-other.-i-see-that-this-film-is-headed-towards-a-theme-of-friendship-(i-don%E2%80%99t-know-if-you-want-to-add-a-twist-to-make-a-less-cliche-plot).-i-think-that-the-idea-of-using-text-was-great%2C-by-i-think-that-some-audio-to-go-along-with-it%2C-even-just-dialogue%2C-would-enhance-the-flim%E2%80%99s-ability-to-evoke-feeling. 2021-11-16 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-that-his-friend-left-him-and-left-the-story.-this-intrigues-me-as-to-wether-their-%E2%80%9Cfriend%E2%80%9D-ever-comes-back-into-the-story.-i-also-noticed-that-the-voiceovers-were-a-little-unclear-and-that-the-ending-seemed-to-cut-off-abruptly.-i-think-that-this-is-an-interesting-story-and-i-am-looking-forward-to-act-3. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it%E2%80%99s-a-really-unique-idea-of-having-the-main-character-be-a-milk-carton.-the-story-is-coming-along-really-well!-i%E2%80%99m-excited-to-see-what-happens-to-ruben-and-if-he-ends-up-learning-and-growing-in-the-end.-great-job! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work.-i-like-how-this-story-is-developing.-i'm-wondering-when-we-will-learn-about-his-parents.-perhaps-in-act-1-we-need-to-learn-about-them-and-how-he-didn't-listen-to-them-at-first%3F-i-also-wonder-what-will-make-him-realize-the-moral-of-your-story.-next-week-be-sure-to-glue-all-your-act-1%2F2%2F3-together-into-one-story-and-take-a-1-second-pause-in-between-your-spoken-parts-as-they-are-getting-cut-off-and-it-caused-a-bit-of-confusion.-overall-i-like-ruben-and-i'm-rooting-for-him%2C-he's-a-cute-character-and-i-like-how-you-tie-real-world-events-into-it. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-drawing-is-soooooo-cute-i-love-it-so-much 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-a-good-love-story!-this-story-makes-the-%231-love-story-i-have-ever-seen 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-cliffhanger!!!!-cool-more-suspense-i-love-it! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-can-relate-i-am-very-shy-!-but-other-than-that-i-really-love-the-story-it-is-a-very-interesting-one! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/yay!-i-love-this-story-alot-and-i-can-never-wait-to-see-more- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-you-should-add-pictures-to-make-it-pop. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-board-style 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-you-should-edit-the-photo-so-we-dont-see-the-background. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-inserting-is-that-the-dog-died-part-and-no-one-cared-that-to-me-is-interesting-because-dogs-are-cute-and-i-would-care-if-a-dog-died.-what-i-didnt-understand-was-the-last-part-because-one-it-cut-of-and-too-the-voice-was-little-low-so-maybe-talk-louder-next-time.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-animation-is-slanted-for-perspective- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-donkey-has-personality-but-you-should-talk-about-the-cat-more. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-way-its-based-off-of-midas 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-good-story-but-the-cult-part-is-confusing-but-interesting. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-theres-words-on-every-page 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-your-story-line-is-very-developed%2C-but-i-would-take-more-time-to-sketch-our-your-character's-because-it-will-make-your-story-the-development-that-it-needs.-keep-up-the-good-work! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-different-backgrounds-and-the-drawings-are-nice.-i-also-love-how-you-put-the-moral-at-the-end.-in-some-parts%2C-it-was-a-little-hard-to-hear-but-that's-it- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-a-ghost-realm!-i-look-forward-to-finding-out-why-the-%E2%80%9Cfriendly%E2%80%9D-ghost-scares-them-off-the-cliff%2C-and-where-that-leads-them-next.-good-job-creating-the-characters!- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-there-is-voice-for-the-charecters 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-drawings-and-i-love-the-way-your-presented-the-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-lots-of-details-makes-key. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art!-it-really-helps-me-visualize-where-and-what-they-are-doing%2C-and-really-expressing-what-is-happening.-however%2C-between-what-i-think-is-act-one-and-two%2C-the-plot-gets-really-jumbled.-(when-the-mic-changes.)-i-get-that-the-parents-divorce%2C-and-that-she-runs-away-on-a-train%2C-but-the-imaginary-friends-part-gets-kind-of-lost.-it-seems-like-it-is-almost-like-a-last-resort%2C-or-like-it-was-thrown-in-at-the-last-second.-i-really-hope-that-you-do-a-little-more-work-in-week-8-to-create-a-easier-transition.-overall-i-love-this-story-and-can't-wait-to-see-what-happens-next. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-animation-is-really-nice-and-the-sound-fits-it-very-well 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-good-job 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-of-all-i-love-your-story%2C-and-i-think-that-the-art-is-really-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-much-detail-that-is-in-the-drawings 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-theme-of-them-on-the-moon 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-your-storyline!-i-also-think-the-drawings-are-very-detailed-and-great.-amazing-job!! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-amazing%2C-everything-is-developed-and-its-a-really-good-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-really-detailed-and-interesting-and-i-like-the-story-idea 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-art-it-is-amazing!-the-story-is-interesting-captivating-and-emotional.-this-story-is-amazing!-keep-up-the-good-work%2C-you-are-doing-great! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/%23lovethevideo 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ayooooo-this-is-the-coolest-one-that-i've-seen-yet!!-the-story-is-amazing-and-the-animation-is-perfect! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/noice-story!-it's-great-to-see-people-evenly-share-up-the-work! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-art-is-simple-but-the-story-is-amazing!-there-aren't-any-changed-i-think-you-need-to-make-except-to-add-color 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i--like-it-but-can-you-add-more-detail 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-separation-as-the-root-of-the-story.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-how-you-formatted-this%2C-but-i-would-have-liked-more-pictures-and-a-voiceover-to-further-explain-the-storyline. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-but-maybe-you-could-add-more-explanation-to-the-story-because-i'm-a-bit-confused.-i-like-the-drawings-tho. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-is-silly-and-has-great-emotion-and-illustrations- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-artwork-is-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-character-development-of-this-story!-it-is-such-an-amazing-but-sad-story.-your-art-is-amazing-and-so-detailed! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-line-and-the-drawings%2C-i-think-it-would-be-helpful-if-you-explained-more-about-your-character.-where-did-he-first-work%3F-why-did-he-get-fired%3F-how-old-is-he-if-he-still-lives-with-his-mom-but-has-a-job%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-and-audio-is-really-good-and-easy-to-understand.-it-seems-very-interesting-but-the-drawings-could-have-more-detail.-maybe-buttons-or-shading--maybe-even-color-or-outlining.-i-think-it-is-amazing-so-far-though! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-a-bit-confused-at-the-beginning%2C-but-at-the-end-i-think-i-get-it-a-bit-more.-it-seems-interesting.-- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-subtitles-and-i-think-the-idea-of-the-story-is-very-good. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-animation- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-if-you-added-the-text-onto-each-slide-so-its-easier-to-follow-the-story 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-but-can-you-add-more-detail--%3A) 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-style-of-the-characters!!-this-has-an-amazing-plot-too 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-and-the-detail 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/who-is-blue-and-what-was-happening-and-why-did-it-start-randomly 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-submission-doesn't-really-make-sense%2C-the-pictures-are-confusing-and-so-is-the-story-line.-i-would-recommend-going-over-it-with-other-people-who-have-not-seen-it-so-that-they-can-give-you-advice.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story-and-your-drawings!-keep-up-the-good-work. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-digital-art-it-looks-great!-your-story-line-was-very-interesting%2C-and-it-kept-me-interested-the-entire-video!-good-job! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-pretty-good-but-it's-not-the-best-it-could-be.-there-should-be-more-words-for-a-long-video.-also-the-drawing-could-be-improved-because-it-looks-like-it's-all-drawn-by-the-same-person.-i-like-the-color-but-you-could-do-more-effort-on-the-anatomy%2Fclothing-too. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/noice-story!-awesome-artwork! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-art! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-was-a-little-sort- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-really-great-and-the-story-is-interesting 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-main-character-and-it's-not-a-bad-idea.-i-think-that-you-can-add-more-detail-into-the-drawings-and-script-because-it's-a-bit-confusing.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-detail-out-into-the-buildings!!-its-amazing-%3A)) 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-idea-was-super-cool%2C-the-only-ting-is-too-make-the-acts-more-detailed-to-make-it-longer 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-drawings-and-story-are-amazing.-can't-wait-to-see-how-your-story-ends! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/pretty-good-story-line. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/noice-story!-i-think-how-your-story-goes-is-very-unique%2C-which-is-awesome-to-see. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-you-have-done-i-think-this-is-going-to-be-a-good-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-hikianalia's-name!--its-pretty-cool.-i-think-maybe-you-could-add-a-bit-more-detail-into-the-characters.-other-than-that%2C-i-love-it! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-with-the-drawings-there-was-just-a-random-cut-off-in-the-audio- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-seems-like-a-very-interesting-story-i-like-how-she-made-friends-online.-i-wonder-what-will-happen-next-since-she-doesn't-want-to-leave-the-world.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-artwork%2C-and-your-character's-hair-is-very-unique!-keep-up-the-good-work! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-idea-about-her-falling-in-love-with-the-stars. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-drawings-and-how-in-depth-they-are- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-it-great! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-drawings-are-amazing 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work!-the-artwork-is-looking-really-good.-i-love-how-the-yellow-sparkles-really-stand-out-against-the-blue-normality.-however%2C-and-this-is-a-big-however%2C-your-story-line-is-really-weak.-while-i-can-see-the-basic-structure-of-the-plot%2C-it-is-lacking%2C-and-needs-a-lot-more-time-and-effort.-think-about-how-back-in-like-week-4-or-3-we-created-a-story-spine.-that-seems-to-be-like-what-you-have.-i-really-love-the-ideas%2C-but-i-want-to-see-the-minor-beats-that-really-build-the-complex-story-we-all-hope-this-turns-into.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-they-bags-have-legs%2C-lol.-good-job! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-should-make-the-minor-beats-longer-and-go-into-more-detail%2C-you-should-also-say-what-the-thing-was-that-he-touched. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-art-at-the-end%2C-but-the-video-was-too-short. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings-but-i-think-the-story-is-a-little-confusing. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-line-and-your-art-is-great!-good-job! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/noice-story!-i-think-the-artwork-is-cool-too. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-that-the-entire-video-is-silent. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-about-her-dumpster-diving-for-revenge. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-was-interesting-and-really-great-i-think-its-great-how-it-is 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-this-story-is-coming-along-good-and--the-drawings-are-great- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-dragons!-they-are-so-cute-%3Ad 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-plot-of-your-story.-i-think-with--little-more-detail-the-story-could-be-amazing...i-m-sure. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-you-put-in. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-that-the-main-characters-are-snakes-and-the-story-is-told-through-dialogue. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-emotion-in-the-voice-over!-i-love-how-creative-your-story-is.-maybe-add-some-more-background-characters-because-that-might-add-some-better-action-to-the-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-that-you-had-your-whole-group-do-the-voice-over-and-had-different-voices-for-different-people!-nice-job! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-detail-put-into-the-characters!!-keep-up-the-good-work-%3A)) 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-do-you-mean-by-because-of-that%3F-i-really-like-the-idea-about-him-running-away-and-getting-kidnapped. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-that-the-main-character-is-part-plant. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-decent%2C-but-i-didn't-really-understand-what-was-going-on.-to-me%2C-it-sounded-like-he-bought-a-dog%2C-but-his-family-couldn't-see-it%2C-so-he-decided-it-must-be-a-ghost.-then-he-researches-ghost%2C-hears-about-a-portal%2C-goes-through-a-portal%2C-and-suddenly-he's-looking-for-his-brother%3F-maybe-a-scene-got-cut-out%2C-or-maybe-it's-just-loud-in-here-and-i-missed-the-explanation.-i-believe-it's-got-potential%2C-but-you'll-need-to-add-a-scene-that-explains-the-character's-motivations. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/like-the-buildings-that-you-did- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-you-put-the-description-before-it-especially-because-it-is-hard-to-hear-people. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-that-the-narrator-switches. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/like-the-background- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-bit-hard-to-hear.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-that-you-did-there-really-cool- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-cool-idea-i-like-it-a-lot 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-couldn't-hear-you-so-i-don't-know-what-your-story-is-but-i-really-like-the-drawings. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-there-were-breaks-in-between-audio 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-that-you-did-and-its-kinda-funny 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-good-but-talk-a-little-more-louder- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-portal-part-where-he-went-to-the-ghost-land.-i-wonder-what-the-drawings-that-didn't-have-a-description-was-about. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing-and-the-graficts--- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-cool-story- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-exciting-story-idea-and-a-beautiful-visual-to-go-with-it.--i-love-the-colors.--the-perspective-you-show-with-the-main-character-at-the-front-looking-out-at-the-world-does-a-great-job-of-illustrating-your-story-idea.--i-can't-wait-to-see-how-you-distinguish-colorless-shapes-and-shapeless-colors-in-your-next-drawings.--i-am-also-excited-to-learn-what-dovie-learns-from-seeing-the-world-in-these-two-ways.--nice-work 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i've-always-loved-your-story-concept%2C-it's-very-original.-this-is-a-great-rendering...fantastic-use-of-space%2C-the.-yellow-line-really-leads-my-eye.-the-variety-of-textures-are-nice-too%2C-love-the-clouds.-can't-wait-to-see-this-story 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-world-you-are-creating-with-real-life-and-the-ghost-world-and-how-tori-is-searching-for-his-brother.-it-would-be-great-to-provide-more-clarity-around-what-motivates-tori-to-look-for-the-ghost-portal%2C-i.e.-is-it-his-dog-that-cannot-be-seen-or-is-he-searching-for-his-brother%3F-are-there-minor-beats-that-help-develop-this-motivation%3F-for-your-next-iteration%2C-i-suggest-you-remove-the-temporary-music-and-add-sound-in-a-few-place-that-will-support-your-story-telling.-great-job-and-i-can't-wait-to-learn-what-happens! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-how-u-showed-her-traits-and-things-she-likes-and-the-story-starts-right-away 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-design-a-lot- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-he-wants-revenge-on-the-robot.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-plot-of-the-story-and-the-drawings-and-how-you-added-a-little-horror-with-the-weird-noises-and-pictures-rearranging. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-he-can-breathe-under-water 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/noice%3E-in-like-that-you-chose-a-story-about-fish 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/had-he-ever-gone-outside-in-his-life%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-really-good-but-i-wish-you-can-be-louder 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-design-is-really-cool!-the-story-is-tragic-but-amazing%2C-it-is-very-realistic-and-it's-horrible-to-know-that-things-like-this-can-actually-happen%2C-but-i'm-glad-that-sibil-finds-what-makes-her-happy. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-the-pics-loo-good-i-just-cant-hear-u.-can-u-just-speak-up-next-time 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing-plus-the-i-like-his-grief-and-sorrows-and-i-like-the-story- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/try-to-point-out-the-main-idea-but-i-like-how-he-met-arlo 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-out-his-daily-routine-most-interesting.-i-do-not-understand-why-he-is-yelling-at-birds. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing-that-he-has-no-time-with-him-self- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job!-though-maybe-consider-adding-how-she-failed.-great-work!-19%2F20 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-sounds-very-cool%2C-the-art-is-amazing!-i-can't-wait-to-see-this-finished-%3Ad 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/eh....-you-really-need-to-deepen-the-story.-show-some-relationship-between-the-son-and-the-father.-how-did-the-dad-die%3F-why-would-he-think-his-dad-is-at-the-government-hq%3F-also-the-government-likes-secrecy-so-placing-a-sign-on-the-building-saying-%22government-hq%22-is-like-saying-%22hey-enemy-nations!-come-and-get-us%3F%22-so-maybe-add-a-bit-more-secrecy%3F-how-did-the-government-hq-not-have-enough-security-to-allow-a-teenager-in-dressed-as-a-guard%3F-and-where-did-he-get-the-costume%3F-also-why-is-the-government-in-this%3F-why%3F-1%2F20 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-it-and-i-cant-wait-to-see-the-next-part 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-is-so-cute!-i-can't-wait-to-see-this-all-done!- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-where-the-story-is-going.-but-i-don't--understand-how-his-boss-starts-randomly-yelling. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting-but-i-would-like-to-see-more-detail-about-the-main-character! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-loved-this-story!-the-drawings-are-awesome-i-loved-the-%22entry-level-roomba%22! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings-and-the-different-perspectives-of-the-drawings 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting... 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-main-plot-and-i-can't-wait-to-see-act-3- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-got-cut-off-at-the-end%2C-but-the-story-is-good%2C-maybe-have-a-bit-more-character-design-instead-of-just-stick-figures%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-super-interesting!-i-think-you-can-develop-the-photos-more 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-but-why-does-he-try-to-order-pizza-in-the-middle-of-the-apocalypse!%3F-maybe-instead-the-ai-helper-on-the-phone-(basically-siri)-sends-a-tracking-signal-to-the-robots-instead%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/inserting-story-looks-cool 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-good-i-like-the-drawings 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job!-i-think-you-should-show-more-of-a-connection-with-steven-and-his-father-so-the-viewer-feels-his-grief-and-sorrow-for-his-father. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-work.-i-like-the-realization-he-has...the-glitch-effects-are-also-a-very-nice-touch.-i-suggest-by-next-week-you-find-some-free-video-editing-software-to-help-turn-this-into-a-storyreel-(to-get-you-prepped-for-the-final-exhibition).-if-you-need-help-email-help%40storyxperiential.com.-all-you-need-to-do-is-take-photos-of-your-frames-and-talk-over-them. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-his-parents-sent-him-to-a-desert.--i-understand-the-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-story-and-i-like-your-drawings. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-line-and-how-the-characters-develop- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it%3A)- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-sounds-very-interesting.-it's-also-tempting-to-know-what-will-happen-next.-this-idea-is-very-creative%2C-i-would-have-never-thought-on-using-socks%2C-such-a-unique-idea.-keep-up-the-good-work.-- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-story.-what-i-wonder-most-is-what-is-the-reason-that-jamal-and-his-friend-get-seprated-all-of-a-sudden%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-relatable-the-concept-is-and-i-like-how-the-story-makes-us-care-for-the-character-by-making-us-feel-sad-for-her-and-relate-to-her.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-it-was-really-good-but-maybe-you-could-add-some-back-story-or-something-to-why-they-get-strings-attached-to-them- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-the-main-character-isn't-human-and-how-he-is-a-monster-but-i-wonder-if-you-could-add-more-to-why-jessica-helped-jhon. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-art-work-i-can-see-the-story-you-are-going-for. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-a-little-dark-turn-but-i-think-it's-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-really-good!-i-like-how-the-pictures-are-very-well-detailed. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-start-to-the-story.--will-dave-every-reunite-with-his-family-and-will-he-correct-his-mistakes%3F-keep-up-with-the-good-work. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/in-the-first-scene-where-the-say-its-848-and-847-it-has-849-and-848-just-a-little-critique-and-the-story-is-very-bland-and-cliche-there-needs-to-be-more-details-in-it-and-it-sounds-a-lot-like-wally.--there-is-a-lot-of-potential-in-this-idea-but-there-hasn't-been-good-execution- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story--and-detail 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-digital-aspects-of-your-act-1-%26-2-look-great-%3A)-the-anatomy-is-pretty-spot-on%2C-and-you-can-see-the-different-drawings-and-art-styles.-this-storyboard-is-awesome%3B-keep-up-the-good-work. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-pictures-kdog 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings-and-the-story-in-sounds-very-awesome!-%3A)- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-you're-guyses-good-job 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/why-did-his-parents--abandon-him-in-the-desert%3F- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-has-a-lot-of-traits!-i-am-excited-to-hear-more! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-how-to-main-character-is-a-sock%2C-i-think-that-it-is-a-very-good-idea.-but-why-did-the-other-socks-cause-to-have-preston-run-away%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-pictures- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it's-a-really-good-concept.-i-also-like-the-cliffhanger-at-the-end. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-story-is-really-good-and-i-wonder-who-stole-jalen's-hat-but-i-wonder-if-you-could-go-more-into-why-jalen-loved-the-hat. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this--is-good-but-i-recommend-to-talk-alittle-bit-louder 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-intresting-about-your-story--was-that-everything-was-the-same-and-the-drawings-are-great 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-of-the-socks-and-the-washer-but%2C-is-this-only-act-one-you-should-have-acts-one-and-two-done.-i-like-your-digital-drawings-you-should-make-them-all-digital- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-yours-drawings-very-talented.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story-line 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-just-their-act-2%2C-if-anyone-is-looking-here-is-the-act-which-goes-with-it%3A-https%3A%2F%2Fwww.storyxperiential.com%2Fvideo-submissions-week-5%2Fb2418cbd-c747-498b-9bab-271451919e58 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-cool-that-you-did-a-baby-bird 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-main-plot-with-all-the-characters.-the-story-has-a-bunch-of-potential%2C-and-the-final-product-will-be-cool. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-this-bird-bonding-with-a-hat.-does-the-bird-every-come-back-with-his-real-family-with-the-hat%3F-or-does-he-just-find-the-hat-and-be-happy%3F-nice-drawings. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-pictures 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-story-it-was-interesting-and-the-drawings-are-nice. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-feel-like-this-part-of-your-story-is-too-short.-maybe-you-add-some-more-minor-beats-and-add-detail-about-how-sad-he-was.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-the-coolest-editer-i-would-really-like-to-meet-him-and-i-love-that-taxi-drawing-it-really-brings-life-to-the-picture 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-why-does-cat-stick-with-donkey. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/does-donkey-learn-to-be-selfless-at-the-end-and-if-he-does-i-think-it-would-be-cool-if-he-gets-less-and-less-selfish-throughout-the-short- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-would-say-try-to-make-the-pictures-more-detailed 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-stories-idea.--i-think-adding-more-little-details-will-really-improve-your-story-and-the-pull-of-the-character 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-main-character-isn't-a-human.-i-love-how-you-designed-jalen.-he-looks-really-cute.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-pictures 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-things-the-bird-does-with-the-hat-like-having-dinner.--i-understand-the-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-a-huge-storm-came-wiped-out-their-village.--i-understand-the-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/some-of-the-characters-being-defeated-by-the-virus-over-lord-is-an-interesting-plot-twist-that-nicely-makes-room-for-the-main-character.-i-thought-that-was-very-well-done.-look-forward-to-seeing-more! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/dave-has-some-issues!-in-this-world-is-it-normal-for-parents-to-abandon-their-kids-in-the-desert%3F-this-is-an-interesting-story!-i-look-forward-to-hearing-more! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoyed-the-drawings%2C-and-look-forward-to-hearing-more-of-the-story.-good-job! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-interesting%2C-and-i-look-forward-to-see-where-it-goes.-does-the-donkey-learn-to-be-less-selfish%3F-i-am-also-wondering-if-his-friend-cat-is-leading-him-into-a-trap.-look-forward-to-seeing-more. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-everyone-is-the-same-except-for-two-people.--i-understand-the-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-need-more-installments-on-this-series- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-that-dragons-are-in-the-story-nothing-needs-to-be-inproved 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-this--i-don't-think-you-guys-need-to-change-any-thing-very-good-- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/hi-i-really-like-the-drawing-they-are-really-good-but-hard-to-hear 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this!-but-there-could-be-a-bit-more-details-..-- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-that-this-story-is-revolved-around-flowers-and-that-ray-made-a-scrifice-for-love-what-i-didn't-understand-was-why-would-ray-mak-such-a-huge-sacrifice%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-pictures-they-are-really-good- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-storyline-was-good-but-there-were-parts-of-it-cutting-out.-i-wonder-what-happens-in-the-hq%3F-nice-job 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-work 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-but-i-don't-understand-act-one- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-cool 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-art-was-really-good-but-you-went-straight-to-the-point-and-their-was-not-much-detail-about-your-character.-the-drawings-were-cool-though 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-good-but-the-background-could-be-more-details- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-line-a-lot!-i-wonder-who-makes-it-to-the-ship-first%3F-the-school-part-was-a-bit-unnecessary-but-other-than-that-its-pretty-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings.-are-good- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-main-plot-of-the-story.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-main-plot. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-character%2C 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-drawings-look-3d-on-the-grund 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/when-i-was-watching-it%2C-it-seemed-to-have-cut-off-was-it-supposed-to%3F- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-in-the-scene-can-really-show-how-your-characters-are-feeling-about-the-students-and-they-show-lots-of-emotion.-good-job 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-and-story%2C-good-stuff 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-rely-like-your-drawings 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-dont-understand-the-story- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-act-was-the-over-all-story.-maybe-add-more-context-on-the-bad-grades.-characters-are-super-cool. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-felt-most-interesting-was-your-drawings 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-over-all-act-super-interesting.--maybe-add-a-bit-more-context-on-the-conflict.--really-liked-the-art. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-so-happy-i-found-this-one%2C-this-short-is-awesome%2C-really-good-visuals%2C-a-silly-but-well-made-story%2C-and-a-good-sense-of-humor.--please-dont-hurt-me-dumpster-granny 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-much-detail-the-story-has.-i-like-how-you-color-his-head-a-different-color-to-set-him-apart-from-the-other-kids.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-good.-however%2C-the-ending-was-cut-off.-i-will-have-to-say%2C-though%2C-this-is-the-only-story-that-i've-encountered-so-far-that-is-actually-funny.-i-couldn't-stop-myself-from-laughing.-i-also-liked-the-story-a-lot%2C-besides-the-humor.-the-plot-absolutely-supported-the-humor.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-works-well.-the-only-issue-is-the-pause-between-photos-and-a-few-with-complete-silence.-other-than-that-issue%2C-the-art-is-pretty-good. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-idea-of-your-world-is-good%2C-but-i-don't-understand-the-moral%2Fmessage-of-this-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-idea-of-the-magic-glowing-milk-but-the-talking-cat-and-her-mom-being-stressed-and-quit-her-job-makes-the-story-uncohesive.-it-was-really-random-how-every-thing-flipped-at-the-occurrence-of-a-talking-cat. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-pretty-good! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-idea-with-having-writing-and-drawings.-i-would-recommend-that-you-put-music-if-you-are-not-talking.-i-would-recommend-that-you-say-why-they-hated-each-other.-i-am-excited-to-see-the-last-act-of-your-story.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-dont-like-the-fact-that-there-is-no-sound%2C-the-voices-add-more-depth-and-gives-us-more-explenation. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-your-stories-show-the-scene-well.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-to-the-middle-of-the-story.-i-think-that-you-should-explain-more-about-what-happens-when-he-runs-into-the-gas-station-because-this-could-be-a-simulation-where-he-is-being-taken-care-of-in-the-outside-world-or-something-like-ready-player-one-where-he-needs-food-and-water-still.-i-think-that-your-story-is-very-suspenseful-and-could-go-in-many-directions. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-amazing-story!-it's-clear%2C-well-written%2C-and-flows-very-well.-i-love-the-character-development-and-the-art-is-amazing-too!-i-cant-wait-to-see-the-rest-of-the-story! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-joe-being-lost-and-confused-but-i-think-if-you-could-make-the-part-when-he's-lost-and-confused-a-little-shorter-(it's-30-seconds) 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is%2C-for-lack-of-a-better-word%2C-a-super-cool-idea%2C-and-the-buildup-to-the-start-of-the-final-act-is-really-well-made%2C-though-it-would-have-been-nice-to-get-more-details-for-each-larger-beat-(he-%22fought-pirates%22-and-lost-an-arm%2C-so-do-these-pirates-know-what-the-watch-is-and-attacked-him-because-they-thought-he-was-a-%22settler%22%3F-or-maybe-they-just-dont-like-the-fact-that-he-was-there%2C-it-just-would-have-been-nice-to-get-a-little-context%2C-beautiful-job-though) 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story%2C-but-the-music-is-a-little-confusing-and-the-cutoff-feels-out-of-place. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-goes-too-fast.-i-think-you-should-add-in-minor-beats-so-the-story-is-easier-to-comprehend. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-introduction%2C-i-think-some-of-the-middles-of-the-story-could-have-been-explained-better%2C-and-i-like-the-drawings. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow.-a-very%2C-very-good%2C-cool%2C-and-interesting-story.-the-artwork-is-pretty-okay.-the-way-that-you-made-the-video-is-extremely-unique%2C-because-i-think-that-you're-the-only-group-who-made-it-this-way.-to-be-honest%2C-i-like-it%2C-because-i-hate-the-audio-on-almost-all-of-these-videos%2C-but-being-able-to-read-it-and-just-look-at-the-pictures-is-so-much-easier.-anyway%2Cs%2C-i-digress.-this-story-is-pretty-cool%2C-as-it-follows-the-common-trope-of-two-people-that-hate-each-other%2C-but-end-up-being-forced-to-be-together-and-will-eventually-like-each-other-and-be-forced-to-work-together.-sure%2C-that-is-very-common-and-the-way-you-did-it-isn't-too-unique%2C-but-it's-still-pretty-cool-and-i'm-glad-that-you-actually-established-reasons-for-why-they-hate-each-other%2C-unlike-most-other-stories-that-do-what-you-did%2C-as-well.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/im-still-a-little-confused-about-the-the-story-idea-but-i-like-the-execution.-also-why-did-he-sink-the-titanic%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-story--and-found-super-interesting-and-i-think-its-super-creative.--maybe-add-a-bit-more-context-in-to-the-garden. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/these-are-just-massive-walls-of-text-we're-asked-to-read%2C-rather-than-voicing-it-out-loud-or-doing-more-to-visually-communicate.-the-premise-seems-creative-but-it-feels-limited-by-how-it's-presented.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/these-are-just-massive-walls-of-text-we're-asked-to-read%2C-rather-than-voicing-it-out-loud-or-doing-more-to-visually-communicate.-the-premise-seems-creative-but-it-feels-limited-by-how-it's-presented.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job.-i-think-this-story-has-potential.-this-is-a-nice-idea.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job.-i-think-this-story-has-potential.-this-is-a-nice-idea.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-that-preston-is-a-sock!-i-would-recommend-that-you-put-what-the-other-sock-does-when-preston-goes-missing.-i-would-recommend-that-you-stick-to-one-drawing-style.-i-am-excited-to-see-the-last-act-of-your-story.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story%2C--but-the-audio-could-use-a-little-work. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-plot-and-story-overall-is-very-unique-and-i-really-like-it.-i-was-wondering-if-we'll-ever-get-the-dead-relative's-backstory.-like-why-he-had-grudges-and-how-he-turned-into-a-wizard. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-best-part-of-the-story-is-ernest-khalimov.-i'm-more-confused-about-the-cult%2C-and-their-goals.-in-what-way-was-ernest-a-vessel%3F-did-they-just-stop-trying-to-kill-him-at-the-end%3F-what-is-the-major-conflict%3F-if-it's-the-cult%2C-then-what-is-his-clear-goal%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-was-good%2Ci-think-there-were-some-points-that-could-use-a-little-more-detail%2C-but-other-than-that-i-think-you-did-a-good-job 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-the-characters-emotions-changed%3B-the-world-treated-him-bad-so-now-he-treats-the-world-bad.-i-couldn't-understand-the-rest-of-the-story-because-there-was-no-dialogue. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/dang%2C-sounds-like-the-protagonist-is-stuck-in-a-progressive-downward-spiral.-he-seems-really-doomed-so-i'm-genuinely-curious-how-the-story-progresses.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it!-the-drawings-a-dialogue-make-it-very-clear-as-to-what-is-happening. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/why-is-it-that-even-though-the-wizard-wanted-johnny-to-have-the-house%2C-he-challenges-him-t-a-dual%3F.-i-like-the-depth-of-the-story-and-how-there's-detail%2C- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/dewd-nice 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/impressive-improvement-and-progress!--simply-listening--to-the-narrative-and-the-voices-of-each-character-really-brings-the-story-to-life.--continue-with-your-work-and-completing-the-story%3B-this-will-be-a-remarkable-project%2C-i%E2%80%99m-sure!-%3A) 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-an-awesome-story%2C-filled-with-really-interesting-creative-sparks.-the-idea-of-mason-rejecting-his-father's-ideals-is-pretty-cool.-the-part-i-loved-the-most-was-that-the-mushrooms-and-humans-had-myths-about-each-other-which-were-later-dispelled-when-they-all-came-together. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-very-thought-out%2C-i-like-the-challenge-that-he-goes-as-that-is-something-all-humans-have-seen%2C-so-great-job 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-showed-a-conflict-like-the-school-wanting-to-tear-down-the-school-garden-but-then-you-also-showed-how-that-conflict-brought-other-problems-around-him-and-also-how-it-showed-how-he-really-is-great-job 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-space-idea-is-great-and-the-story-is-nice.--it-seems-interesting-what-he-will-do-after-being-caught-by-the-black-hole.-the-art-style-is-basically-consistent-and-works-well. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job.-i-think-this-story-has-potential.-this-is-a-nice-idea.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job.-i-think-this-story-has-potential.-this-is-a-nice-idea.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-yes 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-likw-he-characteristics-and-the-ploit-of-the-whole-storyline.-i-would-just-say-to-improve-on-the-drawings. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-fun-(not-for-joe)-idea%2C-and-i-cant-wait-to-see-what-happens-in-the-final-act.-12%2F10-would-get-amnesia-again 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-main-characters-dream-coming-true%2C-but-with-a-twist-that-made-it-unfortunate-for-them.-i-was-a-bit-confused-about-how-the-main-character-was-able-to-duel-their-relative.-i-like-the-overall-plot-and-am-anticipating-the-third-act. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-but-love-the-voice-you-used-at-the-beginning-it-made-me-more-invested-to-the-rest-of-your-story.-i-would-recommend-that-you-tell-use-what-grade-they-are-in.-i-would-recommend-that-you-explain-why-they-ordered-pizza.--i-love-the-timeline-it-made-me-laugh-but-helped-show-what-is-happening.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-in-general-maybe-the-characters-physical-traits-could-be-a-little-better-but-other-than-that-great-job.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job.-i-think-this-story-has-potential.-this-is-a-nice-idea.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-work-and-the-story-of-evan.-but-i-feel-that-it-could-improve-on-how-he-got-his-inspiration-to-keep-going 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-gotta-say%2C-the-art-was-done-very%2C-very-well.-the-use-of-lines-and-visual-perspective-is-very-good%2C-but-several-of-the-frames-are-sideways-and-not-rightly-up.-also%2C-the-story-is-a-bit-confusing.-why-does-the-boy-steal-stuff%3F-also%2C-is-his-dad-dead%2C-or-not%3F-did-the-boy-die%3F-in-my-opinion%2C-this-story-could-use-a-bit-more-fleshing-out-and-some-more-plot-points-that-make-sense-and-give-credit-to-each-other%2C-because-it-seems-like-the-different-parts-of-the-story-don't-complement-each-other%2C-which-is-pretty-bad-for-you're-story%2C-but-your-story-is-only-lacking-that-a-little-bit%2C-which-is-good.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-in-general-maybe-the-characters-physical-traits-could-be-a-little-better-but-other-than-that-great-job- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-dilemma-you've-put-your-character-through-and-i-thought--the-idea-is-very-unique 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-in-general-maybe-the-characters-physical-traits-could-be-a-little-better-but-other-than-that-great-job- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story-from-what-i-can-understand.-i-could-tell-the-story-in-the-first-half-from-the-pictures%2C-but-i-could-not-understand-the-audio-in-the-first-half. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-in-general-maybe-the-characters-physical-traits-could-be-a-little-better-but-other-than-that-great-job- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/couldnt-hear-the-story 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-a-stress-spirit-i-think-it-very-relevant.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-interesting%2C-but-i-had-a-hard-time-understanding-what-you-were-saying-at-certain-points 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawings-they-are-really-well-put-together-.--i-also-really-like-how-this-character-is-developing-.-i-love-the-suspense-i-like-the-idea-that-she-is-making-friends-online-and-i-love-the-problem-your-are-presenting-the-character-with-and-the-suspense-is-really-there- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-in-general-maybe-the-characters-physical-traits-could-be-a-little-better-but-other-than-that-great-job- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-think-it-could-use-more-detail-but-overal-i-like-the-story 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-moral-and-the-plot-of-the-story-but-i-didnt-really-understand-why-she-gets-picked-on-by-her-colleagues.--is-it-because-she's-favored%2C-is-it-because-she's-a-woman%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-character%2C-very-cool.-the-art-is-also-great. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-created-the-scenes-and-how-you-showed-how-they-flowed-from-one-part-to-the-next.-one-thing-i-do-suggest-is-adding-a-part-showing-why-he-thought-it-was-a-good-reason-to-drive-without-a-license-or-how-him-getting-in-a-car-accident-effected-others-around-him 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-wonder-what-the-moral-is-%26-what-the-story-is-about%2C-because-it-was-hard-to-understand-you-%26-because-you-were-cut-off.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-supercilious! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art.-i-can't-really-understand-what-you-are-saying%2C-so-its-hard-for-me-to-tell-what-the-story-is.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-story-needs-more-detail%2C-also-i-didnt-get-the-last-of-the-story--so-i-tehecnally-i-dont-uderstand.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-like-excessively-dark%2C-the-music-that-you-accidentally-left-on-heavily-contrasts-this.-this-is-very-hard-to-hear%2C-as-the-music-kinda-overpowers-your-voice.-but-regardless%2C-this-doesn't-really-sound-like-something-lighthearted-in-the-slightest. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-here-and-i-really-find-your-art-very-creative-it-has-a-lot-of-potential-i-really-want-to-know-about-the-lost-paradise 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-and-i-really-like-the-drawings%2C-also-there-is-alot-of-emotion.. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-overall-act.-maybe-add-more-context-on-how-the-cat-can-do-that-and-why.-the-art-was-super-cool. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-idea-that-everything-is-the-same%3B-it-feels-suffocating.-i-couldn't-understand-the-last-step-because-it-cut-off.--love-the-art-and-the-characters-development! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-seems-to-be-really-thought-out%2C-but-the-ordering-of-the-information-given-at-the-start-is-a-bit-jarring-(%22he-goes-to-the-cafe-every-day%22-is-said-before-he-leaves-his-house) 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-very-great-art-style-and-plot-but-i-could-barely-hear-with-the-music-in-the-back-but-other-the-less-its-still-good. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-artistry-and-depth-of-the-story.-i-like-how-you-added-dialogue%2C-i-don't-understand-if-she-has-one-or-two-or-more-friends%2C-so-maybe-you-should-add-more-depth-to-your-side-characters%2C-and-make-them-easier-to-differentiate.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-think-it-could-use-more-detail-but-overal-i-like-the-story 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-both-of-their-names-start-with-a-b 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-you-do-a-really-good-job-of-setting-the-scene-using-detailed-drawings.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-information-to-the-second-scene.-i-think-that-you-should-have-more-drawings.-i-think-that-your-story-is-super-suspenseful-and-does-a-great-job-of-showing-what-is-happening. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-think-it-could-use-more-detail-but-overal-i-like-the-story 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-and-drawing-is-very-creative-it-looks-like-you-really-took-your-time-i-love-it-and-it-has-a-lot-of-potential- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-and-i-think-it-is-unique. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-basis-around-bees.-the-idea-of-a-completely-normal-life-seems-more-realistic-and-the-tragedy-of-bees-seems-very-unique.-i-wonder-more-about-the-effect-of-bees-though.-how-much-did-it-affect-the-world%3F-what-was-the-time-frame-in-which-mark-tried-bringing-the-bees-back%3F- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-can-really-see-the-emotions-in-the-drawings-and-scenes. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-was-good%2C-but-if-you-added-some-more-details-about-whats-going-on-i-think-it-could-be-better 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story%2C-but-seems-to-deviate-from-the-original-story-spine.-other-than-that-it-is-a-really-good-story-so-far-along-with-the-art. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-story-is-good-but-its-hard-to-understand. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-tone-you-are-using-to-tell-your-story-.-i-think-maybe-you-could-string-your-story-a-bit-better.-i-like-the-idea-of-him-trying-to-keep-himself-together. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawings%2C-you-have-some-good-artists.-i-would-recommend-that-you-zoom-out-your-pictures-to-see-the-whole-thing.-i-would-recommend-that-you-do-more-drawings-to-get-more-of-an-idea-of-what-is-happening.-i-am-excited-to-see-the-last-act-of-your-story.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-fantasy-aspect-of-the-story.-but-i-have-no-idea-what-the-story-is-about.-i-like-the-art. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-plot-and-thought-the-drawing-where-cool. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-great-and-the-story-is-very-cool-and-interesting.-the-fact-that-there's-a-guy-(scientist)-that's-attached-to-bees%2C-more-specifically-the-bees-that-he's-studying%2C-is-very-unique-and-cool.-i-really-like-the-idea-and-i-also-would-like-to-know-how-the-bees-got-out-and-how-the-story-is-going-to-end.-the-talking-that-you-gave-over-the-video-is-pretty-inconsistent-and-thus%2C-it-makes-it-hard-to-hear-and-understand-the-story.-that's-about-the-only-thing-that-i'd-have-to-poorly-criticize.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-intoduction%2C-i-think-some-of-the-middle-of-the-story-could-have-been-explained-better%2C-and-i-like-the-drawings. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-pretty-cool.-i-like-how-she-really-works-hard-for-her-job. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawing-and-art-is-very-creative-and-i-would-really-like-to-know-more-about-the-story- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-story-is-very-appealing-and-well-fleshed-out%2C-i-do-think-the-idea-is-very-cliche-though- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-way-you-described-everything-including-the-characters-and-the-setting%2C-i-think-maybe-your-drawings-or-character-could-be-a-little-more-detailed%2C-but-other-than-that-i-really-liked-everything-from-the-description-of-the-characters-to-the-setting- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-think-it-could-use-more-detail-but-overal-i-like-the-story 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cant-wait-to-see-the-rest-of-the-story-this-is-interesting- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-a-post-apocalyptic-world-where-a-boy-is-trying-to-journey-on-to-find-what-he-needs-but-i-do-think-you-should-put-more-depth-and-thought-on-how-the-two-characters-meet-instead-of-just-showing-1.-he's-walking-2.-they-meet-3.-they-help-each-other-there-should-be-little-minor-beats-in-between-to-help-your-story-flow-and-make-sense- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-was-really-confused-in-the-begging-i-don't-understand-what's-happening%2C-is-their-maybe-a-part-one%2C-but-other-then-that-i-really-like-your-drawings.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-of-the-buildings--and-the-dialogues-of-the-people.-i-think-if-you-could-explain-who-the-main-character-really-is-and-what-their-personalities-are-in-act-1. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-premise-is-interesting%2C-though-i-don't-really-understand-what-keeps-the-kids-in-the-school.-i-feel-as-though-one-would-wander-in-out-of-curiosity-but-eventually-back-out.-if-a-kid-goes-to-school-with-the-intention-to-meet-more-people-or-have-fun%2C-it's-inefficient-since-there-are-much-better-places-to-do-that.-perhaps-the-school-can-offer-something-unique%3F-the-experience-of-%22going-to-school%22-itself-is-already-unique-to-the-people-on-the-island%2C-but-i-feel-like-there's-little-reason-to-stay-at-the-school.-maybe-there's-something-fun-about-the-school%2C-or-maybe-something-about-the-school-is-different-from-schools-in-real-life.-historically-people-went-to-school-because-they-wanted-to-be-educated-so-they-could-get-jobs%2C-so-that's-something-that-can-also-be-used-as-an-idea-for-why-people-go-to-school.-overall-i-like-the-premise.-it's-something-many-kids-have-probably-thought-of%2C-but-that-doesn't-make-it-any-less-interesting-to-entertain-either---there-are-many-different-ways-to-go-about-this-idea.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-doesnt-tell-me-anything-that-your-last-one-didnt 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-lovely-story-about-the-conflict-between-supporting--yourself-in-a-way-that-gives-you-a-home%2C-and-supporting-yourself-in-a-way-that-makes-that-place-home-in-the-true-emotional-meaning.-the-dream-sequence-is-really-creative%2C-and-i-commend-this. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-fun-story%2C-i-loved-the-part-with-the-roomba%2C-but-it-did-end-really-abruptly%2C-and-it-makes-me-wonder-how-a-third-act-would-even-look-like. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-fact-that-the-main-character-recruited-their-friends-to-overcome-their-fear-of-failure.-i-think-that-this-provides-a-strong-theme-of-friendship-in-the-story.-i-was-a-bit-confused-about-how-agu-knew-their-destiny%2C-but-overall-i-think-this-story-great. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-over-all-story-and-the-aspect-that-they-dont-have-names-and-its-numbers.-maybe-add-a-bit-more-detail-in-the-art.-the-concept-was-really-interesting. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-it-is-super-cool-the-drawings-are-amazing-and-i-like-that-she-is-a-different-color-to-show-her-feelings-and-show-that-she-is-different.-in-love-your-idea-it-is-so-cool-- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-the-of-him-making-a-university-but-then-only-idiots-applied%2C-also-how-he-made-a-space-invasion-challenge.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-so-far%2C-since-they-both-read-books-a-lot%2C-my-guess-is-that-they-will-bond-over-their-love-for-reading-and-become-friends.-maybe-try-to-record-with-audio-because-its-hard-to-read-the-text-and-focus-on-story-at-same-time. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-it%2C-and-i-like-the-part-about-how-a-school-was-built-in-a-world-that-hadn%E2%80%99t-wanted-a-school. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-the-drawing-where-cool-but-it-was-hard-to-tell-what-you-where-saying-in-the-begging. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-pretty-cool.-i-like-how-there-is-an-evil-ice-cream-man. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-story-line-is-great!-but-i-feel-that-the-school-scene-is-unnecessary%2C-and-it-distracts-me-from-the-actual-plot.-the-drawing-are-nice.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawing-it-looks-good-i-really-like-the-story-to-i-look-forwards-to-it. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-and-i-really-like-the-drawings%2C-also-nice-tension. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story%2C-i-am-very-invested-into-your-story.-i-would-recommend-that-you-add-the-ages-or-grades-of-cody-and-callie-to-see-how-how-they-are-gong-to-do-with-the-world-exploding.-i-would-recommend-that-you-say-how-cody-and-callie-survive-when-no-one-else-does.-i-am-excited-to-see-the-last-act-of-your-story.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-loved-about-the-story-was-how-the-plot-flows%2C-it's-very-well-written-and-i'm-excited-to-see-what-happens-next. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-story-is-very-appealing-and-well-fleshed-out%2C-the-drawings-are-also--very-good-at-conveying-emotion 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-here-and-i-find-this-really-creative-i-really-like-your-drawing-it-lookx-like-you-really-took-your-time- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-interesting%2C-but-the-drawing-is-a-little-messy-and-hard-to-see-at-times%2C-other-than-that-there-are-no-other-problems-that-i-notice. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-plot-found-it-super-cool.-and-i-thought-the-names-where-creative. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-you-set-the-scene-really-well-with-how-the-main-character-feels.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-detail-to-the-drawings.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-to-what-happens-after-the-intro.-i-think-that-your-story-will-be-really-cool-and-super-suspenseful! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-developed-your-story-very-well-and-i-like-the-suspense-that-you-build-with-the-paranormal-house. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-were-cut-off-in-the-end-of-the-video%2C-but-i-like-your-world-%26-your-character%2C-but-i-couldn't-understand-what-the-moral-was.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-her-creating-an-imaginary-friend.-could-she-create-other-things-that-are-imaginary%3F-how-do-real-people-react-to-her-imaginary-things%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-%E2%80%9Cwhat-if%E2%80%9D-you-made-it-about.-i-found-the-storyline-pretty-confusing.-you-might-see-improvement-by-taking-more-time-to-sketch-your-scenes-and-characters. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawings-and-they-are-super-cool.-i-cannot-really-hear-the-story-really-well-.-the-plot-though-from-what-i-hear-is-really-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-describe-your-characters-personality-and-world-you%E2%80%99ve-built-around-her! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-and-the-drawing-is-very-creative-i-really-like-your-story-and-its-very-intresting- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-interesting%2C-but-i-had-a-hard-time-understand-the-audio-at-certain-points 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-it-could-have-more-detail-but-overal-i-think-you-guys-are-doing-a-good-job 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawings.-your-story-is-really-cool.-i-think-you-could-maybe-add-a-few-more-details.--i-really-like-it- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-story-is-very-appealing-and-well-fleshed-out-but-i-think-it-moves-a-little-to-fast-and-the-drawings-could-be-better 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story.-i-would-like-to-know-more-back-story-about-the-character.-the-art-is-really-good. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-part-how-they-are-all-sunflowers.-i-think-that-is-unique-and-is-a-cool-part-of-your-story%2C 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line%2C-i-also-really-like-how-the-the-story-was-explained.-the-art-was-very-simple-and-i-understood-everything%2C-over-i-would-love-to-see-you-short-film. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-first-drawing-of-the-dad-doing-rocket-science-and-the-mom-doing-surgery.-i-don't-really-understand-how-apollo-failed-his-grades-even-though-he's-like-super-smart.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-theme-of-the-story-is-pretty-cool.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/definitely-has-to-be-the-most-unique-one-so-far.-by-that%2C-i-mean-that-this-is-the-first-video-that-actually-has-dialogue-and-on-top-of-that%2C-you-have-people-voice-acting-that-dialogue%2C-which-is-very-cool-and-unique%2C-so-far.-plus%2C-the-art-is-very-good-and-i-liked-the-story%2C-especially-since-you-used-the-common-trope-of-a-person-that-is-at-their-lowest-and-suddenly-rises-up%2C-because-of-their-hard-work.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-theme-of-the-story-is-pretty-cool.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/sounds-like-fun! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-world-building-in-the-story-is-very-good. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-it-is-very-good-and-i-find-it-very-intresting-your-story-is-very-good-and-i-would-really-like-too-see-more-of-this- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line%2C-i-also-really-like-how-the-the-story-was-explained.-the-art-was-very-simple-and-i-understood-everything%2C-over-i-would-love-to-see-you-short-film. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/intresting%2C-i-liked-the-humor-a-lot-but-i-was-often-confused-about-what-was-going-on.-the-art-is-also-pretty-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-plot-is-good-but-some-of-the-drawings-could-be-a-little-more-detailed 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-line-and-the-drawings%2C-maybe-be-more-clear-when-telling-the-story-because-i-couldn't-understand-some-parts 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-beats-are-pretty-good.-the-story-seems-interesting-as-well.-the-only-issue-i-see-is-the-art-style.-it's-confusing-seeing-7-different-art-styles-that-clash-against-each-other.-other-than-that%2C-the-play-is-really-great. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-very-well-made-(big-props-for-adding-dialogue)-but-it-was-a-little-bit-hard-to-follow%2C-could-have-just-been-because-of-me-though. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line%2C-i-also-really-like-how-the-the-story-was-explained.-the-art-was-very-simple-and-i-understood-everything%2C-over-i-would-love-to-see-you-short-film. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-find-the-story-so-interesting-i-wonder-what-will-happen-after-she-checks-the-email 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-part-about-the-dynamite.-i-also-like-how-the-theme-of-the-story-is-confidence. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-happened-in-the-time-between-the-protest%2C-and-when-it-reached-the-president%3F-the-story-cut-off-mid-sentence%2C-so-i-don't-know-what-the-end-of-act-2-was.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-the-story 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-art-and-how-the-mc-gets-back-up-again-after-falling%3B-it's-good-symbolizing!-i-could-not-understand-the-last-step-because-it-cut-off. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-theme-of-the-story-is-pretty-cool. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-story-is-very-appealing-and-well-fleshed-out- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-though-the-drawings-were-nice-but-they-were-a-little-hard-to-see-at-times. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-style-but-i-don%C2%B4t-think-you-put-you-put-en-focuses-on-the-minor-beats-and-it-was-a-little-short.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-i-find-this-story-very-intresting-and-i-really-like-the-art- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-relationship-between-james-and-steve-is-starting-to-grow-and-i'm-interested-as-to-what-will-happen-next. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-idea-of-a-kid-without-an-imagination-is-interesting%2C-i-wonder-if-he-will-get-an-imagination-and-be-able-to-balance-his-social-life-and-his-academic-one. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line%2C-i-also-really-like-how-the-the-story-was-explained.-the-art-was-very-simple-and-i-understood-everything%2C-over-i-would-love-to-see-you-short-film. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-you-made-his-head-yellow-it-really-shows-how-hes-is-%22different%22-i-kinda-found-the-part-where-he-got-bad-grades-confusing.-super-interesting-act.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-apollo%E2%80%99s-lack-of-imagination.-i-think-you-made-a-very-interesting-problem-based-on-this. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line%2C-i-also-really-like-how-the-the-story-was-explained.-the-art-was-very-simple-and-i-understood-everything%2C-over-i-would-love-to-see-you-short-film. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-he-doesn't-really-have-an-imagination.-i-think-this-story-is-pretty-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-very-good-and-that-you-did-a-very-good-job-on-it. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-gets-cut-off-at-the-end-but-i-love-how-you-address-inequality-through-the-character-and-their-motives.--i-wonder-if-you-have-more-struggles-or-obstacles-for-the-character-to-face-towards-the-end-because-fighting-for-equality-isn't-a-clean-cut-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-it-but-why-does-it-cut-out-after-the-cat-gets-shocked- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-interesting-house-and-story-i-wish-there-was-more-build-up-to-the-duel-with-the-wizard-and-it-have-had-kore-details-for-closure 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-that-someone-had-built-a-school-in-a-world-that-hadn't-had-or-wanted-a-school-so-it-makes-him-stand-out.-but-could-you-also-put-more-in-depth-how-he-came-up-with-the-idea-to-build-a-school-or-why-i-think-that-would-help-your-story-flow-more. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-absolutely-love-this-world-and-story%2C-however-i-think-you-need-to-show-more-of-your-characters-personality. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-absolutely-love-this-world-and-story%2C-however-i-think-you-need-to-show-more-of-your-characters-personality. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-plot-is-good%2C--but-im-pretty-sure-you-were-only-supposed-to-do-act-one-and-two.-i-also-like-how-detailed-the-drawings-are 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-and-how-it-shows-how-life-can-be-some-times.-i-would-recommend-that-you-take-out-the-part-in-the-beginning-before-the-drawings-because-it-kinda-ruined-the-whole-story.-i-would-recommend-that-you-show-what-he-does-or-how-he-is-playing-with-the-other-kids-to-show-how-he-doesn't-know-what-he-is-doing.-i-am-excited-to-see-the-next-part-of-your-story.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-story-i-really-liked-how-the-story-flows-together-and-how-the-start-sets-up-the-end.-the-drawing-really-go-well-with-the-story-and-i-also-like-how-good-the-story-is. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it-can-have-a-bit-more-work. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/if-i-am-being-totally-honest%2C-i-thought-this-was-probably-one-of-the-best-submissions-i-have-seen-in-the-past-six-weeks.-i-think-that-the-background-of-the-story-could-have-been-explained-a-little-better%2C-and-i-loved-the-transitions-and-drawings. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-could-improve-on-audio-quality%2C-but-other-than-that-the-story-is-great-so-far.-i-like-the-part-about-he-sets-up-his-own-stand. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-story-is-nice-because-it-shows-what-people-can-do-even-when-they-start-from-rock-bottom. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-kinda-cut-off-at-the-end-so-i-could-not-hear-the-end-of-your-thought%2C-but-the-drawings-really-show-to-idea.-keep-up-the-good-work! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cant-really-hear-anything-but-im-sure-this-is-a-best-seller 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-was-really-interesting!-the-story's-got-a-really-lovely-premise%2C-and-the-concept-is-something-i-dig.-the-way-it-progresses-as-he-finds-new-things%2C-going-from-things-as-wild-as-new-elements-to-things-as-calm-and-natural-as-playing-pretend%2C-but-to-apollo%2C-it's-a-completely-foreign-concept. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-music-and-story- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-idea-%26-what-your-character-goes-through 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-character-develops.-the-illustration-and-presentations-were-awesome!-the-only-thing-i-would-recommend-is-shortening--your-story%3B-there's-a-lot-of-things-going-on-and-i-think-that-simplyfying-the-story-would-be-great. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-plot-so-far%2C-it-seems-interesting.-the-characterization-of-the-protagonist-so-far-makes-me-wonder-what-it-would-take-for-him-to-also-have-an-imagination.-the-protagonist-seems-really-intelligent-in-an-exaggerated-and-unrealistic-way%2C-which-i-personally-think-is-cool-and-interesting. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-and-the-characters-the-characters-are-so-well-drawn 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-your-story-is-super-suspenseful-and-sets-up-the-next-act-really-well.-i-think-that-you-should-go-more-in-depth-with-the-drawings.-i-think-that-you-should-set-the-scene-more%2C-by-introducing-the-characters-that-he-is-scared-to-tell-his-dreams-to.-i-think-that-this-story-is-going-to-be-great-and-really-action-packed! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-and-the-characters-but-the-art-style-is-very-inconsistent-and-messy.-but-the-story-i-like-it-a-lot. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-portray-your-main-character. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-of-the-robots%2C-but-i-don%3Bt-really-understand-act-1-of-the-story.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-action-and-plot-for-your-story.-i-find-it-very-interesting.-i-wonder-what-other-struggles-they-will-have-besides-a-training-arc.-maybe-he-could-personally-have-a-vendetta-against-the-force-coming-to-wreck-his-town-because-they-killed-his-family-a-long-time-ago 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-it-is-super-cool-and-your-drawings-are-great.--i-think-you-can-maybe-add-a-bit-more-to-the-story-cause-it-is-very-confusing-to-follow-the-story.--i-really-like-the-sound-effects-you-put-into-the--sound. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-and-i-really-like-the-drawings. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-it's-really-cool-how-the-characters-are-animals. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it%E2%80%99s-a-fun-idea%2C-but-i-got-a-little-confused-with-the-ending-for-this-(more-specifically-how-this-would-go-into-the-third-act) 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-plot-and-i-thought-it-was-very-captivating.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-is-cool%2C-but-maybe-put-some-more-effort-on-the-art-aspect. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-liked-about-your-story-was-the-message%2C-so-far-i-can-see-how-all-of-them-will-work-together.-i-like-your-style-of-drawing-and-the-color-you-used. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-would-really-like-this-story-if-i-could-hear-whats-going-on 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-conflict-between-two-different-species.-i-did-not-completely-understand-why-there-was-this-conflict%2C-however.-i-liked-the-storyline-as-a-whole-and-the-relatability-of-the-plot. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-art%2C-i-think-it-can-be-improved-by-having-more-different-shots-since-most-of-them-are-medium-shots 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-giving-me-coraline-vibes.-i-dig-it.-the-drawings-show-what-happening-really-well 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-good.-i-liked-the-story-a-lot%2C-too.-also%2C-i'm-wondering-if-the-argument-with-the-robot-and-his-coworker-had-anything-to-do-with-the-robots-and-the-other-alien-species-misunderstanding-each-other.-that's-the-only-part-that-i-don't-get-so-far%2C-but-other-than-that%2C-i-liked-how-you're-using-the-common-trope-of-two-people-that-always-argue-with-each-other%2C-but-in-the-end%2C-have-to-accept-each-other%2C-so-that-they-can-work-together. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-little-cliche-but-its-still-good-i-would-just-improve-the-art 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-very-appealing-and-well-fleshed-out%2C-but-the-drawings-need-a-lot-of-work 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/theme-is-really-gooad-and-the-art-is-nice 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-find-the-story-interesting-but-is-the-bullying-ever-gonna-stop%3F-is-he-ever-gonna-fully-hatch-out-of-the-egg-shell%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story.-i-think-you-did-a-good-job 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-origin-of-the-house-and-how-the-main-character-is-related-to-a-wizard.-i-think-if-you-guys-could've-expanded-a-little-more-on-act-2-where-the-main-character-went-into-the-portal.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-cool-and-the-idea-is-origonal%2C-the-art-is-pretty-good-as-well. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-and-i-really-like-the-drawings. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-plot-and-the-drawings%2C-but-there-was-a-very-long-pause-in-the-video. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-clear-story%2C-and-a-great-setup-for-the-final-act 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-theme-of-the-story-and-i-like-the-art. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-theme%2C-and-the-art-is-very-nice%2C-the-idea-is-a-little-cliche-though. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-think-it-could-use-more-detail. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-pretty-good%2C-i-think-you-could-put-more-details.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-and-morale 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-art-and-variety-of-angles-used.-maybe-slow-down-on-the-transitions-because-its-harder-to-see-the-pictures. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/superior- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-robot-idea-is-cool%2C-and-the-art-is-nice 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-clear-and-easy-to-understand 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/elite-story-making-dudes 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/for-anyone-else-reviewing-this%2C-act-1-is-here%3A-https%3A%2F%2Fwww.storyxperiential.com%2Fvideo-submissions-week-5%2F6a288ab7-6261-4702-ac7a-1365a0fab29e---nice-work.-i-love-the-moment-when-she-falls-in-love-with-the-moon.-i-wonder-where-they-go-next%3F-next-week-be-sure-to-put-all-your-act-1%2C2-%26-3's-together-so-we-can-see-the-full-story.-also-it-would-be-awesome-if-you-could-try-to-record-audio-next-week-as-well. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-love-the-artwork-(especially-at-4%3A39-5%3A55!)%2C-animation%2C-sound-and-storyboarding.-very-high-quality-production.-it's-a-powerful-story.-your-use-of-flashbacks-is-impressive.-i-had-to-watch-it-twice-to-fully-understand-because-at-first-the-imaginary-friends-in-the-train-confused-me-until-you-explained-it-in-the-following-scene%2C-but-on-second-viewing-it-was-much-clearer-as-i-saw-hints-in-the-opening-scene-with-the-drawings-all-over-the-floor-(i'm-assuming-some-of-those-drawings-are-her-imaginary-friends%3F).-i-wonder-if-in-that-opening-scene-you-could-somehow-make-it-more-clear-that-those-are-her-imaginary-friends-she's-drawing%3F-my-only-other-note-is-i-feel-like-you-could-speed-this-up-a-little-bit%2C-perhaps-15%25-faster%3F-i-can't-wait-to-see-what-happens-when-the-door-opens! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-setup-to-your-story...we-can-all-relate-to-this.-love-the-idea-of-field-trip-forcing-them-together....i-hope-they-can-come-together-to-survive-in-the-end.-your-drawings-have-lots-of-energy-they-were-fun-to-watch.-i-hope-next-week-you-can-record-audio-with-your-full-storyreel.-great-work.-i'd-love-to-know-a-littel-more-at-the-beginning-why-they-think-that-they-hate-each-other%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wonderful-story-so-far%2C-love-the-art...i-most-enjoyed-the-part-where-she-falls-into-the-hidden-layer%2C-and-how-it-leads-to-the-riddle.-great-setup!-i-wonder-if-his-knowledge-of-books-will-help-him%3F-next-week-i-hope-you-can-record-with-audio.-my-guess-is-her-love-of-books-will-save-her%3F-bravo! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-intriguing-story%2C-what-i-found-most-interesting-is-this-idea-that-an-explosion-awakens-mythical-creatures....i'm-very-curious-what-is-deep-inside-the-library.-i-hope-next-week-you-can-record-audio-with-submission%2C-but-your-title-cards-still-had-great-timing...i'm-wondering-what-this-precious-power-crystal-will-do%3F%3F 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-is-that-you-made-the-girl-look-like-she-was-running.--i-don't-understand-the-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-main-character-is-addicted-to-the-game.--i'm-very-confused-with-the-first-half-of-the-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-your-act-2-to-be-pretty-funny.-i-would-like-to-know-more-about-why-the-applicants-for-the-university-were-idiots-and-how-you-are-going-to-plan-your-climax-and-resolution-in-act-3.-otherwise%2C-looks-like-it's-coming-along-great! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-like-how-the-story-is-coming-along!-i-don't-see-any-problems-and-i-think-the-story-flows-very-well.-the-only-slight-thing-i-think-that-could-be-improved-upon-is-that-evan-doesn't-need-to-walk-away-from-the-tree-to-have-his-realization.-it-might-be-interesting-for-the-banana-to-fall-on-his-head%2C-he-picks-it-up%2C-and-then-remember-his-father's-knowledge.-this-way-it-would-parallel-how-isac-newton-started-to-research-and-later-discover-gravity-because-an-apple-fell-on-his-head%2C-and-would-be-a-more-fluid-momment-to-storyboard.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-coming-along-great!-i-defiantly-understand-the-relationship-between-ray-and-his-love-interest-a-lot-more-now.-since-you-establish-that-she-never-really-noticed-him%2C-but-he-really-wanted-a-chance-to-meet-her%2C-i-think-you-can-use-the-ending-where-they-get-placed-in-the-same-bokay-as-the-chance-ray-finally-gets-to-talk-to-her.-keep-up-the-good-work! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-flowing-really-well.-i-liked-how-you-added-the-detail-that-even-in-the-virtual-world-the-avatar-does-not-treat-her-kindly.-this-makes-me-understand-that-both-the-real-and-fictional-worlds-are-not-completely-perfect.-the-only-problem-i-sense-is-at-this-point-i-do-not-understand-what-the-climax-will-be.-other-than-that-your-story-is-looking-great-and-i'm-sure-the-ending-will-be-great! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story%2C-it's-understandable-and-the-act-1-story-sets-up-a-great-universe-for-arlo.-the-only-problem-i-sense-is-that-the-ending-of-act-2-looks-like-it-will-be-challenging-to-set-up-the-climax-and-resolution-within-act-3.--what-i-would-recommend-is-making-the-parent's-inability-to-hug-their-child-a-more-intense-moment-or-the-defining-moment-that-establishes-that-arlo-has-lost-almost-all-connection-to-his-humanity.-this-way-it-gives-him-a-lot-of-motivation-to-return-to-humanity-when-i-think-your-act-3-shows-how-he-and-other-kids-at-the-school-turn-his-private-garden-into-a-communal-school-garden.-otherwise-great-work-and-i-really-like-your-art-style-it's-very-cute-and-works-well-with-the-calm-story! 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-incredibly-well-done-and-flesh-out!-the-only-comment-i-have-is-it-takes-a-while-to-get-to-the-until-one-day-portion%2C-where-she-starts-volunteering-at-the-senior-center.-what-i-would-recommend-is-shortening-the-story-to-end-when-she-develops-her-first-connection-to-the-boy-and-grandma-at-the-center-and-stops-seeing-her-therapist.-this-ending-offers-room-for-concrete-and-understandable-growth-and-shortens-the-amount-of-work-you-will-have-to-do-for-both-storyboarding-and-creating-dialogue.-depending-on-whether-or-not-you-really-want-to-implement-the-ghost-part-of-the-story%2C-i-would-end-the-story-when-she-stops-seeing-her-therapist-or-implement-the-ghosts-while-she-still-develops-her-friendship-with-the-boy-and-his-grandma.-otherwise%2C-everything-looks-outstanding%2C-just-think-about-how-your-story-can-include-the-great-emotional-growth-with-or-without-the-ghosts-sprinkled-in-at-an-earlier-part.- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-have-combined-creativity-and-friendship.--i-also-really-like-the-positive-feeling-in-this-story-and-want-to-see-where-it-goes-next. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work.--i-am-really-curious-to-see-where-this-goes-now.--i-love-that-we-meet-the-main-character-and-so-clearly-see-what-her-conflict-is.-now-i-am-waiting-to-see-what-the-mysterious-reflection--is-going-to-add-to-the-story. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-interesting-story-and-there-are-a-few-things-i-want-to-understand.--i-am-confused-about-how-mason's-dad-and-the-village-learned-that-mason-had-been-with-the-mushroom-community-and-would-like-to-see-something-in-the-story-that-shows-when-he-came-back-and-how-he-told-them-about-his-time-there.--is-this-the-full-story-or-just-act-1-and-2%3F--i'd-also-like-to-know-more-about-the-evil-characters-and-why-they-are-the-way-they-are.--will-mason's-dad-be-changed-by-what-he-learns-from-his-son.--great-work. 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-interested-to-find-out-what-the-dog-finds-and-how-dave-is-going-to-change-from-whatever-happens-next.--i-liked-seeing-that-dave-has-a-life-with-a-routine%2C-but-would-like-to-know-a-little-more-about-what-dave-is-all-about.--what-matters-to-him-in-his-life%3F-- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-such-an-interesting-and-complex-story-and-topic.--i-am-fascinated-by-her-conflict-about-her-belief-system-and-wanting-to-be-accepted-by-her-parents-even-though-they-have-different-beliefs.--i-am-curious-if-she-will-be-able-to-find-resolution-with-her-family-since-she-has-died.--i-am-really-interested-in-hearing-what-happens-next.--your-drawings-and-visuals-for-the-story-are-very-powerful.-- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-visuals-and-love-the-idea-of-%22artsville.%22-you-use-color-so-effectively-to-draw-us-into-the-story.-the-vibrant-colors-for-the-party-atmosphere-are-in-great-contrast-to-sophie-who-is-usually-in-muted-colors.--the-idea-of-someone-who-cannot-fit-into-a-party-mood-is-interesting-and-i-am-very-curious-to-see-where-this-story-goes.--graet-work..-- 2021-11-15 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-character-so-far!-something-that-i-was-wondering-is-why-does-jitt-have-a-dissatisfaction-with-pumpkins%3F-i-think-you-could-work-on-clarifying-some-details-in-your-character%2C-but-overall-it-looks-great! 2021-11-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-illustrations-are-simple-and-easy-to-understand.-i-really-love-how-you've-given-voices-to-the-snakes-instead-of-narrating-the-story.-the-voice-modulations-are-extremely-good. 2021-11-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-story-is-unfolding%2C-but-this-story-is-extremely-similar-to-how-to-train-your-dragon-animated-by-dreamworks. 2021-11-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-interesting%2C-what-i-feel-is-there-could-be-more-minor-beats-you-could-add-to-the-plot%2C-adding-up-the-coherence.-like-how-the-watch-switches-on-and-transports-him%2C-or-like-why-he-gets-into-a-fight-with-the-pirates-sailing-in-the-ship.-adding-such-beats-would-give-clear-explanation-and-understanding-to-the-viewers. 2021-11-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-your-drawings...-cant-wait-to-see-how-this-story-unfolds. 2021-11-14 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how--your-minor-beats-flow-your-story-so-well 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-your-minor-beats-support-your-major-beats-as-well 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-your-%22because-of-that%22s-flow-so-well 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-you-portray-his-fears-so-well 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-nale-defeats-meanies. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-your-closeup-shots-and--your-illustrations-are-so-detailed- 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-digital-dependency%2C-seeing-as-it-is-a-more-prevalent-issue-as-the-days-go-by%2C-and-you-can-take-that-concept-in-many-different-ways.-is-her-digital-counterpart-ai%3F-how-does-she-exist-and-did-she-mean-for-harper-to-become-attached-to-this-fake-idealized-world%3F 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/hey%2C-this-clip-is-very-nice.-what-i-found-confusing-is-how-the-protagonist-always-wanted-to-have-fun%2C-but-felt-it-was-boring.-i-believe-this-reason-is-not-quite-logical.-rest-all-is-great. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-really-unfolding-well.-the-only-thing-i-wasnt-able-to-understand-that-how-a-sudden-mob-walked-in-the-hallway%2C-and-trapped-the-reflection.-also%2C-you-could-elaborated-more-on%2C-how-the-reflection-gets-trapped-into-the-prism.-i-believe-that-frame-needs-a-little-more-work.-i-feel-its-quiet-sudden%2C-breaking-the-motion-of-the-overall-story%2C 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i'm-confused-why-there-was-suddenly-a-crowd%2C-but-i-really-like-this-story!-the-art-is-great%2C-and-the-story-seems-like-a-lot-of-effort-was-put-into-it. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i'm-confused-because-act-1-is-missing%3F-it-is-just-act-2.-but-otherwise%2C-the-art-style-is-really-cute-and-they-story-seems-interesting! 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-the-story-is-like-hawaiian-culture%3F-also-is-she-supposed-to-be-like-a-leader-or-is-she-just-a-normal-person-in-the-village%3F 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-story-is-really-creative!- 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/idk-if-this-was-intentional-or-not%2C-but-there-is-a-similar-folk-tale-about-this-(the-story-of-king-midas).-if-you-want-any-inspiration.-the--story-itself-is-pretty-good. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-get-the-concept-of-your-idea%2C-which-is-very-cool-concept.-i--am-just-confused-who-1-is.-anyways-the-art-is-pretty-solid. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-pretty-good%2C-the-story-itself-is-straight-to-point-and-concise.-i-think-its-to-concise-if-i-am-being-honest. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-was-interesting-about-the-story-is-the-idea-of-flowers-growing-on-people-as-a-disease.-the-story-is-very-well-paced-for-a-2-minute-video.--i-guess---the-reaveal-didn't-really-make-sense.-the-uncle-expelling-to-rae--the-corrupt-business-and-the-uncle-being-ok-to-reveal-the-company-as-the-problem. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-and-story%2Fmessage-is-really-good.-but-what-confused-me-is--that-you--submitted-this-on-act-2-when-there-is-still-more-to-write-on-this-story.-anyways-great-job-guys. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-amazing%2C-what-interested-me-was-osud%3F-i-want-to-learn-more-about-this-negative-feeding-entity-scarlet-has.-great-submission-though. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-amazing-first-of-all%2C-second-of-all-the-story-is-also-amazing.-what-intrigued-me-the-most-is-shealas-reaction-to-her-reflection.-i-guess-i-didn't-understand-the--quick-shift-of-tone-where-one-second-she-was--afraid-of-her-reflection-to-being--tame-about-it-after-the-reflection-is-under-the-water. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-could-be-slightly-clearer-however-i-personally-think-the-story-is-understandable-and-interesting.- 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/detailed-illustrations%2C-i-like-them-a-lot.-the-story-is-very-comedic-but-has-a-dark-undertone.-i'm-curious-where-she-got-her-abilities-from-to-be-so-tough%3F- 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-know-this-story.-awesome-illustrations.-maybe-try-to-shift-the-story-to-make-it-more-unique%3F- 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-color-choices. 2021-11-12 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/far-out-idea-but-still-pretty-good! 2021-11-12 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-idea.-the-beats-seemed-a-tad-fast-though. 2021-11-12 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story-line.-i-have-been-following-a-while-and-this-is-very-interesting-to-see-what's-happening. 2021-11-12 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-beats.-they-are-a-little-complicated-to-understand%2C-but-otherwise-good! 2021-11-12 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-the-student-wanting-to-build-their-mother's-dream-of-a-school.--i-want-to-know-why-that-was-the-mother's-dream%3F--were-there-any-clues-she-eft-behind-about-what-her-dream-was%3F--will-their-be-something-special-that-happens-that-draws-attention-to-the-school-and-brings-more-people-there%3F--i-look-forward-to-hearing-more 2021-11-12 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-interested-in-learning-more-about-the-one-missing-piece-in-the-spaceship.--why-was-it-missing%3F--how-will-they-find-it-and-include-it%3F--will-that-be-an-important-part-of-the-story%3F 2021-11-12 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-competition-between-ice--cream--and-mochi.--do-you-plan-to-bring-any-of-the-cultural-background-of-mochi-into-your-story%3F--how-will-the-competitors-learn-from-each-other-during-their-competition%3F 2021-11-12 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-that-the-outlaw-got-sucked-into-a-portal.-that-makes-me-wonder-what-will-happen-to-him.-and-great-drawings-by-the-way. 2021-11-13 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it-it-is-amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 2021-11-12 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-creating-a-variety-of-drawings.--in-particular-i-liked-the-close-up-images-of-what-dave-is-studying.--simple-but-effective-detail.--i-agree-with-the-feedback-below%2C-and-i-am-curious-what-happens-at-the-end-of-act-1-that-will-connect-us-to-the-next-major-beat.--is-there-a-twist-or-does-dave-want-or-learn-something-that-will-keep-the-story-moving-forward-when-he%E2%80%99s-in-the-hospital%3F---good-job!- 2021-11-11 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-awesome-jobs-with-your-drawings.--in-particular%2C-i-liked-how-you-started-with-a-wide-or-establishing-image-to-set-up-the-world.--one-question-i-had-was-how-do-the-characters-feel-about-the-glitches-and-henry.--are-they-more-curious-or-scared-or-excited%3F--or-maybe-each-character-is-all-of-these-things%3F--also%2C-do-their-feelings-lead-them-to-start-working-with-henry%3F-- 2021-11-11 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-with-the-minor-beats-after-the-%E2%80%9Conce-upon-a-time%E2%80%9D-major-beat-that-set-up-the-character%E2%80%99s-world.--one-question-i-had-was-how-does-your-character-feel-about-working-with-cars.--it-feels-like-that%E2%80%99s-what-he-wants%2C-so-i-was-a-little-confused-why-he-got-angry.--was-it-because-the-ceo-was-giving-him-too-much-work%3F-- 2021-11-11 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-drawings!-im-pretty-confused-about-the-storyline%2C-be-more-discriptive. 2021-11-11 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-inventive-idea%2C-and-i-really-enjoyed-your-drawings.--for-example%2C-the-sequence-of-arlo-going-from-plant-to-plant-to-eventually-becoming-a-boy-was-extremely-effective.--i-could-easily-imagine-the-progression-based-on-your-simple-but-beautifully-crafted-drawings.--awesome-job.---- 2021-11-11 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-creativity! 2021-11-11 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-start...- 2021-11-11 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-use-of-minor-beats-for-all-your-major-beats.--you-added-some-wonderful-detail-as-the-story-progressed.--for-example%2C-the-fact-that-she-sat-alone-at-the-back-of-the-class-with-her-hoodie-really-sets-up-the-minor-beat-in-the-next-major-beat-%E2%80%93-when-she-gets-on-the-bus.--looking-forwarding-to-see-more.-- 2021-11-11 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-saturated-colors%2C-it-really-gives-it-emotion! 2021-11-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-detailed-and-well-thought-out-your-story-is!-all-the-steps-flow-and-are-clear.-keep-up-the-great-job! 2021-11-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-was-how-it-developed.-all-the-steps-were-clear-and-the-illustrations-are-great! 2021-11-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-video-was-the-editing-and-illustrations!-very-good-job!-there's-a-lot-going-on-in-your-story-so-it's-a-lot-to-take-in%2C-i-recommend-simplifying-the-story-a-bit. 2021-11-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-was-the-idea-of-hiding-identities.-the-last-couple-steps-were-surprising.- 2021-11-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-way-it-develops-and-i-didn't-understand-the-last-step-because-i-think-it-cut-out.-good-job! 2021-11-10 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i'm-excited-to-see-the-new-alien-species.-the-robots-are-so-cute.-i'd-like-to-get-to-know-them-a-bit-more-in-the-opening-and-find-out-what-drives-them-forward-in-the-story.-what-do-they-want%3F 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/one-question-i-have-how-the-reflection-is-introduced%2C-it-seemed-like-it-just-jumped-out-of-the-mirror-suddenly-and-that-was-normal-to-her.--is-she-aware-of-her-reflection-having-a-mind-of-it's-own-before-this-part-or-is-this-when-she-learns-it%3F-that's-the-only-part-i-was-slightly-confused-about%2C-can't-wait-to-see-where-it-goes 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/well-done%2C-i'm-curious-to-see-where-her-imagination-takes-her-and-what-this-new-friend-can-do-to-help.-next-week-try-and-find-an-editing-tool-so-you-can-just-take-pictures-of-your-drawings-and-talk-over-them-(such-as-adobe-spark)%2C-they-looked-cool-but-were-hard-to-see. 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-act-1.-good-job-building-up-his-world...i-like-the-artwork.-the-only-thing-i'm-not-sure-of-at-this-point-is-what-the-character-wants.....i'm-hoping-he-learns-something-through-his-cancer-diagnosis-which-helps-him.-well-done 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-very-sad-and-very-well-done....i-hope-something-positive-comes-out-of-this-tragedy....can't-wait-to-see-what-he-finds.-perhaps-you-can-show-us-a-bit-more-detail-about-their-relationship-before-he-passes 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-is-a-really-deep-and-meaningful-idea-underlying-this-story----trying-to-do-well-by-you-children-but-perhaps-not-making-the-best-choice-along-the-way.-a-very-relatable-concept.-i-was-confused-by-a-few-points-though.-why-did-daniel-leave-for-2-days%3F-how-did-he-get-to-space%3F-if-that-was-part-of-his-job-it-would-help-to-have-a-couple-of-minor-beats-to-establish-that.-finally%2C-act-1-usually-ends-with-an-%22until-one-day%22-kind-of-moment-where-something-happens-to-shake-up-the-character's-world.-i-wasn't-sure-what-that-moment-was.-i-think-these-questions-can-all-be-answered-in-a-way-that-leads-to-a-super-engaging-and-meaningful-final-story.-looking-forward-to-seeing-the-completed-work! 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/such-a-creative-and-novel-idea-for-a-story!-i-love-it.-i-felt-like-the-very-opening-about-arlo-being-born-from-a-seed-was-a-little-out-of-place.-i-think-it-will-play-better-to-start-earlier%2C-with-the-part-about-the-parents-wanting-a-child-but-not-being-able-to-have-one.-it-would-also-help-to-know-a-little-more-about-the-school's-motivation-to-remove-the-plants----that-is-a-good-beat-to-have-but-it-could-be-strong-if-we-understood-why.-i-agree-with-the-other-comment-that-exploring-arlo's-plant-ness-will-be-really-interesting-in-act-2.-i-look-forward-to-the-completed-story. 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-interesting-premise-for-the-story.-i'm-drawn-in-immediately-and-can't-wait-to-see-what-happens-next.-so-many-different-and-engaging-ways-the-rest-of-the-story-could-unfold.-great-start! 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-setup-and-the-underlying-message-against-bullying-(act-1).-act-2-(because-of-that's)-also-seems-to-flow-naturally-from-act-1.-i'm-wondering-about-act-3-though.-saying-that-he-no-longer-dreams-feels-more-like-a-start-to-another-story-(i'm-curious-what-happens-to-someone-who-doesn't-dream%3F-how-do-they-cope%3F-etc.)-rather-than-the-completion-of-this-story.-what-did-malcolm-learn-in-act-3%2C-how-did-he-grow%3F 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-done-a-nice-job-setting-up-the-story-and-main-character.--i-am-curious-about-why-the-main-character-is-a-milk-carton-(-or-is-it-cartoon%3F)-and-how-that-will-influence-the-story.--what-is-unique-about-him-because-of-the-fact-that-he-is-a-milk-carton%3F-is-there-a-reason-that-he-goes-to-the-kitchen-to-get-macaroni%3F-what-does-that-tell-us-about-the-character%3F--i-look-forward-to-learning-more-about-what-happens-to-him. 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-curious-about-what-andrew-means-when-he-says-%22there-are-some-robots-but-i-don't-even-care%22.--i-like-that-the-story-focuses-on-two-brothers-and-want-to-know-more-about-their-relationship.--i-am-nervous-to-find-out-what-happened-to-them-and-hope-that-they-will-be-ok-and-that-we-can-learn-more-about-who-they-are-and-what-their-lives-are-about. 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-are-some-really-interesting-ideas-in-this-story-which-make-me-interested-in-following-it.--the-drawings-are-really-great-and-help-tell-the-story-well.--i-would-like-to-understand-more-about--what-the-glitches-are-and-also-want-to-know-how-henry-could-so-easily-get-them-out-of-jail.- 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you've-done-a-nice-job-setting-up-this-story-and-making-me-curious-about-where-it-is-going-to-go.--it-would-be-good-to-have-a-hint-of-what-the-twist-in-the-story-is-going-to-be-by-the-end-of-act-1. 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work!--you-make-me-really-care-about-melody-right-away-and-i-am-interested-in-what-her-journey-will-be.--i-am-very-intrigued-by-the-discovery-of-the-magic-aisle-and-the-glowing-milk-and-i-thin-you-set-up-act-2-well.--i-also-like-the-loose-style-of-your-drawings-to-illustrate-what-is-happening.--one-think-that-i-think-could-make-your-drawings-stronger-is-either-the-use-of-color-or-darker-pencil-lines-to-emphasize-where-you-want-the-viewer-to-look.-- 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job%2C-love-the-depth-in-the-image-and-the-character-expressions.-the-world-feels-like-a-real-place%2C-it-feels-alive. 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-your-world-and-they-way-you-brought-it-to-life.-wonderful-images-and-vocal-delivery.-what-i-found-most-interesting-is-how-she-tried-to-hide-from-the-music-at-first....i-think-you-could-introduce-her-social-anxiety-right-at-the-start-of-the-story-so-we-understand-her-feelings-right-away.-the-fight-scene-was-very-dramatic....i'm-excited-to-see-what-happens-when-she-opens-herself-up-to-music!-bravo! 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-very-interesting. 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-told-the-story-well%2C-very-clear.-you-set-up-a-nice-struggle-for-melody.-i-love-the-way-you've-ended-act-1-with-a-discovery!...i'm-very-excited-to-learn-more-about-what-powers-this-milk-contains.-i-look-forward-doing-seeing-if-she-overcomes-her-shyness-and-how-her-work-helping-her-mom%2C-might-end-up-being-a-blessing-in-disguise%3F-these-are-just-some-things-i-wonder-after-this-act-1.-bravo! 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-i-love-the-idea-of-the-bug-in-the-virtual-world%2C-great-ending-to-act-1...great-opening-image-too....such-a-cool-scene.-i'd-like-to-learn-more-about-how-the-companies-earn-a-profit-from-the-users-(and-does-this-come-back-later-in-the-story).%3F-brovo-can't-wait-for-more 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-cool-beginning.-the-idea-of-being-able-to-scan-yourself-into-a-virtual-world-is-intriguing.-i-am-also-interested-in-finding-out-more-about-this-virus!-great-work! 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-connie-is-a-ghost-and-she-can-become-flesh-again-if-she-can-make-lots-of-friends.-i-think-you-could-have-added-more-minor-beats-for-example%3A-how-connie-did-when-she-tried-to-make-her-first-friend-(which-i-think-you-did-before-in-another-video).-it-felt-complete-though%2C-and-maybe-it-was-just-too-short-for-me.-i-have-a-weird-feeling-that-connie's-relationship-with-animals-will-come-in-display-later-in-the-story.-well-done!! 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-that-their-is-this-magic-royal-family-that-can-shape-shift-and-couldn't-use-their-powers-to-help-people-because-of-what-the-people-might-do-to-them.-i-think-you-went-past-act-1-a-little-bit-too-much%2C-but-nonetheless-it-was-a-great-story-so-far.-well-done!-i-had-a-little-trouble-comprehending-the-beginning%2C-but-that-could-just-be-me.-- 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-fact-that-mayoko-and-her-brother-have-to-pretend-to-be-each-other%2C-and-drawing-herself-with-her-different-emotions-was-interesting-and-nice.-i-feel-like-you-kind-of-skipped-through-the-minor-beats-too-fast-when-you-could-have-taken-your-time-explaining-why-your-character-did-what-she-did-(for-minor-beats).-i-thought-it-ended-too-quickly%2C-but-it-still-made-me-want-to-know-why-and-what-happens-when-mayoko-pretends-to-be-her-brother.- 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-way-it-flows%3A-how-you-introduce-your-character-and-a-mini-internal-crisis%2C-then-a-secondary-character-comes-in-and-solves-his-mini-internal-crisis%2C-then-he-gets-into-an-unexpected-plot-that-has-danger%2C-challengers%2Fenemies%2C-and-friends%2C-to-help-the-character-grow-and-develop.-i-also-loved-your-story-by-the-way!-i-love-the-mysterious-kinds-of-stories!-there-was-nothing-i-didn't-quite-understand.-well-done!!-the-details%2Fminor-beats-were-very-precise-and-detailed%2C-with-extra-tiny-details-that-make-the-story-have-much-clarity.- 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-storyboarding-in-my-opinion-it-shows-the-story-your-trying-to-portray.-the-sound-and-voice-recording-could-use-some-help%2C-maybe-slow-the-narration-down-a-bit%3F- 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-cool-story.-i-am-curious-what-happened-to-this-specific-hat-that-was-being-sold-at-a-store-causing-it-to-have-magical-properties.- 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-a-rude-mean-old-billionaire-turning-into-a-chicken%2C-however-i-am-curious-as-to-what-specifically-he-would-do-that-made-him-so-despicable.- 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-illustration-of-the-character-jeff.-i'm-curious-where-he-got-the-idea-to-write-to-congress-and-is-the-congress-also-full-of-sunflowers%3F 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-this-story-seems-very-real-world-with-everything-that-has-happened.-i'm-excited-for-the-act-two-on-this-to-see-what-happens-to-torys-soul.- 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-the-story.-i-wonder-why-danny-is-not-cared-about%2C-is-it-because-he-has-become-obsolete-and-everything-has-become-more-digital%3F- 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-interesting-idea!-i%E2%80%99m-excited-to-see-if-alex-is-found-out.-i%E2%80%99m-also-wondering-why-alex-is-the-only-girl.-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-interesting-idea!-i%E2%80%99m-wondering-what-challenges-the-character-faces-being-part-plant.-can-they-eat-normal-food%2C-do-they-need-more-sun-light%3F-i%E2%80%99m-excited-to-see-more.-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-idea-of-the-main-character-being-a-milk-carton!-it-will-be-interesting-to-see-how-the-character-over-comes-his-challenges.-i%E2%80%99m-wondering-if-he-finds-work-when-he-goes-back-home%2C-or-if-he-ever-returns-to-new-york.-great-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-interesting!-what-i-am-wondering-is-how-henry-is-able-to-pick-the-lock-and-how-they-are-able-to-escape.-is-everything-in-their-world-a-simulation%2C-or-is-some-of-it-real.-really-interested-in-seeing-more!-great-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-sad-story!-i%E2%80%99m-wondering-if-the-character-is-really-alone-and-going-through-all-of-this%2C-or-if-there-is-a-plot-twist.-really-interested-to-see-where-this-goes!-great-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/those-chickens-are-adorable.-the-chickens-shells-breaking-right-after-they-have-stood-against-their-bullies-a-really-great-idea.-good-job! 2021-11-09 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/extremely-imaginative-way-of-exploring-how-to-deal-with-the-very-critical-issue-of-bullying.--my-one-question-is-how-does-dancing-fit-into-demarcus%2Fshakes-life%3F--is-it-random-as-you-say-in-one-of-your-beats%2C-or-has-dancing-always-a-part-of-life-that-helps-him-deal-with-the-stress-of-being-bullied%3F--- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wonderful-job-creating-a-story-that-changes-across-the-major-beats-of-you-story-spine.--it%E2%80%99s-very-clear-how-things-change-at-the-beginning-from-the-dog-and-cat-working-alone-to-them-working-together-at-the-end.--one-question-i-had-was-how-does-ben-kujo-get-out-of-%E2%80%9Cprison%E2%80%9D-so-he-can-team-up-with-the-cat%3F--also%2C-is-that-where-he-learns-about-the-importance-of-teaming-up%3F-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-also-really-enjoyed-your-drawings.--they-complemented-each-beat-of-your-story-spine-very-nicely.--one-question-i-had-was-what-would-you-say-is-the-moral-of-the-story%3F--would-it-be-something-related-to-the-importance-of-being-yourself-and-pursuing-your-dreams%3F-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-they-have-a-school-for-people-with-superpowers.-i-wonder-why-the-school-is-called-lass.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-drawings 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-both-the-drawings-and-story-and-i-love-learning-more-about-her- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-a-very-good-story-line%2C-i-like-how-they-came-together-at-the-end.-i-do-wonder-how-they-found-out-that-the-other-bad-creatures-in-the-forest-were-enemies.-i-also-have-some-ideas%2C-i-think-you-should-include-the-dad-and-mason-being-more-closer-instead-of-distant.-i-think-you-should-also-add-some-more-detail-in-between-when-they-were-fighting-and-wanting-to-start-a-war-with-the-mushrooms-to-when-they-came-together-to-fight-the-enemy-race-because-i-feel-like-there-is-a-gap.-overall%2C-the-story-is-very-good.-great-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-it-so-interesting-that-her-reflection-was-free.-each-drawing-adds-to-the-story-and-has-so-much-meaning.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it's-really-good-i-like-the-background-sounds-you-used-like-the-banging-on-the-door. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing-style.-like-the-black-and-white-and-the-main-character-have-some-color-and-also-great-story.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-character-design!-i-also-love-the-addition-of-music-in-the-background.-i-think-it-would-be-easier-to-follow-if-the-narrating-was-more-spread-out-and-if-there-was-a-clearer-ending.-i-think-that-the-plot-idea-is-great-and-i'm-excited-to-see-how-it-ends! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-drawings-because-it-goes-along-with-the-story-and-they-match-whats-happening! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-made-the-character-stand-out-with-color-and-great-story- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-absolutely-love-the-art!-i-wonder-how-nuri-was-able-to-touch-the-water-in-the-beginning-when-they-fell-in%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing-style- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-were-great.-can-you-add-more-details-to-explain%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-take-of-the-story-but-facial-expressions-i-think-would-help 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-idea-but-i-wish-there-where-actual-drawings-of-the-characters-and-not-a-program-that-had-pre-set-options-to-create-the-characters 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/terrific-idea%2C-and-very-clear-major-beats-for-story-spine.--i-really-enjoyed-how-your-drawings-completed-each-of-your-beats.--one-question-i-had-was%2C-is-there-something-that-happened-in-carl%E2%80%99s-life-that-made-the-shadow-karl-reveal-himself-to-his-new-friend%3F--well-done.-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-start!-the-concept-is-really-interesting%2C-i'm-wondering-if-animals-are-considered-mythical-creatures-in-that-world.-i-would-love-to-see-what-happens-next%2C-looking-forward-to-seeing-it!- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-drawings-and-clear-story.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--the-drawings-and-the-overall-layout-of-the-story- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-art-is-totally-cool!-the-lighting-and-shading-works-really-well-and-helped-me-picture-the-story-you-were-telling!-i-thought-it-was-really-neat!-i'm-a-little-confused-by-how-the-flowers-are-alive%2C-and-the-story-does-feel-%22familiar%22-to-me%2C-so-maybe-there-can-be-more-elaboration-and-more-story-to-come-along-later!-either-way%2C-i-think-this-is-awesome%2C-and-can't-wait-to-see-what-happens-next! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-style-and-i-think-that-sybil-has-a-great-character-arc.-i-think-that-some-more-details-could-make-the-story-more-cohesive.-i'm-excited-to-see-how-it-turns-out! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings-maybe-make-em-a-lil-cleaner-but-idk-if-thats-your-style-either-way-theyre-nice.-also-very-interested-on-whats-going-to-happen-after-because-it-cut-of-when-the-cat-sent-out-a-shock-wave.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-amazing-story-with-a-very-good-plot-i-like-it-a-lot-i-just-wish-there-where-more-expressions-shown-on-evans-face 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-storyline!-i'd-love-if-you'll-be-able-to-add-more-motion-to-the-pictures.-and%2C-your-art-looks-great!- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-art-and-i-love-the-story-so-far!-i-get-really-excited-when-we-start-a-new-week-with-pixar-and-i-like-to-look-for-this-story-because-it-is-very-interesting 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/pretty-interesting-about-how-people-thought-he-was-useless-but-then-found-a-purpose 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-first-part-was-clear-and-we-could-follow-the-story.-i-was-a-little-confused-at-the-end.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-it-gives-me-anime-vibes 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-i-think-the-drawings-are-really-nice 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story!-i-think-the-audio-could-use-fixing%2C-but-overall-good-job!-i-also-like-how-the-color-put-emphasis-on-the-character. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-music-and-the-background-gives-me-a-smile-when-i-watch-it.-i-can-watch-this-over-and-over-again-lol. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-art-is-really-cute%2C-but-i'm-definitely-sort-of-confused-as-to-why-they're-on-a-boat-in-the-first-place-and-why-the-main-character-became-a-narwhal.-hopefully-this-is-stuff-that-can-be-elaborated-on-in-the-future!-either-way%2C-i-like-the-premise-so-far%2C-and-i'm-excited-to-see-where-the-story-goes-from-there! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/drawings-and-explanations-were-clear.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-picture-are-telling-the-story%2C-its-like-if-there-was-no-words-i-will-still-know-what's-going-on.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-liam-can-only-see-the-monster 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-he-has-relatable-feelings- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/story-seems-like-you-took-a-lot-of-time-good-job 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawings-and-the-story-is-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawings-and-the-story-is-nice 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-vary-interesting 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-kinda-dark-in-a-way 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-your-whole-story.-i-wonder-what-you-were-trying-to-say-because-it-cut-off-at-the-end. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was--that-he-wants-human-rights.-i-wonder-why-you-added-all-your-pictures-after-you-were-done-talking-because-talking-over-specific-pictures-helps-me-understand. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-your-character-is-shown-through-many-different-bodies-and-faces.-there-were-animations-of-harper%2C-kind-of-manga-drawings-of-harper%2C-girly-and-mature-drawings-of-harper-(i-mean-no-offense).-it-was-really-cool-to-see-that.-different-perspectives-of-the-same-girl-with-the-same-internal-features-but-different-external-features.-there-was-no-step-i-didn't-understand%2C-and-the-story-was-going-very-smoothly.-i-totally-wanted-to-see-what-would-happen-when-harper-opened-the-email.-(kind-of-got-mad).-well-done!! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-your-character-is-shown-through-many-different-bodies-and-faces.-there-were-animations-of-harper%2C-kind-of-manga-drawings-of-harper%2C-girly-and-mature-drawings-of-harper-(i-mean-no-offense).-it-was-really-cool-to-see-that.-different-perspectives-of-the-same-girl-with-the-same-internal-features-but-different-external-features.-there-was-no-step-i-didn't-understand%2C-and-the-story-was-going-very-smoothly.-i-totally-wanted-to-see-what-would-happen-when-harper-opened-the-email.-(kind-of-got-mad).-well-done!! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-character-has-a-fear-of-going-to-the-moon-(your-crisis-is-shown-very-early)%2C-and-also-the-fact-that-your-character-is-happy-but-is-lonely-in-the-lab.-how-can-she-be-happy-if-she-is-alone%3F-i-like-that.-there-was-nothing-to-critique-on-the-steps%2C-your-minor-beats-went-along-perfectly-with-your-major-beats.-well-done!! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/why-does-the-mayor-ban-music%3F-the-story-line-is-a-bit-confusing.-i-think-you-should-spend-less-time-creating-a-backstory-for-your-character-and-more-time-working-on-your-story.-5%2F10 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-really-good-but-maybe-you-can-add-a-little-more-detail 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-brother-has-character-development-so-it-makes-us-feel-bad-about-the-death-i-cant-wait--to-see-next 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-realistic-the-story-is-at-the-beginning-and-the-cliffhanger. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoyed-how-your-team-included-everyone.-the-storytelling-was-good-and-so-were-the-drawings. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-music-and-i-think-the-plants-are-a-good-idea- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-but-i-couldn't-really-hear-what-you-were-saying. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-storyline-and-the-characters.-i-would-say-don't-jump-in-different-places- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-storytelling.-maybe-next-time%2C-when-you-are-talking-add-more-pictures.-%3A) 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-was-he-was-being-nice-but-no-one-cared-he-gave-compliments-but-it-was-confusing-most-of-the-time. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-it-kinda-reminds-me-of-ours-for-some-reason-but-its-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-intresting-about-your-story-its--if-we-didn't-have-school-and-they-teach-people.-it-was-kinda-hard-to-under-stand-you-guys-but-is-ok 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-elwen-is-a-witch.--i-understand-the-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-he-can't-let-go-of-the-shark-tooth-necklace.--why-couldn't-he-let-go-of-the-shark-tooth-necklace%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-only-liam-can-see-the-monster.--i-understand-the-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-artwork-a-lot.-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-direction-that-it-took.-at-first%2C-it-was-a-completely-normal-story.-a-story-that-was-depicting-the-life-of-a-girl-and-then-it-took-a-huge-turn.-that's-what-i-like-most-about-this-story.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/darn-looks-like-a-great-story-but-i-can't-hear-your-vocals.-make-sure-you-check-your-submission-before-you-upload-next-time.-if-you-email-help%40storyxperiential.com-we-can-replace-this-with-a-fixed-version. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-that-the-dad-died-when-sybil-was-only-12.--why-wasn't-sybil-grateful-for-her-family%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-good-but..ive'-already-seen-this-story-before.-you-should-check-out-the-video%2C-it's-called-%22nick-change%22.-maybe-add-more-detail%2C-kinda-like-they-did.---- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-the-best-story-ive-seen-its-so-interesting-and-creative 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-like!-it's-good! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-your-character-and-your-picture 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-music-i-think-the-plant-rights-idea-is-good. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/unisaur-is-a-very-cool-name.-i-feel-like-when-you-took-the-pictures-you-could-of-put-it-on-the-table--and-used-your-phone-or-something.-that-way-you-wouldn't-get-to-much-extra-background-and-no-fingers. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story%2C-and-i-think-that-it-is-your-what-if-question-is-interesting.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-detailed-the-artwork-is-and-you-spoke-very-clear- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up--wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up--wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up--wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up--wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up--wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up--wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up--wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up--wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/etgvnwow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/yo-this-is-the-absolute-funniest-stryline-ive-ever-seen-you-have-my-total-support-on-this-bro- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting%2C-want-to-hear-more. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/we-do-have-a-back-story%2C-it-will-be-around-act-2-or-3-though.-%3A)--the-creators 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-concept-and-idea-of-the-story! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it-was-a-great-story-but-you-can-improve-a-bit 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-nice-but-maybe-add-some-detail 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings%2C-animation%2C-flat-color%2C-and-sound-effects.-and-i-see-how-you-really-have-the-capabilities-of-making-this-visually-really-great.-however%2C-your-story-is-kind-of-weak.-i-need-more-details-about-why-he-conquers%2C-and-how-he-came-about.-think-about-inbetweens-that-help-move-the-story-along.-i-also-am-unsure-where-the-problem-comes-in%3F-it-seems-too-perfect%2C-and-like-your-main-character-has-no-flaws.-one-idea-might-be-to-use-building-the-school%2C-and-the-problems-that-might-come-with-it%2C- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-title-says-%22-the-day-we-change%22-though-i-don't-really-see-the-characters-changing.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-story-is-interesting-and-has-potential- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-story-is-very-interesting.-my-favorite-thing-is-the-idea-of-childsville.-i-think-this-story-has-a-lot-of-potential. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-details-and-it-sounds-interesting- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it's-good-but-can-you-speak-a-little-faster-so-we-can-hear-the-rest- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-really-liked-about-your-story-was-that-this-is-the-future-and-basically-it's-a-robot-takeover.-that's-really-cool-and-clever.-keep-up-the-good-work. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art.-the-story-seems-well-thought-out.-im-excited-for-what-happens-next!! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-you-should-add-more-detail-to-the-story-line 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/so-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-storyline!-i-think-you-should-add-a-bit-more-details-to-the-story-though--lilly-the-art-work-is-really-well-done-but-i-think-you-needed-to-manage-more-time-to-actually-develop-the-story-a-lot-more.-it's-really-good-though!---maya 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/some-feedback-i-have-is-that-the-music-is-kind-of-loud-so-its-hard-to-hear-the-person-that's-speaking. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing's-and-i-didn't-really-understand 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-couldn't-hear-anything 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-you-tell-your-character 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-there-is-room-for-drawing-improvement-and-maybe-make-it-more-interesting 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-work-in-this.-can't-wait-to-see-more! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/hi-maya%2Cdexter%2Clill%2Cizzy-i-love-it-the-art-work-is-10%2F10-also-same-with-the-story-line- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-really-nice-and-its-a-interesting-story 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i'm-getting-a-cool-anime-vibe-from-the-story-so-far.-the-art-is-fantastic.-something-i-think-you-can-improve-on-is-how-much-information-is-within-act-one. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story!-maybe-you-can-add-more-detail-but-it-is-great-so-far. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/make-a-better-backstory.-good-art-good-concept.-8%2F10 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-good-but-some-of-you-guys-were-just-talking-a-little-to-fast-but-it-was-good-good-job. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-most-found-interesting-is-the-drawings.-i-really-like-your-story-too!-i'm-excited-to-see-how-this-turns-out!! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-line-is-very-cool%2C-i-think-this-story-is-going-to-come-out-very-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/some-advice-i-have-is-try-to-make-the-storytelling-a-bit-smoother-and-talk-in-more-detail 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art!-it's-really-great.-however%2C-i-wish-that-we-saw-more-of-the-in-between's-of-the-story-in-images.-maybe-showing-mayoko-finding-something-that-triggered-the-body-swap.--other-then-that%2C-the-storyline-could-use-some-work.-we-have-the-basic-outlines-of-what-the-story-is-about%2C-now-we-want-to-see-more-of-what-caused-the-next-things-to-happen.-i-really-see-how-this-could-be-a-really-great-story%2C-i-just-want-to-see-more-so-i-can-better-understand-what-is-happening. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-the-main-character-but-i-think-you-could-add-more-detail-to-the-setting-and-maybe-explain-why-he-is-the-way-he-is-more. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-love-the-art-work--%3A3-its-not-good-story-line-it-is-a-awesome-story-line-keep-it-up-%3A)-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-ti's-really-good-but-you-should-try-drawing-them-because-i-think-you-just-got-it-off-a-website-called-picrew.-the-voiceover-is-good-but-i-think-you-could-do-better. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings.-although-i-think-you-can-focus-more-on-the-story-because-i-see-a-lot-of-the-drawings.-maybe-you-can-add-why-her-and-her-brother-had-to-switch-bodies.-and-what-happens-next. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-line-and-your-character-seems-very-developed.-i-would-be-more-specific-with-your-ideas%2C-and%2C-and-try-not-to-jump-to-different-places-in-your-story-so-quickly.-otherwise%2C-you-guys-did-a-great-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-really-good-overall%2C-however-it-could-use-improvement.-what-i-mean-is-mostly-speech.-it'll-help-if-you-could-speak-up-more-so-we-can-understand-what-your-saying-better. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/decent 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-baseline-but-i-would-it-would-be-more-interesting-if-you-added-more--events- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/last-part-got-cut-off 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story.-it's-pretty-interesting.--but-what-exactly-will-the-magic-milk-do%3F-just-something-to-think-about. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it!- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it-but-i'm-confused-about-what-is-happening-can--you-tell-more-details-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-concept-of-the-story-it-sounds-very-intresting 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-has-room-to-develop-but-there-is-good-potential.-but-it's-very-boring-and-needs-work.-also-more-in-the-drawings-would-be-good-because-they-look-a-little-rushed 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story-but-i-did-not-get-to-hear-the-rest-because-it-sounded-like-you-wanted-to-say-more-but-it's-ok- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/add-a-backstory.--good-drawings. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-drawings.-i-think-they-are-really-cool!-i-also-think-you-should-focus-on-the-story-more.-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-very-nice 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-detail-and-hard-work-you-have-put-into-this-film. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-is-a-very-good-story%2C-maybe-add-some-detail%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-detailed-the-flower-and-i-like-how-the-story-is 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/noice-story%2C-and-great-artwork!-why-did-he-have-to-steal-stuff%3F-just-cuz%2C-or-he-had-to%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-interesting-and-has-an-interesting-character-i-also-love-the-art-work-and-think-whoever-drew-it-is-very-talented 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-your-act-1-of-your-story.-maybe-you-could-explain-more-about-this-ren-character.-also-this-reminds-me-a-lot-about-avatar. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-so-far-but-i-think-you-could-add-more-detail-to-the-character.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/is-shows-this-saddness-so-i-hope-thats-what-you-where-going-for-but-thats-what-it-makes-me-feel 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-nice-job-addison-it-has-a-good-base-storyline.-keep-it-up- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/woah!-its-super-good!-i-like-the-drawings.-i-think-you-could-maybe-add-a-bit-more-of-the-draws-though.-also--i-think-the-audio-couldv'e-been-a-bit-louder.-but-other-than-that-i-really-like-it! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-she-turned-into-a-narwhal.-the-drawing-a-really-good-as-well-i-am-a-bit-confused--why-they-are-on-a-boat.-maybe-you-can-explain-a-bit-why-they-were-on-the-boat. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-in-depth-alex's-feelings-are.-for-example-his-struggle-to-find-happiness%2C-grumpy%2C-lonely%2C-and-happy. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-pictures-looked-very-interesting-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-drawings-is-very-amazing 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story-and-your-drawings-are-great! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story-good-backstory.-maybe-louder-voice%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-you-plot-line-and-your-drawings-are-great!-maybe-you-could-give-more-information-about-what-happened-in-the-store%2C-it-kinda-just-jumped-forward-and-ended-the-scene-without-any-information-about-it.-i-really-like-your-story%2C-it's-great! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-really-good-there-could-be-more-drawings-because-there-are-only-a-few-but-the-voiceover-is-really-good-and-easy-to-hear. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-very-good-and-i-like-how-the-character-developes- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/noice-story%2C-does-chowder-ever-know-these-creatures%3F- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it-was-good-but-can-you-speak-louder 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-should-add-more-information-about-the-story-into-the-film. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loveeee-the-story-line-and-the-drawings-are-the-best! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-and-its-detailed-but-i-couldnt-understand-what-you-were-saying-because-of-the-music- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-boy-steals-stuff-and-then-sells-it-the-a-pawn-shop%2C-but-why-does-he-still%3F-does-he-need-the-extra-money%3F- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-jest-a-little-confused--about-what-your-story-is-about-so-more-back-story-would-be-nice-but-other-then-that-its-good. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ok%2C-i-love-this.-the-drawings%2C-the-story%2C-and-the-fairy-tale-type-of-magic.-and-while-this-all-makes-me-wonder-what--is-going-to-happen-next%2C-i-wish-there-where-more-drawings%2Fimagery.-this-would-help-me-better-visualize-what-is-happening-during-this-story.--or-in-other-words%2C-help-the-images-go-just-a-smoothly-as-the-story-line.-can't-wait-to-see-what-is-going-to-happen-to-the-greedy-donkey-next! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-amazing- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/need-more-in-the-story.-more-drawing-detail-would-be-good-as-well. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-the-story-and-how-he-meets-others-after-he-is-lonely-for-awhile 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-great-i-liked-how-he-was-different-from-people.-he-had-a-good-character-development- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-but-can-you-add-more-details-on-what's-happening- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-really-good-and-well-done.-some-of-the-people-could-be-better-instead-of-shadows.-the-talking-is-clear-but-it-was-quiet-so-i-had-to-turn-the-volume-way-up. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-good-but-maybe-add-like-a-title-or-something-so-the-viewer-kind-of-knows-what-is-happening.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-additional-music-touch-is-great%3B-and-your-voice-is-audible%2C-one-recommendation-is-lowering-the-volume--but-overall-awesome-job. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-very-bland-and-there-is-a-lot-of-room-for-improvement.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/noice-story!-did-congress-ever-respond-to-the-letter%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-images-look.-you-did-good-on-the-detail. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story-and-drawings-are-incredible- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/why-was-mason-sad- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story.-i-love-the-drawings-and-the-details-in-the-drawings 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/why-does-he-not-like-his-job-and-how-did-he-find-the-job 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-witch-main-character-is-cool-and-i-like-the-story-so-far.-i-think-you-should-add-more-detail-to-the-main-character-and-the-setting. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-and-the-story-looks-interesting 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-story--and-the-drawing%2C-and-that-they-have-the-same-problem 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-drwaing-and-i-love-the-realistic-story-line 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-how-detailed-the-pictures-were!-the-audio-could-be-better-it's-kinda-hard-to-hear-but-it-looks-amazing!-i-think-how-you-did-the-angles-was-sooo-cool!! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/uhuh-very-cool 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-whole-concept-so-far.-the-art-work-is-amazing!!-i-cant-wait-to-see-what-happens-next. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story-and-drawings- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your--story-and-your-drawings!-it-is-very-cool-to-see-how-detailed-and-interesting-your-drawings-are!-i-would-say-that-maybe-you-can-talk-more-about-how-the-narwhals-talk%2C-and-if-she-could-talk-as-a-narwhal.-i-really-like-your-story! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-cool-that-alex-took-time-to-relax-and-not-worry 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/frem-really-frem-out-of-anything-in-the-world-frem 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-alex-is-very-quiet-but-their-family-is-really-loud. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-is-vary-good. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/increadible-story.-but-you-could-add-more-backstory 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-is-the-over-all-of-your-story-it-does-not-really-make-sense.-and-also-the-last-clip-does-not-make-sense-to-me- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-it-isn't-about-a-human-and-it's-about-something-that-is-extinct.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/drawings-are-amazing-great-story- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-drawings-are-great-and-very-detailed- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-great-start-for-your-story-but-one-thing-i'd-add-would-be-finishing-the-sentence-because-it-cut-off-at-the-end.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-and-the-execution-of-it-is-really-well-done 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-multiple-people-can-relate-to-the-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-art-is-really-neat%2C-and-the-digital-(%3F)-traditional-combo-is-awesome--great-job-%3A) 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-act-one-story-and-i-think-the-character-is-really-relatable 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-pictures-are-cool-and-interesting 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-act-one-story-script-love-the-drawings-too-%3A) 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-daily-routine.-and-maybe-make-it-more-interesting-this-story-seems-kind-of-boring- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-the-plot.-i-like-what-he-learns-too! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-is-really-good-because-a-lot-of-people-can-relate-with-it. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-line%2C-but-maybe-you-could-add-more-detail-about-what-exactly-alex-is-distancing-themselves-from%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-of-all%2C-i-just-have-to-mention-the-artwork.-it's-the-best-artwork-that-i've-seen-so-far.-the-use-of-shading-and-visual-perspective-is-amazing.-it's-also-a-really-unique-story-that-uses-an-extremely-common-trope%2C-which-i-happen-to-find-super-cool-and-super-interesting.-the-pacing-was-also-done-really-well.-i-would-watch-this-if-it-was-an-actual-movie-and-i-really-want-to-see-what-happens-next-in-the-story-and-if-it's-going-to-use-the-common-trope-of-a-character-abandoning-everything-it-ever-knew-for-just-one-thing%2Fperson.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-the-most-from-your-story-is-that-description-of-your-character-and-how-she's-by-herself-at-her-new-school.-i-think-your-drawings-could-have-more-clear.-i-also-like-how-she-finds-a-magical-aisle-and-gets-the-milk%2C-i-wonder-what-will-happen-next!- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-flows-nicely%2C-and-the-protagonist's-character-develops-nicely.-i-feel-strongly-as-though-the-ending-could-be-much-more-interesting-though-if-the-mother-also-received-similar-character-development.-since-sybil's-diagnosis-is-mentioned%2C-maybe-her-mother-can-be-diagnosed-with-some-kind-of-substance-abuse-disorder...%3F-i-understand-that-the-mother-is-not-supposed-to-be-very-likable%2C-but-she-feels-pretty-one-dimensional-and-i-feel-like-she-could-be-fleshed-out-or-developed-more.-i-think-the-ending-might-be-more-satisfying-if-all-characters-affected-by-the-main-conflict-(father's-death)-could-heal-or-have-some-happy-ending.-it-doesn't-really-feel-completely-resolved-to-me-at-all-if-only-sybil-gets-help.-it-still-leaves-me-to-wonder-about-the-mom.-perhaps-other-directions-can-be-explored-though---the-mom-doesn't-have-to-be-just-as-likable-and-developed-as-the-protagonist%2C-but-i-think-she-should-be-more-likable.-overall%2C-the-story-is-nice-and-appealing.-i-am-quite-interested-in-it. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-super-cool.-the-story-was-super-interesting.-what-could-be-more-clear-about--the-story-is-talking-about-her-relationships- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-it-was-very-intriguing.-i-would-recommend-that-you-take-the-music-off-because-i-could-not-really-hear-what-was-being-said.-i-would-recommend-that-you-zoom-out-so-that-we-can-see-the-whole-picture.-i-am-excited-to-see-where-your-story-goes.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-your-drawings-i-like-that-you-set-it-in-the-past.-your-delima--in-the-story-is-really-clear-i-like-it-. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-your-story-is-very-suspenseful.-i-think-that-you-could-have-made-more-in-depth-drawings.-i-think-that-you-should've-gone-more-in-depth.-i-think-that-you-story-will-go-together-great! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-really-like-the-drawings-and-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-expressions-work-really-well-in-conveying-the-emotions. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-plot-is-about-rejection%2C-when-you-say-he-gets-a-b%2B-right-after-he-stacks-blocks-it-makes-me-think-that-he-got-a-b%2B-because-he-was-stacking-blocks.-im-exited-to-see-this-story-grow! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story.-you-did-a-good-job 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-here-very-creative-i-really-like-the-theme-also-about-an-strounant-i-really-like-this-nice-job 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-should-stop-focusing-on-the-drawings-and-focus-on-the-story-because-the-story-is-pretty-confusing-and-it-looks-like-you-cared-about-the-quality-of-your-drawing-more-than-the-quality-of-your-story.-i-think-you-should-focus-on-giving-the-characters-a-more-deep-backstory-so-that-we-could-understand-the-story-more.-also%2C-what-causes-the-siblings-to-switch-bodies%3F-i'm-curious-to-learn-more-about-this-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-really-like-the-drawings-and-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-make-sure-to-turn-off-the-music%3F-despite-that%2C-your-voice-is-very-clear%2C-and-the-visuals-are-really-cleanly-done%2C-and-more-than-do-their-job.-the-main-character's-struggle-is-really-interesting%2C-i-like-this! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-is-nice-and-the-art-is-good.-the-story-makes-me-think-deeper-abnout-reality. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-i-really-like-the-drawing-here-it-is-very-creative-i-love-your-theme-very-good- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-really-like-the-drawings-and-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-video-just-cut-off-at-the-end%2C-so-i-couldn't-hear-everything.-anyways%2C-the-artwork-is-cool.-i-like-it-a-lot.-what-i-found-confusing-were-the-differences-of-the-mutated-animals-that-carried-viruses-with-them-and-the-apocalypse.-did-the-virus%2C-which-caused-all-of-these-animals-to-mutate%2C-also-cause-the-apocalypse%2C-or-is-the-apocalypse-completely-separate-from-the-virus-and-mutated-animals%3F-this-is-left-a-bit-unclear-in-my-opinion.-besides-that%2C-the-story-is-very-good-and-so-far%2C-i'm-liking-the-direction-that-you're-currently-taking-with-it.-i-am-wondering-if-this-%22secret%2Fhidden-city%22-holds-other-survivors%2C-or-not.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-your-plot-and-the-drawing-where-very-good-i-only-have-good-things-to-say-about-this-short. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-art-and-i-thought-your-story-was-really-thought-out-well-and-meaningful.--maybe-add-a-bit-more-context-about-her-depression-because-i-think-that-would-be-nice-for-people-to-relate-to-if-that-makes-sense. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-well-made%2C-but-the-narrator-was-speaking-really-quiet%2C-so-it-was-hard-to-hear. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawings-super-clear.-i-like-your-idea-about-using-the-color-yellow-for-his-hair-to-tell-the-difference-between-him-and-the-other-kids.-love-your-ideas-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-danny%2C-but-if-he-could-print-money-and-do-crazy-things-and-showed-them-to-people%2C-how-would-they-react%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-concept.-it-got-cut-off-though-so-i-couldn't-hear-the-full-story.-maybe-try-to-choose-a-different-title-because-it-is-titled-%22what-if-there-were-no-schools%22-when-its-about-making-a-school.-i-do-like-the-creativity-though. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-really-like-the-drawings-they-are-really-cool 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-video%2C-your-drawings-and-story-is-very-good.-i-would-recommend-that-you-say-who-your-characters-are-and-their-story.-i-would-appreciate-that-you-point-out-what-the-bad-guy-is-literally-or-figuateraly.-i-am-excited-to-see-where-your-story-goes.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-here-it-is-very-creative-and-really-nice-drawings-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-are-lovely%2C-it-really-brings-the-story-to-life! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-twist-at-the-end-was-really-unexpected%2C-i'm-excited-to-see-where-this-story-goes-next.-the-art-here-is-lovely%2C-and-does-a-lot-of-effective-less-is-more-visual-communication.good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-looks-really-cool.-the-art-style-is-also-amazingly-well-done-for-something-so-simply-drawn.-the-only-criticism-i-have-is-that-it-goes-by-a-little-too-fast. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-creative-art-i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-here-it-is-very-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-plot.-but-the-pictures-are-very-blurry.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-and-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-i-really-like-the-dept-of-thougth-here-it-is-very-creative- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting-idea%2C-i-am-looking-forward-to-the-other-parts-of-our-story%2C-but-i-also-your-complex-characters.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-and-the-character's-motive-and-morals.-i-also-think-you-did-the-character-design-really-well-and-i-was-wondering-if-you-could-add-farming-and-angles-to-add-to-the-character-and-their-actions 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-say-that-the-school-is-for-people-like-him%2C-who-are-people-like-him%3F-what-does-lass-stand-for%3F-why-is-it-important%3F-why-does-he-teleport%3F-is-he-special-or-does-everyone-do-that%3F-if-the-school-is-for-people-with-powers-why-would-he-get-bullied%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-sketches-were-good-and-thats-why-it-didnt-need-much-explaining-and-so-i-really-liked-your-art-and-how-it-showed-your-story 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-be-a-little-bit-more-specific-with-your--ideas-and-maybe-be-a-bit-more-detailed-with-your-script-.-i-love-your-drawings--super-clear-drawings-.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-colors-you-used.-the-plot-seems-good-and-i-really-like-the-animation. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ithe-story-is-good%2C-and-the-art-is-nice.-it-also-makes-me-wonder-how-this-world-would-be 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-could-be-better-in-my-opinion.-besides-that%2C-the-story-is-very-good%2C-cool%2C-and-interesting.-i-would-actually-watch-this-if-it-existed.-i'm-also-assuming-that-this-story-is-using-the-common-trope-where-a-person-finds-something-that-makes-their-life-so-much-easier%2C-but-the-item-has-a-cost%2C-or-a-downside-to-it.-i'm-wondering-if-that-common-trope-will-take-place-in-this-story.-i-also-found-it-a-bit-weird-that-the-kid-just-had-a-bullet-proof-glass-case-lying-around-in-his-bedroom.-of-course%2C-he-could've-bought-it-just-then%2C-but-still%2C-it-is-a-bit-weird.-also%2C-just-because-the-glass-case-would-be-hard-to-break%2C-doesn't-mean-that-it-could-easily-be-stolen.-someone-could-just-grab-the-case-and-run.-although%2C-i-do-wonder-who-stole-it-and-why.-the-story-is-very-interesting%2C-i'll-give-you-that-and-the-pacing-is-also-done-really-well.-for-example%2C-you-gave-several-instances-where-the-hat-had-helped-the-kid%2C-which-was-nice.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/these-are-good-drawings.-the-villain-good-be-clearer.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-good-for-multiple-people%2C-as-you-can-tell-different-parts-are-drawn-by-other-people%2C-it-stays-consistent.--for-the-character%2C-it-works-out-well-how-she-has-a-hard-time-trusting-others-because-of-her-mother.-i-hope-it-comes-out-well 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-of-the-houses-and-the-description-of-the-main-character.-in-the-scene-where-joe-is-driving-next-to-the-gas-station%2C-the-drawing-of-the-gas-station-isn't-really-there.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-very-creative-idea!-it-looks-like-it-will-lead-to-a-great-story%2C-although-it-does-need-a-little-more-explanation-of-what-is-happening-during-the-scene-where-he-goes-into-a-portal-or-how-he-goes-into-it. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-really-interesting%2C-but-i-want-to-know-more-about-why-the-animals-leave.-other-than-that%2C-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/oh-my-gosh--i-love-this-concept-already-i'm-pretty-sure-that-we-were-only-supposed-to-do-the-first-three-prompts.-i'm-exited-to-see-this-story-grow 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-art-and-the-most-interesting-part-i-thought-was-the-overall-world-she-lives-in.-maybe-add-a-bit-more-context-of-why-they-would-be-mad-at-her-for-losing-the-gem-if-its-a-mistake.--why-is-it-so-important%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-did-a-very-good-job-in-general%2C-i-like-the-artwork-and-everything.-maybe-next--time-speak-up-a-little-bit-or-be-in-a-more-quieter-area-but-other-than-that-very-good-job.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-idea!-why-did-they-ban-electronics%3F-was-it-because-of-the-excessive-use-of-it-in-society%3F-what-about-the-benifits-of-electronics-that-will-no-longer-be-usable%3F- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-storyline-and--the-way-it-fits-together%2C-but-the-art-could-use-a-little-more-effort%2C 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/superior!-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-drawings-and-super-fun-it-is-super-fun-and-sad-i-love-your-idea-and-super-clear-and-i-love-your-message.-your-can-really-tell-who-is-who-even-though-all-the-orangutans-look-the-same-you-could-really-tell-your-story.-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-to-very-interesting-character's%2C-very-interested-to-see-how-your-story-will-affect-their-relationship- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-to-very-interesting-character's%2C-very-interested-to-see-how-your-story-will-affect-their-relationship- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-it-but-you-could-have-added-more-detail. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-and-how-it-flows-i-just-think-that-because-the-art-is-inconsistent-it-doesnt-flow-as-much-as-it-could%2C-and-i-would-also-say-maybe-a-louder-voice-when-your-explaining-your-story-and-art-please. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-each-frame-and-how-they're-so-well-done.-i-couldnt-really-hear-the-story-itself-because-of-the-speed-but-i-think-the-boarding-did-a-lot-of-the-explaining-which-was-really-nice 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-seems-like-it'll-be-interesting%2C-but-i-didn't-understand-how-all-the-bees-suddenly-disappeared.-what-happened-to-them%3F-other-than-that%2C-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-and-the-story.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-story%2C-it-helps-bring-real-world-problems-into-the-world-by-making-bees-disappear.-it-could-be-improved-by-going-more-into-depth-about-how-bee's-just-disappeared%2C-or-is-that-maybe-the-conflict%3F- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story%2C-i-think-that-it-will-have-lots-of-excitement.-i-think-that-your-drawings-could've-been-expanded-on-more%2C-by-adding-more-detail.-i-think-that-you-should-have-less-going-on-it-the-story%2C-i-found-that-it-was-hard-to-keep-track-of-what-order-everything-is-going-on.-i-think-that-your-story-will-be-really-suspenseful-. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-obsessed-to-your-drawing%2C-you-are-a-very-good-artist.-i-would-recommend-that-you-go-more-into-why-they-can't-be-with-the-other-elements.-i-recommend-that-you-should-talk-about-you-character-more.-i-am-obsessed-to-your-story%2C-i-am-very-intrigued. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-plot.--and-found-it-all-very-intresting. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-there-was-a-magical-isle-and-the-milk-that-she-bought-from-that-specific-isle-just-disappeared.-i-find-this-to-be-very%2C-very-interesting%2C-as-there's-a-lot-that-you-could-do-with-that.-i'm-also-wondering-how-this-magical-isle-will-tie-in-to-the-girl's-hard-life.-the-art-is-also-pretty-nice.-also%2C-i'm-wondering-if-the-%22until-one-day%22-part%2C-was-the-magical-isle-with-the-milk.-this-wasn't-clear.-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-and-the-story-is-super-interesting.-maybe-add-a-little-more-about-the-relationship-with-her-and-her-mother.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-beong-friends-with-multiple-buterflies.-i-think-he-really-need-more-to-help-him-with-the-buterflies. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-idea-a-lot%2C-your-drawings-are-great-too.-i-like-the-way-you-built-on-the-world-and-let-us-see-how-the-world-worked.-i-would-love-to-see-a-bit-more-character-building.-character-848-sounds-really-interesting%2C-but-what-about-847%3F-what-makes-him-feel-drawn-to-848%3F- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-is-a-cool-and-interesting-concept.-i-think-that-there-could-be-more-emphasis-on-the-moon-crash-or-the-space-ship-failing%2C-to-add-more-detail.-i'm-exited-tp-see-the-rest-of-the-story 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/omg-i-love-it-it-is-so-amazing-and-i-love-the-idea-it-is-super-fun-and-silly-.-the-drawings-are-simple-but-so-amazing-and-really-get-your-idea-across.-however-maybe-when-you-are-recording-your-audio-maybe-your-slow-down-a-bit-.-amazing-job-over-all-love-the-idea-and-animation-is-really-great. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-impressed-with-what-you-have-submitted%2C-i-really-like-what-your-character-is-going-through- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-religion-was-she-forced-to-believe%3F-what-did-she-believe%3F- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-you-could-maybe-add-more-of-a-conflict-but-i-think-you-did-a-great-job 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-art-and-the-way-you-contrast-some-characters-with-color-compared-to-their-greyish-blackish-setting-and-others-around-them.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-seems-interesting%2C-the-intro-to-the-character%2C-the-setting%2C-etc.-though-the-only-criticism-i-have-is-the-art-choice.-it's-inconsistent-and-messes-it-up-a-bit%2C-as-changing-from-one-style-to-the-other-is-weird.-so-i-would-say-try-to-keep-it-consistent.-other-than-that-small-issue%2C-its-great%2C 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-quite-nice. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-art-and-a-good-story%2C-like-everything-about-it 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story-about-siblings-switching-bodies.-i-wonder-if-there-will-be-more-context-about-the-sibling-dynamic-themselves.-i-also-love-the-character-designs-but-i-want-to-know-if-your-group-did-the-actual-storyboarding-and-where-that-is-so-we-could-see-the-action 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-fantastic%2C-but-the-art-styles-really-conflicted-with-each-other.-also%2C-the-story-was-very-easy-to-follow. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-act.-the-sketches-could-be-a-little-more-clear.-and-i-didn't-find-the-end-step-clear-if-that-makes-sense.-over-all-it-was-super-interesting.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-seems-like-it-will-be-very-interesting.-i'm-excited-to-see-what-will-happen-next 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i'm-very-intrigued-as-to-what-his-idea-is.-i-like-the-color-as-well.-maybe-talk-more-about-the-world-they-live-in.-why-is-his-idea-important%3F- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-artwork-and-the-use-of-the-story-board-panels.-i-think-that-the-way-you-paced-the-story-and-fleshed-it-out-was-done-very-well.-one-thing-that-i-don't-get-is-his-reasoning-for-trashing-his-parents'-stuff.-did-he-do-it-for-fun%2C-for-revenge%2C-or-because-he's-simply-a-bad-kid%3F-i-also-really-want-to-know-what-he-found-in-the-desert%2C-showing-that-i'm-very-interested-in-this-story.-another-thing-that-just-doesn't-seem-realistic-to-me-is-the-fact-that-his-parents-sent-him-faraway-to-a-random-desert.-what-kind-of-parents-would-do-that%3F-now-that-i-think-about-it%2C-it-is-very-common-for-parents-to-be-evil-to-their-children%2C-but-still%2C-it-is-a-bit-unrealistic.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-interesting%2C-and-the-art-is-well-done.-i-really-like-the-grey-backgrounds%2C-and-colors-with-low-saturation-on-the-characters.-the-warped-perspective-at-the-hallway-scene-is-very-cool%2C-and-i-love-how-the-world-just-warps-around-the-protagonist-(also-the-lockers-feel-like-they-are-looming-over-her-very-cool%2C-and-the-ceiling-light-that-shines-on-her-to-wow)%2C-i-really-feel-as-though-it-depicts-the-feeling-of-fear%2C-anxiety%2C-and-discomfort-very-well.-i-thought-the-reflection-thing-was-interesting%2C-and-this-is-pretty-nice-overall. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-can-put-in--more-effort-or-add-more-to-it.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-it-but-you-could-have-added-more-detail. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-a-magical-hat.-although-it-would-be-nice-to-know-does-this-hat-affect-the-main-character-socially-and-how-others-can-react-to-him-having-a-magical-hat.-this-could-lead-to-friends-and-rivalry-to-expand-emotions-towards-the-main-character-and-story-line. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-artwork-and-the-effort-you-put-into-it-maybe-next-time-take-away-the-music-in-the-background-because-it-makes-it-hard-to-hear-what-your-saying.-but-other-than-that- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-hard-to-understand-what-you-where-saying%2C-so-i-didn't-get-the-jist-of-it.-but-the-drawing-are-quite-nice- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting%2C-just-wondering-about-certain-aspects%2C-or-are-they-left-out-for-a-certain-purpose 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-everything-was-clear-to-me-on-how-the-story-worked%2C-i-would-hopefully-like-to-here-more- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-it-was-good.-but-maybe-you-could-have-added-color-and-the-drawing-were-unclear.-but-over-all-i-liked-it. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-the-main-characters-popularity-because-popularity-can-become-influence-to-do-things-that-aren't-right-i-just-think-that-you-need-touch-ups-on-what-cause-certain-scenes-like-why-the-car-swerved-or-what-influenced-him-to-drive-without-a-license 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-is-how-she-went-from-nothing-to-something. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-the-act-is-super-interesting.--maybe-add-a-more-clear-ending-to-the-act.-overall-i-think-the-art-was-super-nice. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-interesting-idea%2C-and-i-really-liked-the-drawings. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-made-the-drwings-but-you-could-add-color-but-overal-i-think-you-did-a-good-job 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-everything-was-clear-to-me-on-how-the-story-worked%2C-i-would-hopefully-like-to-here-more- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-well-narrated-and-put-together%2C-is-it-radioactive-milk%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-appreciate-that-you-spoke-at-a-good-level-and-had-not-music-in-the-back%2C-i-could-really-hear-what-you-said.-i-would-recommend-that-you-made-the-important-links-darker-because-it-looked-like-just-a-bunch-of-lines.-i-would-appreciate-that-you-did-not-go-into-very-detailed-points-just-the-minor-beats-to-make-the-story-better.-i-am-excited-to-see-where-your-story-goes.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-interesting-idea%2C-excited-to-see-what-comes-next!-maybe-add-more-detail-on-who-the-characters-are-that-want-to-leave%3F-why-do-they-want-to-leave%3F-what-will-the-owl-do-to-the-animals-that-want-to-leave%3F-how-has-he-become-their-sort-of-%22leader%22%3F- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-interesting%2C-but-i-didn't-understand-why-the-main-character-has-to-take-care-of-her-mom.-what-happened-to-her-mom-that-she-can't-take-care-of-herself%3F-other-than-that%2C-i-think-your-story-is-really-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea%2C-but-the-art-could-use-a-little-more-effort%2C-but-the-story-is-nice-and-realistic. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-everything-was-clear-to-me-on-how-the-story-worked%2C-i-would-hopefully-like-to-here-more- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-concept-of-switching-bodies-and-the-drawings-of-the-people.-i--think-if-you-could-expand-some-more-on-the-characters-(who-they-are)-and-draw-the-background-(where-they-live). 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-art-and-good-story%2C-try-talking-a-bit-slower-though 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-your-drawing-so-detailed-i-really-like-the-concept-of-your-ideas-and-the-suspense-really-comes-threw-at-the-end-amazing-job.-i-would-however-maybe-give-your-character-a-bit-more-depth-when-it-comes-to-his-emotions.-amazing-job-so-excited-to-see-where-it-goes. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-everything-was-clear-to-me-on-how-the-story-worked%2C-i-would-hopefully-like-to-here-more- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-line-was-not-the-clearest.-why-did-the-earth-explode%3F-why-are-cody-and-callie-relevant%3F- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-magic-isle-was-cool%2C--and-the-drawings-are-pretty-cool 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-a-super-heavy-story%2C-and-i-am-super-exited-to-see-what-you-do-next. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting-story%2C-wondering-what-will-happen-to-your-character-though 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-storytelling-and-the-boarding-for-your-story.-i-wonder-if-you-could-play-with-things-like-framing-and-camera-angles-more-to-highlight-your-characters-and-their-actions. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-it-but-you-could-have-added-more-detail. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-seems-like-a-great-first-act-with-good-depth-perception-in-the-drawing-which-really-shows-how-this-man-is-very-serious-about-his-job%2C-although-i-don't-get-why-it-makes-him-angry-at-his-mom%3F-does-it-have-to-do-with-him-not-finding-a-job%3F-does-his-mom-get-mad-at-him-or-something-similar%3F-great-story-idea-but-maybe-go-more-into-depth-about-how-his-mom-is-related-to-him-getting-rejected. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-the-eyes-on-the-chick-was-good.i-thought-you-could-have-added-more-detail.--but-over-all-it-was-good. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea%2C-but-there-is-art-for-only-some-of-the-plot-points%2C-although-the-rest-if-it-is-good. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-everything-was-clear-to-me-on-how-the-story-worked%2C-something-i-found-interesting-was-the-magic-isle- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-it-but-you-could-have-added-more-detail. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-world-of-this-story-sounds-neat.-the-layout-is-good-showing-us-our-character(s)-and-the-setting.-it's-interesting-to-wonder-what-the-ending-will-be. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-story-kinda-reminds-me-of-walking-dead%2C-i-would-record-in-a-better-environment-to-make-the-audio-more-clear 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-off-i-like-your-art-and-the-concept-of-it-but-your-story-needs-a-reason-on-why-they-switched-bodies-(aka-the-conflict)-and-also-a-way-they-switched-back 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-idea-of-being-in-a-place-you-don't-love%2C-then-dreaming-and-fantasizing-about-a-place-that-you-would-love-is-a-fun-idea%2C-and-i-am-exited-to-see-where-it-goes. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-your-drawings.-maybe-add-a-little-bit-more-detail--when-it-comes-to-your-script-but-that-would-be-all-what-an-amazing-concept-.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-really-interesting.-i-think-you-could-include-a-little-more-of-your-actual-character-in-the-beginning%2C-but-other-than-that%2C-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-everything-was-clear-to-me-on-how-the-story-worked%2C-something-i-found-interesting-was-what-he-came-upon-in-the-dessert- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-the-family-feud-but-i-don't-really-understand-why-they-went-public-with-it-and-decided-to-have-the-people-vote 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it!-the-%22camera%22-angles-are-great 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-ending-of-the-story-and-how-he-was-stranded-in-a-desert.-i-think-if-you-could-contract-the-beginning-of-the-story-and-skip-to-the-part-where-his-parents-throw-him-out.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-story-line%2F-your-minor-beats-they-worked-with-each-other.-i-would-recommend-that-you-speak-louder-because-it-was-hard-to-hear-you.-some-of-your-pictures-were-kinds-blurry-i-could-not-read-or-see-what-was-in-the-back.-i-am-excited-to-see-the-other-acts.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/so-i-gave-feedback-on-this-a-couple-weeks-ago-and-it-was-already-an-amazing-story-and-this-gives-me-even-more-depth-to-the-character-amazing-job-i-love-it-so-much.-the-only-feedback-that-i-would-give-is-on-the-quality-of-the-film-maybe-speak-up-a-little-more-that-would-be-it.-i-love-the-story-and-the-idea-of-the-characters-is-clear-. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-easy-to-understand%2C-and-we-really-get-to-know-how-ajax-lives. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-story-line-although-it-seemed-that-it-started-to-get-less-in-depth-about-the-parts-half-way-through%2C-maybe-for-the-next-part-try-to-go-into-depth-on-all-the-parts 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-build-up-!---wonder-what-is-coming-up-next-!!- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-you've-taken-a-universal-idea-that-anyone-can-relate-to%2C-and-added-a-resolution-with-the-conversation-as-well-as-a-celebration-of-dancing.-since-this-is-your-act-1%2C-i-imagine-there-will-be-more-conflict-or-points-of-change-for-your-main-character-that-cause-them-to-change-or-hit-a-point-of-no-return.-i'm-curious-what-the-bully-and-demarcus-talk-about%3F-i'm-also-curious-if-there-is-significance-with-your-main-character's-name-changing-3-times-and-if-there-is-more-to-that-part-of-your-story%3F-i-want-to-know-more---nice-work! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-old-was-the-driver%3F!%3F!-i-loved-the-drawings-and-the-dog-was-so-cute!-great-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-cool-idea-i-like-the-drawings%2C-but-it-makes-me-wonder-what-happens-when-the-cat-sends-a-shock-wave.---- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-characters-and-setting-are-so-well-drawn-and-the-storyline-is-very-detailed-and-i-can-tell-you-put-a-lot-of-thought-into-it.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-its-a-cool-concept-but-it-makes-me-wonder-why. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/one-thing-i-found-interesting-was-how-he-went-to-bed-and-saw-the-world-he-made-with-his-dad. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-style-of-drawing-for-this.-this-is-such-a-cute-concept-and-i-love-your-storyline.-can't-wait-to-see-how-it-will-play-out!! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-pictures-are-really-cool-and-i-love-how-you-depict-the-setting-and-characters.-the-story-has-great-detail-and-it-will-be-interesting-how-it-plays-out 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-that-you-chose-a-sunflower-but-why-was-the-sunflower-bullied- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-such-a-cool-concept-and-setting-for-the-character!-it-will-be-interesting-to-see-how-the-story-plays-out 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-liked-your-pictures-they-are-really-good.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-character!-i-am-excited-to-see-how-this-story-plays-out-and-i-think-this-is-a-great-start-to-it! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-really-cool-story-but-it-makes-me-wonder-what-the-letter-says-also-in-my-opinion-she-looks-quite-different-in-some-different-scenes. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-main-character%E2%80%99s-obsession-with-portals.-it-makes-me-wonder-wether-they-had-another-reason%2C-aside-from-becoming-rich. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-that-steeky-liked-going-on-many-adventures-even-if-they-are-dangerous!-the-drawing-was-excellent!-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-art-and-a-masterpiece.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-letter-near-the-end.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-idea.-why-did-their-parents-go-in-a-war-with-the-land-people%2C-is-there-history-between-both-species.-your-act-1-is-pretty-good! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-this-is-an-amazing-story%2C-i-love-it!-it-makes-me-wonder-if-he-is-loosing-sun-because-he-is-only-looking-one-way-because-he-is-only-looking-at-her. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/loved-how-you-end-it.--the-pictures-ore-cool- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-color-and-characters%2C-vary-good- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-simple-but-very-effective-and-helped-the-story-a-lot!-i-like-your-characters-and-your-storyline-a-lot.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-14-year-old-person-loving-to-be-and-act-like-a-wizard. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-robots-were-taking-over%2C-and-this-is-in-2030%2C-will-this-actually-happen-is-2030%2C-maybe%3F-i-also-like-the-amount-of-detail-in-the-drawings!-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-idea-but-i-wish-u-could-explain-it-a-little-slower-next-round 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story--was-that-electronics-where-illegal---i-think-you-should-add-more-detail. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-needs-to-be-a-bit-slower-but-i-really-liked-it 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-there-are-some-really-interesting-ideas-here.--i-really-like-the-idea-of-changing-identity-to-confront-the-bullies-and-i-like-that-that-allows-them-to-have-a-deep-conversation.--i-want-to-know-more-about-what-that-conversation-is-like.--what-do-they-talk-about%3F--i-like-your-drawings-too.--they-are-simple-but-clear.--it-would-be-fun-to-see-more-of-the-dancing-too.--does-dancing-bring-them-closer-as-friends%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-didnt-include-humans-to-make-it-unique.-a-question-i-have-is-why-did-they-go-to-the-alien-planet-what-if-it-is-dangerous%3F-your-act-1-was-good!! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-conflict-between-staying-true-to-family-or-yourself.-i-am-looking-forward-to-your-next-acts-for-this-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-it-makes-you-feel-so-sad-for-evan.-but-then-makes-you-happy-that-he%22s-still-trying.-everything-was-understandable.-%3A)- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-danny-prints-money.-i%E2%80%99m-wondering-do-people-care-about-him-after-he-starts-handing-out-money.-i-think-the-story-is-very-good-so-far. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-needs-improvement 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-fact-that-a-monkey-could-make-inventions.-also-i-love-the-pictures. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-elliot-and-clementine-meet-and-how-they-are-running-from-the-same-problems. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story.--i-love-the-idea-of-a-cat-and-dog-mochi%2Fice-cream-rivalry.--i-want-to-know-more-about-how-the-cat-and-dog-end-up-deciding-to-team-up.--what-happens-between-their-fighting-and-their-deciding-to-work-together%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-design-and-caracter 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-pitchers.--i-was-wording-about-her-family- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/how-did-connie-become-a-ghost%3F-i-wonder-why-connie-was-not-being-nice-enough.-good-job 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-advantage-over-other-people-that-the-hat-gave-the-main-character.-it-makes-me-wonder-wether-he-was-guilty-about-this. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-that-masons-father-ruled-over-the-human-race-yet-mason-didn't-want-to-because-he-didn't-want-to-and-how-the-mushrooms-outside-could-kill-you-if-you-ever-go-outside.-very-good! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-main-character-becomes-the-owner.-i-think-the-story-is-pretty-good-right-now.-i%E2%80%99m-excited-to-see-the-second-act. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-built-your-character%2C-but-i-hope-you-can-find-a-consistent-style-to-draw-her-in.-maybe-you-could-give-her-a-motive-for-being-so-reserved. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-the-portal-idea 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story!--and-i-really-like-your-drawings.--it-would-be-fun-to-know-more-about-why-kylie-loves-tennis-so-much-and-how-she-ended-up-in-fashion.-- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-monster-came-to-life.-did-the-monster-scare-other-people%3F-this-act-1-is-very-detailed-nice-job. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/--i-found-the-end-most-interesting-because-clementine-seems-mad-when-she-bumped-into-him.-it-makes-me-wonder-if-they-will-end-up-being-good-friends. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-ok 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-popularity-of-the-main-character.-it-makes-me-wonder-wether-that-influenced-them-to-drive-without-a-driver%E2%80%99s-license.-i-didn%E2%80%99t-understand-the-explosion-scene.-it-makes-me-think-they-blew-themselves-up-and-died.-also%2C-what-made-the-swerve-into-the-gas-station-was-unclear-to-me.-overall-i-think-this-story-will-be-very-interesting. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-how-it-is-about-robot-and-not-about-humans-so-it-is-something-different!-a-step-i-didn't-understand-was-why-the-robots-wanted-t-go-meet-the-aliens%2C-what-if-they're-dangerous.....%3F- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-drawing-are-relly-good 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-they-are-really-cool 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-both-boys-find-each-other--the-only-thing-im-confused-about-is-why-he-was-different 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-idea-and-the-moral-of-the-story.--i-want-to-know-more-about-why-it-is-against-the-rules-for-carl-and-carl-to-meet.-who-makes-the-rules%3F--i-want-to-know-more-about-the-shadow-world-too.-i-can't-wait-to-see-the-next-installment-of-this! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/pretty-drawings-and-nice-concept-but-i-agree-with-kyle%2C-the-villain-part-could-use-a-bit-more-explanation. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-last-drawing%2C-one-thing-i-would-suggest-is-switching-the-voices-a-little-less%2C-so-the-story-is-more-clear. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-good%2C-but-i-think-that-it-could-be-improved- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-so-far-is-not-bad%2C-but-it-has-kinda-been-done-before%2C-maybe-try-to-add-your-own-touch-to-it. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-that-this-is-super-detailed-while-still-being-neat!-very-pretty-style-and-cute-story! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/seems-pretty-unique.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-especially-the-panel-where-the-mirror-breaks%2C-the-color-contrast-is-very-nice.-also-great-job-on-the-story-pacing-and-voicing%2C-it-was-clear-and-engaging.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/although-i-found-the-story-very-interesting%2C-i-don%E2%80%99t-understand-the-conflict-between-the-main-character-and-the-other-apothecary. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/seems-intriguing%2C-but-please-explain-it-slower. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-captivated-the-story-into-your-drawings%2C-it's-really-neat!-i-do-want-to-know-more-about-why-ethan-might-be-competitive-and-eat.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/did-you-draw-those%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-nice%2C-i-wonder-a-lot-about-the-villains-of-the-story.-how-could-they-steal-a-gem-right-under-her-nose-!-i-wish-some-of-the-images-were-a-bit-clearer-to-see-but-overall-i-quite-like-this-story-reel. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-how-the-happier-the-flowers%2C-the-happier-the-bouquet.-i-really-like-your-illustrations-and-i-think-so-far-your-story-is-great. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-concept!-i-hope-to-learn-more-about-who-alistair-(no-clue-how-to-spell-the-name-sorry)-is-and-why-he's-trying-to-control-the-animals.-was-it-passed-down-as-a-job-for-the-owls-of-the-forest-or-what-lead-him-to-this-path%3F-i'm-excited-to-see-what-kind-of-obstacles-the-three-curious-animals-face-and-how-alistair-grows-as-a-character! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-drawings-are-so-pretty-and-well-captivated.-i-think-it-might-be-a-good-idea-to-add-some-fuller-images-instead-of-just-close-ups-to-really-show-what's-going-on.-other-than-hat-i-think-it's-really-cool!!- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-your-character-persists-to-make-a-invention-to-prove-himself. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-art-because-it's-neat-and-has-a-lot-of-colors.-the-story-is-very-straightforward-so-far-and-not-hard-to-understand-at-all.-i-wonder-how-the-rest-of-the-story-will-go-and-hope-to-see-more.-very-nice-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-coloring-and-design-or-the-tree-and-how-the-story-is-told. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-(i'm-assuming)-a-group-of-humans-or-a-whole-another-species-from-humans-living-underwater.-i-really-like-how-you-guys-gave-the-background-information-of-alex-and-building-up-to-the-end-of-act-1-and-beginning-of-act-2.-this-makes-me-really-curious-what-the-shark-tooth-necklace-will-show-or-do-to-alex.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/is-that-a-nether-portal%3F-is-jerry-actually-notch-minecraft%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-scene-and-ow-you-stage-it. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoyed-the-different-art-styles-that-were-used%2C-it-made-the-video-more-engaging.-one-thing-i-would-suggest-is-slow-down-the-talking-slightly-so-it's-more-clear. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-cool-idea-and-i-can't-wait-to-see-where-the-story-goes! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-cool!-i-think-that-the-part-about-the-person-bumping-into-the-girl.-and-them-being-the-only-survivors-were-a-bit-confusing. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-theme-of-segregation-at-the-heart-of-the-conflict.-i-think-that-this-is-an-important-and-meaningful-topic-to-educate-about.-i-recommend-that-you-include-setting-in-your-once-upon-a-time%2C-so-context-for-the-government%E2%80%99s-actions-can-be-given. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-so-pretty!!-i-love-the-plot-and-detail-to-both-story-and-drawings.-would-love-to-see-how-this-develops 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-story-and-how-simple-it-is. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-style-and-how-it-tells-the-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-intro-of-the-character!-wish-you-could-add-something-off-or-different-about-her%2C-something-that-separates-her-a-bit-more-from-just-being-a-shy-girl. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-really-cool!!-what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-different-art-styles-throughout-the-reel.-keep-up-the-great--work-%3Ad 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-act-1-and-i-think-that-it-could-have-a-bit-less-commotion.--it-has-a-good-plot-and-i-think-that-you-did-a-great-job-on-this-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/such-a-fun-idea!-though%2C-if-she-crashed-with-her-father-in-the-spaceship%2C-why-doesn't-she-know-where-it-is%2C-and-why-is-she-looking-for-it%3F-i'm-excited-to-se-how-she-overcomes-her-loss-and-maybe-meets-some-friends-along-the-way! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-and-the-storyline-is-amazing%2C-i-wish-you-could-explain-who-russell-is-a-bit-more-though. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-really-like-the-story!-the-drawing-style-is-awesome-too! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-overall-idea%2C-just-like-parker-said-i'm-a-bit-confused-why-exactly-eliot-is-being-mistreated%2C-but-i'm-excited-to-see-more-about-your-story-and-learn-more-about-these-characters! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-when-clementine-meets-another-teenager-his-age.-i-think-your-story-is-really-good-so-far-and-i%E2%80%99m-excited-to-see-the-other-acts%2C 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-artstyle.-it's-rough-but-still-very-clear-and-you-understand-what's-happening. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-voice-acting.-it-gives-more-emotion-to-the-characters.-i-am-looking-forward-to-how-clementine-will-help-elliot-and-how-they-will-bond. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-problem-being-thinking-you-are-the-only-one-that-is-different-or-makes-mistakes.-i-like-that-many-people-could-relate-to-this-at-some-point-in-their-lives.-i-was-confused-about-why-elliot-was-laughed-at-in-the-store%2C-and-what-the-argument-about-him-involved.-overall%2C-i-think-this-is-a-great-story-and-i-am-looking-forward-to-viewing-the-next-two-acts. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-a-very-charming-style-and-i-like-how-the-story-is-going-so-far%2C-but-the-cut-off-makes-me-wonder-so-many-things. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-design 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-design- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-design- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-visual.-language-techniques-you-used-to-show-emotion.--your-sketches-have-just-the-right-amount-of-detail-to-convey-your-story-too.-i-also-love-the-concept-you-are-working-with-in-act-1-to-gain-the-viewer's-attention.-great-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-idea.-has-a-sort-of-owls-of-gahoole-feel.-great-job 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-of-all%2C-i-love-the-%22pear-phone-13%22-advertisement-in-the-very-beginning.-what-do-the-people-eat-if-there-are-no-animals%3F-also%2C-how-are-the-plants-pollinated%3F-it-got-cut-off-at-the-end.-wish-i-could-have-heard-the-end-of-the-story! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/pretty-good-idea.-interesting-concept.-it-got-cut-off-at-the-end-though.-maybe-a-little-less-background-noise. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow!-i-really-love-this-idea!-love-the-magical-aspect-of-it-and-i-love-the-art.-great-illustrations! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea.-everyone-feels-like-that-sometimes.-like-you-can't-do-anything-right.-i-like-the-relatability-of-the-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/couldn't-understand-all-of-it-because-of-the-speedy-talking-but-i-like-the-idea. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-characters-have-to-switch-bodies.--what-i-didn't-understand-about-the-story-was-why-did-they-have-to-switch-bodies%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-main-character-has-never-seen-a-baseball-before.--i-understand-the-story. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-great-idea!-i-love-that-they-sabotage-each-other%2C-there-is-lots-of-room-for-comedy-there.-what-i%E2%80%99m-interested-in-seeing-is-how-the-two-characters-get-to-the-point-where-they-are-willing-to-team-up.-is-the-ice-cream-stand-also-struggling%3F-looking-forward-to-seeing-more-of-this! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-such-a-good-idea!-i-love-that-all-the-characters-get-to-learn-a-lesson-and-grow.-there-is-so-much-room-for-humour-in-this-story-as-well.-the-two-girls-could-get-themselves-into-some-very-funny-situations-when-pretending-to-be-each-other.-looking-forward-to-seeing-more.-great-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-cool-idea!-it-was-clever-to-name-them-both-carl%2C-very-cool.-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work.-love-the-image-of-the-big-lineup-at-the-mochi-stand-at-the-beginning.-the-sabotage-scene-is-a-great-story-point-to-get-you-to-the-low-point.-i-love-how-it-resolves-in-the-end-with-the-working-together%2C-i-just-wonder-what-happens-to-help-him-realize-they-should-team-up%3F-i-think-that's-the-only-missing-piece-for-me-so-far....i-imagine-it-could-happen-by-accident-(perhaps-an-accidental-spill-creates-the-new-product%3F)-or-maybe-they-see-a-customer-eating-both%3F-or-do-they-learn-something-about-each-other-that-makes-them-want-to-work-together%3F-can't-wait-to-find-out 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/bravo.-very-original-idea.-what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-part-when-she-was-invited-to-dinner-and-was-sweating.-i-love-the-realization-she-had-about-her-mother...i-think-that-will-be-a-great-scene.-i-wonder-if-we-can-learn-something-at-the-beginning-related-to-her-fear-of-her-mothers-approval-of-tennis.-perhaps-in-act-1-we-see-the-mother-pressuring-her-to-pursue-fashion%3F-can't-wait-to-see-how-this-develops.-also-loved-the-character-design. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-idea%2C-it's-very-original.-i'd-love-to-know-how-they-figured-out-a-%22new-way%22-to-play-with-each-other.-also-what-did-karl-miss-most-when-they-were-separated%3F-look-forward-to-more! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-story-line.-i've-been-watching-your-previous-videos-and-they-are-equally-good! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-have-watched-your-project-a-little-while-and-i-absolutely-love-this-idea!-i-like-the-extra-detail-i-got-with-this-act%2C-and-i-hope-to-see-what-happens-next! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-story-idea!-what-does-the-human-want-with-the-leaves%3F-and-why-did-he-steal-them%3F-many-questions-to-be-answered! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-story-scene.-what-is-the-monster-going-to-do%3F 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-plot-line.-it-is-very-good-in-relating-to-the-audience.-i'm-sure-everyone-has-had-a-time-where-they-feel-stuck-with-nothing-they-can-do. 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-work-looks-really-good-so-far!-what-i-found-most-intriguing-is-that-your-main-character-feels-responsible-for-finding-his-brother's-soul.-great-work-so-far! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-are-doing-really-well-so-far!-is-there-a-name-for-your-main-character%3F-other-then-the-name%2C-everything-else-is-really-good!-keep-working-on-it! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-is-really-great!-the-plot-line-i-think-needs-to-be-more-specific.-for-example%2C-when-mentioning-the-part-about-when-she-is-alone.-what-does-that-look-like-and-how-does-blue-handle-that%3F-your-main-idea-got-across-though!-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-that-you-incorporated-the-plague-into-your-story!-the-story-is-well-thought-out%2C-although-i-am-confused-about-the-part-where-you-mention-how-he-competes-with-the-other-apothecary.-will-that-ever-be-incorporated-into-the-story-again%3F-everything-else-is-amazing!-good-job! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-really-great%2C-i-was-genuinely-entertained!-the-only-problem-i-see-is-that-it-is-hard-to-see-at-this-point-in-the-story-what-the-main-conflict-or-climax-will-be.-is-the-university-going-to-fail%3F-will-someone-stop-the-founding-of-the-university%3F-will-captain-zork-not-like-running-the-university%3F-how-the-story-progresses-is-up-to-you-but-otherwise%2C-the-story-is-coming-along-great-and-the-use-of-sound-effects-helped-to-convey-your-loonie-toons-like-style! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-good!-i-think-the-story-flows-very-well-and-will-be-fun-to-storyboard.-the-only-comment-i-have-would-be-to-remove-the-scene-where-the-monster-explains-that-they-can't-be-seen-by-others.-this-detail-might-be-better-translated-to-the-audience-and-will-reduce-the-amount-of-work-you-will-have-if-liam-sees-that-others-do-not-notice-the-monster-when-he-goes-to-school-or-if-anyone-else-gets-near-the-monster.-otherwise%2C-the-story-is-coming-along-great-and-you-just-need-to-watch-out-for-plot-details-that-can-be-expressed-without-a-large-scene-dedicated-to-it.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-like-how-the-story-is-coming-along!-the-abuse-of-the-alcoholic-mother-provides-a-good-motivation-for-the-character-to-at-first-not-trust-others-around-her.-the-connection-to-earl-also-gives-sybil-a-good-reason-to-trust-some-people-before-therapy.-overall%2C-i-don't-see-any-major-problems-and-think-it-will-be-great-to-storyboard!-keep-up-the-good-work! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-love-how-the-story-is-coming-along.-i-don't-see-any-major-problems-and-think-it-will-be-a-blast-to-storyboard.-if-you-wanted-to-add-extra-detail-or-conflict-to-the-plot-in-act-2-you-can-show-what-happens-to-the-flowers-who-do-not-become-fully-grown-or-happy-enough-to-be-put-in-a-bokay.-otherwise%2C-keep-doing-good-work! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-you-organized-a-complex-backstory-for-evan!-the-only-problem-i-see-in-this-is-that-it-might-be-hard-to-storyboard-all-of-these-scenes.-what-i-recommend-is-finding-some-way-to-show-the-bits-concerning-his-father-in-a-flashback-or-compressed-sequence-like-the-beginning-part-of-up.--remember-this-is-still-act-1-of-the-story-and-you-will-probably-have-to-flesh-out-the-same-amount-of-story-progression-in-act-2-and-3.-so-in-order-to-reduce-your-workload-and-keep-the-story-compact-and-without-too-many-details%2C-try-to-remove-or-combine-a-few-of-these-story-elements-in-a-way-that-the-audience-can-easily-digest.-but-otherwise%2C-the-work-you-did-was-fantastic-and-you-just-need-to-figure-out-how-to-trim-down-the-story.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-the-story-is-progressing!-one-comment-i-have-is-that-your-art-is-good-but-it-would-be-good-to-have-a-consistent-style%2C-choose-either-a-more-japanese-or-realistic-style-that-fits-your-story-and-character-designs.-also%2C-i-think-your-story-beats-flow-into-each-other-well%2C-and-it-would-be-good-to-think-of-scenes-or-moments-that-will-help-establish-why-she-doesn't-like-to-be-seen-and-finds-it-easier-to-be-alone.-otherwise%2C-you-seem-to-be-heading-down-the-right-track-just-think-of-potential-scenes-and-how-to-storyboard-in-a-uniform-style.- 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-the-variety-of-drawings%2C-great-to-see.-maybe-in-the-future-you-could-combine-and-have-one-person-do-backgrounds-one-do-characters-etc.-(for-example-i-loved-whoever-shaded-the-background-in-the-2nd-frame)%2C--and-all-your-character-designs-were-good.-the-illness-is-a-great-hook-for-the-end-of-act-1.-i-think-you-could-slow-down-a-tiny-bit%2C-and-add-some-tension...fantastic-work! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-act-1%2C-i-love-this-plot-point-where-they-realize-the-plauge-was-created.-i-also-thought-the-idea-of-making-magic-with-shapes-using-crushed-up-power-was-interesting.-i-wonder-why-ethan-is-so-competitive%3F-i-like-that-about-him-but-wonder-if-it-will-be-his-downfall-or-his-saving-grace%3F-i-guess-i'll-find-out-next-week!-well-done 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-can't-wait-to-see-what-happens-next.-i'd-also-like-to-know-who-created-the-robots-and--maybe-what-they-put-inside-them.-and-what-made-the-ai-turn-evil%3F-do-they-teacher-to-be-nice-in-the-end%3F-can't-wait-for-more 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/awwww-it-got-cut-off%2C-next-tie-check-the-preview-first.-your-act-1-is-really-good-and-i-love-the-idea-of-her-giving-the-cat-a-bath-after-saving-it.-your-images-of-the-cityscape-were-awesome.-i-can't-wait-to-see-where-this-goes...i-wonder-how-the-world-will-change-after-animals-come-back%2C-or%2C-is-that-the-last-cat-in-the-world%3F-bravo! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work%2C-i'm-sad-that-it-got-cut-off-at-the-end.-i-think-you-have-a-really-original-story%2C-it-will-be-fun-to-see-how-the-school-does-on-day-1.--i-wonder-if-there-is-something-they-learned-from-butterflies-that-they-apply-to-the-human-school%3F-or-if-there-are-any-mistakes-in-the-way-they-first-imagine-school%3F-can't-wait! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-artwork-and-the-story%2C-it-is-a-sad-but-powerful-act-1.-your-characters-are-very-believable-and-i'm-rooting-for-her-to-find-happiness-next.-keep-up-the-great-work 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-just-love-the-story-so-far%2C-you-set-up-act-2-perfectly...i-wonder-what-she's-going-to-lose-most-when-life-without-the-teddy-bear-begins.-i-especially-loved-the-part-where-you-showed-her-aging-the-sketching-was-fantastic.-bravo!!! 2021-11-08 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-scifi-concept%2C-and-this-is-really-nitpicky-but-it-might-be-better-not-to-state-the-year-and-just-say-%22sometime-in-the-future%22-so-that-anyone-watching-it-in-that-year-can-imagine-it-as-their-future-as-well-rather-than-it-being-set-in-their-past.-(again%2C-super-nitpicky%2C-you-don't-have-to-do-this).-also%2C-the-disaster-isn't-super-clear%2C-did-the-whole-world-just-implode%3F-if-so%2C-than-how-did-people-survive%3F-are-they-just-floating-in-space-now%3F-how-are-they-surviving-in-space%3F-how-did-the-world-implode-anyway%3F-its-just-that-saying-%22the-world-suddenly-imploded%22-gives-me-the-idea-that-the-entire-world-is-just-gone.-but-i-love-that-cody-and-callie-are-starting-out-as-enemies-or-at-least-two-people-who-very-obviously-dislike-each-other%2C-and-that-they-are-sheltered-kids-living-in-utopia-who-suddenly-have-to-deal-with-a-harsh-and-unforgiving-world.-it-sounds-really-cool%2C-and-i-can't-wait-to-see-where-it-goes! 2021-11-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-absolutely-awesome!-however%2C-most-of-it-seems-to-be-pretty-close-shots-of-mayoko%2C-but-it-might-be-better-to-show-her-in-a-setting-or-doing-something%2C-so-that-we-can-get-a-feel-for-her-routine-and-what-is-normal-for-her-and-contrast-it-with-the-life-of-her-brother.-it-would-also-be-cool-if-you-could-include-how-they-ended-up-switching-bodies-in-the-first-place%2C-rather-than-just-stating-that-it-happened.-but-again%2C-100-out-of-10-art%2C-really-cool-idea! 2021-11-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/who-is-he%3F-you-include-a-ton-of-scenery-and-objects-that-were-really-well-drawn%2C-which-is-great%2C-but-i-never-saw-the-character-until-maybe-at-the-end%2C-but-there-were-other-people-in-the-scene-so-it-wasn't-clear-who-he-was.-i-also-didn't-hear-his-name-in-the-video.-i-assume-from-the-title-that-his-name-is-supposed-to-be-nick%2C-but-it-might-be-better-to-include-that-in-the-video-rather-than-only-mention-it-in-the-title%2C-and-include-some-shots-of-him-alone-so-that-we-know-who-he-is-and-what-he-looks-like.-other-than-that%2C-you-have-a-great-theme%2C-and-all-of-your-images-look-pretty-good!- 2021-11-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-did-a-great-job-of-establishing-bob-as-an-unfeeling%2C-uptight-business-man%2C-but-i-don't-understand-what-being-grateful-to-his-mom-has-to-do-with-him-job-hunting.-since-you-mention-job-hunting-and-his-gratefulness-to-his-mother-together%2C-it-seems-to-indicate-that-the-two-are-related%2C-even-though-it-doesn't-really-make-much-sense-for-there-to-be-any-correlation.-if-there-is-some-kind-of-link-between-the-two%2C-it-might-be-better-to-make-it-more-clear-in-the-video-(maybe-his-mom-works-at-a-large-company-and-could-get-him-a-job-there%3F-or-is-providing-him-shelter-until-he-can-get-a-job-and-get-back-on-his-feet%3F)-you-also-only-stated-that-he-is-ungrateful-to-his-mom-but-didn't-include-an-image-to-prove-it%2C-and-it-might-be-better-if-we-can-actually-see-that-he-is-ungrateful-to-make-it-seem-more-impactful-and-important. 2021-11-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-great%2C-but-maybe-a-little-more-should-happen-in-act-1%3F-this-feels-like-a-single-moment-rather-than-a-whole-act.-maybe-you-could-have-included-her-arrival%3F 2021-11-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-style-used-is-simple-and-easy-to-understand.-however-i-wasn't-able-to-understand-why-there-was-no-dad-figure-besides-her-mom.-mentioning-that-would-give-a-better-understanding-to-the-viewers. 2021-11-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-your-illustration.-your-minor-beats-are-well-stitched. 2021-11-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-illustrations-are-simple-yet-amazing.-cant-wait-to-see-your-film-ahead. 2021-11-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-perspective-and-pose%2C-it's-very-realistic.-i-love-the-motion-lines-on-the-ball-as-well.-bravo! 2021-11-07 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-character-you-have-created-is-really-interesting.-does-him-falling-and-being-in-the-hospital-affect-the-snow-in-new-york%3F 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-wonder-why-bob-is-angry-at-his-mom-when-he-cannot-find-a-job.-i-am-curious-to-see-how-the-many-different-points-in-the-story-connect-later-on.- 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-that-agu-was-afraid-of-failure.-why-was-he-afraid-of-this%3F-did-this-cause-him-to-train-more%3F 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-included-the-detail-at-the-beginning-that-the-owl-makes-sure-all-the-animals-are-obeying-him-because-it-makes-the-fact-that-some-animals-want-to-go-outside-the-boundary-much-more-interesting.- 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-you-have-2-different-types-of-creatures%2C-neither-of-which-are-humans-or-animals.-i-like-the-idea-that-robots-and-aliens-meet!-great-job! 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-fact-that-the-city-is-called-childsville.-when-the-city-becomes-real%2C-how-is-it-different-than-new-york-city-where-he-lives%3F- 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-act-one-is-great!-you-did-a-good-job-at-introducing-the-minor-beats-under-the-act-1-major-beat.-i-feel-you-set-the-stage-very-well.- 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-draw-in-your-audience-very-well.-it's-very-interesting-and-gets-you-hooked-and-i-wonder-what-will-happen-next.-your-illustrations-are-amazing-at-showing-emotions-of-your-characters.- 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-introduced-the-conflict-between-the-characters-in-the-very-beginning.-so-far-you-transitioned-from-beat-to-beat-very-well 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-your-minor-beats-really-led-to-you-to-the-next-major-beat-in-the-story-line.-your-illustrations-really-show-the-emotions-of-your-character. 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-interesting-how-you-really-showed-how-evan--is-going-to-achieve-his-goal-for-making-his-own-inventions.--is-this-only-act-1%3F- 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-moral-of-the-story-is-not-to-pick-on-other-people.-- 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-magic-top-hat.- 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-drawings.-i-think-the-drawing-are-cool.- 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/one-question%3A-is-the-sunflower-the-same-size-as-regular-flower-or-a-regular-human%3F-also-are-thinking-of-bringing-racism-in-this-story.-if-so%2C-that-will-be-very-interesting.-great-job-on-this-submission. 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-the-world-premise-and-setting-is-very-interesting%2C-there-is-a-lot-of-opportunities-you-can-do-with-that.-the-story-is-well-paced-and-concise.-i%E2%80%99m-wondering-why-monsters-would-even-attack-humans.-very-good-job. 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-i-think-is-very-good.-the-story-it-self-went-a-little-to-fast-for-me.-though-the-main-idea-of-it-was-well-fleshed-out.-keep-at-it. 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-very-good%2C-good-job-on-that.-the-story-also-is-very-concise-which-is-good-and-%E2%80%9Cbad%E2%80%9D.-parts-i-didn%E2%80%99t-understand-were-why-are-they-in-they-are-on-boat-%26-visitors-on-sed-boat 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-and-anatomy-of-the-characters-is-very-well-defined.-the-story-is-going-a-little-to-fast-for-me.-for-example-the-mention-of-a-plague.-anyway-the-story-it-self-is-really-good.-keep-it-up. 2021-11-06 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-style-is-unique-and-very-pleasing.-the-story-is-very-straight-to-the-point-and-concise-enough.-what-interested-me-was-how-sibil%E2%80%99s-mom-treated-her-daughter.-what-didn%E2%80%99t-understand-was-why-there-was-no-dad-figure-besides-her-mom.-did-they-break-up%3F%3F%3F%3F-i-only-saw-a-dad-in-the-start-of-the-video. 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-style-is-very-pleasing%2C-its-really-good.-the-story-its-self-is-very-good%2C-not-to-simple-or-to-complex.-i-guess-a-part-i-didn%E2%80%99t-understand-was-why-sheila-would-push-away-her-reflection. 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-girl-comes-to-realize-that-she-needs-to-make-friends-and-can%CA%BBt-stay-online-all-day.- 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-drawings.-i-thing-the-drawings-are-cool.- 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-2-people-didn%CA%BBt-thing-what-others-would-think-about-them.-they-had-very-good-self-confidence.- 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-he-wanted-to-try-something-new-so-then-he-started-playing-with-the-baseball.-it-shows-to-always-try-new-things.- 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-moral.-that-was-a-good-point.-it%CA%BBs-better-to-have-a-good-friendship-than-to-be-popular-and-nobody-likes-you.- 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-chicken-is-not-alone-in-being-still-in-the-shell.-i'm-excited-to-see-what-journey-both-unhatched-chickens-will-go-on-in-the-story-spine.- 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-set-up-to-the-story.--your-first-three-major-beats-are-clear-and-concise.---one-question-i-had-was-towards-the-end%2C-after-melody-reverses-the-effects-of-the-milk-and-ash-stops-talking%2C-what-would-you-say-is-the-beat-for-%238-and-ever-since-then%3F--would-it-be-something-like%2C-%E2%80%9Cever-since-then%2C-ash-stopped-talking%3F%E2%80%9D-- 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wonderful-drawings---very-colorful-and-vibrant.--i%E2%80%99m-looking-forward-to-seeing-the-images-that-will-replace-the-works-in-progress-section.--also%2C-great-job-in-setting-up-a-detailed-world-in-the-first-two-beats-(once-upon-a-time%2C-and-every-day).--finally%2C-very-clear-and-ending-that-ties-directly-to-the-moral-of-your-story.--really-great-work.-- 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i'm-in-love-with-your-story.-amazing-work.-i-love-how-they-bring-each-other-power.-i-felt-so-bad-for-them-in-the-beginning-when-they-were-not-accepted.-i-have-a-few-random-ideas-swirling-in-my-head.-%231)-i-think-we-should-learn-about-their-distrust-of-humans-at-the-beginning.-%232.-i'd-love-to-see-the-sisters-get-accepted-by-the-other-snakes-at-the-end.-perhaps-they-save-them-from-the-bird-monster%3F-i-can't-wait-for-more%2C-don't-give-up-you-are-my-favorite-so-far 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-really-interesting-ideas-in-this-story.--i-want-to-know-more.-i-love-the-idea-of-a-magical-aisle-in-the-supermarket-and-i-want-to-know-more-about-it.--how-does-it-work%3F-how-does-melody-find-out-it-is-magical%3F--does-she-pour-the-milk-for-her-and-ash-at-home-or-at-the-supermarket%3F---what-does-the-cat-say%3F--who-tells-melody-to-stop-talking-to-her-mom-and-how-does-that-make-melody-feel%3F-i-look-forward-to-hearing-more-as-you-develop-this-story.-the-story-has-a-wonderful-moral-and-message.-- 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-cool-idea%2C-i-love-the-idea-of-a-magic-isle-in-a-grocery-store!-what-i-am-wondering-now-is-does-melody%E2%80%99s-mom-get-her-job-back%3F-great-job! 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-very-intriguing-story.--i-really-like-the-idea-of-the-snake-sisters-having-to-work-together-to-survive-and-be-successful.--i'd-like-to-see-some-examples-of-when-that-is-difficult-for-them-and-also-understand-how-it-is-their-special-strength-and-super-power.--your-at-work-is-beautiful-and-your-use-of-color-emphasizes-the-power-of-the-story-you-are-telling.--in-the-image-of-the-snakes-attacking-their-prey-at-00%3A47-it-was-a-little-hard-to-see-the-snake-at-first.--i-am-looking-forward-to-seeing-the-rest-of-the-story-as-you-keep-working-on-it. 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-cool-idea!-the-moral-of-the-story-is-really-good.-are-the-snake-sisters-ever-accepted-by-their-own-kind%3F-the-artwork-is-really-well-done.-good-job! 2021-11-05 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-body-language-of-the-character-is-awesome!-the-storytelling-is-amazing-as-well!- 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story!-i'm-excited-to-see-what'll-happen-afterwards! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-interesting-idea.-i-think-we-all-can-relate-to-the-main-characters-wish-to-change-his-identity-when-going-through-what-he-is-experiencing.-i-liked-that-the-bully-was-open-to-having-a-conversation-at-the-end.-good-job! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-interesting-idea.-i-think-we-all-can-relate-to-the-main-characters-wish-to-change-his-identity-when-going-through-what-he-is-experiencing.-i-liked-that-the-bully-was-open-to-having-a-conversation-at-the-end.-good-job! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-interesting-idea.-i-think-we-all-can-relate-to-the-main-characters-wish-to-change-his-identity-when-going-through-what-he-is-experiencing.-i-liked-that-the-bully-was-open-to-having-a-conversation-at-the-end.-good-job! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-underlying-idea-that-%22you-choose-who-you-are%22-and-the-realization-that-your-worth-comes-from-with-and-not-from-others.-super-concept! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-sure-that-you-will-be-adding-a-lot-of-extra-minor-beats-to-each-act-that-will-explain-how-and-why-the-strings-arrived--until-then%2C-i-am-excited-to-see-how-this-story-unfolds!-great-idea! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-interesting-idea%2C-and-i-loved-the-drawings!-it-seems-like-the-characters-are-under-constant-surveillance.-is-that-the-cause-of-all-their-stress%3F-good-job! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-cool-idea!-i-would-love-to-know-how-they-defeated-the-over-lord%2C-and-who-was-in-charged-after-they-were-defeated.-really-cool-idea! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-cool-idea!-i-would-love-to-know-how-they-defeated-the-over-lord%2C-and-who-was-in-charged-after-they-were-defeated.-really-cool-idea! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-image.-what-i-love-most-about-the-character-is-their-expression-and-this-idea-of-the-shadow-world...it-feels-spooky-but-draws-me-in.-this-image-has-great-use-of-color-and-shading-as-well.-can't-wait-to-see-how-the-story-unfolds. 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i've-been-following-this-story-for-a-long-time.-i-like-the-story-arch-a-lot.-i-wonder-if-the-avatar-was-trying-to-take-her-place-and-stick-harper-in-the-pc.-and-the-only-way-for-her-to-escape-is-to-trap-someone-else-instead%3F 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-story-idea-and-the-artwork-is-superb. 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-love-love-this-story!-such-a-amazing-idea-and-a-great-moral! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-structure-and-drawings.-i-have-lots-of-questions%2C-what-stops-them-from-living-their-life%3F-is-it-the-surveillance-world-they-are-stuck-in%3F-what-is-the-solution-they-find%3F-i-can't-wait-to-learn-more.-keep-up-the-great-work---fyi-here-is-a-link-to-this-groups-last-submission-which-has-more-clues-(https%3A%2F%2Fwww.storyxperiential.com%2Fvideo-submission-week-2%2F9e2b29f5-c8a5-4dbb-be9e-521ee6a7b582) 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-story.-i-was-however-confused-on-what-tum-tum-is-when-and-how-he-got-there.-but-overall-amazing-story! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-way-of-drawing-the-line-of-being-made-fun-of.-i-wonder-if-your-idea-could-be-more-polished%3F 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-unusual-story-line.-it-must-have-required-much-effort-to-do-it.-i-wonder-if-you-could-make-the-story-easier-to-understand%3F 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-unusual-story-line.-it-must-have-required-much-effort-to-do-it.-i-wonder-if-you-could-make-the-story-easier-to-understand%3F 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow!-this-is-amazing!-your-story-spine-is-so-professional-l!-amazing-job!!-%3Add 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-clear-story-spine-that-hits-all-the-major-story-beats.--great-work.--one-question-i-had-is-what-happens-when-you-say-jayla-looked-at-seafood-differently%3B-does-she-change-her-business-and-sell-less-seafood%2C-is-her-baby-ok-but-doesn%E2%80%99t-like-seafood%2C-etc.--this-may-be-one-area-you-could-develop-even-further!---- 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-interesting-plot!-how-does-the-main-character-overcome-this-traumatic-experience%3F-does-it-have-an-impact-on-her-work%3F-really-well-done! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-opening-major-beat%2C-and-very-clear-moral-to-the-story.--because-you-did-such-a-good-job-with-these-two-elements%2C-i-understood-how-loni-changed-from-the-beginning-to-the-end.--if-you-wanted-to-develop-this-story-further%2C-i-think-one-place-you-could-focus-on-would-be-the-%E2%80%9Cbecause-of-that%E2%80%9D-story-beats.--these-would-help-your-audience-see-your-character-change-from-the-type-of-person-he-is-the-beginning-to-the-person-he-grows-into-at-the-end-when-he-learns-the-moral.-- 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-interesting-idea!-now-i-want-to-know-if-they-ever-figure-out-why-the-sun-is-burning-people.-does-humanity-find-a-reason-and-are-they-able-to-stop-it%3F-i-like-the-character-arc-you-have-as-well.-good-job! 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-loni-learns-from-his-experiences.--i'd-like-to-hear-more-about-how-loni-feels-when-he-is-hurt-before-anyone-is-helping-him.--it-would-help-for-us-to-feel-what-he-is-feeling-and-then-see-him-be-relieved-when-he-gets-help.--i-also-think-it-is-interesting-that-it-is-the-sun-that-is-hurting-people.--are-you-interested-in-exploring-why-the-sun-is-the-reason-for-people-getting-hurt%3F 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-it-very-interesting-the-way-you-paired-a-pregnant-person's-love-for-seafood-with-her-health-and-well-being.--i'd-like-to-hear-more-about-why-she-loves-seafood-so-much.-is-it-just-how-it-tastes%3F-i-also-wonder-if-the-moral-of-the-story-is-to-be-cautious---should-you-show-her-being-distracted-and-not-cautious-when-the-accident-happens%3F 2021-11-04 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-variety-of-drawings-is-not-a-problem-at-all.--many-different-artists-work-on-an-animated-film%2C-so-this-is-completely-normal%2C-and%2C-in-fact%2C-the-variety-of-drawings-make-your-story-even-more-exciting.--i-was-curious-about-the-moral-of-your-story.--do-you-say-the-moral-of-your-story-at-the-end%3F--your-video-got-cut-off%2C-but-i-think-it-has-to-do-with-what-your-character-learns-about-wanting-to-be-popular.--like-elyse-said%2C-i%E2%80%99d-like-to-hear-more-about-what-events-in-the-story-help-your-character-learn-this-moral.-- 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-job-with-the-first-three-major-beats-of-your-story-spine.--i-knew-clearly-who-your-characters-were-and-the-world-they-lived-in-before-you-introduced-the-beat-that-disrupted-everything.--great-act-1!--i-also-liked-how-you-demonstrated-the-moral-by-first-setting-up-that-the-tree-and-mushrooms-were-enemies%2C-but%2C-in-the-end%2C-the-mushrooms-worked-together-to-help-the-tree.-- 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-mention-early-on-that-your-character%E2%80%99s-personality-develops-based-on-their-experience%2C-and-i%E2%80%99m-curious-to-know-more-about-that-personality%2C-and-what-experiences-are-going-to-shape-your-character.--i-think-setting-that-up-early-on-will-help-you-establish-the-changes-you-refer-to-later%3B-changes-to-their-looks%2C-emotions-and-starting-to-do-pranks.-- 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-in-creating-a-very-specific-world-with-distinct-characters.--one-thing-that-i-was-unclear-about-in-the-beginning-was-the-protector-snakes.--are-they-protecting-the-secret-society-of-snakes%2C-or-is-their-job-to-protect-something-else%3F--and-finally%2C-what-would-you-say-is-the-moral-of-your-story%3F--great-job! 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/extremely-imaginative!--in-particular-i-liked-how-you-took-something-that%E2%80%99s-part-of-our-everyday-world-and-turned-it-into-another%2C-unique-and-magical-world.--in-terms-of-your-story-spine-and-developing-your-story%2C-one-thing-to-think-about%2C-as-lexi-said-above%2C-is-conflict.--what-potential-conflicts-does-preston-go-through-on-his-journey-that-helps-him-change-and-grow.--looking-forward-to-hearing-more-about-preston%E2%80%99s-journey.-- 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-one-that-a-lot-of-students-can-relate-to.--i-think-the-puppy-being-his-only-friend-and-then-dying-is-an-interesting-part-of-the-story-that-can-be-explained-more.--how-did-he-feel-when-his-only-friend%2C-the-puppy-died.--i-would-like-to-hear-more-about-why-he-wants-to-leave-town-and-also-why-he-realizes-that-popularity-isn't-important. 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow--really-like-this-creativity-it-really-has-a-lot-of-potential-i-would-also-like-to-see-more-of-this-story-the-drawings-are-really-good- 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-i-really-like-the-drawings-they-are-so-nice-i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-here-also-the-once-upon-a-time-stands-out-very-good-that-what-made-me-click-it-i-really-would-like-to-see-this-story- 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-used-your-creativity-and-i-really-like-this-story-it-is-very-intresting- 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-it-is-very-good-and-i-would-really-like-to-see-more-of-this 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-used-diffrent-lines-to-make-the-monitor-it-is-really-creative-and-its-a-really-good-theme- 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-here-it-is-really-creative-i-like-how-you-drew-the-cat-and-it-is-really-creative. 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-here-it-is-really-creative-i-like-how-you-drew-the-cat-and-it-is-really-creative. 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-dept-of-thougth-here-it-s-really-creative-and-i-would-like-to-see--more-and-see-what-happens 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-relatable-your-story-idea-is-with-having-parents-who-work-long-hours-and-being-a-kid-who-has-to-learn-on-his-own-who-he-wants-to-be.-you-did-an-amazing-job-structuring-the-build-up-of-your-story-and-your-character's-%22ah-ha%22-moment.--i-would-love-to-see-how-your-character-and-his-parents'-relationship-shifts-from-the-big-lesson-and-if-there-is-something-more-to-tell-there.-great-work-and-looking-forward-to-seeing-you-develop-your-story-further. 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-unique-story-idea-about-snakes-which-you-don't-normally-think-of-as-a-cooperative-species.-i-found-the-most-interesting-part-of-your-story-to-be-how-the-snakes-have-super-powers-and-go-out-to-help-others.-it-would-be-great-to-further-develop-what-makes-twilight-unique-from-the-other-snakes-and-what-is-the-lesson-that-he-needs-to-learn-in-your-story%2C-i.e.-what-causes-him-to-evolve-from-beginning-to-end%3F 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-idea%2C-it-so-original!-it-will-be-interesting-to-see-what-preston-goes-through-when-he-goes-to-the-land-of-lost-socks.-its-a-really-intriguing-story%2C-good-job!- 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-well-done%2C-beautiful-too.-i-wonder-if-maybe-the-cats-realize-a-way-to-combine-both-their-talents-into-a-single-product-to-nail-the-point-a-bit-more.-for-example%2C-some-aspect-of-baking-used-to-make-some-kind-of-new-coffee%3F-can't-wait-to-see-more! 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-originality-of-your-story%2C-the-portal-is-a-great-story-mechanism.-it's-a-solid-story.-what-i-wonder-is-how-you-can-bring-out-the-moral-more%2C-that-is%2C-show-us-that-preston-hasn't-learned-the-moral-earlier-in-the-story-(such-as-showing-him-putting-popularity-about-all-else%2C-and-perhaps-after-the-first-portal-he-prejudges-the-other-socks%3F)-well-done 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-is-a-really-good-message-here%2C-namely-one-shouldn't-do-something-immoral-even-if-its-a-way-to-make-lots-of-money.-i-can't-think-of-anything-more-immoral-than-killing%2C-but-setting-the-story-up-using-a-company-of-assassins-feels-to-me-like-a-bit-too-much-like-the-john-wick-movies.-i-wonder-if-you-could-explore-the-same-theme-but-with-some-other-immoral-act-(something-along-the-lines-of-facebook-perhaps)%3F-love-the-cereal-subtext-too----don't-lose-that! 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-work%2C-love-the-composition.-what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-her-ears-they-are-adorable.-i-like-how-she's-looking-out-into-the-city-so-we-can-feel-how-big-it-seems-to-her.-i-like-the-energy-in-the-lines-of-your-trees-as-well%2C-it-contrasts-nicely-with-the-angular-buildings.-can't-wait-for-this-story! 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-has-so-much-heart-and-is-so-original.-i-think-it's-going-to-make-a-wonderful-story-reel.-we-you-start-to-flesh-out-into-minor-beats-this-week-keep-in-mind-what-you-want-the-morale-to-be.-can't-wait-to-see-the-final-project. 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-this-original-story-concept%2C-really-well-done.-my-favorite-part-is-how-they-ended-up-working-together-on-their-shared-problem-at-the-end.-the-charcoal-drawings-are-a-nice-touch-too.-i'm-wondering-how-his-%22twitching%22-super-powers-ends-up-helping%2C-perhaps-you-could-flesh-that-out-a-bit-next.-i'm-also-wondering-what-the-other-snake-super-powers-were.-would-be-nice-to-play-up-the-distrust-of-the-two-types-of-snakes-earlier-in-the-story-so-that-when-they-work-together-at-the-end-it's-extra-satisfying 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-interesting-story-line.-i-enjoy-that-the-character-turns-the-tables-on-his-boss.-the-cereal-was-a-nice-touch-as-well! 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-such-a-good-plot.-i-loved-that-basil-had-to-give-up-the-one-thing-she-thought-she-wanted-most-in-life-to-get-back-her-friends.-really-well-done! 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-interesting-idea!-love-the-illustrations-and-the-moral-of-the-story-is-really-good.-i-liked-that-they-went-on-a-journey-together-to-make-the-cafe-the-best-it-could-be.-great-job! 2021-11-03 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-story-itself.-i-like-how-the-girl-realizes-how-fortunate-she-is.- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/unique-perspective.-clear-storyboarding%2C-and-strong-plot.-i'm-a-tiny-confused-why-the-narwhals-are-building-a-railroad-on-the-bottom-of-the-ocean%2C-but-it-works-anyway.-there's-a-really-nice-element-of-unexplained-mystery-and-wonder-that-reminds-me-of-a-studio-ghibli-style.- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-flows-nicely.-i-like-that-frosty-suffers-some-early-setbacks-which-make-him-work-to-become-stronger.-one-question-though%2C-frosty-wants-to-%22save-everyone.%22-what-does-everyone-need-saving-from%3F-the-elephant-was-stuck-in-mud%2C-is-that-a-thing-that-happens-often-where-frosty-lives%3F-is-it-better-to-pull-everyone-out-of-the-mud-or-figure-out-how-to-shape-drainage-so-water-flows-into-crops-and-away-from-paths%3F-is-being-a-hero-just-being-strong%3F-- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-mint-drawing 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-clean-animation 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-drawings 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/well-done-i-like-the-concept.-i-think-it-has-potential-to-be-a-really-emotional-%26-powerful-tale.-the-fire-prank-is-a-great-%22low-point%22-for-the-story-as-well....i-hope-the-parents-can-learn-a-lesson-in-this-story-as-well.-i-urge-you-to-keep-developing-this%2C-it's-going-to-be-great 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-pictures%2C-it-is-really-cool.-i-liked-the-details-in-your-drawings.-- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings!-also-it%E2%80%99s-pretty-cool-that-jim%E2%80%99s-dream-job-ends-up-being-the-reason-he-is-fired-from-his-other-place-of-work.-good-job! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-hope-that-you-stick-with-the-moral%2Frealization-that-we-are-all-so-much-more-than-our-mistakes. 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-respect-the-way-that-you-are-tackling-such-a-sorrowful-issue-with-positive-lessons. 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-detailed-the-main-character-was-and-it-shows-how-she's-the-main-protagonist-of-the-story 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-cute-the-cow-is-and-the-edit 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-design-of-the-characters-and-how-detailed-the-mage-was-to-show-that-she-was-the-main-character.-the-mage-looks-like-lisa-from-genshin.- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-style-and-the-attention-to-details-like-facial-expression- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-with-the-story-spine.-i-like-this-idea-of-a-british-tree-it's-very-original-%3A)-.-i-was-only-confused-about-who-ronin-was-and-why-there-were-fake-leaves%2C-perhaps-that-story-point-could-be-clarified.-i-also-wonder-how-we-can-show-a-character-earlier-in-your-story-who-has-not-yet-learned-the-moral-(so-that-there-is-a-change-at-the-end).-tip%3A-next-time-use-blank-paper-as-the-grid-was-distracting.-can't-wait-for-more! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-well-done%2C-great-drawings-and-vocals.-i-like-this-bakery-story-point.-i-wonder-if-maybe-he-also-learns-that-bakery-is-just-as-much-%22hard-work%22-but-it's-work-he-loves-which-is-the-key-difference.-(tip%3A-next-time-try-and-record-when-it's-quiet-as-you-worked-so-hard-and-the-noise-in-the-background-is-distracting-from-the-work).-great-work 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-nice-work...love-that-it's-an-original-idea.-the-butcher-scene-is-going-to-be-sad%2C-but-it's-a-strong-story-point%2C-i-wonder-how-you-can-make-something-good-come-of-it-to-help-reenforce-the-moral...-(tip%3A-there-was-an-alarm-going-off-in-background-%2C-watch-that-next-time-%3A) 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-this-storyboard-world%2C-it's-a-strong-concept.-i-wonder-how-they-will-realize-they-are-not-%22complete%22-%2C-maybe-it-could-be-more-than-just-how-they-are-sketched-out-and-some-kind-of-internal-feature-they-are-missing%3F-some-advice%3A-sext-time-make-sure-your-voice-over-is-louder-or-just-remove-the-music-until-you-have-your-story-done.-it-also-got-cut-off-at-the-end-so-review-the-video-before-upload.-great-work! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-great-drawings%2C-love-the-character-design...i-wonder-how-he-realizes-he-needs-help%2C-perhaps-that-could-be-a-key-plot-point-in-your-story. 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-storyboarding%2C-clear-and-energetic.-i-love-the-moment-when-she-couldn't-tell-them-about-the-human-world...and-then-sees-the-girl-falling-into-the-bubbles.-this-has-big-potential! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-story-idea...i'd-love-to-know-how-they-first-noticed-the-virus-and-who-created-it.--i-wonder-how-the-moral-can-be-weaved-into-the-beginning-somehow-(before-the-characters-learn-the-importance-of-friends) 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-precious.-i-love-the-concept-of-worthiness-that-you-are-exploring.-this-is-going-to-be-one-of-my-favorites! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-amount-of-detail-you-put-into-drawing-your-characters-and-the-backgrounds%2C-even-though-they-may-not-be-the-best-you-want-them-to-be%2C-some-explain-perfectly-the-point-you-try-to-make.-i-just-found-myself-thinking-what-kind-of-magic-the-protagonist-can-do%2C-unless-it-is-just-making-magic-potions.-i-also-want-to-ask-how-and-why-your-protagonist-has-to-first%3A-get-jackson-to-pick-the-padlock%2C-and-second%2C-why-your-protagonist-teams-up-with-his-enemy-and-why-they-agree%2C-and-third%2C-what-the-protagonists'-mission-actually-is-with-the-whole-plague-and-secrecy-of-the-royal-family-and-the-church.-great-job!- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-mind-blowing-ending-that-ajax-becomes-the-successor-of-the-world-he-has-found%2C-and-becoming-an-astronaut-to-follow-the-mysterious-hand-is-admirable.-i-didn't-quite-catch-the-last-speaker-on-some-of-the-things-he%3F-said%2C-and-he%3F-cut-off-a-little-bit-at-the-end.-great-job! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-fact-that-you-have-flowers-and-humans-living-and-working-together-(not-that-they-like-it).-i-found-it-interesting-that-your-topic-for-the-story-is-for-flowers-to-have-equal-rights-with-humans.-i-think-you-should-say-equality-between-flowers-and-humans%2C-or-equality-among-flowers-and-humans-(instead-of-equality-for-humans).-i-like-how-you-changed-your-character-from-being-the-center-of-attention-for-the-audience%2C-to-making-it-more-about-all-of-the-flowers-and-not-just-himself.-the-ending-was-a-start-of-something-great%2C-and-that-makes-me-wonder-if-their-would-be-a-sequel-so-i-could-see-the-end.-great-job! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-crisis-for-your-character-is-a-part-of-everyone's-daily-lives-as-well%2C-all-social-media-stopping-for-good.-it-made-me-interested-in-learning-about-how-the-other-characters-will-act-in-your-story-and-how-leo-dealed-with-the-people-who-didn't-accept-him%2C-how-he-got-over-his-fear-(i-feel-like-you-glazed-over-this-last-part). 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-yellow-rose-is-a-storyboard-character-for-pixar-and-meets-all-the-other-backgrounds%2C-and-also-makes-them-realize-they-are-not-real.-i-didn't-quite-catch-that-last-part-where-the-audio-cut-off-and-the-video-stopped%2C-also%2C-how-your-character-saved-the-day-was-a-little-unclear-for-me.-i-kind-of-got-a-little-confused-with-the-pronouns-you-were-using-because-they-were-kind-of-redundant%2C-pertaining-exactly-to-who%2C-i-didn't-catch-on-quick-enough.-great-job! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-connie-is-trying-to-make-friends%2C-the-detail-of-the-pictures-for-those-scenes-is-great-and-makes-me-want-to-learn-more-about-who-she-tries-to-make-friends-with-and-who-those-people-are-and-what-they-do.-i-didn't-really-understand-why-connie-felt-she-was-a-bad-person%2C-is-it-because-she-made-people-mad%3F-from-her-personality-in-general-or-attitude%3F-you-also-cut-off-the-last-part-and-i-don't-think-you-got-to-finish-what-you-were-saying.-great-job! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-moral.-it-has-a-good-meaning-behind-it.-i-also-like-the-different-types-of-drawings-and-colors-that-was-in-it.- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-story-itself.-i-like-how-the-main-character-learns-how-to-fell-confident-in-herself-to-talk-to-people-in-real-life-instead-behind-a-screen.- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-moral.-i-think-its-a-great-one.-i-also-like-that-one-of-the-other-character-in-the-story-tried-to-help-the-main-character-gain-confidence-in-herself.- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-moral.-it-has-a-very-good-meaning.-i-also-liked-the-drawing-and-colors-used-for-this-video.-good-job! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-way-that-it-was-illustrated-%E2%80%94-it's-very-interesting%2C-and-i-love-the-style!-it-seemed-pretty-clear. 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-mark's-job.--i-wonder-why-everyone-ran-away%3F 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-specificity-of-the-chicken's-design.--i-was-a-bit-confused-about-what-happened-to-get-him-into-a-crazy-zoo-%E2%80%94-what-is-the-crazy-zoo%3F-%E2%80%94-and-the-amount-of-different-things-going-on-in-this-story. 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-very-basic-driving-force-behind-the-story.--how-did-she-manage-to-sneak-out%3F 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawings-have-such-movement-and-life-in-them!--what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-nuance-of-morality-within-it.--i-think-that-it-was-pretty-clear.--great-job! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-how-she-was-friends-with-the-tree.--however%2C-i-didn't-understand-how-exactly-this-tree-was-a-friend-to-her. 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-you-are-telling%2C-and-the-art-is-amazing.-elwen's-design-is-super-cool!-however%2C-it-would-be-nice-if-you-could-explain-a-little-more-about-what-the-ruler-asked-of-her%2C-and-the-events-that-led-up-to-her-decision-to-stand-up-to-them.- 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-great-idea%2C-i-love-the-art-and-the-fact-that-your-character-isn't-conventionally-attractive%3B-its-very-rare-to-see-a-character%2C-even-in-cartoons-who-isn't-pretty-and-nearly-perfect-in-appearance%2C-even-if-they-are-supposed-to-be-unattractive.-you-really-seem-to-understand-your-subject%2C-and-even-though-the-idea-of-a-loner-learning-to-make-friends-isn't-uncommon%2C-you-really-capture-it-better-than-any-story-i've-seen.-this-is-absolutely-awesome%2C-can't-wait-to-see-the-final-product! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-great-idea%2C-i-love-the-art-and-the-fact-that-your-character-isn't-conventionally-attractive%3B-its-very-rare-to-see-a-character%2C-even-in-cartoons-who-isn't-pretty-and-nearly-perfect-in-appearance%2C-even-if-they-are-supposed-to-be-unattractive.-you-really-seem-to-understand-your-subject%2C-and-even-though-the-idea-of-a-loner-learning-to-make-friends-isn't-uncommon%2C-you-really-capture-it-better-than-any-story-i've-seen.-this-is-absolutely-awesome%2C-can't-wait-to-see-the-final-product! 2021-11-02 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-an-arc-in-mind-for-this-character%2C-something-for-him-to-learn-and-grow-from-which-is-great.-i-was-a-bit-confused-about-how-music-helped-him-overcome-his-obstacles.-did-he-become-a-successful-musician-as-a-way-to-pay-his-bills-doing-something-he-enjoys%3F-hopefully-you-can-make-that-point-clearer-in-the-next-iteration. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-work.-but-it-was-difficult-for-me-to-read-in-time%2C 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-potential-here.-i-wonder-what-moral-you're-working-toward%3F-i-could-imagine-several-different-options%2C-and-which-one-you-pick-could-drive-the-story-one-way-or-the-other.-i-also-think-it-would-be-interesting-to-play-into-the-idea-that-steeky-is-a-blob-like-creature.-i-suggest-really-leaning-into-that-idea.-like%2C-what-special-obstacles-would-a-blob-encounter-that-regular-human-children-wouldn't%3F-keep-it-up! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-unisaur-chowder!-love-the-moral-and-all-his-friends.-only-thing-would-be-maybe-try-to-get-the-drawings-to-look-more-alike.-great-job-though. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/gang-member-robot%3F-love-it!!!-great-idea.-i-have-wondered-about-the-same-thing-many-times.-love-the-art-too! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-idea-of-the-baby-puffin-and-the-inspiring-message! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-general-concept-of-the-story.-who-would-have-thought-that-a-bunny-could-become-a-hero%3F-i-also-like-the-it-doesn't-come-easy-to-him----he-really-has-to-work-for-it.-for-the-full-story-it-might-be-interesting-to-play-up-the-difficulty-part%2C-perhaps-by-frosty-second-guessing-himself-in-act-2.-it-might-also-be-interesting-to-break-away-from-the-super-hero-part-and-have-frosty-be-satisfied-with-being-just-a-regular-hero-(the-superhero-theme-has-really-be-overdone-lately).-the-drawings-are-simple%2C-but-they-do-a-great-job-of-communicating-the-basic-points.-it's-hard-to-do-that-with-simple-drawing%2C-but-you've-mastered-that-skill. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-submission!-love-the-music. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-amazing!-the-story-you've-created-is-really-powerful%2C-and-feeds-into-an-amazing-message!-this-is-really-well-thought-out%2C-great-job! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-work%2C-i-didn't-understand-what-happened-after-the-first-two-drawings.-those-seemed-connected-but-then-it-got-confusing-for-me.-can-you-clarify-the-connections-a-bit%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-work%2C-i-didn't-understand-what-really-happened-after-he-made-the-first-friend. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/something-interesting-is-that-you-used-anime-characters-for-your-drawings 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-got-cut-off-at-the-end.-you-are-going-a-little-bit-too-fast-i-like-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-message-i-am-just-confused-how-his-wish-came-true 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-moral 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-maybe-some-more-detail 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-monster-really-interesting-in-the-story-since-it-adds-some-fantasy.-i-couldn't-really-understand-what-you-were-saying-though-and-i-am-wondering-why-the-character-instantly-became-friends-with-the-monster-though-because-that-is-pretty-creepy-and-scary 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-when-he-needs-his-mom-and-they-need-the-support-and-love-from-people 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interseting-about-your-story-is-how-they-defeated-their-fake-friend-and-got-rich.-i-didnt-understand-how-the-fake-friend-got-a-wrecking-ball. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-when-he-notice-he-should-have-put-his-want-then-his-needs 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-result-of-your-conflict-in-the-story-and-the-positive-impact-it-had-on-the-character. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-got-cut-off-at-the-end-but-i-like-the-story- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/even-though-this-is-the-group-im-working-with%2C-it-was-very-hard-to-hear--the-person-talking 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/add-more-info-and-just-put-one-speaker 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-art-most-interesting-because-it's-really-good.-i-didn't-really-understand-how-they-swapped-bodies-though. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is%2C-how-plants-had-the-ability-to-stand-up-for-their-rights.-i-didn't-understand-how-he-got-the-fame-so-quickly. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-light-in-the-sky-was-cool!-did-she-get-to-meet-the-aliens-or-what%3F-i-think-that-this-is-really-cool-though! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-was-really-good-but-it-was-really-hard-to-hear-the-person-talking-even-with-my-sound-turned-all-the-way-up 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-most-interesting-part-was--he-fix-a-walk-and-he-meant-his-dad- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-creativity-that-went-into-this-video-i-love-the-idea-how-they-ended-going-back-with-each-other.-i-hope-this-becomes-one-of-pixar-short-films. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/did-the-people-accept-her-or-did-she-stay-her-true-self-and-stay-with-her-true-friends%3F-this-is-a-great-story! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-art-because-it's-really-good-but-i-couldn't-really-understand-some-things-you-guys-were-saying-%E2%80%8B 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-was-very-very-amazing-but-it-was-super-hard-to-hear-the-person-that-was-talking-with-the-music- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-how-she-was-good-at-doing-sports.-what-i-didnt-understand-is-how-in-1-day-she-was-hooked-on-junk-food-and-not-sports. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-was-the-conflict-in-your-video%2C-nice-job-with-the-drawings-and-the-story-spine-%3A) 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-can't-really-hear-but-i-like-the-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/idea-is-aewsome- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-the-details-in-the-drawings-were-so-cool!- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-very-cool-to-show-the-reality-of-the-real-world.-when-he-was-sad-did-he-have-anyone-and-why-didn't-they-accept-him%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-intresting-that-its-ok-to-make-mistakes-and-you-guys-want-to-learn-how-to--fix-your-mistakes-to-get-better 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-you-added-color-and-the-moral-of-the-story.--what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-character-because-they-seem-really-nice-and-seem-like-a-great-friend.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-different.-cool-%3Ad-good-drawing-aswell 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-adorable-i-love-the-drawings-and-the-effort-that-went-in-this%E1%95%99(%E2%96%80%CC%BF%C4%BA%CC%AF%E2%96%80%CC%BF-%CC%BF)%E1%95%97 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-were-very-cool-but-the-story-was-a-little-hard-to-follow-it-was-slightly-confusing- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-drawing- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-add-more-detail-to-the-story-but-its-very-good-tho- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-art 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-very-creative!-i-want-to-see-if-he-was-in-a-coma-or-just-woke-up-with-memory-loss. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-story.-making-the-monster-help-the-mc-is-cool 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/sounds-inserting 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-your-team-used-every-person-to-talk 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cute!-it-was-kinda-hard-to-hear-because-of-the-movements--in--the-microphone- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-i-love-every-thing-about-this 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-job.-i-love-the-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/sounds-inserting 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings-and-there-was-amazing-detail--in-it 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/they-were-very-nice-drawings-but-i-couldn't-really-hear-well-with-my-sound-i-had-to-turn-it-all-the-way-up-and-the-person-talking-was-going-to-fast-so-it-was-kind-of--hard-to-follow 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-amazing!-does-her-brother-ruin-her-ballet-career-or-not.-it-seems-like-a-very-interesting-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/sounds-inserting- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-realy-good-but-how-dose-falling-in-love-show-him-how-hes-selfish-maybe-if-you-somehow-showed-him-how-he-mad-other's-feel 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-could-not-here-anything-but-the-pics-look-good 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it--%3A) 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-guys-story-it-sounds-very-inserting 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-drawings-u-just-need-to-talke-louder 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-with-the-snake%2C-the-way-she-was-sitting-with-her-head-down-conveyed-a-lot-of-emotion-and-it-showed-us-how-she-felt 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/hi-ivy.-nice-job-on-this%3E-maybe-have-backstory-and-have-that-backstory-mean-something 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-your-story-spine!-and-i-think-you-led-up-to-the-moral-of-the-story-very-well.-nice-job-%3A) 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story-its-so-inserting- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-this-story-is-involving-school!-considering-nobody-really-used-school.-was-his-partner-ever-rude-or-didn't-like-alexander.-i-cant-wait-to-see-the-rest! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-work-is-good-u-just-need-to-talk-louder 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-dident-do-the-whole-moral-other-that-its-realy-good 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/honestly%2C-this-was-really-good.-i-like-the-moral-of-the-story.-make-sure-no-background-noises-though.-%3A) 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-your-character-needs-to-learn.-i-think-you-could-add-more-about-the-setting.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-story- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/why-dose-he-go-to-the-human-world-for-3-days-spacificly-i-think-the-story-is-great-thou 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-really-cute.-i-love-the-idea-of-a-bunny-going-to-the-gym.-is-it-a-bunny-sized-gym%3F-nice-job-with-the-drawings-as-well! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-absolutely-love-this!-the-drawings-are-so-unique%2C-and-the-story-plot-is-fantastic!-really-well-done. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-your-drawings%2C-and-your-story-line-is-interesting.-i-did-miss-a-couple-of-the-points-because-of-the-speed-your-talking-at%2C-but-it-well-done! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-i-would--just-love-if-you-gave-more-detail 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-how-there-were-people-who-bullied-her-(not-in-a-mean-way)-that-pushed-the-story-forward- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-drawings-and-very-interesting-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-amazing-and-is-sad!-i-love-how-the-character-grew-sooo-much!!-i-think-you-should-add-more-detail-to-your-drawings 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-inserting-was-how-the-fluffed--bear-has-powers.-what-i-didn't-understand-was-how-or-why-does-the-bear-have-powers-how-did-it-happen-or-why-does-he-even-have-it-in-the-first-place- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-this-character-when-i-first-saw-her-i-wanted-to-learn-more-she-is-a-very-interesting-character-if-that-sounds-weird-i'm-sorry-but-i-really-love-this-character 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-creativity-and-artwork-that-y'all-provided.--how-did-he-meet-all-of-these-creatures-and-i-would-love-you-to-elaborate-on-these-things-that-helped-him-recover.-can't-wait-to-hear-more! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-drawings.-less-murder-would-be-nice. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-detail-you-put-into-this-story-i-think-you-could-add-more-description-to-the-words. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-really-liked-your-story-it-had-a-good-plot-and-story-line-and-you-have-really-great-drawings. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-plot.-how-they-turned-into-a-human-was-a-very-creative-idea.-they-have-some-issues-coming-up-in-the-story-i-wonder-if-they-can-be-more-open-minded-when-facing-these-issues.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-very-beautiful-and-should-speak-a-little-louder-and-more-detail-to-the-first-drawings! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-you-could-add-a-little-more-pictures. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-facial-expressions.-of-your-characters.-i-think-you-could-have-a-little-more-detail. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-character-because-they-are-a-chip-to-a-human-but-i-would-like-to-know-how-they-turned-into-a-human. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-has-some-really-good-potential.-who-taught-him-all-of-this-information-on-how-to-take-care-of-the-bees%3F-can't-wait-to-hear-more-%3A) 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-plot.-its-a-really-sweet-story-with-a-great-message-good-job 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-story-and-thought-there-was-a-lot-of-character-development.-i-think-you-can-add-more-detail-and-personality-to-the-character-though. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/dont-worry-about-it-- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-is-the-story%3F-i-like-your-character%2C-but-i-kinda-want-to-know-what-the-story-is... 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-they-all-team-up-and-its-an-actual-fight-for-rights 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-the-moral-and-the-pictures- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawings-there-very-detailed 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-this-story-is-how-like-he-has-so-much-problems-with-the-people-and-has-kids-and-his-wife-died--that-is-sad-and--lot-of-problems-he-needs-to-overcome.-a-step-i-didn't%22t-understand-was-the-part-on-how-died-the-wife-die-in-a-car-crash-what-did-she-do-wrong-to-make-that-happen.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-is-amazing-and-i-love-how-much-detail-you-put-in 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-and-the-characters-and-their-background.--the-artwork-is-also-amazing-and-the-detail-you-all-put-into-the-drawings-really-show.-can't-wait-to-hear-more-about-your-story.-- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-the-plot-was-interesting.-how-did-you-get-the-idea-for-your-story%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-monster-only-came-to-life-to-help-the-main-character-make-new-friends.--i-understood-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fire 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-challenges-that-this-character-faces.-i-also-think-your-drawings-are-super-cool.-i-would-like-to-see-a-few-more-parts-that-are-left-questioned-such-as-the-social-life.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-liked-most-about-your-story-would-be-the-drawings-because-they-were-very-good.-also-i-like-the-part-were-the-human-meets-the-alien%2C-it's-a-cool-twist. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/make-a-cult 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/yes-sir-you-have-the-best-editor-and-i-want-to-get-his-autograph-and-he-is-the-coolest-person-ever- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-pictures-but-i-think-you-could-add-words-to-tell-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoyed-the-face--expression--for-each-character%2C-also-little-details-from-the-background- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-creative-this-story-is!!-the-character-is-super-inspirational.-i-think-you-should-add-more-detail-in-the-pictres. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-and-the-people-in-the-story.-one-thing-is-giving-more-detail-on-the-development-of-the-girl-and-her-background.-with-her-issues-and-problems.-other-than-that-i-love-the-story-and-the-plot.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story-i-think-it-has-a-couple-gaps-in-the-story-though 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-danny-finally-understood-that-he-should-and-can-be-himself. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-art 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-main-character-is-a-potato-that-can-turn-into-a-human.--i-understood-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story-good-job 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-how-the-2-people-from-different-tribes-have-a-friendship--because-it-is-very-inspiring-and-nice-how-the-story-is-made-%5D 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-your-characters-and-the-art-work-so-detailed-! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-and-it-is-ok-to-make-mistakes-and-you-wanna-learn-from-those-mistakes. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-drawings-they-are-beautiful!-the-story-spine-is-awsome-and-unique!%3C3- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-character-followed-her-dreams!!-one-thing-you-should-add-is-color.-it-would-really-make-the-story-pop! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-in-your-story-is-that-this-is-like-the-last-people-trying-to-survive-by-they're-wits.--what-i'm-wondering-is-how-exactly-the-city-became-an-apocalyptic-place. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story%2C--my-question-is-that-how-is-it-an-ordinary-teenagers-if-they-live-underwater. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-the-story-had-an-interesting-plot-with-the-swapping-body-thing.-how-did-they-body-swap%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-story-and-feel-like-i-can-relate-to-this-story-i-would-say-maybe-add-some-color-that-would-be-so-cool! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ok-improve-plsz 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-idea-but-maybe-next-time-do-the-assignment-correct-add-drawings-and-read-it-to-us.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-drawings-and-the-story!-keep-up-the-good-work 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-your-story-it-had-a-lot-of-detail- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/like-the-drawing-you-did-nice 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-it-i-cant-wait-to-see-it-is-is-so-good-and-sad-and-i-love-the-art-work. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool--._-.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-interesting-i-like-it-- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-interesting-i-like-it- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-so-talented-the-drawling-is-so-good-the-story-is-great-too 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-really-pulls-you-in-and-makes-you-care-for-each-character.-even-if-it's-just-a-sketch-the-artwork-is-amazingly-beautiful.-the-way-you-show-the-main-character-is-amazing-too-because-you-can-see-her-internal-traits-without-having-to-say-it-out-loud.-i 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-guys-did-really-good-with-your-drawings-and-i-love-how-you-elaborated-on-your-settings.--i-also-love-how-you-decided-to-add-information-on-social-life.-i-would-like-to-see-more-information-on-the-background-of-this-caracter. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-that-a-50-year-old-goes-to-high-school-really-like-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-moral-of-the-story-and-the-idea-of-change-in-their-society- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-it-good- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story-and-it-was-really-easy-to-understand!- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-moral-of-the-story.-i-think-you-should-make-the-story-a-little-shorter-by-making-the-pictures-more-detailed-so-they-express-more. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-story-but-is-there-more-to-the-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-just-make-sure-to-speak-up-next-time-please-it-was-hard-to-hear-what-you-were-saying-at-some-points- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-was-very-good-it-all-made-sense-and-i-love-the-story-it-reminds-me-of-the-short-film-lava.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-was-interesting-i-really-like-the-voice-that-you-used-to 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-main-character-can-see-ghosts.--i-understand-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-story-has-a-strong-and-easy-to-understand-concept-but%2C-you-could-work-on-the-character-development 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawling-there-very-good-the-story-was-also-great- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-can't-hear-you-but-the-story-looks-good- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/rap-up-the-moral-of-the-story-to-a-simple-point.-try-to-not-use-scribbles-but-i-understand-if-you-were-rushed.-some-things-are-to-sudden-a-dont-make-sense.--has-potenial-though. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-can-go-farrr-%5C 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is--interesting-and-i-like-the-story-- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/who-kidnapped-amythyst- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/why-couldn't-she-see-anybody%3F-who-is-the-person-controlling-her%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-drawings-and-you-added-a-lot-of-detail-to-your-story%2C-your-moral-is-very-powerful 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-confused-about-what-the-story--is-about.-this--is-not-telling-me-much-so-i-think-you-can-improve-on-the-story-its-self-but-it-will-be-good- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-detail-you-put-in-the-drawings-and-the-idea-that-there-always-another-way-in-life 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it-keep-up-the-good-work 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-duck-you-did-it-looks-good-and-like-the-idea- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-that-the-people-behind-the-plant-are-intentionally-making-it-dangerous 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-2-tribes-and-the-elements.-also-i-really-like-your-drawings-they're-really-good. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-drawings-you-did-a-great-job-of-showing-the-emotions-in-the-drawings- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/how-did-the-old-man-find-out-that-the-world-was-a-simulation%3F-i-love-the-drawings-and-i-think-this-story-has-a-lot-of-potential. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/thiis-can-go-far-it-is-cool- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-was-pretty-good 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-drawings-are-very-cool-and-interesting 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-drawings-but-the-music-was-really-loud-so-i-couldn't-really-hear-your-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-city-and-the-idea-good-jub- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story-and-i-also-really-like-your-drawling-too- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-vary-cool- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawings!-its-a-great-story-spine-too 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-everybody-just-breaks-out-singing-and-dancing-whenever-they-want.-i-understood-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-was-amazing-and-i-agree-don't-try-to-be-something-you're-not-it-will-only-make-you-misreble 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-a-very-great-story-and-i-love-the-plot.-i-like-how-you-show-people-discouraging-her-whether-she-was-a-narwhal-or-a-person.-you-clearly-explained-everything-and-i-think-this-story-would-make-a-great-short! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is--so-much-i-love-this-story-already-and-cant-wait-to-see-what-else-you-add-to-this. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-basic-idea-but-more-detail-would-be-nice.-and-why-does-everyone-do-the-same-thing-and-when-did-it-start-to-happen-that-everyone-doe-the-same-thing-every-day 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-content-of-his-life-i-think-it-cool 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-drawings!-if-i-tried-drawing-like-that-it-would-probably-be-a-flop%2C-lol.-anyways-i-love-the-story.-good-job- 2021-11-01 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like--the-music-in-the-background-i-think-it-suits-the-story-overall-its-great 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-confused-on-both-the-moral-and-the-name.-- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-so-funny-i-feel-like-i-was-going-to-cry-of-laufter 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-seemed-like-the-steps-did-not-line-up-with-each-other- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-short-film-i-feel-like-i-can-relate-to-it-in-lots-of-ways-%2C-one-thing-i-would-say-is-just-maybe-adding-some-colors-but-i-really-like-it. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-sudden-problem-that-happens-in-the-story-and-how-it-is-unexpected.-i-didn't-really-understand-the-final-part-because-since-he-is-a-loner-he-shouldn't-have-many-friends.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/how-did--his-dad-die-and-also-what-are-the-wishes-he-put-in-his-book 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story!-i-love-the-drawings%2C-but-what-makes-him-so-addicted-to-the-game%2C-and-how-does-he-realize-he-needs-to-stop-playing%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-fact-that-it-emphasizes--the-fact-the-differences-can-also-be-a-strength- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what--i-found-interesting-in-your-story-was-how-you-decided-to-make-a-separate-drawings-for-each-of-your-characters-and-backstory-for-each-of-them. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-he-realizes-his-mistakes-at-the-end-and-that-he-doesn't-let-his-past-mistakes-define-him.-i-don't-understand-what-mistakes-he-made. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-really-good-but-next-time-add-more-detail-please 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool-story%2C-what-i-found-most-interesting-is-how-he-wanted-to-share-his-creative-ideas%2C-what-were-those-ideas-though%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this--story-was-really- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-dont-understand-what-his-connection-to-the-old-world-is%3F--still-a-really-great-idea- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-character-was-so-interested-in-opening-a-university.-but-the-step-that-i-didn't-understand-was-why-do-the-two-planets-combined-it-does-not-really-make-sense-to-the-story.--%E2%80%8B 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-but-maybe-you-could-have-explained-your-story-more 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-stork-takes-care-of-the-babies.--i-understood-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-don't-really-understand-why-he-wants-to-learn-and-why-he-has-to-learn-how-to-be-content.-i-love-how--he's-a-pretty-relatable-character. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story-a-lot-its-very-intresting-and-how-everyone-is-controlled-by-string- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-wonder-what-his-job-was-before-and-why-he-got-fired 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-the-art-also-at-one-point-we-didnt-have-school-so-i 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/how-did-joe-become-a-billianaire- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-so-cool-i-feel-like-you-can-work-on-the-music-and-it-cut-out-during-the-last-one-and-it-is-cool 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-addition-of-the-midas-touch-and-how-it-developed-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-is-the-main-character-is-a-outlaw.--one-thing-that-i-don't-understand-is-what-is-the-moral-of-the-story%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-concept-and-how-is-was-executed- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like--how-the-characters-are-made.-and-the-drawings.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-names-%3A) 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/something-i-found-interesting-is-that-there-is-a-potato-world 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-were-great- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-add-more-detail-to-the-story%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-is-definitely-improvement-room-with-talking%2C-but-other-then-that-its-great.-something-you-could-improve-on-is-how-fast-you-talk.-if-your-speech-was-a-little-bit-slower-i-would-understand-the-emotion-and-what-your-saying-a-lot-better. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-zooming-in-was-great 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-creative-this-is-and-put-a-lot-of-effort-on-everything 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story!-what-was-his-job-that-fired-for%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story.-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-that-the-two-characters-are-form-different-elements.--i-really-like-the-moral-of-the-story.--a-question-i-have-is-in-the-future-does-everyone-join-together%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-well-done%2C-the-art-if-fantastic.-the-zooming-in-on-the-facial-expressions-and-the-talent-in-the-drawing-is-amazing.-this-is-definitely-something-that-pixar-would-make-and-do.-the-amount-of-emotion-in-that-two-minute-video-is-crazy. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-from-this-team.-sorry-for-the-background-music.-we-could-not-turn-it-off. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-story-spine!-its-very-clear%2C-and-tells-us-exactly-where-everything-is-going.--i-do-wish-we-were-able-to-hear-more-of-why-connie-is-so-mean%3F--other-than-that%2C-i-like-how-much-work-you-put-into-the-drawings.--the-background-could-use-some-work%2C-but-otherwise%2C-its-perfect.-i'm-ready-to-see-the-final! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/noice!-why-space-though. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-artwork-you-did-for-the-drawings-and-the-story-is-intresting- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-very-well-written.-the-art-work-is-along-with-the-the-story-makes-it-powerful.-nice-job! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/one-thing-i-don't-understand-is-why-he-passed-out-no-one-said-that-he-was-stressed-out-we-only-knew-that-he-had-a-lot-of-work 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-sounds-really-cool-but-maybe-add-more-detail-to-the-story-like-why-did-the-ai-attack-jeff%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-aspect-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-the-conflict-resulted-into-the-solution.-it-definitely-has-potential-and-i'd-like-to-see-where-it-goes-in-the-future. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-idea%2C-and-the-story-line-is-very-interesting.-i-like-the-ending-as-well.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-they-drawings-good-job! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-part-where-he-goes-to-a-adventure-in-his-dreams-but-you-should-put-more-detail-into-the-person- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-and-the-drawings-and-i'm-excited-to-see-how-it-comes-out. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-moral-of-the-story!-this-is-a-very-creative-idea! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-your-story-is-how-the-drawings-got-more-and-more-creative-i-think-you-can-add-a-little-more-detail-in-the-story--your-telling-but-overall-good-job. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-this-story-has-a-lot-of-potential-because-the-way-the-story-is-built.-i-like-how-he-prints-money-to-help-people-to-realize-that-its-better-just-to-be-yourself.-the-story-has-a-great-moral-and-is-showed-in-a-fantastic-way. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-but-i'm-a-little-confused-on-who-the-jhan-is.-i-think-it-would-help-to-give-a-bit-of-backstory.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-if-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-much-fun-this-sounds-and-how-detailed-it-is 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-everything-is-controlled-by-strings 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-didn't-understand-why-she-developed-relationships-at-the-end-because-we-as-the-audience-are-never-told-that-she-has-trouble-with-relationships- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-vid!-how-did-the-stings-come-out-of-know-where%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-pictures%2C-and-you-are-one-of-the-only-people-that-have-good-audio!!!!!-i-like-the-story-line. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/like-the-drawings.-two-criteria%2C-questions-however.--1.-how--does-he-live-an-ordinary-teenagers-life-if-he-lives-in-an-underwater-utopia%3F-and-2.-where-did-the-magical-necklace-come-from%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-want-to-start-off-by-saying-how-i-like-the-drawings%2C-and-how-they-match-up-with-what-your-saying.--however%2C-they-could-use-more-time-and-work-on-refining-them.-in-addition%2C--i-like-your-story-line%2C-but-i-would-want-to-hear-more-details-about-the-plot.-it-seems-kinda-rushed-at-points%2C-and-unclear.-when-he-falls-into-a-spiraling-mental-state%2C-we-aren't-exactly-sure-about-why%3F--another-tip%2C-when-you-are-recording%2C-try-wait-a-few-seconds-before-and-after-speaking.-i-think-that-some-details-were-cut-off. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-story- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-you-gave-some-detail-in-your-picture 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-but-i-dont-understand-the-morale-of-the-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-artwork-was-very-good-and-it-was-captivating.-i-think-that-other-people-must-have-said-this%2C-but-you-can't-hear-you-guys-over-the-music.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-design-of-chip-as-a-potato-and-as-a-human-is-cool-%3A).-the-background-has-good-detail-it-makes-it-look-life-like.-sometimes-i-wonder-if-moe-can-turn-into-a-potato. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story--i-think-its-a-good-life-story-and-a-good-motivation--story-for-people--i-like-your-drawings-overall-great-job! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/something-that-i-thought-was-the-most-interesting-was-how-a-lonely-kid-thinks-back-on-a-fictional-character-to-support-him.-the-idea-of-the-story-is-very-good-and-i-think-it-has-a-lot-of-potential. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-chowder-is-really-cute-and-i-think-that-the-story-is-really-interesting 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story%2C-how-did-timmy-wake-up-with-his-mom-after-falling-off-a-cillf. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/something-interesting-about-the-story-is-the-portal-and-them-teleporting-at-the-same-time-to-tell-the-public 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-if-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-creative-this-is- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-that-you-added-expression-to-the-faces-of-people.-one-thing-i-would-have-added-is-labels.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-and-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-on-the-story. 2021-11-01 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-can't-express-how-much-i-love-this.-i-love-all-the-drawings-that-help-us-clearly-understand-the-where-and-what-aspect-of-the-story.-the-story-spine's-details-and-words-are-moving%2C-and-quickly-describe-whats-happening-in-the-greatest-detail.-it-really-makes-me-feel-like-i-am-right-there-looking-into-this-scene-happening.-i-also-really-like-how-we-really-grow-attached-to-the-flower's-feelings-and-wants.--we-are-excited-when-we-learn-about-the-lover%2C-and-are-sad-when-we-see-the-flower's-own-life-almost-go-to-waste.-love-it!-i-can't-wait-to-see-your-final! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-story-sounds-pretty-inserting-and-your-drawings-are-really-good.-one-think-i-think-you-can-work-on-is-making-your-voice-more-clear-and-make-sure-theirs-no-background-noise--so-we-can-hear-you-but-overall-good-job!- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-liked-most-about-your-story-is-the-drawings-and-how-this-can-and-actually-does-happen-in-real-life.-i-love-the-perspective-and-detail-on-your-drawings.-the-only-thing-is-that-i-didn't-really-connect-to-the-character-and-the-main-problem-isn't-very-clear.-good-job-keep-it-up! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job%2C-amazing-detail. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-is-that-bob-changed-dramatically-throughout-the-story.-bob-went-from-not-appreciating-his-mom-to-being-really-grateful.-i-thought-that-was-really-cool-and-interesting. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-line-was-very-interesting.-maybe-you-could-try-to-develop-your-space-scene%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-if-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-in-every-drawing-you-can-tell-what-they-were-doing- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-chowder-was-a-comedian%2C-i-wonder-what-story-he-slipped-on-ice-on. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-was-that-your-story--escalated-quickly.-it-was-interesting-how-your-character-developed.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-concpet-and-the-drawings 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-are-you-have-done!-you-did-a-good-job-on-detail. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-detail-on-every-drawing-and-what-they-are-for- 2021-11-01 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-digital-drawing%2C-i-think-you-could-have-sid-more. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/omg-i-love-the-story%2C-you-were-talking-about-other-elements%2C-are-they-going-to-meet-any-others%3F-%2C-i-like-how-the-characters-met. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-that-sophie-is-mean-in-the-beginning-but-changes-at-the-end-it-is-very-good- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-was-how-ai-attacked-jeff.-why-did-the-ai-attack%3F-did-jeff-do-something-to-make-the-ai-mad%3F-what-was-a-bit-confusing-was-that-the-ai-came-out-of-nowhere.-why-did-the-ai-attack%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-much-detail-you've-added-to-your-story.-the-moral-is-really-clear-throughout-the-whole-video. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-but-the-story-kind-of-confused-me-also-i-have-a-question-why-is-it-not-allowed-to-interact-with-humans%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-illustration-and-i-found-them-the-most-interesting-part-of-the-story.-i-think-you-should-include-a-voice-over-or-a-description-of-whats-happening-because-it's-very-difficult-to-understand-what's-going-on. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-that-any-time-of-day-anyone-could-just-break-out-into-singing-and-dancing-and-sophie-finding-her-true-self-even-though-she-might-not-be-able-to-sing-and-dance-but-that's-ok-because-she-accepts-the-other-people-for-who-they-are.-i-didnt-really-understand-why-she-couldnt-dance-because-everyone-has-different-styles-of-dance-and-it-could-be-just-vibing-to-the-music! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/beautiful-visuals%2C-and-while-the-music-is-nice%2C-it-makes-it-almost-impossible-to-understand-what-is-being-said. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-the-relationships-between-the-lil-girl-and-the-bear-is-something-that-a-lot-of-people-have-and-she-has-a-strong-support-system.-i-think-that-is-so-sweet-and-i-love-it. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-is-interesting%2C-but-i-was-confused-about-the-mission.-i-think-it-would-help-if-you-clarified-what-exactly-it-is. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-well-done.-its-pretty-simple-yet-works-well.-the-only-big-problem-is-that-the-music-is-louder-than-almost-everyone's-voice.-mainly-the-last-few-seconds%2C-as-the-voice-is-so-quite-and-the-music-so-loud-its-impossible-to-hear.-but-the-drawings-of-the-story-looks-nice 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-most-is-that-is-that-when-they-go-up-in-space-and-they-lied-haply-ever-after- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-joe-dying-and-coming-back-to-life.-the-only-thing-you-could-change-would-be-to-have-joe's-drawings-the-same-in-all-of-the-scenes.-i-especially-like-the-drawing-of-the-car-going-sideways-in-the-car-crash-scene. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-settlers-killed-the-outlaws-family.-and-great-job-on-the-drawings%2C-they-were-so-good! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-royal-donkey. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-plot-and-story-but-i-could-barely-hear-the-talking-over-the-music-but-i-really-like-how-they-can-transfer-they're-consciousness-into-a-robot.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-portal.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-relatable-setting%2C-i-couldn't-hear-anything-though%2C-i-don't-know-if-its-the-audio-or-just-no-talking%2C-otherwise-it-looks-pretty-good- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-overcoming-your-fears-and-not-being-afraid-to-fail.-what-if-you-compare-the-main-character-with-it's-peers-to-build-on-that-fear-of-failing%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-fact-that-jery's-brother-gets-jelouse-of-jery-but-i-don't-understand-why-the-public-made-a-vote 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-seems-nice%2C-and-i-feel-like-harper's-character-can-be-easily-relatable-to-some-people%2C-and-she-has-a-cute-design-as-well.-has-what-causes-her-get-off-her-computer-been-decided-yet%3F-i'm-curious-as-to-what-the-reason-would-be.-the-story-feels-a-bit-predictable-at-first%2C-but-i-think-that-whatever-causes-her-to-get-off-her-computer-has-the-possibility-of-changing-that%2C-depending-on-what-it-is.-i-think-the-story-flows-nicely%2C-and-has-a-clear-moral%2C-pretty-well-done. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-his-so-called--friends-were-talking-bad-about-him-because-it-makes-me-wonder-if-he-really-thought-they-were-his-friends-or-not.-everything-for-me-was-understandable!-good-job! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-and-the-exicution%2C-but-i-feel-like-you-could-add-some-more-detal-about-what-happend-after. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-included-a-side-character-and-a-mini-conflict-with-that-character.-i-think-you-should-make-what-the-main-conflict-is-more-clear.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-stories-that-take-a-metaphor-(if-these-walls-could-talk)-and-make-them-real 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-drawing! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good--good--good--good- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea%2C-why-does-donky-fall-in-love-with-the-kraken%3F-very-creative-though-i-like-it 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-over-all-story-is-interesting-and-the-art-is-nice.-maybe-for-future-video-making-don%E2%80%99t-add-the-music-in-the-background-it%E2%80%99s-a-bit-hard-to-great-you. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-conflict-and-resolution%2C-however-it's-hard-to-tell-how-the-characters-changed-throughout-the-story-and-the-steps-were-a-bit-unclear.-i-love-the-art-very-good-job! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-here!-mark-seems-like-a-pretty-interesting-character!-the-environmentalist-message-is-really-creative!-the-dialog-cuts-out-at-the-end%2C-and-i-think-the-progression-of-him-figuring-it-out-could-be-more-natural%2C-so-maybe-he-slowly-works-out-how-to-get-the-bees-back%2C-sorta-trial-and-error-like-the-scientific-method%3F-i-do-like-the-idea-of-new-york-getting-more-ecologically-devastated-as-the-bees-are-gone. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-idea-was-interesting%2C-but-i-felt-like-it-was-incomplete.-rather-than-ending-the-story-with-him-passing-out%2C-maybe-you-could-use-that-as-his-low-point-in-the-story.-you-could-make-it-so-that-he-feels-like-he's-never-going-to-get-better-and-gain-confidence%2C-but-then-he-some-how-overcomes-this-(maybe-a-friend-in-the-debate-club-helps-him). 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-the-sunflower-got-picked.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-idea%2C-i-think-that-it-could-be-used-to-create-a-great-detailed-story.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-variation-between-the-people-in-the-drawing.-i-think-that-you-should-have-the-internal-struggles-be-less-surface-level.-i-think-that-your-story-will-be-great! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-no-music%2C-i-think-it-is-a-little-irrational-that-just-because-the-mayor-says-no-music-that-the-parents-instantly-hate-music.-i-think-that-it-has-some-good-potential%2C-but-i-think-you-could-add-something-to-the-snake-that-makes-the-girl-like-it.-also-does-the-girl-have-a-name. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-advanced-technology-but-i-didn't-really-understand-when-you-said-that-he-kept-switching.-is-he-switching-bodies-because-his-consciousness-is-moving-or-is-he-like-teleporting-places-for-some-apparent-reason.-i-also-didn't-really-get-the-moral-of-your-story-other-than-just-a-regular-revenge-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-that-the-main-character-is-a-unisaur-and-that-he-is-a-comedian- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-robot-idea-but-i-don't-understand-what-happens-at-the-end 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-when-he-mane-charter-gets-with-his-friends-a-fate-the-sheon 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-having-unknown-entities-in-whats-considered-a-%22normal-land.%22-the-moral-is-well-fit-between-the-situations-of-illegal-acts-and-doing-whats-right.-the-only-thing-that-i-would-want-to-clarify-is-going-into-detail-about-the-watch-and-what-happens-after.-how-does-your-character-realize-his-actions-while-traveling-through-time%3F-overall%2C-great-story-idea%2C-interested-to-see-how-he-experiences-time-travel. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art%2C-also-the-remembering-family-to-gain-courage-is-a-good-theme-to-have%2C-it-could-be-improved-by-giving-more-detail-about-how-she-expresses-herself-and-develops-as-a-character 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/at-last-we-finally-get-the-intense-and-very-serious-backstory-to-why-jalen-loves-his-beloved-top-hat-so-much.-also-jess-is-a-0%2F7-character-she-is-a-monster-she-is-the-worst-and-jalen-deserves-better. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-story-idea-it-is-super-amazing-the-picture-really-reflect--the-character-.-this-owrld-sounds-really-cool-and-i-am-so-excited-to-see-where-this-goes. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story%2C-but-who-lived-before-them-there%2C-why-had-the-wall-never-talked-before%2C-is-the-face-a-ghost%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-a-great-story-%26-moral%2C-i-really-like-how-ray-is-as-a-character-%26-how-relatable-he-is-with-not-loving-himself%2C-very-nice-job.-excited-to-see-what-you-have-next.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-a-dinosaur%2C-its-very-unique-and-it's-the-first-one-i've-seen-that-involves-animals%2C-maybe-to-make-it-better-you-could-add-backstory-of-the-dinosaur-and-his-personality-but-other-than-that-very-good-job-with-everything. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-over-all-story-is-super-interesting.-but-it-could-be-a-bit-more-clear.-the-art-is-super-nice.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-you-could-have-added-a-better-ending-but-i-love-the-art-work-and-the-idea. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-line-if-the-potato-becoming-really-close-friends-with-a-human. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/one-thing-i-liked-was-the-plot.-one-thing-i-think-you-could-have-added-is-a-setting.-but-i-liked-the-detail-on-the-person. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-idea-of-how-a-girl-drawn-to-her-computer-destroys-it-but-i-believe-that-you-should-also-put-more-depth-into-why-she-destroys-her-computer%2C-and-also-i-feel-like-you-should-display-strongly-how-this-character-feels-so-it-shows-the-audience-a-sense-of-connection-or-feeling-on-why-shes-doing-what-shes-doing. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-he-got-lost-and-found-friends. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-makes-chowder-being-a-unisaur-so-important%3F-i-like-the-idea-of-fantastical-creatures%2C-i'm-just-curious-if-that-has-any-prevalence-in-the-story..-and-with-the-new-characters-that-help-him%2C-how-would-him-having-memory-loss-make-it-different-than-say%2C-him-feeling-distraught-and-just-some-friends-he-has-helping-him-overcome-that%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-character.-i-think-you-should-include-more-detail-to-you-conflict.-ex%3B-%22because-of-that-jamal-got-closer-to-his-friend-and-got-lost-sometimes%22-it-would-be-great-if-you-added-more-details-to-that-part%3B-how-did-he-get-lost%3F-what-were-his-obstacles%3F-this-story-has-potential!-good-job! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-a-bit-more-details-will-make-it-better 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-most-interesting-part-of-the-story-was-when-chip-met-mo.-will-mo-tell-his-friends-about-chip%3F-will-people-accept-chip-for-who-he-is%3F-what-was-a-bit-confusing-is-why-he-needed-to-go-to-the-human-world-he-could-of-found-new-potato-friends.-but-overall-this-has-potential-good-job!! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-of-the-story-seems-nice%2C-though-leaving-us-to-read-it-and-without-images-to-have-us-do-it.-its-clearly-rushed-and-done-lazily%2C-though-if-drawn-upon-and-actual-work-put-it%2C-it-could-be-something-good. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-good-story--make-the-character-a-actual-person--id-watch-this-if-it-was-a-story--- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-that-your-character-is-not-upfront-but-more-in-the-back-but-what-i-don't-understand-is-how-did-he-get-cancer%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/im-confused-about-the-concept- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-artwork-its-very-cute-and-very-artistic-it-was-very-good. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-2nd-and--3rd-drawing-you-are-so-talented.-i-would-recommend-that-you-add-more-to-the-1st-and-4th-drawing-because-it-looks-very-bland.-i-would-recommend-that-you-speak-louder-because-i-could-not-really-hear-you.-i-am-excited-to-see-your-story-unfold.-- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-that-her-brother-called-her-out! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-artwork-in-this%2C-i-think-that-you-could-maybe-explain-the-main-characters-backstory-or-motives-a-little-bit-more%2C-but-besides-that-i-like-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story.-i-was-confused-why-her-parents-didn't-teach-her-to-dance-and-sing-when-she-was-young.-was-it-because-they-didn't-want-her-to-feel-like-she-had-to-do-anything%3F-or-was-she-just-too-bad-at-it-that-they-gave-up%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-and-over-all-story-is-interesting.-for-future-video-making-maybe-no-music-in-the-background-cause-you-can-barely-what-your-are-saying. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-plot-a-lot-and-i-liked-the-way-you-described-everything.-maybe-you-could-give-a-little-more-backstory-of-the-main-character-just-so-we-know-how-he-is%2C-other-than-that-very-good-job- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-is-good 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-fleshed-out-story-and-a-nice-concept%2C-well-done! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-inst-resting-in-the-story-is-that-the-main-character-was-fighting-for-his-right.-but-it-was-hard-to-understand--because-its-hard-to-hear-- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-art-and-a-surprisingly-deep-story%2C--i-wish-that-it-was-explained-the-situation-a-bit-better-though%2C-like-why-did-she-see-the-ghost-as-well-as-russel%3F-is-it-because-they-both-lost-someone-they-cared-for%2C--did-the-ghost-disappear-after-they-got-over-them%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-i-the-the-drawings-could-be-a-bit--more-clear-but-there-than-that-i-really-like-your-story-.-i-think-however-that-maybe-you-could-add-some-color. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-and-the-art-work-and-the-story-but-i-feel-like-it-was-skipped-over-a-little. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/decent-drawings%2C-i-really-like-the-moral. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/dos-he-have-a-lot-of-frends 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-idea%2C--i-like-the-crossover-where-they-watch-kong-fu-panda-and-get-courage%2C-it-could-be-improved-a-bit-if-it-went-more-into-detail-about-how-kong-fu-panda-gave-them-courage 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-think-you-could-improve-the-drawing-by-adding-more-detail-but-overal-i-like-it 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-idea-on-how-plants-become-human-like-and-that-the-problem-in-the-story-is-a-character-that-is-afraid-and-uncomfortable-to-open-up%2C-the-moral-to-your-story-is-don't-isolate-yourself-in-my-opinion-i-find-isolating-myself-from-others-could-be-good-sometimes-i-think-you-should-change-your-moral-to-don't-isolate-yourself-completely-from-others-because-that-can-lead-to-a-lot-of-sadness 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-story%2C-but-where-did-the-treasure-come--from%2C-how-did-the-fake-friend-get-construction-machines%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/whats-the-moral%3F-what-does-the-character-learn%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-moral-of-the-story.-but-i-think-it-would-be-better-if-it-was-drawn.-but-i-like-the-plot. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-time-traveling-idea-where-her-goes-on-a-mission-to-look-for-his-father-in-time.-because-he-originally-met-his-father-during-his-funeral-will-there-be-a-loop-in-time%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea%2C-but-you-should-have-used-actual-art-instead-of-google-images%2C-good-idea-though. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/like-the-overall-story-and-thought-it-was-interesting.-maybe-add-a-bit-more-conflict-and-making-the-story-a-bit-more-clear. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-girl-made-friends-with-a-tree 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawings-and-story.-i-would-recommend-that-you-take-the-music-out-or-mute-it-because-it-is-very-hard-to-hear-you.-i-would-recommend-that-you-make-the-second-drawings-a-darker-color-because-i-could-not-see-it.-i-am-excited-to-see-your-story-unfold.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story%2C-%26-the-characters%2C-but-i-wonder-what-the-moral-is-%26-how-joe-grows%2C-especially-with-how-the-ending-is.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-the-dinosaur-slipped-and-fell-then-it-lost-its-memory. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-dont-know-why-you-want-school-to-exist-but-fine-i'll-go-along-with-it%2C--the-way-they-make-the-school-is-kinda-messed-up%2C-like-they-burn-it-down-and-then-bribe-them-to-make-it-again. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawings-and-all-the-different-scenes--but-i-dont-really-understand-what-stocks-have-to-do-with-ruben-is-hes-doesnt-even-trade-or-stuff-like-that-and-the-end-of-the-video-cut-off.-good-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-can-buy-the-ghosts-but-the-talking-animals%3F-really-takes-the-realism-out-of-it 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-used-the-common-trope-of-having-to-accept-yourself-and-your-family-members%2C-no-matter-how-little-they're-around.-i-also-liked-the-art-and-the-story-a-lot.-although%2C-i-do-wonder-how-a-fortune-teller-and-the-boy-gaining-the-power-to-turn-anything-he-touches-into-gold-correlate.-i-also-liked-how-you-added-realism-to-the-story-by-making-it-so-that-the-other-kids-wanted-to-use-the-boy-their-advantage.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-story%2C-where-are-the-pictures%3F-and-your-story-is-framed-nice 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-seemed-interesting%2C-but-the-whole-potato-%2F-human-world-thing-rather-confuses-me.-what-important-story-relevance-is-their-to-be-gained-from-chip-being-a-potato-and-not-something-like-a-leprechaun-or-a-horse%3F-try-to-think-of-what-character-could-possibly-fit-better%3F-this-seems-like-it-has-potential%2C-it's-just-something-that-i-feel-needs-a-bit-of-reworking. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-plot.-one-thing-i-noticed-is-that-you-could-have-added-more-detail-also%2C-you-could-have-added-more-of-a-setting.-but-over-all-i-liked-the-plot. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art%2C-and-the-sketchy-feel-to-it%2C-and-also-the-idea%2C-but-the-theme-is-a-little-cliche-but-its-great. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/put-more-detale-into-the-college-student.-a-stick-figure-doesn't-really-represent--a-college-student.-i-really-like-the-storyline-and-the-moral. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-this-idea-kinda-reminds-me-of-that-scene-in-incredibles-where-bob-is-in-his-cramped-office-and-seems-gigantic%2C-which-i-really-like%2C-and-while-i-am-a-little-confused-on-what-happens-for-the-second-act-(only-one-%22because-of-that%22)-i-really-do-like-this-idea%2C-and-the-artwork-is-really-well-done. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-the-complex-story-and-how-there's-a-lot-to-the-characters.-i-think-you-should-think-about-how-you'll-incorperate-this-whole-story-in-a-short-animation%2C-it's-a-very-creative-story-but-there-is-way-too-much-going-on%3B-if-you-simplify-the-story-a-bit-i-think-it-would-be-easier-to-identify-the-steps-and-meaning-of-the-story.-good-job! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-potatoes! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-and-the-drawing%2C-i-thought-everything-was-clear-and-understandable.-the-drawings-were-very-clear-and-showed-the-exact-emotions. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-part-of-the-moral-is-great%2C-very-good-story-line%2C-but-why-did-the-garbage-runners-trample-and-destroy-crops%2C-just-for-the-fun-of-it%2C-did-she-do-something-to-them-when-she-was-younger%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-amazing-the-story-the-art-everything-your-so-going- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-art-is-cool%2C-but-i-dont-really-understand-how-she-became-friends-with-the-tree.-the-story-is-pretty-good-and-emotional 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-good%2C-i-would-draw-not-stick-figures 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-premise-seems-interesting%2C-and-i-also-find-it-interesting-how-the-visuals-were-done-with-picrews.-the-characters-could-probably-be-developed-better%2C-and-i-think-the-lesson-or-moral-is-unclear.-i-think-it-would-help-a-lot-if-what-the-characters-learned-or-gained-from-this-experience-was-mentioned-to-the-audience. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-making-it-a-video-that-take-you-through-the-story.-i-would-recommend-that-you-hold-the-camera-still-because-it-was-very-shaky.-i-would-recommend-that-you-speak-a-little-louder-because-it-is-hard-to-hear-you.-i-am-excited-to-see-your-story-unfold.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-is-how-he-got-kicked-out-which-relates-to-an-actual-problem-of-people-becoming-homeless-when-they-are-18-years-old-because-they-don't-have-a-place-to-live.-great-idea-and-i-like-how-it-relates-to-real-world-problems 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-how-you-can-clearly-see-the-stages-of-teddy-and-ashley's-journey-and-growth-together.-i-think-you-should-maybe-add-more-conflict-to-the-story%2C-and-show-ashley-and-teddy-when-she's-all-grown-up. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-and-the-drawing%2C-i-thought-everything-was-clear-and-understandable.-the-drawings-were-very-clear-and-showed-the-exact-emotions. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-overall-story-and-think-it%E2%80%99s-really-interesting.-what-if-the-conflict-was-someone-having-a-phone.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-a-ghost-wanting-to-be-alive-to-have-friends-and-interact-with-human-life-and-the-idea-that-she-can-grant-another-life-is-really-good-because-it-gives-your-story-depth-with-a-problem-and-a-main-goal-that-can-relate-to-each-other.-i-like-the-art-btw-you-did-good- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-like-the-car-is-moving-and-so-are-the-trees.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-core-idea-is...-interesting.-but-i-don't-see-how-the-characters-developed-as-better-people 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings-that-you-have%2C-i-think-that-they-really-show-emotion.-i-think-that-you-should-expand-more-on-the-idea-of-the-choppers.-i-think-that-you-should-expand-more-on-the-setting.-i-think-that-your-story-can-easily-show-emotion-and-morals. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-interesting-story%2C-i-love-the-plot-and-the-way-you-described-everything.-i-think-maybe-you-could-give-a-little-more-backstory-on-sophie%2C%2C-so-we-get-to-know-her-a-little-better.-i-really-love-the-detail-and-effort-out-into-the-drawing-and-the-plot%2C-you-can-really-tell-you-tried-very-hard-on-this-and-its-just-very-good-in-general 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-really-well-done%2C-the-art-and-story-telling-are-very-good-and-it-was-easy-to-understand-and-had-a-great-moral 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-drew-the-bird-with-an-8-pack.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-would-love-to-see-other-drawing-to-show-the-ideas-and-characters.-and-i-wonder-how-the-main-character-develops-and-what-he-learns. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-was-very-good.-i-really-liked-the-story-and-the-idea%2Fconcept-of-it.-two-people-that-hate-each-other%2C-but-end-up-putting-their-differences-aside.-i-like-how-you-added-this-common-trope-to-your-story-and-the-pacing-of-it-was-also-actually-pretty-good.-however%2C-i-didn't-understand-whether-the-two-people-chose-two-different-roads-in-real-life%2C-or-emotionally.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-idea-of-a-world-without-schools-is-interesting%2C-but-i-wonder-why-there-isn't-any-schools.-is-it-because-no-one-ever-thought-of-the-idea-or-were-they-all-destroyed-long-in-the-past%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-inclusion-of-him-struggling-with-his-mental-health%2C-unfortunately%2C-this-is-a-really-common-issue.-i-like-your-art-and-your-concept.-i'm-wondering-what-helped-him-get-better%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-idea-however-i-would-have-liked-to-have-seen-the-world-you-are-putting-your-character-in-i-would-have-liked-to-see-some-drawings.-i-think-this-story-has-a-lot-of-potential--but-i-think-it-need-a-little-bit-more-in-the-drawing-department.-other-than-that-i-really-like-the-idea-good-job. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it-but-i-think-jacob-could-do-better-but-i-love-you-jacob--jake 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-has-great-potential%2C-along-with-your-character-who-just-wants-to-help-her-community%2C-but-i-wonder-the-moral-is.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-character-designs-but-im-kind-of-confused-from-the-story-i-was-so-confused-why-does-mayoko-hate-her-brother%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-story-and-i-think-its-really-unique%2C-the-only-thing-i-think-you-could-do-differently-is-maybe-make-the-art-a-little-it-more-clear-but-besides-that-the-story-and-overall-is-great. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/how-is-it-that-he-can-live-in-an-underwater-utopia-and-have-an-ordinary-teenagers-life%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-his-struggle-being-rejection%2C-i-was-wondering-why-he-was-getting-ungrateful-to-his-mom-because-he-was-being-rejected-from-his-job.-also-if-there-was-a-black-hole-in-an-alleyway-and-it-was-big-enough-to-see-it-would-probably-consume-the-whole-planet.-i-love-the-drawing-style-that-you-do- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing-a-lot-and-i-also-like-the-story-but-i-feel-that-i-could-have-a-better-ending-and-a-morale-of-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-moral-and-interesting-story%2C-but-how-did-it-go-from-researching-to-throwing-stuff-away%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-idea.-dream-story's-that-show-a-different-perspective-to-distract-from-the-horrors-of-having-cancer-is-very-good-and-i-like-the-world-that-they-are-in%2C-although-there-are-not-many-descriptive-features-of-the-character-that-help-them-stick-out-from-everyone-else.-besides-that-its-a-great-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-drawings%2C-very-good-story-spine. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-plot-and-story-it-feels-like-a-very-real-manga-i-like-the-art-style-to-very-artistic-and-expressive.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-issue-here-is-very-interesting%2C-seeing-that-for-once%2C-the-main-character-is-the-source-of-the-problem%2C-not-the-one-being-affected-by-it.-then-with-the-slow-reveal-of-her-insecurities-and-her-improvement%2C-along-a-rough-and-winding-road%2C-we-see-sophie-improve-in-a-way-that-feels-very-realistic-and-natural%2C-this-is-really-nice!-the-art-here-is-exceedingly-well-done%2C-don't-stop-being-creative-ever-please. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-but-i-would-love-to-see-how-you-portray-the-character-and-the-story-with-your-own-drawings. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-overall-story.-maybe-add-more-detail-about-his-dad.-the-art-is-really-nice. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-narration%2C-i-think-the-first-and-last-drawing-could-be-better%2C-and-i-like-the-plot. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-a-chip-turning-into-a-human-but-i-feel-like-you-also-need-to-go-more-in-depth-on-the-reasons-he-wants-to-become-human-in-order-for-the-problem-and-the-main-goal-of-your-character-relate-to-each-other. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-is-incredible%2C-a-motive-that-actually-makes-sense%2C-a-fun-premise%2C-and-an-extremely-ripped-grandother%2C-10%2F10-would-not-fight-dumpster-granny-again 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-and-the-drawing%2C-i-thought-everything-was-clear-and-understandable.-the-drawings-were-very-clear-and-showed-emotions. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-line-of-a-whole-world-that-sings.-i-like-that-sophie-doesn't-care-that-shes-different-and-doesn't-go-with-the-flow.-i-like-the-be-true-to-yourself-moral. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-wish-i-had-the-drawing-skills-they-you-have-they-are-very-good.-i-would-recommend-that-you-mute-the-music-because-it-is-kinda-hard-to-hear-what-you-are-saying.-i-would-recommend-that-you-take-the-background-out.-a-tip-to-do-that-is-to-take-a-picture-with-your-phone-and-email-it-to-yourself.--i-am-excited-to-see-how-your-story-unfolds. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-its-a-good-plot.-one-thing-i-noticed--is-that-you-didn't-add-a-lot-of-detail-and-i-think-you-could-have-added-more.-over-all-i-like-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-added-color-into-this.-it-looks-like-you-took-your-time-and-actually-put-effort.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-story%2C-and-i-like-your-pictures-to-go-with-it 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-is-nice-and-well-spoken-but-it-was-hard-to-hear- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-you-story.-i-think-it-would-be-ibteresting-if-you-added-a-little-more-about-her-journey-to-the-kingdom-and-what-she-encounters-along-the-way. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-plot-of-your-story-is-really-interesting-and-i-love-the-learning-to-accept-death-theme.-i-was-wondering-if-the-mother-will-play-her-role-more-in-sybil's-life-and-her-inability-to-cope-with-her-dad's-death-other-than-just-the-beginning-as-a-minor-plot-point.-i-feel-that-you-could-really-develop-the-mom-character-into-the-antagonist-more. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-art.-it-was-done-very-well%2C-as-was-the-story.-the-pacing-of-the-story-is-good-and-in-general%2C-it-seems-like-a-good-story.-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-fact-that-the-caretaker%2C-hikianalia%2C-couldn't-do-everything-on-her-own-and-needed-help-to-learn-how-to-properly-take-care-of-the-kids.-she-even-taught-the-kids-how-to-do-it%2C-so-that-they-can-be-more-independent.-overall%2C-it's-a-pretty-good-story-and-the-art-is-also-amazing. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-is-the-moral-of-your-story%3F-is-there-symbolism-to-the-tree%3F-the-tree-dying%3F-how-does-the-girl-grow-from-the-loss%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-and-the-drawing%2C-i-thought-everything-was-clear-and-understandable.-the-drawings-were-very-clear-and-showed-the-exact-emotions. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/everything-here-was-awesome%2C-the-art%2C-the-story-potential%2C-%26-your-moral-of-the-story.-very-impressed.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-ideas%2C-good-drawings.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-story-and-idea%2C-i-can-only-suggest-a-bit-more-detail-for-the-background-and-it-would-be-perfect 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-the-relationship-of-a-girl-and-the-tree-but-you-should-also-explain-more-in-depth-the-relationship-they-have-with-each-other%2C-such-as-have-they-helped-each-other-for-a-long-period-of-time%2C-is-the-tree-alive%2C-or-how-exactly-has-the-tree-helped-the-girl-what-are-the-steps-that-got-you-to-your-ending-goal%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawing-they-are-amazing.-you-can-tell-the-characters-are-really-developed.-you-can-really--see-the-hurt-in-the-characters.-you-can-really-tell-you-worked-really-hard-on-the-story-and-i-love-your-story-idea- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-art- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-character-concept-is-very-interesting%2C-and-i-find-the-design-as-well-as-the-drawings-are-notably-cute.-how%2C-exactly-though%2C-do-the-four-friends-help-him-recover%3F-short-term-memory-loss-is-typically-reversed-through-medication%2C-so-is-there-something-preventing-the-protagonist-from-accessing-treatment%2C-which-therefore-requires-the-help-of-his-friends%3F-i-feel-as-though-this-story-spine-could-be-more-specific-with-the-conflicts-presented.-overall%2C-the-characters-are-very-cute-and-the-ending-seems-nice%2C-wholesome%2C-and-pure.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-drawings-and-i-really-like-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting--in-the-story-is-that-the-cowboy-at-the-end-why-was-he-lonely--you-should-just-add-color-so-it-could-stand-out.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it-has-potential%2C-but-why-do-the-towns-people-sing-and-dance%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-thetre-is-not-room-for-improvment-because-of-how-perfect-it-is. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-realy-like-the-artwork-and-drawing%2C-very-good.-i-think-that-maybe-you-should-follow-the-order-of-cause-and-effect-and-maybe-use-the-template-which-for-example-says-%22because-of-that_____%2C-because-of-that_______%2C-i-feel-like-it-would-give-your-story-more-life-and-interest.-but-other-than-that-excellent-job-and-excellent-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-artwork-in-this-one%2C-i-think-you-could-go-more-in-depth-into-how-she-got-kicked-out-of-the-house%2C-and-other-then-that-i-like-the-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-and-the-drawing%2C-i-thought-everything-was-clear-and-understandable.-the-drawings-were-very-clear-and-showed-the-exact-emotions.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/whats-the-moral-and-i-like-the-unicorn-dinasaur 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-art-is-great%2C--and-the-theme-is-really-good%2C-the-main-characters-design-and-look-is-cool. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-in-your-story-was-how-dave-came-to-have-the-dreams-about-the-monsters-and-dragons.-however%2C-i'm-a-bit-confused-about-how-the-character-develops-and-what-large-events-change-his-way-of-thinking.-it-seems-like-everything-goes-fast-without-really-thinking-in-depth-for-some-points-of-the-story.-even-though-it's-missing-some-detail%2C-i-like-the-concept-of-a-dream-world. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/oh-my-god.-the-visuals-here-are-nothing-short-of-stunning.-the-concept-of-a-sunflower-in-love-is-really-creative-visual-storytelling.-this-is-beautiful-and-really-amazing%2C-seriously-awesome. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-amazing%2C-the-world-of-elements-sort-of-reminds-me-of-like-groups-of-people-that-society-doesn't-like-to-be-together-and-promotes-a-rebellious-act-of-friendship-which-is-leading-to-a-good-story%2C--maybe-there-can-be-a-bit-more-action-or-more-things-they-strive-for-that-could-make-the-story-more-engaging%3F-besides-that-its-a-great-draft-and-idea. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/how-did-his-friends-find-out%3F-was-the-pain-of-them-not-accepting-him-the-thing-that-changed-his-view-of-himself%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-fact-that-the-tree-helped-her-self-confidence-and-that-it-helped-her-grow.-i'm-wondering-why-some-pictures-are-well-drawn-in-and-colored-and-others-are-not. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-concept-was-good-but-hard-to-understand.-i-think-you-should-simplify-the-story-and-not-use-an-app-for-your-drawing.-but-overall%2C-i-think-the-concept-is-pretty-cool. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/whats-the-moral%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-that-you-used-a-lot-of-color.--the-drawings-were-very-good-and-the-plot-is-promising.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea%2C-and-as-always%2C-the-visuals-are-great%2C-but-i-was-a-little-confused%2C-how-did-zork%2C-this-ultra-powerful-super-alien-who-always-had-everything-just-decide-to-let-things-be-as-they-are%3F-but-again%2C-i-love-this-idea%2C-and-i-think-it-really-has-potential. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-is-a-very-neat-idea%2C-i-find-the-idea-of-the-book-is-interesting.-though-the-idea-of-where-she-gets-the-motivation-to-destroy-the-computer-is-non-existence-and-should-be-written-upon-on-how-she-gains-the-motivation-to-destroy-it.-other-than-that-issue%2C-the-idea-is-great. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-beginning-drawings%2C-they-showed-what-were-happening.-i-would-recommend-that-you-refill-the-ending-because-it-got-cut-out.-i-would-recommend-that-you-show-the-challenges-they-faced-without-the-other-one.-i-am-excited-to-see-the-journey-of-callie-and-cody-unfold.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawings%2C-i-think-that-they-do-well-to-set-the-scene.--i-think-that-you-should-do-more-to-set-the-scene-of-the-story.-i-think-that-the-middle-of-he-story-should-have-more-going-on.i-think-that-your-story-could-have-great-emotion. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-that-you-explained-there-difference- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/intriguing-story%2C-but-whats-the-moral%3F-whats-the-thing-driving-the-character%3F-where-did-the-expansion-team-come-in%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-was-the-mission-chip-was-on%2C-what-were-his-feelings 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/beautiful 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-shading-and-how-different-they-made-the-character.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thinkm-its-okay-but-theres-definatly-room-for-improvment 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-story-was-the-complexity-of-the-characters-and-their-emotions.-i-love-how-your-video-is-very-clear-and-not-confusing! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-line-and-the-drawing%2C-i-thought-everything-was-clear-and-understandable.-the-drawings-were-very-clear-and-showed-the-exact-emotions. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-not-clear-if-the-watch-was-a-time-travelling-watch%2C-or-not.-i-really-liked-the-art-and-the-story.-the-plot-and-the-plot-points-flow-well-together-in-the-story.-the-moral-of-the-story-is-also-great.-although%2C-i-am-wondering-if-he-was-able-to-bring-his-parents-back-to-life-and-if-he-exacted-his-revenge-on-the-settlers%2C-or-not.-did-he-keep-the-watch%3F-it's-a-very-interesting-story-and-can-definitely-be-developed-for-the-better-in-the-future.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-world-building-you-did-at-the-beginning-of-the-video.-how-did-the-donkey-become-aware-of-his-actions%3F-did-his-love-for-her-make-him-a-better-person%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-feels-weird-and-disjointed%2Chow-does-him-turning-into-a-chicken-cause-the-witch-to-die%2C-who-is-the-scientist%3F-what-is-going-on%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-in-here%2C-maybe-could-have-a-better-way-for-him-to-be-embarrassed-cause-%22he-was-forced-to-by-random-monkeys%22-doesn't-really-make-sense.-but-besides-that-i-really-love-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-the-plot-twist-like-ending.-i-think-that-there-could-be-more-detail-with-the-friend-that-joe-makes.-i-love-the-idea-of-joe-being-sort-of-revived-or-reborn-because-he-dies-then-un-dies.-i-think-its-a-cool-idea. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-is-the-purpose-of-the-dream%3F-what-role-does-it-play--in-dave's-life%3F-how-does-dave's-character-change-and-develops%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-it-reminds-of-a-book-called-the-giving-tree 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-much-structure-your-story-has.-i-like-how-it-is-realistic%3B-and-the-moral-is-clear-throughout-the-whole-thing.-i-think-you-should-fill-in-when-she-told-her-mom-about-everything-she-found-out%2C-and-when-and-how-she-meets-her-other-relative.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-here-goes-in--a-really-interesting-direction%2C-and-i-must-say%2C-the-visuals-here-are-really-well-made!-the-idea-of-the-story-being-a-dream-that-conveys-the-loneliness-of-being-in-the-hospital-is-really-interesting.-i-like-how-the-family-visiting-helps-the-main-character's-mood%2C-as-people-visiting-me-or-saying-hi-always-helps-me-feel-good%2C-as-i'm-rather-social. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-idea-of-a-university-for-planet-conquerors-is-interesting%2C-but-i-didn't-completely-understand-the-part-when-their-planet-is-combined-with-earth.-how-exactly-did-that-happen%3F-and-does-anything-else-happen-afterwards-(other-than-the-captain-taking-stress-pills)%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-base-and-how-in-depth-you-were-talking-about-the-different-scenarios-and-everything-that-was-happening.-i-wish-that-maybe-the-artwork-or-the-drawing-could've-had-more-detail-or-maybe-you-could've-displayed-the-characters-a-little-better%2C-but-other-than-that-you-did-a-really-good-job-with-everything%2C-excellent-job 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-this-it-was-amazing-the-story-is-amazing-and-i-got-your-message-right-away-without-you--telling-me-explicitly.-i-think-that-maybe-one-thins-you-could-do-to-add-to-the-story-is-you-could-maybe-add-some-color.-other-than-that-the-drawings-are-amazing-the-story-is-amazing-and-you-have-some-really-amazing-character-work.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/losing-social-media-would-definitely-effect-a-lot-of-people-because-on-our-platforms-we-are-able-to-express-the-person-we-want-to-be-without-being-afraid-of-others-opinions.-but-you-should-also-go-more-in-depth-with-your-character's-true-self-that-would-make-your-story-better-than-it-already-is. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-a-rebel-in-a-reformed-type-of-society%2C-but-is-the-idea-of-not-being-a-clone-like-illegal-or-is-it-just-different-than-the-norms%3F-and-why-is-everyone-like-%231%3F-was-%231-originally-a-bad-person-that-forced-people-to-reform%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-i-liked-all-the-characters-personalities.-i-wonder-if-the-main-character-misses-his-dad-a-lot-and--runs-away-good-job 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-but-i-think-that-theres-room-for-imporovment.-but-i-liked-the-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-idea%2C-what-makes-steven-realize-that-he-needs-to-put-his-needs-in-front-of-his-wants-though%3F-what-prevents-him-from-having-both%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-for-your-character%2C-but-it-was-very-hard-to-hear-because-of-the-music%2C-but-i'm-interested-to-know-what-your-moral-is-%26-how-your-character-grows-from-these-challenges.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/is-his-dream-of-the-blade-fighting-the-dragon-a-metaphor-for-the-cancer%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawings%2C-i-think-you-could-have-spoken-up-more%2C-and-i-like-the-plot. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-progression-board%2C-but-i-do-think-you-could-elaborate-with-audio%2C-aside-that-i-like-the-images-that-go-with-the-story 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-shape-and-how-it-looks-like-its-moving.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-chip-and-the-story-spine-but-i-feel-that-it-could-use-some-totch-up-on-the-exicution. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-video%2C-the-concept-and-symbolism-are-really-great.-one-thing-i-would-add-is-more-detail-to-the-images.-other-than-that-i-love-your-idea!-i-cant-wait-to-see-more-of-dave. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-moral-and--nice-visual-to-go-along-with-the-story%2C-but-what-made-him-put-up-the-%22mask%22%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/harper's-journey-is-very-good%2C-i-wish-i-had-drawing-skills-like-you.-i-would-recommend-that-you-show-how-harper-got-the-email-at-the-end.-i-would-recommend-that-you-explain-how-her-avatar-trapped-her-in-her-room.-just-so-you-know-it-was-very-hard-to-find-things-to-crotecte-you-on.-i-am-excited-to-see-the-full-journey-of-harper.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-cool%2C-and-i-love-the-art-and-idea%2C-although-some-of-the-voice-lines-got-cut-off. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-that-you-added-expression-to-the-faces-of-people.-one-thing-i-would-have-added-is-labels.-over-all-i-really-liked-it. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-how-it's-about-a-guy-who-lost-his-job-and-is-constantly-trying-to-get-a-new-one%2C-but-is-keep-on-getting-rejected.-yet%2C-it's-all-about-not-taking-people-for-granted.-to-me%2C-that's-a-bit-confusing%2C-as-i-don't-understand-what-you-were-trying-to-do-with-that.-also%2C-i-don't-get-if-the-underground-paradise-was-what-he-wanted%2C-or-what-he-needed-to-learn-the-moral-of-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-idea 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-art-and-interesting-idea%2C-i-feel-like-this-has-already-been-explored-though.-i-wonder-what-you-will-do-to-make-it-unique%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-its-really-basic-and-could-be-more-exciting-i-thin-k-that-you-could-do-better 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing-they-are-verryt-good.-my-one-thing-is-you-should-talk-louder- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-nice%2C-i-like-it-the-drawing.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-all-the-detail-%26-story-you-are-putting-your-character-through%2C-all-the-challenges%2C-goals%2C-%26-the-relatable-moral%2C-but-i'm-wondering-about-how-your-character-grows-from-the-stuff-i-mentioned-before.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-self-change-and-improvement-but-how-will-she-use-her-big-left-hand-to-her-advantage%3F-will-we-ever-get-an-epilogue%3F- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-sketches%2C-i-don't-know-exactly-why-she-needed-help-from-the-humans%2C-and-i-like-the-happy-ending 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-well-explained%2C-and-i-really-like-the-art-style. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-idea%2C-i-think-that-it-could-make-a-great-story.-i-think-that-you-should-expand-more-on-your-drawings.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-to-the-middle-and-start-of-your-story-to-set-the-scene 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-idea!-i-wonder-why-harper-is-so-shy%3F-did-something-happen-or-is-that-just-how-she-is%3F-the-art-style-is-very-nice 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-didn't-get-the-last-part.-it-was-just-so-sudden-and-random.-he-just-passed-out%3F-it-just-seemed-a-bit-random-to-me-compared-to-the-rest-of-the-video.-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-fact-that-you-used-the-common-trope-of-a-kid-being-shy-and-having-to-overcome-that-shyness.-i-like-that%2C-although-it-is-a-bit-too-common.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-last-icture-with-the-kracken-and-donkey-with-their-kids- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-must-interacting-was-that-he-got-turned-in-a-chicken.-why-a-chicken%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-dilemma-between-doing-what-your-family-told-and-what-you-think-is-right.-i-don%E2%80%99t-understand-whether-this-deliberation-was-serious-or-a-quick-thing.-i-like-the-character-and-story-concept-a-lot. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-core-concept-of-your-story-interesting%2C-but-i-don%E2%80%99t-understand-how-the-characters-develop-or-evolve. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-conflict-created-by-the-main-character-pretending-to-be-her-brother.-i-don%E2%80%99t-understand-how-she-and-her-brother-switched-bodies.-i-also-liked-the-illustrations-throughout-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-concept-here.-this-story-has-a-lot-of-potential%2C-but-i-don%E2%80%99t-understand-how-the-character-develops-through-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-it-is-based-in-a-relatable-setting%2C-someone%E2%80%99s-room.-i-didn%E2%80%99t-understand-the-conflict-because-it-was-hard-to-understand-the-story-without-description-of-how-what-was-happening-meant.-i-liked-the-detailed-illustrations-in-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-monster-came-to-life. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-outlaw-has-conflicts-with-the-settlers. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-whole-story-is-with-flowers-instead-of-humans. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-all-social-media-stopped-working. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-that-the-main-character-was-so-concerned-about-controlling-their-reflection.-i-found-this-story-to-be-interesting-and-original-overall. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-part-i-found-most-interesting-in-this-story-was-when-she-was-faced-with-the-dilemma-of-her-family's-legacy-or-her-own-beliefs.-it-shows-her-true-self-and-how-much-she-values-pride-over-her-heart.-it-exemplifies-how-she-can-have-a-conflict-in-her-mind-and-her-ability-to-overcome-her-mental-barriers-and-do-what-she-believes-is-the-right-choice.-one-step-i-didn't-understand-was-the-step-of-her-traveling%2C-i-would-have-liked-a-deeper-explanation-of-how-she-traveled-and-where-to.-it-could-use-some-details-and-maybe-a-few-conflicts-along-the-way-that-make-her-question-her-pride.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-was-how-people-stormed-danny-for-him-to-turn-items-into-gold.-however%2C-i-didn%E2%80%99t-understand-how-his-mother-telling-him-he-loved-him-resolved-the-conflict.-overall%2C-the-story-spine-had-great-conflict. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-the-girl-became-friends-with-the-tree.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-most-interesting-part-of-the-story-was-when-chip's-friends-were-talking-bad-about-him.-this-made-me-wonder-what-they-were-saying%2C-and-how-that-made-chip-feel.-one-step-i-didn't-quite-understand-was-the-mission-that-chip-was-on.-i-love-the-idea-of-how-chip-turns-into-a-human-but-i-am-wondering-why-he-needs-to-be-in-the-human-world.-what-was-his-original-motive-to-become-a-human%3F 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-relationship-between-someone-and-a-tree%2C-who-helps-them-become-more-social.-i-didn%E2%80%99t-understand-how-the-tree-made-the-girl-more-social.-overall%2C-i-think-this-is-a-great-idea-for-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-the-relationship-between-someone-and-a-tree%2C-who-helps-them-become-more-social.-i-didn%E2%80%99t-understand-how-the-tree-made-the-girl-more-social.-overall%2C-i-think-this-is-a-great-idea-for-the-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-when-monsters-attacked-humans.-overall-sounds-like-a-good-and-well-planned-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-most-interesting-part-of-the-story-was-her-volunteering-and-helping-others-in-order-to-feel-better.-i-love-how-she-can-find-happiness-by-being-generous-and-selfless.--one-step-i-didn't-understand-was-why-she-could-see-the-ghosts%3F-does-she-have-some-sort-of-power%3F-did-her-father-have-this-power%3F-can-she-share-this-power-with-others-to-show-them-ghosts-as-well%3F-very-nice-story-and-amazing-art!-i-can't-wait-for-this-to-continue-growing-and-developing.-awesome-job. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-story-is-out-of-order.-i-love-the-message-being--conveyed-in-this-story. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/loved-the-story%2C-it-had-a-great-progression-that-was-easy-to-process-and-a-fantastic-moral-to-teach-others!-there-wasn't-any-significant-elements-that-prevented-me-from-understanding-the-story.-the-only-thing-i-recommend-is-spending-a-good-chunk-of-time-developing-the-story-moment-that-liam-meets-his-real-friends-to-really-show-how-these-nice-kids-contrast-with-the-popular-kids.-great-work-and-can't-wait-to-see-the-final-product! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-loved-the-artwork-and-story!-the-only-thing-that-i-am-confused-about-is-why-the-mother-needs-to-be-abusive-to-her-children.-the-character-doesn%E2%80%99t-seem-to-have-that-much-involvement-within-the-story-and-it-might-be-too-much-work-storyboarding-her-when-you-still-need-to-add-in-the-main-events-at-the-senior-center.-what-i-recommend-is-showing-in-a-brief-scene-that-she-is-grieving-the-loss-of-sybil%E2%80%99s-father%2C-but-when-her-kids-come-to-comfort-her-she-pushes-them-away%2C-instead-of-storyboarding-multiple-scenes-depicting-her-emotional-abuse-that-may-not-be-relevant-to-the-community-center-ark.-otherwise-great-work! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-loved-the-art-and-the-character-designs-for-both-the-water-and-fire-tribe.-the-relationship-progression-between-the-two-characters-is-great!-would-also-like-to-see-how-the-trading-of-hair-allows-them-to-physically-contact-one-another.-the-only-concern-i-have-is-about-is-the-%E2%80%9Clove-concurs-all-moral%E2%80%9D.-love-is-a-very-important-aspect-of-life-but-i-am-unsure-if-teaching-others-that-love-is-the-best-thing-in-the-world-and-is-worth-sacrificing-everything-in-a-person%E2%80%99s-life-is-the-best-use-of-your-great-love-story.-if-there-was-a-way-to-show-that-the-characters-are-still-in-love-but-are-allowed-to-pursue-other-things-outside-of-that-i-believe-the-pure-love-moral-will-be-more-grounded.-otherwise-amazing-work! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-loved-the-story%2C-it-was-really-easy-to-understand-and-i-found-it-very-relatable.-i-am-a-bit-confused-on-how-the-other-sunflower-sees-ray-as-a-partner.-they-don't-seem-to-have-a-lot-of-character-interaction%2C-so-it-will-be-important-to-show-interaction-between-the-two-characters-to-show-that-ray-isn't-just-infatuated-with-another-sunflower-that-doesn't-care-about-them.-otherwise-art-was-great-and-your-composition-was-on-point.-remember-to-show-that-the-other-sunflower-cares-about-ray-to-avoid-a-one-sided-love-story%2C-but-other-than-that-great-work! 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-how-the-story-is-turning-out!-it-feels-like-a-real-manga-plot-and-makes-me-wonder-if-the-avatar-will-act-nice-in-the-beginning-and-get-slowly-more-corrupt.-there-aren%E2%80%99t-many-story-problems-that-i-can-sense.-just-make-sure-to-flesh-out-the-characters-well-to-make-them-able-to-convey-strong-emotions%2C-and-develop-the-villain-as-i-feel-the-character-has-a-lot-of-good-story-potential.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-like-the-plant-idea-and-the-character-design-of-the-main-character!-there-are-not-many-huge-story-problems-that-i-can-sense.-the-only-thing-that-i-would-say-is-maybe-the-don't-isolate-yourself-moral-could-be-better-translated-if-they-had-a-friend-throughout-the-story-that-tried-to-get-them-to-open-up-while-they-were-dealing-with-the-nursery-destruction-and-plant-transformation-process.- 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-seems-super-interesting%2C-and-i'm-excited-to-see-it-unfold.-the-story-spine-seems-very-fluent-and-smooth%2C-and-will-flow-very-nicely. 2021-11-01 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-concept-of-the-reflection-freeing-itself-from-the-mirror-was-what-i-found-interesting-.-the-emotions%2Fexpressions-seen-on-the-main-character-are-well-depicted. 2021-10-31 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-well-illustrated-clip.-what-i-found-interesting-about-your-story-is-how-ray-gets-another-shot-in-growing-to-its-full-length%2C-and-ultimately-able-to-meet-his-true-love.-the-usage-of-the-phrase-'ray-of-light%22-really-showed-how-individual-get-another-shot-in-life-when-they-feel-they-have-no-way-out-of-the-darkness!! 2021-10-31 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-passion-and-full-effort-you-did-for-every-scene-was-amazing. 2021-10-31 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-is-a-great-idea!-losing-social-media-would-definitely-affect-some-teenagers-today-so-i-think-this-is-pretty-relatable.-a-question-i-had-was-what-was-his-%22true-self%22-like-what-was-the-thing-that-made-him-different-that-he-wanted-to-hide-and-not-show-people%3F-maybe-emphasizing-that-a-little-more-but-amazing-job!!! 2021-10-31 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-idea-is-so-interesting-that-he-didn't-know-how-to-play-because-he-did-not-have-an-imagination.-this-is-a-good-idea-it-will-be-interesting-to-see-it-fleshed-out-a-little-more! 2021-10-31 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-characters-and-the-idea!-the-characters-look-so-unique-and-i-really-like-the-colors-a-lot.-your-storyline-is-very-cute-and-there-was-not-part-that-was-confusing-or-anything-i-really-enjoyed-it.- 2021-10-31 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-pictures-are-so-well-done-and-professional-looking!-love-your-character-and-the-story-is-so-original!-i-also-really-like-how-you-used-the-same-white%2C-black%2C-and-grey-but-its-really-effective-and-looks-great.- 2021-10-31 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-so-creative!-the-pictures-and-how-you-drew-your-character-is-amazing-and-something-i've-never-seen-before!-very-original-and-straightforward.- 2021-10-31 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-pictures-are-so-cute-and-the-story-is-so-creative-and-adorable!!-it-was-very-straightforward-and-easy-to-understand.-love-it!! 2021-10-31 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story%2C-love-the-moral-and-how-she-learned-how-to-stick-up-for-herself....can't-wait-for-more 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-message-a-lot%2C-to-live-in-your-own-time.-the-art-was-really-well-done%2C-especially-his-transition-at-the-end.-can-you-clarify-if-the-watch-is-a-time-travel-device%2C-i-wasn't-sure-at-that-part.-can't-wait-for-more 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story%2C-the-drawings-were-great%2C-and-i-love-the-business-cycles.-when-you-do-your-next-recording-go-a-bit-slower-as-it-was-really-fast.-i-love-the-moral-and-think-the-opening-scene-could-connect-to-it-(maybe-open-with-a-parent-scene%3F) 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-that-was-a-powerful-story-with-incredible-art.-i-think-the-undead-characters-were-very-scary....maybe-we-should-see-the-ghosts-being-happy-so-we-understand-they-aren't-afraid-of-death%3F-can't-wait-for-more.-bravo 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story.-i-look-forward-to-the-scene-when-you-show-him-waking-up.-so-does-the-gold-represent-his-ability-to-get-attention%3F-can't-wait-to-see-next-version 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story%2C-i-like-it.-also-kind-of-sad...why-couldn't-he-be-himself%3F-when-the-social-media-got-cancelled-why-couldn't-he-be-himself-anymore.-see-if-you-can-turn-down-the-music-a-bit-next-time-as-it-was-hard-to-hear-at-the-end..-can't-wait-to-see-next-version 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/bravo.-i-can't-wait-to-hear-what-caused-her-to-realize-she-needed-to-get-off-the-computer%2C-...this-story-is-fantastic-and-i-relate-to-it 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it-would-be-scary-to-be-buried-in-shadows-of-your-own-kind..-very-very-interesting.-i-was-blown-away-by-your-images-and-story.-i-especially-liked-when-that-ray-of-light-came-through-at-the-end 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-everything-about-this-story.-the-art%2C-the-story%2C-and-the-art-and-the-story-and-the-art-and-the-story.-seriously..-i-don't-think-you-need-to-change-anything%2C-can't-wait-for-your-to-flesh-it-out. 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-clear-the-explanation-of-the-story-is!!-is-there-some-backstory-to-the-magical-necklace%3F 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/are-all-of-the-people-in-this-world-inanimate-objects%3F-that%E2%80%99s-pretty-neat!! 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-unicorn-dinosaur%3F!-super-cool!-are-the-friends-also-hybrid-animals%3F-and-what%E2%80%99s-the-moral-of-the-story%3F- 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-of-the-half-unicorn--half-dinosaur-is-interesting-and-so-is-his-personality.-nothing-was-confusing 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story-spine-and-the-moral-of-your-story.-i-didn't-find-anything-confusing-and-am-looking-forward-to-seeing-more-about-this.- 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-the-breaking-of-the-mirror-very-interesting-and-your-illustrations-are-very-good.-i-didn't-find-any--steps-confusing.-- 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what--i-found-most-interesting-was-that-dave-got-kicked-out-his-parents-house.-why-did-he-get-kicked-out%3F-and-nice-looking-drawings.- 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-your-story-line-interesting-%2C-especially-the-idea-of-all-electronics-becoming-illegal---that's-crazy-to-imagine.-i-didnt-really-understand-about-the-girl-trying-to-be-mean-to-others.- 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-is-you're-obviously-not-making-this-for-young-kids%2C-your-drawing-is-awesome-very-detailed.-i-didn't-understand-about--very-well-about-the-ending- 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-line-is-empowering-and-timely-in-today%E2%80%99s-world.-- 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-off%2C-the-art-is-amazing!-what-i-found-most-interesting-was-how-they-still-were-able-to-see-each-other-after-their-villages-forbid-it.-how-were-they-able-to%3F-did-they-run-away%3F-also%2C-how-did-they-figure-out-they-could-swap-a-strand-of-each-other%E2%80%99s-hair%3F-and-how-does-it-stay-on%3F 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-that-she-could-be-granted-another-life.-i-don%E2%80%99t-understand-what-happened-at-the-end-because-the-audio-cut-out.-the-art-is-nice-and-i-think-this-submission-is-good! 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-the-story-was-how-he-becomes-friends-with-his-rival.-something-i%E2%80%99m-confused-about-is-the-%E2%80%9Cmagic%E2%80%9D.-what-kind-of-magic-is-there%3F-and-why-didn%E2%80%99t-they-use-it-to-help-discover-who-was-behind-the-plague%3F-but-otherwise-this-story-seems-really-well-planned-out!-i-can-tell-a-lot-of-effort-was-put-in-and-the-art-is-really-good! 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-story-was-it-was-all-just-a-dream.-i-wonder-how-exactly-the-woman-gave-him-the-powers%2C-and-why.-what-i-am-confused-about-is-how%2C-after-that-dream-does-it-make-him-appreciate-his-parents-more%3F 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-moral-(i-think)-is-very-interesting-and-unique.--the-art-itself-is-also-really-great-as-well.-a-part-i-didn't-understand-is-where%2Fhow-she-would-get-the-courage-to-destroy-her-own-computer.-since-she-was-drawn-to-her-computer.-besides-that-the-submission-was-really-good. 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-moral%2C-character-growth-and-art-is-amazing.-this-is-a-overall-amazing-story.-i-don't-even-know-what-to-add-on-from-this.-really-great-job. 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-stork-is-charge-of-caring-for-the-babies.-the-was-no-part-in-the-story-i-did-not-understand.-really-great-job. 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-anatomy-and-character-poses-are-fantastic.-its-so-simple-but-interesting.-i-have-to-mention-the-music-for-your-submission-was-way-to-loud%3B-making-it-hard-to-here-your-voices.-i-can-only-assume-the-story-was-good%3F-the-art-and-submission-was-good. 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-i-thought-was-interesting-and-very-nice.-your-moral-also-reflects-that-mindset.-there-wasn't-a-part-of-the-story-i-did-not-understand.-the-artstyle-also-was-fantastic.-great-job-on-this-submission 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-of-all-the-shading-a-lighting-on-these-scenes-are-amazing.-the-use-of-grey-and-white-really-elevates-your-story.-the-story-and-character-growth-is-amazing-and-interesting.-getting-attach-to-someone-can-affect-your-well-being-is-great-idea.-i-guess-the-ending-of-your-story--didn'-t-really-line-up-with-your-theme.-since-he-still-gets-what-he-wants-in-the-end.-the-submission-and-art-was-amazing-however. 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-illustration-is-extremely-beautiful.-all-the-characteristics-of-ray-are-visible.-the-only-thing-you-can-change-is-to-show-the-rest-of-the-sunflowers-in-that-field-facing-the-sun%2C-helping-to-showcase-the-fact-of-ray's-peculiar-nature. 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-soooo-amazing-!!!!!-you-did-such-a-good-job-with-the-colors%2C-characters-and-detail-%3Ad 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-did-such-and-amazing-job-with-the-character-and-the-background 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-that-description-%3Ad 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-emotion-you-get-behind-with-this-drawing-and-your-character-%E2%80%9Crevasar%E2%80%9D%2C-and-the-backgrounds-are-really-detailed-and-chilling.-i-like-the-different-layers-this-background-conveys.-the-only-thing-i-would-fix-is-making-the-%E2%80%9Ccold-hands%E2%80%9D-a-little-more-precise-as-i-didn%E2%80%99t-see-them-at-first%2C-but-i-still-love-it-overall. 2021-10-30 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-here- 2021-10-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-i-really-like-the-depth-of-thougth-here- 2021-10-31 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-concept!-i-love-the-contrast-you-establish-with-a-flower-not-following-it's-namesake%2C-and-it-makes-me-curious-as-to-why-ray-never-faces-the-sun-and-if-it-has-anything-to-do-with-his-first-name.-your-image-shows-incredible-use-of-shading%2C-lighting-with-the-highlights%2C-and-focus-shift-with-blurry-leaves-in-the-foreground-and-background.-incredible-work! 2021-10-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-descriptions-of-your-character-and-his-world.-what-i-find-most-interesting-about-your-character-is-even-though-his-basic-needs-aren't-being-met-considering-he-has-no-shelter%2C-he-is-still-able-to-find-happiness-from-his-friendships.-i'm-curious-to-learn-more-about-your-character's-journey-and-what-causes-him-to-recognize-what-brings-him-happiness.-nice-work! 2021-10-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work.-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-is-his-depression...is-it-the-cause-or-result-of-his-homelessness.-i-love-the-theme-of-this-story-(friends-%3D-family)-i-really-hope-to-see-this-developed-more-in-the-next-week.- 2021-10-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-the-use-of-light-is-fantastic!-blown-away...i-love-how-the-world-gradually-fades-into-the-distance%2C-i-can't-wait-to-see-what-you-make-next 2021-10-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-video-and-the-art 2021-10-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-the-drawing-of-melody-is-great%2C-it-looks-like-you-put-a-lot-of-effort-into-it.-maybe-practice-drawing-just-backgrounds 2021-10-29 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-hair-style%2C-the-stairs-in-the-background%2C-and-cliffs 2021-10-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing-style%2C--background-items%2C-and-has-a-great-use-of-background 2021-10-28 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-seafood-coming-alive.-what-would-happen-next%3F-do-the-seafood-have-a-way-of-communicating-with-jayla-and-what-would-they-tell-her%3F-would-it-change-jayla's-behavior-and-would-she-give-up-seafood-because-of-it.-cool-idea. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-use-of-simple-shapes-which-give-depth-to-your-scene-and-details-that-distinguish-between-worlds.-what-i-like-about-your-simple-sketches-is-that-it-makes-me-curious-to-know-more-about-the-different-rules-for-each-world-and-why-your-character-travels-between-both.-is-he-a-superhero%3F-does-he-travel-between-dimensions%3F-does-he-travel-between-different-eras-of-time%3F 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawing-clearly-communicate's-the-rules-of-your-world-and-does-a-great-job-communicating-that-lawney-is-in-charge-and-wants-to-help.-i-like-how-you-distinguished-the-different-characters-by-giving-them-different-hair-styles.-it-makes-me-wonder-if-these-people-live-in-a-time-where-its-not-safe-to-be-out-in-the-sun%2C-even-if-for-a-little-bit.- 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-emotions-shown-on-the-birds-faces-as-well-as-their-placement-and-size-in-the-illustration-give-great-insight-into-the-scene-here.-very-well-done-drawing.- 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/whoa.-excellent-shading-and-crosshatching-to-give-a-very-detailed-depth.-the-character-it's-self-is-also-depicted-great-in-it's-world.-the-act-of-the-character-sitting-on-the-rooftop-ledge-gives-insight-into-his-psyche-and-the-story.- 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-abstract.-i-like-the-style-of-this-somewhat-2d-world%2C-really-interesting.- 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-setup-your-character's-world-to-appear-happy-and-comfortable-in-the-privacy-of-her-own-room-spending-time-how-she-wants-to.-i-also-like-the-sports-image-in-the-background-which-makes-me-wonder-how-that-is-connected-to-your-character.-great-use-of-simple-images-to-clearly-communicate-the-safety-and-calmness-of-your-character's-world.-i'm-curious-to-learn-more-about-your-story. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/epic-illustration.-a-lot-of-detail-and-emotion-in-this-graphic.- 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-impressive-art.-gives-the-viewer-a-good-insight-into-your-story. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-drawing-showing-how-happy-and-celebratory-your-character-looks-in-playing-the-piano-and-the-instructor-or-witness-enjoying-the-music.-then-you-have-a-polluted-and-dangerous-in-the-background.-great-use-of-contrast-that-makes-me-want-to-know-more-about-the-internal-world-of-your-character-and-how-he-stays-so-positive. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-interesting-to-see-the-opposites-you-created-between-the-other-characters-who-look-happy-and-open%2C-and-your-main-character-who-is-hidden-behind-their-face-mask-and-hoody%2C-and-appears-standoffish%2C-shy-or-sad.-it-is-a-great-use-of-contrast-and-it-makes-me-curious-to-know-more-about-what-is-happening-inside-your-character-and-their-world. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-colors-are-really-cool.-one-way-to-improve-this-would-just-to-add-a-little-more-detail-to-the-setting. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-contrast-between-the-characters-and-the-setting.-there-is-also-great-use-of-shading-in-the-image. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-color-scheme-of-the-world.-there-is-a-great-use-of-proportion-and-shading. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-contrast-between-the-girl-and-the-trees-in-the-background.-it-tells-a-lot-about-the-story. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-on-the-setting-and-buildings-in-the-background.-it-really-conveys-an-apocalyptic-feel.-the-cars-have-a-great-design-as-well. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-the-character-stands-right-in-the-middle-of-the-page%2C-drawing-the-attention-right-to-the-character.-another-thing-i-loved-is-the-great-use-of-depth-perception. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawings-(and-full-colored-images%2C-with-lighting-included)-are-incredibly-impressive.-the-images-have-great-expression-and-use-of-squash-and-stretch-into-poses-that-further-emphasize-the-character's-expressions.-makes-me-want-to-know-more-about-the-many-characters-in-your-world-and-different-use-of-scale. 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-your-character-is-his-eyes%2C-you-can-really-feel-for-him%2C-especially-contrasted-against-the-other-kids.-you-did-a-great-job-with-that.-i-can't-wait-to-see-how-his-story-comes-together-next-week 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-fun-image%2C-i-love-the-concept.-of-the-world-falling-apart-around-kiko.-i-like-line-work-(especially-the-speed-lines-on-the-highway)%2C-the-city-feels-alive-and-hectic.-can't-wait-for-your-story-reel! 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-love-the-warped-perspective-how-did-you-do-that%3F-feels-like-a-fish-eye-lens.-love-the-light-coming-in-the-window-and-the-various-shadows-it-is-casting.-you-can-feel-the-sense-of-surprise-in-her-face.-i'm-intrigued-about-this-character%2C-look-forward-to-the-story 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-in-case-you-were-curious%2C-the-qr-code-directed-to-%22https%3A%2F%2Fwww.youtube.com%2Fwatch%3Fv%3Ddzcoft6htnw%22.-i'm-trying-for-guerrilla-tactics-to-overwhelm-people-into-checking-it-out-since-everyone-else-did-super-phenomenal-work.- 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/thanks-guys-for-all-the-awesome-feedback! 2021-10-27 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/oooh%2C-great-stuff-to-put-you-in-the-mood-for-halloween-...-i-like-the-mix-of-thick-and-thin-lines%2C-and-the-dark-smudgy-dark-areas-and-subtle-color-to-make-ocean-stand-out-as-the-key-character-to-focus-on...--i'm-wondering-if-you-might-add-a-light-%22smudge%22-under-the-chair-to-make-the-chair-and-snakes-pop-out-even-further---it-seems-like-you-colored-over-the-stripes-on-the-floor-paneling-with-the-intention-of-the-area-below-the-chair-to-be-shadowed%3F--(the-lines-do-a-great-job-of-drawing-the-eye-in-with-a-sense-of-depth%2C-like-the-week's-assignment-called-for.--good-job!- 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work%2C-i-love-how-the-character-looks-immersed-in-her-music.-it-feels-like-a-real-place...nice-accents-with-the-laptop-light-lines.-look-forward-to-this-characters-story 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-can-imagine-this-as-the-opening-scene-of-a-story...-it-could-then-zoom-into-a-close-up-of-the-character%2C-or-we-might-hear-the-music-she's-listening-to%2C-the-book-she's-reading%2C-what's-on-her-laptop%2C-the-clutter-around-her-bed%2C-the-clock-and-memos-behind-it%2C-or-even-the-poster-of-the-baseball-player%2C..-i-love-the-possibilities!--in-the-next-draft%2C-you-might-make-the-floor-line-behind-the-bed-straighter-and-more-defined%2C-to-get-a-stronger-illusion-of-depth%3F--and-possibly-adjust-the-lighting-so-it's-clearer-if-this-is-a-morning-sunrise-scene%2C-or-at-night-with-the-moon-peeking-in-with-moody-lighting-from-the-hanging-lamps%3F-i'm-intrigued-and-curious-how-the-story-will-unfold...-the-different-elements-in-the-scene-tells-me-you-have-lots-of-ideas-about-the-character's-world.-- 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job-creating-a-sense-of-distance-and-motion!--i'm-already-anticipating-characters-entering-the-scene%2C-having-to-choose-the-treat-they-want!--one-suggestion---maybe-in-the-next-draft%2C-move-the-lamp-posts-further-away-from-the-snack-stands-so-we-can-see-the-signs-labeled-%22mochi%22-and-%22ice-cream%2C-or-create-signs-that-don't-need-to-overlap-onto-the-lamp-posts%3F-- 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-way-the-character-is-staring-out-at-the-spaceship.-i-call-almost-see-excitement-in-their-eyes...-but-i-cant-see-their-eyes.-it-gives-lots-of-creative-liberty-to-the-observer-to-determine-what-the-character's-expression-is-and-therefore-what-they-are-feeling.-i-like-the-shading-you-did-with-the-wind-and-snow%2C-it-gives-me-a-sense-of-the-visibility-out-there-and-also-how-cold-it-is.-this-drawing-has-a-fantastic-use-of-color-of-dimensions%2C-showing-what-is-most-important-in-the-photo-and-also-the-scale-of-things.-great-job! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-use-of-colors-and-depth%2C-the-watercolor-really-adds-to-the-feelings-in-the-photo 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-emotions-and-perspective-are-both-conveyed-really-well! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-kitchen!-so-detailed!- 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-flower-is-adorable!-such-an-intriguing-character-and-such-a-good-story-line.-i'm-interested-to-see-how-it-ends%2C-do-they-overcome-their-challenges-and-get-what-they-want%3F-really-well-done!- 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-will-be-interesting-to-see-what-challenges-the-character-faces-and-how-they-overcome-them.-good-job! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-cool-idea!-i-wonder-how-he-solves-his-problems-to-get-what-he-wants.-really-interested-to-see-where-this-goes! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-work%2C-love-the-line-use-in-your-drawing.-great-idea-for-an-obstacle-and-moral...should-make-for-a-great-story.-i-wonder-how-he-will-realize-his-needs-in-the-story%3F-what-will-the-conflict-be%3F-exciting 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-wonder-how-karl-will-learn-to-take-risks%3F-what's-holding-him-back%3F-this-should-be-good.-well-done 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-nice-work-on-your-production-(good-sound%2Fimage).-the-design-of-karl-is-awesome.-i-also-love-the-moral-of-this-story.-can't-wait-for-more.-i-wonder-how-carl-will-learn-what-he-needs-to-learn%3F 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-size-of-those-spiders-in-comparison-to-the-buildings-in-the-back-is-terrifying!-so-well-done-and-so-scary! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-this-drawing.-it-really-captures-the-emotion-of-almond-and-where-she-is-going.-but%2C-i-think-the-picture-is-just-a-touch-too-dark.- 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-much-detail-i-get-from-looking-at-this-picture.-it-has-a-comic-book-feel-which-is-really-cool.-great-job! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-really-well-done!-the-character-features-are-really-consistent%2C-and-you-can-easily-tell-it's-the-same-character.-great-job! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-mochi-and-ice-cream%2C-so%2C-great-job-on-that.-i-think-you-could-add-some-customers-to-make-the-picture-come-to-life-tho.-great-job. 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow.-this!-is!-amazing!-y'all-did-a-great-job-drawing-this.-i-love-the-space%2Ffuturistic-vibe.-i-can't-really-think-of-any-criticism.-love-it! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-drawing.-but-i-think-it-needs-a-little-more-detail.-chip-is-the-only-one-you-can-see-clearly-in-the-picture.-and-i-think-the-shading-needs-a-little-work.-but-overall%2C-great-job. 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-gun-was-drawn-really-well-and-i-love-the-name-of-the-character.-but-the-background-is-kinda-far-away-so-its-hard-to-make-out-the-details. 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-think-you-did-a-great-job-with-this.-i-wonder-if-you-could-make-the-kitchen-look-used-though.-there-is-nothing-on-the-counters%2C-no-pictures-on-the-fridge%2C-nothing-that-hints-that-someone-lives-there-except-for-john. 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-this-is-terrifying%2C-love-the-spider-cars-(great-job-on-the-legs).-your-use-of-depth-makes-me-feel-like-i'm-stuck-inside-this-city.-should-be-a-fun-story 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-storytelling-in-this-image%2C-you've-captured-the-danger-of-the-sun-well%2C-especially-using-the-line-marks-in-the-sky.-this-story-is-going-to-be-awesome-look-forward-to-it. 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-such-a-neat-idea%2C-i-love-the-animation-and-the-contrasting-colors.-also-great-line-work%2C-lots-of-energy-in-the-background.-your-drawing-feels-alive 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-amazing-drawing.-i-love-the-small-details-and-the-different-characters.-i-also-like-how-you-added-color-in-your-drawing! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-character-face-tells-a-lot-about-how-feels.-amazing-drawing!! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-small-details-you-added%2C-such-as-the-book!! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-uwu 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-environment-its-a-great-drawing! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-art-style!-and-the-perspective-is-amazing!-but-i-would-try-to-add-more-types-of-grays-or-whites-to-add-depth-to-your-scene-so-you-can-really-tell-what's-going-on.-%3A) 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-the-person-that-made-it%2C-did-you-read-the-description-carter%3F-i-thought-it-explained-things%2C-but-maybe-not. 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-whole-room-is-shown-while-also-showing-the-character.- 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-detailed-this-drawing-is! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-alex-and-the-cat-are-drawn-from-the-side%2C-it%E2%80%99s-an-interesting-angle 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-perspective-of-this-drawing%2C-and-i-wonder-what-she%E2%80%99s-reaching-towards%3F 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-perspective-we-are-seeing-this-scene-from 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-detailed-this-drawing-is- 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-perspective-is-really-good%2C-but-since-there-are-so-many-characters-in-the-image%2C-it-is-a-bit-hard-to-tell-which-one-is-bede.-other-than-that%2C-i-like-your-art-style-and-the-amount-of-contrast-in-the-image%2C-it-looks-great! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-is-really-well-drawn%2C-i-like-your-style!-the-background-does-seem-a-bit-rushed%2C-and-it-may-look-a-bit-better-if-you-use-shorter-pencil-strokes.-really-love-the-character-design-though%2C-keep-up-the-good-work! 2021-10-26 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-movement-you-show-in-your-character.-you-drew-him-in-such-a-way-that-works-really-well-with-the-scenery-and-really-helps-me-see-his-movement-through-the-space.-i-really-enjoy-how-the-road%2C-trees%2C-and-buildings-all-fit-together-inside-of-your-drawing.-i-think-you-make-great-use-of-perspective-in-this-drawing-by-balancing-all-of-the-scenery-components. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-detail-on-the-characters-and-how-they-first-attract-your-eyes%2C-then-direct-them-to-the-next-most-important-part-if-the-image.-the-perspective-is-great-and-gives-me-a-sense-of-the-world%2C-i-feel-like-i'm-standing-there!-this-image-has-a-great-use-of-perspective-aswell-as-coloring%2C-very-cool-image! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoy-the-expressions-of-your-characters-you-were-able-to-capture-the-emotions-that-they-have-inside-of-your-drawing.-i-really-enjoy-the-design-of-the-walls-and-how-you-were-able-to-make-the-man-idea-of-your-what-if-statement-a-vital-part-to-your-world.-i-think-you-make-great-use-of-perspective-especially-with-showing-things-father-back-in-the-room. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-your-sketch-is-that-we-get-a-good-idea-of-who-the-character-is-by-what-she-is-doing-int-he-scene.-i-really-like-the-bright-and-vibrant-colors-you-use-to-create-the-world.-your-sketch-here-makes-great-use-of-framing-while-keeping-the-main-character-front-and-center-while-also-having-an-interesting-setting-in-the-background. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-how-it-is-robotic.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-it-is-like-a-factory-in-the-background.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-pointing-your-eyes-towards-the-character. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-its'-hair.--what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-shops-in-the-background.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-putting-the-character-in-the-middle. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-clothes-it-wears.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-garden.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-describing-what-the-background-looks-like. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-how-he-is-muscular.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-big-entrance-to-the-world.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-focusing-your-eyes-towards-the-most-important-part. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-boots-it's-wearing.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-camping-background.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-detailing-the-background-and-setting. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-his-hair.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-stars-and-planets.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-detail-of-the-character. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-bike-he-has.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-cities-in-the-background.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-cool-text 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool-concept%2C-and-great-work-trying-the-3d-perspective-and-shading...love-the-despair-on-the-peoples-poses.-should-be-a-great-story 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the--contrast-between-the-waterfall-and-the-trees-around-it. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-environment- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-drawing-it-is-very-detailed-i-also-like-how-you-based-it-off-of-the-scene-of-of-with-the-woman-and-man-in-the-hospital-room 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/simple-but-i-like-this-style-of-art.-simple-but-good.-good-job- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-shading-bro 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-very-detailed.-looks-nice 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-glowing-things%2C-but-the-brightness-could-be-tweaked-so-we-can-fully-see-the-alien. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-so-much!-the-perspective-is-amazing-and-it's-easy-to-tell-who-the-main-character-is.-i-also-love-how-natural-the-main-character's-pose-is%2C-it-has-so-much-life-and-movement-in-it. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-good-drawing 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-is-the-bird-and-the-reflection-in-the-puddle-i-think-it-looks-really-cool. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-very-scary-looking-but-very-detailed-i-like-your-guys-style-of-art.-unique- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-is-really-pretty!! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-we-get-to-see-the-granny-and-the-rubbish-runners-in-the-same-picture!-i-also-like-the-attention-to-detail! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-how-it-was-inspired-by-lily-pads-and-the-outfit-shows-that.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-looks-magical-and-it-really-fits-the-character. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-looking.-really-like-the-robot-characters 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-well-the-perspective-is-used-in-the-drawing-. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-can-sense-the-emotion-of-exhaustion-in-the-drawing 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-color-balance-is-great!-it-gives-a-magical-and-clam-emotion.--i-am-wondering-what-place-the-character-is-in%2C-is-it-their-home%3F- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-characters--design-. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-really-good!!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-color-ad-perfect-drawing-is-nice 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-style-so-much!-i-think-it-is-very-visually-intriguing-and-it-definitely-caught-my-eye.-i-think-that-emphasizing-the-main-character-could-be-helpful%2C-since-it's-a-little-hard-to-tell-which-one's-the-main-character.-i-also-love-the-perspective-of-this-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-depth-the-picture-shows!--i'm-also-curious-about-what-buildings-tumtum-is-sitting-on-and-looking-at.--also%2C-the-perspective-the-picture-is-really-cool!-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-colors-and-it's-really-easy-to-tell-that-they're-in-a-bedroom 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wat-i-like-most-is-how-u-made-the-color-blue-that's-my-favorite-and-i-like-how-u-made-it-a-smile-mood-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/reminds-me-of-an-anime 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-detailed-it-is-with-the-shading.i-get-a-sense-of-curiosity-coming-from-your-character 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-colors-a-lot%2C-it's-very-visually-appealing!-however%2C-i-fee-like-the-monkey-looks-a-little-out-of-place-when-it-comes-to-the-lighting%2C-but-besides-that-i-think-this-is-rad! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-cool 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-level-of-detail-that's-shown-in-this-image-by-the-cross-hatching-.-it's-really-pleasing-to-look-at!-personally%2C-i-feel-like-it-could-show-more-of-the-%22world%22-that-the-character-is-in%2C-but-i-absolutely-love-it-besides-that! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-very-cool-and-i-wish-i-could-draw-like-that 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-good- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-face%2C-i-don't-know-if-jim-is-withered-or-if-he-is-just-sad-or-has-to-do-something-he-doesn't-really-want-to-do-on-the-computer%2C-or-watching-something-sad%2Fbad-that-he-doesn't-like-(with-his-hands-under-the-table).-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-ruggedness-of-it%2C-the-way-the-lines-and-shading-is%2C-it-really-looks-like-jim-might-be-dreaming-or-is-this-a-normal-day-for-him.-(that-is-the-feeling-i-am-getting-from-them).-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-shading-and-lines.-great-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-of-all%2C-i-didn't-know-the-moon-could-look-like-this!-second%2C-what-i-like-about-your-character-is-that-she-looks-cautious-and-doesn't-seem-to-remember-her-home-world%2C-or-is-somewhat-saddened%2Fscared-by-what-has-become-of-it.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-looks-alive%3B-whether-the-pink-outline%2C-grey%2C-red-lines-are-strings-or-neurons-or-something%2C-it-looks-like-its-flowing-and-ebbing%2C-and-the-fog-makes-it-more-mysterious.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-colors-because-the-purple-fog-works-well-with-the-pink%2C-red%2C-and-grey-lines%2C-and-it-almost-makes-me-think-the-lines-are-a-tree-or-an-actual-human-being%2C-or-something-inside-an-actual-human-being%2C-like-veins.-great-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-going-to-be-a-fun-story.-i-love-those-floating-balls-nice-use-of-lighting-on-them.....what-will-he-choose-i-wonder%3F-i-hope-in-the-story-he-goes-to-the-outside-world-for-a-bit-%3A) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-concept%2C-good-use-of-space-on-the-stage-as-well...i-can't-wait-to-see-this-story 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-well-done%2C-i-feel-for-the-character-in-this-image.-you-made-him-feel-small.-also-i-like-the-pose-of-the-two-characters-on-the-right-side 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-the-various-amounts-of-shading-throughout-the-image.-the-story-this-image-tells-is-very-sweet-and-seems-to-show-puff's-personality.-cute! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character%2C-is-that-there-is-no-character!-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-fact-that-you-put-no-character-and-that-it-looks-like-a-bamboo-forest.-i-want-to-believe-that-this-is-a-tranquil-scene%2C-where-the-background-itself-is-the-most-important-thing.-although-i-can-imagine-it%2C-i-see-black-and-white-on-paper%2C-and-for-some-reason-the-shading-at-the-top-of-the-bamboo-sticks-throw-me-off.-i-can-imagine-this-scene.-great-job!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-this-image-is-how-there-is-alot-of-shading-and-the-images-look-very-good.-i-think-that-you-did-a-good-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-way-he-looks-because-that-drawing-is-awesome!-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-looks-very-much-like-what-you-said-in-the-description%2C-and-i-can-see-the-stairway-to-heaven%2C-and-the-towers-actually-look-like-flames-to-me%2C-surrounding-your-character.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-using-lines-and-the-character-has-a-great-use-of-lines-and-tone%2C-and-has-shading-in-just-the-right-places-to-make-it-and-the-character%2C-pop-out.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-the-character-is-that-she-is-in-a-position-where-she-looks-as-though-she-is-falling%2C-and-the-blue-streaks-below-her%2C-are-clouds.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-looks-like-a-factory-that-is-very-far-away.-i-feel-as-though-the-character-is-right-in-front-of-me%2C-and-the-background-is-farther-away.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-space%2C-but-i-think-the-background-could-have-just-used-more-color%2C-to-make-it-look-more-life-like-and-to-get-that-feel-of-an-actual-place%2C-not-just-a-2d-drawing.-(if-that-makes-sense).-great-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-her-face%2C-what-i-get-from-it-is-happiness%2C-a-feeling-of-joy%2C-i-think-she-is-a-young-girl-from-the-looks-of-her%2C-and-she-is-kind-of-feeling-this-new-place-out-and-is-enjoying-it-so-far%2C-and-the-fact-that-she-might-be-a-ghost-is-amazing.-moving-on%2C-how-your-world-is-portrayed%2C-even-with-the-character-is-all-flowing.-it-looks-just-so-smooth-with-fast-lines-and-shading-and-it-looks-like-it-has-movement-in-it%2C-that's-why-the-character-looks-so-much-like-a-ghost-to-me%2C-(along-with-the-no-limbs)%2C-like-she-is-flying-into-this-moving-world-that-feels-simple%2C-but-still-has-so-much-to-offer.-great-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-way-the-character-is-positioned-and-the-suit-and-sadness-in-the-character's-appearance.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it's-gloomy-and-i-am-getting-the-scary-vampire-dracula-feel-about-it%2C-with-the-moon-showing-a-hint-of-brightest-behind-realistic-clouds%2C-as-the-only-source-of-light%2C-and-i-am-now-realizing-the-glowing-hands-on-the-character.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-the-camera-in-the-background%2C-a-blurry-kind-of-scene-is-pretty-great-that-showcases-more-of-the-character%2C-so-good-job-on-that.-i-just-want-to-say-how-the-room-is-possesssing-a-scary-dark-kind-of-feel%2C-but-the-library%2Fbookshelf-looks-fairly-normal%2C-with-no-sort-of-cobwebs-or-abandoned-ness-anywhere-around-it.-of-course-i-might-have-to-know-the-story-more%2C-to-understand.-great-job!-(i-thought-it-was-a-full-on-video).- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-colours%2C-really-enjoy-the-flow-of-this.-looking-forward-to-your-next-step 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-confuses-me-a-little-bit.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-curious-about-this-story.-seems-violent-and-sleepy-at-the-same-time%2C-how-did-you-pull-that-off%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-like-a-doctor-strange-scene 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-hallway-goes-farther-and-farther---a-great-use-of-depth. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/oh-my-god!-even-is-the-best-jarvis-ur-insane- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-coloring! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-the-best-one-i-have-seen-i-love-the-idea.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fire 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea.-us-at-pixar-love-the-background-and-the-way-you-put-the-idea-into-a-drawing-me-personal-would-watch-that-as-a-movie 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/mason-looks-very-colorful-you-should-add-color-to-the-mushrooms- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-her-world-is-it-looks-like-she-likes-to-cook. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-happens%2C-if-she-get-wings-or-not. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ah-yes-very-nice-polite 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-we-can-see-the-character-look-into-the-distance.-a-suggestion-i-have-is-to-maybe-tell-us-what-he's-looking-at.-great-job.-cant-to-see-it! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/butiful-art-workk-!!!!!!!!!!!! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-background-looks-amazing-its-very-interesting--the-clothes-is-amazing- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-looks-cool-but-what-is-she-holding-on-to-. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-are-the-bees.--what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-there-is-a-sign-and-pathway-to-new-york-city.--the-image-has-a-great-use-of-detail. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-need-more-flaver 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-you-did-very-good-with-the-drawings-because-you-were-very-good-with-all-of-the-small-details.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-green-skin-and-the-angle-its-at-and-the-lights%2C-that-looks-cool 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-depth-you-used-in-the-drawing%2C-i-also-like-that-you-made-the-building-more-3d-but-i-feel-like-you-can-add-more-buildings-in-the-back 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-looks-very-cool-good-job 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-behind-it-is-really-cool%2C-the-drawing-as-well-is-nice-%3Ad 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job-with-the-art- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-robot 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-your-character-is-he-wants-to-do-something-new 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-detail.-what-i-like-most-about-your-world-is-the-creativity-it-is-very-cool-and-unique.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-detail%2C-space%2C-and-perspective. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/omg%2C-so-realistic 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-artwork!!! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/perfect!!!!!!!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-buildings-grass-and-road-its-giving-me-city-vibes-love-how-your-saying-if-flowers-were-living- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-characer-is-that-it-is-funny-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-character-is-very-well-detailed. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-great-drawing-and-this-reminds-me-from-a-moivie!!!!!!! 2021-10-25 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-anatomy-is-cool-with-the-additional-shading-style%3B-great-job!-%3A) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-image-can-have-a-great-use-of-more-mushrooms-and-more-texture 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-very-cool.-what-i-like-most-about-your-character-is-how-cute-she-is.-what-i-like-most-about-your-world-is-the-depth-and-illusion-of-3d.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-space- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-drew-her!-but-maybe-you-could-add-a-bit-more-detail-to-the-setting 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-is-really-cool. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that-is-an-awesome-drawing!!-love-it-%3B) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-and-design-of-the-picture.-i-think-you-should-add-more-detail. 2021-10-25 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-shading-and-coloring-brings-a-pop-to-the-design%3B-it'd-be-cool-though-if-you-could-color-the-character. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-amazing-but-i-do-not-understand-the-sorry-i-really-don't--have-a-clue- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-idea-but-maybe-you-could-add-more-detail-to-the-hills 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/poor-bird 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-backround-is-vary-good-from-that-pic-i-dont-know-what-your-story-is-about-. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-back-ground-and-how-it-really-looks-like-they-are-in-the-city. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-backround-and-its-a-great-drwing-of-the-zoo 2021-10-25 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-good-drawing- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-background-it-looks-like-a-galaxy-with-stars-in-their- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-character-design.-add-a-little-more-to-the-background-next-time 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-character-is-crouching-because-that-really-shows-how-big-the-creature-in-the-back-is.-i-like-that-the-world-is-very-colorful-and-definitely-very-green-and-nature-y.--there-is-a-great-use-of-perspective-and-color. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-drew-the-character-and-all-the-other-things-around-the-character-have-a-lot-of-good-details. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-he-survived-whatever-happened-to-his-world.--what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it's-not-completely-destroyed.--the-image-has-a-great-use-of-showing-what-jeff's-world-looks-like. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/well-if-money-had-no-value-that-means-that-the-prices-would-change-on-things-maybe-some-people-woulden't-like-that-who-knows 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-dont-really-get-what-the-story-is-about-in-this-pic-i-am-confused 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-really-like-is--how-much-color-this-drawing-has-and-the-deatils-it-has%2C-i-would-say-maybe-out-line-the-character-in-black-for-him-to-be-notice--little-more-clear. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-just-add-color-and-blur-for-the-background-objects 2021-10-25 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-is-the-use-of-depth-and-the-shading-is-very-good-as-well.-you-might-consider-adding-more-detail-to-the-stuff-around-him-it-looks-very-random-like-you-just-through-it-in. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-and-world-is-that-you-put-multiple-different-things-in-the-picture.-try-to-build-more-on-the-background-buildings. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-character-is-kind-of-like-a-silhouette-in-the-picture.-the-use-of-value-is-also-really-great-because-the-shading-makes-it-look-ominous-and-kind-of-mysterious.-i-love-how-the-world-is-very-scary-and-mysterious. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/definitely-feels-like-a-wasteland%2C-well-done.-i-appreciate-the-use-of-depth-perspective-as-well 2021-10-25 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-setting-in-this-drawing-maybe-add-either-color-and-add-so-more-very-good!! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-made-the-drawing-in-space.-that-space-bus-or-whatever-that-is%2C-is-really-well-drawn-and-the-setting-and-whatever-little-details-are-awesome. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-it-looks-cool 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-background-i-also-think-you-could-add-detail-to-the-character- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-your-world--is-the-detail- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-cool-just-add-more-color-and-a-bit-more-backround 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like--the-image-its-very-creative-its-amazing- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-line-and-space%2C-but-there-is-no-character-so-i-can't-really-see-the-story-happening.-but-good-job- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-character-is-kind-of-standing-over-the-city.-i-also-like-how-the-setting-makes-the-character-look-small.-the-use-of-perspective-is-really-good-in-this-picture.--i-also-like-how-it-makes-us-focus-on-the-character-because-he's-really-small. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-your-character-is-that-you-can-tell-her-feelings-by-how-she-is-drawn.-something-you-could-add-is-like-more-of-a-back-round-like-what-does-it-actually-look-like-where-she-lives.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-color.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it-just-add-more-detail-and-more-collor-and-more-backround 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-epic-you-did-such-a-great-job 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-make-the-building-bigger-so-they-don't-look-huge 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-what-i-like-most-about-this-character-in-his-world-is-how-much-details-it-has-in-one-this-picture%2Ccraving-for-a-little-color!!-but-really-good. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-context-clues 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-pose-of-the-character-is-the-thing-i-most-like-%3A)-good-job-on-the-overall-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-characters-are-that-they-can-grow-plants-on-them.--what-i-like-about-the-world-is-how-colorful-it-is.--the-image-has-a-great-use-of-detail. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawling-its-good-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-what-i-like-most-is-the-idea-and-what-your-trying-to-show.-there-needs-to-be-more-detail. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-it-looks-just-a-bit-more-color-and-you-will-be-fine 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-great-use-of-space-and-i-like-how-you-put-the-character-on-the-sidewalk-and-the-city-in-the-background.--try-to-zoom-a-bit-more-on-the-character- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-showing-us-what-it-looks- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-idea-but-maybe-you-could-add-a-bit-more-detail-to-the-setting 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-amazing-you-had-a-point-that-she-likes-the-garden-i-cant-wait-to-see-it-finished. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-detail-that-you-put-in-his-face%2C-maybe-put-a-little-bit-more-emotion-into-it--or-something. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-perspective-of-the-drawing!-i-think-it's-nice-to-see-3d-buildings-with-shading.-a-suggestion-i-have-is-to-maybe-make-the-lines-of-people-or-things-that-are-supposed-to-stand-out-a-little-thicker%2C-overall%2C-i-think-you-did-a-pretty-good-job.-i-can't-wait-to-see-how-it-turns-out%2C-so-keep-up-the-good-work! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-people-i-like-have-you-have-things-shaded-i-really-like-how-its-in-a-subway- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-space-and-better-details 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-character-looks-empty-and-kind-of-sad-with-his-job.-i-like-how-in-the-setting-we-can-see-a-lot-of-things-happening-in-his-little-office.-he-also-has-many-stuff-filing-his-office%2C-making-the-office-look-small.-that's-a-really-great-use-of-perspective.-you-should-add-a-lamp-and-then-make-some-shading-around-some-parts-to-make-the-picture-have-more-depth. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-character-looks-but-i-think-you-could-add-more-detail-to-the--background 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/to-start-off%2C-i-just-want-to-say-this-work-is-beautiful.-whoever-drew-this-is-a-true-artist.-the-only-thing-i-will-say-is-that-the-little-girls-shirt-looks-like-its-part-of-the-side-walk.-other-then-that%2C-excellent-work---- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-shading-whith-how-much-presure-you-put-on-each-part 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawling-and-the-shading-keep-up-the-good-work!-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-drew-it-to-make-her-look-small-and-the-city-big.-it-shows-that-she-might-feel-small-or-insignificant.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-characters-are-the-there-hair.--what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-colorful-it-is.--the-image-has-a-great-use-of-color-and-detail. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-top-drawing-perspective-is-really-neat!-you-could-add-a-bit-of-shading-and-a-little-detail-on-the-bottom-paper%3B-but-overall-great-job. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-that-picture-is-the-perspective-and-the-angle-you-made-this-really-good. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-perspective-you-put-it-at-but-maybe-you-could-add-more-color-or-use-body-language-to-show-how-the-characters-are-feeling 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-details-in-the-picture%2C-i-dont-really-understand-the-story-yet-but-maybe-add-a-character-in-the-picture-that-would-be-great-!! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-about-the-back-round-is-that-it-looks-so--detailed 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-good-bro-you-are-so-cool-you-are-so-goood 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-there-surrounding-looks-like-there-outfit-it-looks-really-cool.-what-i-like-most-about-your-world-is-like-the-very-faint-colors-you-used-it-looks-like-it-is-foggy.--the-image-has-a-great-use-of-color- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-the-character-is-making-the-story-interesting-and-just-facing-different-things- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-face-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-are-the-trees-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-context-clues 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image--has-a-great-use-of-space-and-size-and-angle%2C-the-i-like-how-some-buildings-are-over-lapping-and-are-all-different-sizes.--it-would-be-nice-to-add-some-more-and-define-the-character-a-little-bit. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-clothing-on-him%2Fher.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-fact-that-it-looks-like-space-with-all-the-stars.the-image-has-a-grate-use-of-space 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the--imagination-on-this-drawing-is-amazing-like-the-art-work- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-your-world-is-how-you-show-multiple-perspective-or-shots.-it-brings-more-into-the-drawing-then-if-you-just-did-one. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-character-is-really-big-and-intimidating.--i-like-how-the-world-is-kind-of-dry-and-barren.--there-isn't-many-people-and-there-are-also-not-many-houses.-these-images-have-a-great-use-of-color-and-perspective.-it-uses-a-lot-of-nice-colors-and-it-shows-how-big-the-character-is. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-the-most-about-the-characters-is-how-they-look-very-human-like-except-the-stomach-portion-like-the-legs-a-very-human-like-and-not-just-straight-lines 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-cool 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-there--are-2-people-and-it-looks-like-they-like-different--things-like-the-boy-likes-math-and-it-seems-like-the-girl-likes-art%2Fdrawing.--i-also-like-the-setting-as-well. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-art-style-its-very-cute-it-gives-me-a-vintage-vibe.-love-it! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-perspective!--it'd-be-cool-if-the-buildings-had-a-bit-of-shading%3B-but-overall-nice-job-%3A) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-her-body-language!-it-really-shows-you-how-she-is-feeling 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-blends--in-and-looks-very-cool 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-epic-you-are-so-good-at-drawing 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about--your-character-is-the-perspective-you-out-him-in-how-it-looks-like-hes-looking-away-from-the-camera. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-love-the-use-of-space-in-the-top-drawing%2C-and-the-difference-between-the-two-worlds-is-striking%2C-well-done. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-that-art%2C-detail-and-size-to-show-distance-in-the-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-looks-good-but-where-are-the-characters 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-color-and-i-think-you-could-add-outline-to-really-make-those-colors-very-vibrant- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-this-world-is-how-you-added-detail- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-the-concept-is-crazy-animals-in-the-zoo 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-really-like-about-the-character-is-her-outfit%2C-she-is-really-well-drawn-as-well!-what-i-like-the-most-about-the-world-is-the-store-behind-her.-the-image-has-great-use-of-detail!-although-i-think-you-can-add-a-bit-more-detail-to-the-right-of-the-drawing.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing-and-your-picture-put-were-is-your-character-at-were-dose-it-takes-place- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawing-is-so-good!!-you-should-add-more-lighter-colors-though-unless-that-is-the-theme-you-are-going-for. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-good-drawing-i-can-imagine-a-conversation-is-happening-and-i-think-those-three-are-the-main-charaters-but-i-think-you-could-add-more-background-because-there-really-isn't-much 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-characters-name-but-it-should-be-a-calculator 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-it's--bird.-i-wonder-what-the-bird-is-going-to-do. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-perspective-and-i-think-you-could-add-windows-to-the-building-as-well-as-adding-signs-like-old-joe's. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-the-most-about-this-character-is-that-it-remains-me-of-the-ugly-duckling-but-instead-with-birds-and-like-the-book-the-ugly-ducking-because-you-are-beautiful-no-matter-what-and-stand-up-for-yourself-when-you-are-getting-bullied.---j-i-like-how-you-made-the-mountains-seem-like-they-get-farther-and-farther-away%2C-i-think-you-can-add-some-more-detail-to-the-background--x- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-background%2C-craving-more-detail 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-drawing-has-many-details.-i-really-think-it-would-help-if-you-add-some-color-to-this-picture-that-would-make-it-all-that-much-better.-overall-nice-good-with-making-this-picture. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-nailed-it-and-i-also-think-you-can-add-a-little-more-shading-on-like-the-road-but-overall-it-is-amazing.-good-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/%22not-great-this-week%22-this-is-so-good-i-dont-know-how-you-could-think-that.--great-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/something-i-think-you-can-improve-on-is-the-background.-i-feel-like-theirs-a-lot-of-white-in-the-picture-that-can-be-filled-with-sand-or-more-cacti-or-something.-what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-detail-in-the-body.-for-example-his-abs-fingers-biceps%2C-ect. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-looks-wonderfull!-what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-how-much-detail-you-put-in.-if-this-is-in-color-i-cant-wait-to-see-it. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-pretty-good%2C-but-the-background-is-a-little-empty-but-it's-good 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-lighting-and-i-also-like-how-the-water-is-shimmering-in-the-light-and-it-is-very-well-drawn 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-image!-we-can-see-who-the-focus-is%2C-and-some-of-their-personality.--the-color-and-style-give-off-a-forestry%2C-woodland-villager-vibe.-this-makes-me-intriguing-to-hear-about-the-final-product.-i-do-wish-that-more-work-was-put-into-the-background.-it-seems-like-it-is-lacking-in-detail-and-attention.-they-feel-last-minute%2C-and-simple.-detail-and-color-are-an-easy-fix-to-make-it-just-as-astonishing-as-the-character%2C-i'm-excited-to-see-where-your-story-will-end-up!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoy-the-language-of-the-girl!-although-maybe-a-road-and-other-items-to-the-background-would-make-this-more-interesting! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-your-character-is-friends-with-the-robot.-i-wonder-if-the-robot-was-bad. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-background-and-character-are-super-cool-but-i-think-you-should-add-color. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-perspective-and-i-think-you-could-angle-the-posters-to-make-them-look-like-they're-on-the-wall. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-the-image-that-the-flower-looks-like-its-facing-the-city-and-the-road-disappearing 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-drawing-looks-like-you-put-a-lot-of-thought-in-this-drawing.-i-would-like-to-see-more-detail-in-this-picture-though.-i-can-see-the-mountains-but-i-want-them-to-stand-out-more.-maybe-put-some-shading-in-them-and-color-them-i-so-them-look-nice-and-full. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-made-the-drawling-and-how-you-put-effort-and-i-like-you-character-- 2021-10-25 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-black-and-white-that-you-did!-and-that-the-people-you-did-that-give-is-some-characteristics.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-background%2Fenvironment-is-really-neat!-the-way-the-trees-have-realistic-features%2C-and-the-sky-color-is-very-good!-i-also-like-the-character%2C-he-looks-very-happy-there%2C-it-makes-us-happy. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-he-still-has-imaginary-friends.-i-wonder-what-his-imaginary-friends-are-going-to-do. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-really-good!-love-the-background.-maybe-you-could-make-your-character-a-little-more-noticeable.-overall-though-i-notice-you-put-hard-work-in-the-background-and-that-shows!-good-job! 2021-10-25 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-details-and-face-expressions-on-the-character%2C-i-also-like-the-different-tools-scattered-around.-this-image-also-uses-shading-very-well.-only-suggestion-that-i-have-is-try-to-not-make-it-scattered%2C-maybe-more-organized.-good-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-texture-and-size-to-show-distance-in-this. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-a-beautiful-drawing!-i-love-that-you-added-watercoler.-i-was-wondering--what-in-this-drawing-is-your-character%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-super-good 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-image-it-is-really-pretty-but-dose-he-like-all-math-or-dose-he-like-some-math-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-how-you-gave-lots-of-detail-and-i-think-it-looks-great! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-light-and-happy-it-feels 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/zinedine%2C-i-would-like-to-inform-you-that-we-haven't-finished-yet.-we-will-work-on-it-more-and-take-your-advice.-thank-you. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this!-i-love-how-you-can-really-see-how-the-story-is-being-portrayed.-the-background-really-gives-us-clear-insight-into-the-world%2C-and-the-surrounding-landmarks.-with-that%2C-i-wish-that-the-granny-had-got-more-of-the-same-attention-as-the-background-did.-i-think-she-could--use-definition-in-the-hair%2C-and-more-work-into-her-outfit.---great-job-on-the-rubbish-runners-though!-they-could-use-some-work-on-their-bodies%2C-but-they-are-very-cute-otherwise! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-your-paper-is-a-great-and-gives-more-detail-and-describes-the-world.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-the-world-is-that-theres-plenty-of-things-in-the-background-to-look-at 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-background-looks-really-cool.-the-story-sounds-funny-i-think-this-story-is-going-to-come-out-cool 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-conspt-is-so-cool.-i-would-like-to-know-more-about-them%2C-and-why-a-robot%3F 2021-10-25 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/um-i-think-you-should-make-the-picture-look-more-stressed-instead-of-the-summary-having-to-tell-you-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/one-thing-i-like-about-this-piece-is-how-cartoony-the-image-looks.-but-on-thing-i-think-you-should-add-is-a-bit-more-detail. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-the-character-is-that-its-a-teddy-bear.-i-think-you-could-make-the-bear-more-visible-because-i-couldn't-really-tell-who-the-character-was.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-it-the-detail%2C-shading%2C-and-color.--the-image-has-a-very-good--use-of-color. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-use-of-plants. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-the-world-is-how-much-things-are-in-the-back-ground--and-how-it-makes-the-thing-in-front-match- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-amazing-drawing-it-would-look-even-better-with-color- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job-this-week!-something-that-i-think-you-could-add-you-this-drawing-would-be-making-your-character-a-little-bigger-along-with-adding-a-bit-more-detail-in-the-backround.--really-good-start! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-very-intriguing-and-i-want-to-know-more-abut-her-and-her-world-and-your-artwork-is-so-cool! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-great-use-of-details-but-i-think-that-the-angles-need-a-little-more-work.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-this-character-is-how--the-all-look-the-same-and-your-story-look-very-interesting--and-your-drawing-looks-detailed.--- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-how-happy-she-looks-.-i-like-how-the-world-has-the-school-and-specific-details.-the-whole-picture-itself-is-great-in-details-and-great-art-itself. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-picture-gives-a-idea-of-the-character's-personality-from-the-angle-and-perspective-that-you-used.-i-like-the-background%2C-but-i-would-fill-the-blank-space-behind-it.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-simple-style-and-colors.-it-really-brings-it-together-you-could-try-adding-a-few-more-neutral-colors-just-for-something-more-interesting 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-it-shows-where-she-is-and-the-details-of-her-and-how-she-looks....... 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-way-you-created-the-character-in-there-world-and-the-angles-along-with-the-way-their-head-is-facing.-but-it-could-use-some-shading. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-wonder-was-why-is-there-a-rat-sitting-on-the-whiteboard 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-a-cool-way-to-do-your-drawing-very-different-but-cool-i-like-the-way-u-made-the-picture 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-your-character-is-that--she-shows-her-personality.-what-i-like-about-the-world-is-that-it-matches-the-character-shading- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-picture-is-made-with-fish-and-i-can-tell-that-the-story-looks-like-the-person-likes-fishing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-she-is-very-joyful-and-happy 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https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-creativity-i-like-how-you-decided-to-draw-them-in-monsters-university-because-they-don't-have-a-home-i-think-that-that-is-very-creative 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-found-most-ineresting-was-the-emount-of-detail-in-this-picture. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-way-you--brought-the-colors-together-the-characters-its-amazing 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-shading-in-the-picture-because-it-makes-it-seem-gloomy-and-it-fits-the-mood.-i-would-add-things-onto-the-ground%2C-but-overall%2C-it-is-really-good! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-outfit-and-that-connie-is-a-ghost.-what-is-like-about-the-world-is-the-trees-and-the-placing-of-them.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-shading.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-magic-hat- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-this-image-is-how-there-is-alot-of-shading-and-the-images-look-very-good.-i-think-that-you-did-a-good-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-made-your-character-a-silhouette-to-bring-your-attention-onto-what's-in-the-door%2C-it-makes-me-wonder-what-else-is-in-there%2C-the-shading-is-incredible 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-amazing-perspective.-i-think-the-buildings-could-be-even-smaller-and-cover-the-horizon. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-you-gave-more-detailed-in-the-paper 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-you-gave-more-detailed-in-the-paper 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-artwork!-the-image-has-a-really-great-use-of-tone-in-the-water%2C-on-the-bridge%2C-and-in-the-sky.--i-also-love-how-the-character-is-pictured-more-naturally-in-the-background.-how-you-told-us-about-how-they-are-based-off-of-lily-pads-really-helped-complete-the-scene.-because-of-this%2C-i-wish-that-we-could-see-more-of-the-characters-details.-facial-features%2C-color%2Ftype-of-hair%2C-and-details-of-the-outfit.--overall%2C-it's-a-really-amazing-piece-otherwise.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-very-great-use-of-art-work-and-shading. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-color-and-how-its-very-detailed-and-good-choice-of-the-colors. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-look-in-the-trees-and-the-top-of-the-trees 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-outfit-and-that-connie-is-a-ghost.--what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-trees-and-the-placement-of-them.--the-image-has-great-use-of-shading. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-background-looks-very-nice%2C-the-character-looks-very-cool.-i-think-the-story-will-come-out-really-nice 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-all-the-detail-and-shading.-i-think-the-backround-could-use-more-work-like-texture-may-help-the-floor-look-less-plain.-maybe-even-color-to-make-the-character-pop- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-characters-is-that-they-look-all-different-and-very-much-like-robots. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-picture-has-a-lot-of-personality%2C-and-it-shows-what-kind-of-personality-the-character-has.-one-thing-that-i-would-recommend-is-putting-more-time-into-the-character's-features.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-drawing-is-sooo-cool!!-i-love-the-style-of-the-characters!!!-%3Ad 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-is-very-detail-i-can-see-that-you-put-a-lot-of-effort-into-it-like-for-example-the-fence-looks-very-detail-the-walk-way- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-the-most-about-the-character-is-all-the-animals-in-the-zoo-what-i-like-the-most-about-the-world-is-all-the-encloses- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-picture-is-how-the-guy-loves-math-also-i-dont-understand-the-math-myself. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-your-character-is-their-spikes-and-eyes.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-are-the-houses-in-the-background.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-depth-and-perspective! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/dave-looks-like-he-can-livet-anything-is-that-true--it's-cool-that-he-finds-abandoned-house-i-like-it-10%2F10- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-your-character-is-that-she-has-a-very-open-mind.-i-like-ow-the-world-has-a-little-bit-of-every-thing.-very-good-detail. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-way-you-brought-the-hole-drawing-together-into-one-picture-it-looks-great!! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-robot-has-a-scared-expression!-very-cool! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-depth-and-detail-in-the-rawings 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-detail-that-is-put-in-the-image 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-you-really-gave-detail-of-the-backround. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-depth-in-the-drawing-and-3d-dimensins 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-characters-expression-is-really-good!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice!-the-hooves-look-like-boots%2C-it-really-is-a-funny-pace--%F0%9F%A4%A3 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-imagination.-i-like-all-the-floating-planets 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-depth-but-for-the-windows-on-the-building-a-ruler-can-help-them-look-more-even.-for-the-floor-and-road-it-should-have-texture-to-make-it-less-plain 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-image-has-a-great-use-of-shading-and-technique- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-he-looks-like-he-has-a-lot-to-say.-what-i-like-most-about-this-world-is-its-in-the-distance.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-how-he-looks-like-he's-going-somewhere. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-image-has-a-great-use-of-color-so-far!-i-love-the-colors-you-have-used. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-are-phenominal 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/thats-so-cool-that-there-is-a-cowboy-who-time-travels!-the-back-angle-of-the-character-was-done-really-well. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-this-world-is-how-you-made-the-mushrooms-different-sizes. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like--most-about-the-character-is-that-he-is-wearing-earphones.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-buildings-in-the-back-especially-the-one-to-the-right.-the-image-has-great-use-of-roads.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-he-is-vibing-in-the-mushroom-forest-and-i-love-the-background-because-the-shading-is-cool-you-can-tell-its-dark-behind-the-mushrooms-in-the-for-ground. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawings-are-spectacular 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-should-add-your-character-in-the-picture.-i-like-how-you-used-perspective-in-your-picture- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-picture-is-that-the-main-charactor-is-sitting-on-the-ledge-of-the-building. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-buildings.-the-3d-part-is-really-good.-but-it-needs-more-detail-on-the-floor-and-in-the-trees.-even-some-texture-on-the-trunks-and-floor-could-help-it-a-lot. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-most-like-about-the-character-is-her-body-language-and-i-think-you-should-add-more-to-the-backround. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-used-the-angles-and-how-there-is-a-little-city-at-the-end-of-the-road!-its-looks-really-cool!-%3A) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-your-character-is-how-adventurous-they-seem.-maybe-you-could-be-more-descriptive-about-the-character%3F- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-this-world-is-it-looks-like-it-takes-place-in-his-bedroom. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-drawings-and-the-detail-in-them 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-many-plants-there-are!-they-look-really-nice. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/woah%2C-the-background-looks-really-cool-and-the-expression-portrays-how-happy-she-is-very-well! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-how-they-look-like-they-have-more-to-them-then-meets-the-eye.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most--about-the-character-is-that-he-looks-like-he-can-be-really-nice.-what-i-like-most-was-about-the-world-is-that-you-put-it-in-a-city-and-it-looks-like-a-park-in-the-city--.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-most-like-about-the-world-is-the-color-and-i-think-it-looks-really-pretty-and-beautiful.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-amazing!-but-it-could-use-some-more-shading%2C-also-she's-adorable%2C-what-spices-is-john-%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-cool-how-you-made-the-angles-on--your-drawing!-%3Ad 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-how-they-live-in-a-dumpster.-what-i-like-most-about-this-world-is-how-it-takes-place-in-a-dark-alleyway. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-characters-emotions-are-very-clear-and-her-world-were-people-dance-and-sings-is-a-cool-concept-but-i-cant-really-tell-about-their-surroundings-because-all-i-see-is-a-car.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-he-has-a-beard.-what-i-like-most-about-this-world-is-how-it-looks-like-its-in-the-fall. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-the-most-about-the-character-is-his-name-and-how-strong-he-is-what-i-like-most-about-the-wold-is-that-it-looks-deserted-and-empty- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-put-depth-in-the-photo-and-i-think-that-you-could-have-made-you-character-a-bit-bigger.-i-really-loved-the-colour-and-how-you-made-the-habitat. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-there-was-a-gun-but-that-is-the-only-thing-with-colour-so-i-think-you-should-add-colour-to-the-rest-of-the-picture.-the-thing-i-also-wondered-is-what-is-a-raider-and-what-are-there-purposes. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-emotion-on-their-faces.-what-i-like-bout-their-world-is-that-their-surroundings-look-neat-and-tidy-the-image-has-great-use-of-shade 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-keep-it-up- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-she-has-yellow-clothes-because-you-don't-often-see-many-character-with-yellow-clothes.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-space-and-texture. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-way-you-drew-the-floor-is-so-well-done!-the-expression-on-your-character's-face-really-shows-how-they-feel-as-well!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-all-the-detail-you-put-into-this-and-how-it-all-looks 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-way-you-drew-your-character's-world-is-mysterious.-i-really-love-it!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-happy-she-looks-and-how-free-the-world-looks-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-perspective 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-included-the-sign-of-where-he-is-in-the-picture--i-also-liked-how-you-put-your-character-up-close-instead-of-far-away 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-way-you-drew-the-trees%2C-with-the-closer-ones-being-bigger%2C-and-the-further-ones-being-smaller.-it-shows-depth. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-he-has-a-smile-in-his-face-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that--it-looks-3d- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-he-is-a-robot.-what-i-like-most-about-this-world-is-the-idea-of-money-has-no-worth-so-it-makes-me-wonder-how-the-world-would-work. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-little-smile-on-your-character's-face-is-so-adorable.-you-can-really-tell-that-they-enjoy-what-they're-doing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-colors-you-used-are-stunning%2C-and-the-way-you-shade-really-compliments-the-entire-piece.-i-absolutely-love-this-one. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-feel-sad-for-lily-i-hope-she-grows-wings-and-flys- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-drawing-love-it-keep-up-the-good-work 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-way-you-shaded-the-picture!-it-gives-it-life%2C-and-i-love-nale's-expression. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-fun-idea-good-job 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-amazing!-i-like-the-initiative-of-this-group%2C-and-i-like-how-you-incorporated-a-real-life-scenario.-into-your-project. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-designs-and-concept.-also-the-way-you-drew-the-portals-is-amazing!-i-love-the-idea-of-the-two-headed-snake. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-the-use-of-perspective-on-the-stairs.--my-only-critique-is-i-would%CA%BBve-liked-to-see-the-shading-on-the-character-and-different-parts-of-the-drawing-to-make-it-more-detailed.--but-other-than-that-amazing-job%2C-i-really-loved-the-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-use-of-perspective-in-this-drawing.--i-would%CA%BBve-liked-to-see-more-details-on-the-cityscape-like-windows-or-different-shaped-buildings%2C-but-other-than-that-great-job. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-clouds-and-how-colorful-the-outlining-is.--i-would%CA%BBve-liked-to-have-seen-more-details-that-help-to-make-this-world-more-unique-to-you-and-your-story.--it-would%CA%BBve-been-a-little-bit-easier-if-you-were-to-outline-the-stork-in-black%2C-but-other-than-that-good-job.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-small-details-that-you-were-able-to-add-to-help-tell-me-more-about-the-story.--i-also-liked-the-use-of-shading.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-building-looks-futuristic-and-is-unique-to-the-storyline.--my-only-critique-is-i-would%CA%BBve-liked-to-see-more-details-that-help-to-intrigue-the-viewer.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-how-you-were-able-to-add-so-many-details-that-make-this-world-unique.--i-love-your-use-of-perspective-as-well-to-make-the-road-look-longer.--well-done! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-picture-was-able-to-not-only-give-the-setting-of-the-world-but-also-helped-to-tell-a-story-through-the-face-on-the-wall.--i-would%CA%BBve-liked-to-see-a-little-bit-more-detail-to-tell-us-about-the-character-and-the-kind-of-person-they-are.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-of-the-trees-and-the-depth-is-so-fantastic--i-love-the-drawing-of-nature-and-it%E2%80%99s-really-believable-and-i%E2%80%99m-curious-if-the-character-is-coming-in-or-going-out.---thanks---roxanne- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-use-of-sketching--i%E2%80%99m-curious-on-what-the-character-is-going-to-do-next.--this-drawing-is-pulling-me-into-your-story.---i%E2%80%99m-curious-of-what-he-thinks-of-the-world-he%E2%80%99s-in.---the-buildings-he%E2%80%99s-looking-out-at-look-older-and-makes-me-feel-like-this-is-set-in-a-place-outside-of-us 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-they-have-antlers-and-a-tail.-i-like-that-the-character-seems-to-be-part-of-a-fantasy-world.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it's-in-a-tree.-i-love-trees-and-the-idea-of-a-large-tree-as-a-world.-i-wonder-what-the-character-is-a-mix-of%2Fcross-between%3F-the-character-makes-me-very-curious.-this-image-has-a-great-use-of-perspective.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-key-for-me-in-the-picture-is-the-use-of-one-color--i-like-the-whimsical-approach-to-the-drawing-and-can%E2%80%99t-wait-for-more-of-the-story-too-unfold--the-character-looks-happy-and-out-to-have-fun 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-she-has-a-vivid-imagination.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-looks-like-an-ordinary-classroom-but-is-travelling-to-different-worlds-through-imagination.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-line-and-shape.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoy-the-abstract-use-of-color-and-really-as-understanding-the-portal-that-this-sock-is-now-in--i-like-the-use-of-color---what-i-might-suggest-is-possibly-adding-more-detail-to-the-hills.-making-them-as-unique-or-drawing-more-detail-for-your-world.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-like-a-cute-adventure.-i'd-imagine-the-character-is-shy-and-a-bit-introvert.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-use-of-color-and-the-drawing-is-amazing.---i-can-feel-lily%E2%80%99s-sadness-in-her-eyes-that-you-drew.-it%E2%80%99s-very-touching---great-use-of-scenery---the-mountains-and-hillside-are-realistically-drawn.--- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-looks-very-neat%2C-it-reminds-me-of-the-jungle-book.-great-work.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-lighting-but-it's-way-too-dark-to-see-the-details.-maybe-lighten-the-image%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-concepts-and-detailed-drawings-are-very-realistic--the-use-of-color-is-amazing--i-can-see-every-detail-of-the-town-and-the-depth-of-the-picture.-i-feel-like-it%E2%80%99s-well-drawn- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-style-and-coloring.-great-work.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-perspective-drawing.-character-looks-like-they-vibin'.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-is-the-sketch-of-the-person.-it%E2%80%99s-very-realistic-but-abstract-at-the-same-time---the-world-image-just-might-use-more-details.-i%E2%80%99m-not-tying-the-monsters-inc-back-ground-too-it.---i-love-the-use-of-color-in-the-person-and-the-blue-on-the-floor.-it%E2%80%99s-a-good-start.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-shading-and--back-ground-is-really-good-%5E%5E 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-platypus!-also-i-think-it's-super-cool-how-you-used-both-colored-pencils-and-markers%2C-it-makes-different-things-pop-out.-for-example-if-it-were-all-in-colored-pencil%2C-i-would-have-focused-mostly-on-the-waterfall-but-with-marker-added-the-platypus-and-trees-stand-out. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-theme-of-the-colors-used-and-how-the-lighting-of-the-candle-is-portrayed. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-whole-picture-is-just-amazing!!!!!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-digital-drawing-skills-and-think-that-this-is-very-well-done-and-thought-out.-i-would-like-to-see-more-of-this-story. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-very-cool-its-almost-like-something-out-of-a-children's-book!-i-love-the-style-and-it-makes-me-ask-a-lot-of-questions. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-attention-to-detail.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-multiple-parts-of-the-world-is-shown.-i-like-how-you-can-see-parts-of-the-characters-personality-with-their-facial-expression. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-insane-and-super-cool!-however-i-would-say-its-a-little-hard-to-find-out-the-backstory%2Fconflict-behind-this-scene.-very-cool-though! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-perspective-shown-in-this-image-is-great.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-style-you-used%2C-it-is-very-cute.--the-use-of-traditional-media-gives-some-nice-texture-that-adds-to-the-image- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-its-very-similar-to--a-tv-show-i-watched-which-makes-the-image-nice. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-is-really-nice-and-well-done-%5E%5E 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-the-world-is-the-use-of-curve%2Fwavy-lines%2C-to-really-show-the-foggy%2Fcloudiness-of-the-city.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-tone. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-lighting-and-colors%2C-they-give-off-a-kind-of-homely-vibe.--it-makes-me-wonder-what-kind-of-person-this-saucy-young-englishman-is. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-vibrant-color-scheme-used-in-this-scene.-it-makes-me-wonder-what-significance-the-cherry-blossom-has-later-in-the-story 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-vibrant-color-scheme-used-in-this-scene.-it-makes-me-wonder-what-significance-the-cherry-blossom-has-later-in-the-story 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-scenery%2C-its-light-and-bright%2C-having-a-fantasy%2Fmagical-touch-to-it.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-color-and-perspective. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-muted-colors-you-used-and-the-amount-of-detail-you-put-into-this-piece- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-shadowing-and-how-the-character-is-placed-somewhere-to-tell-us-more-about-the-character. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-this-concept-art%2C-in-a-way-reminds-me-of-a-fantasy-world-or-a-video-game. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-coloring-and-the-way-they-meshed-so-well. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-art-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-so-cool- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-colors-to-show-there-emotion-and-the-feel-of-the-room-is-gloomy-even-the-outside-looks-gloomy-to-complement-the-scean-the-bluer-color-on-the-girl-makes-her-look--sad-and-the-green-makes-the-older-one-at-peace 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-left-picture-a-lot.-i-wonder-what-the-tunnel-will-lead-to! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-color-and-shading-are-amazing.-the-sky-looks-like-a-galaxy. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool!-its-very-detailed-to- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool.-i-like-how-it-has-a-lot-of-dimension-to-it.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-perspective!-every-time-i-see-this-title-it-makes-me-laugh!-but-now-i'm-thinking-who-are-the-rubbish-runners%3F- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-amazing-i-love-the-detail-and-the-character-is-so-pretty-this-whole-setting-is-very-pretty-i-don't-have-any-like-critique-because-i-think-this-is-amazing-in-all-ways-i-love-the-colors-and-the-detial-etc.-and-the-trees-and-bushes-ets-it's-amazing!!!! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-will-like-to-see-something-like-this%2C-this-sounds-really-interesting.-i-like-how-the-chatterer-wants-to-overcome-her-fear-to-do-want-she------- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-so-pretty.-it-looks-very-nice.--maybe-you-can-add-more-details-%3A) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-prospective-you-chose-for-this-picture-but-considering-its-in-the-city-there-should-be-some-cars-and-why-dose-the-road-lead-strait-to-a-building- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/awesome!-very-creative.-when-you-tell-the-story%2C-give-a-description-of-how-the-galaxy-is 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-pretty-i-love-the-art-it-really-inspires-me%F0%9F%A4%A9 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-!-wow!-how! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it-just-the-only-problem-is-you-looking-at-an-angle-and-in-the-picture-you-can-see-the-deck-so-the-flag-pole-should-go-farther-down-to-where-it-is-on-the-ship-and-if-your-looking-at-that-perspective-why-isn't-everything-else 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/is-he-on-a-floating-subway%3F-because-if-so-it-looks-amazing.-he-looks-like-the-main-character-you-guys-did-a-great-job 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-their-hair%2C-i-think-it's-really-cute.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-yellow-things%2C-i-don't-know-what-they-are-or-what-their-purpose-is%2C-but-they're-the-only-thing-i-see-besides-the-character-and-some-greenery.-the-image-has-great-use-of-the-difference-in-lighting-to-make-something-(the-yellow-things)-stick-out. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-detailed-%2Ci--like-it 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-love-love-the-creativity-and-the-abstracted-style-its-amzing! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-buildings-but-maybe-you-could-add-more-detail-to-them- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-ur-so-good-at-drawing- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/dot-being-of-afraid-of-asking-for-help-is-his-weakness-and-i-hope-he-overcomes-it.-i-like-the-drawing-%3A)-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow!-this-is-amazing!-the-art-style-is-so-astounding-and-the-shading-is-fantastic!-i-want-to-say-some-cons%2C-but-i-have-none!-this-is-an-immaculate-piece-of-art! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-shading-is-mind-blowing.-i-can-tell-exactly-how-the-character-looks-even-if-the-character-is-facing-the-other-direction%2C-maybe-if-you-add-some-color-in-the-shading-it-would-make-the-drawing-better. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool!-its-very-detailed-i-would-want-to-see-what-it-looks-like-with-color 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice-maybe-try-adding-more-shading-and-color%3F-but-it-is-very-cool-and-i-love-the-shapes-and-the-character-and-i-love-all-the-detial! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-uce-of-diseption 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-amazing!-i-cant-wait-to-see-the-rest-of-the-house-and-i-want-to-know-if-you-can-show-the-age-of-the-gentleman-on-his-face. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-sketch%2C-maybe-add-some-more-dimension-so-you-can-easily-tell-what-objects-are-in-front-of-the-others-%3A) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-drawing.-maybe-add-color%2C-but-amazing-background 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-should-add-more-details-to-the-buildings-and-if-the-buildings-have-cars-on-top-may'be-make-it-a-parking-garage-and-the-picture-docent-real'y-show-the-time-traveler-part. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-outfit-that-connie-is-wearing%2C-you-should-expand-the-idea-of-people-seeing-ghosts-though%2C-the-background-is-really-nice-and-the-way-you-made-the-trees-is-awesome!-you-could-have-maybe-make-the-background-stand-out-more-since-this-week-was-about-the-background%2C-but-the-art-is-still-awesome! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-bob-and-the-drawing.-i-find-his-story-interesting-and-hope-to-see-if-he-overcomes-his-weakness. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-drawing%2C-maybe-add-some-color 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-really-good-i-love-all-the-detial-and-colors-is-amazing-maybe-you-could-try-to-add-a-little-more-shading%3F-but-other-than-that-i-think-its-amazing!!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-train-it-looks-cool 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-very-pretty-and-creative!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-love-the-shading-and-atenchen-to-detal! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-angles-are-good.-maybe-if-you-have-shading-and-color-the-drawing-would-be-even-better. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-inserting- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/%22what-i-like-most-about-the-characer-is-how-detaled-he-is 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice.-maybe-add-a-quick-summary-story-to-give-the-person-a-overview 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-you-could-write-what-the-character-is-doing-in-the-image-or-where-they-are. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-cool!-and-its-very-creative-i'm-wondering-is-the-character-going-to-be-from-space%3F- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-drawing-and-the-background- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-photo!-maybe-try-to-create-more-dimension-in-the-back-with-more-trees-%3A) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-can't-really-tell-what's-going-on-in-the-picture.-but-i-want-to-know-if-you-could-show-more-depth-into-the-photo-is-a-donkey-in-the-story%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/%22what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-detaled-it-is 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-this-scene-is-that-there-are-two-characters%2C-and-they-seem-to-have-very-different-attitudes-on-the-situation-that-they-are-in%2C-and-that-makes-me-wonder-why-this-is.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-seems-to-swallow-the-characters-up-in-its-space.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-making-objects-look-three-dimensional. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-so-amazing!-i-can-definitely-tell-you-took-a-long-time-with-this-because-of-the-detail-in-shading-and-background-details!-digital-art-is-really-hard-and-i'm-surprised-you-got-this-done-within-a-week! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-cool-and-inserting 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-creative.-btw%2C-zach-king-already-did-it-though.-i-don't-know-if-you-got-it-from-him-but-if-you-didn't...awesome 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/seems-inserting 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-your-drawings-skills-and-your-attention-to-detail.-i-would-recommend-that-you-add-more-children.-i-recommend-that-you-add-things-to-the-side-of-the-buildings.-i-am-excited-to-see-were-your-story-and-character-go.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-so-cool!-i-love-how-the-background-is-detailed-and-the-school-just-says-%22school%22-%F0%9F%98%82-you-could-definitely-work-on-finalizing-it%2C-but-i-know-that-digital-art-takes-forever.-everything-aside%2C-it-looks-wonderful! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-add-more-context-about-your-charter-but-seems-inserting 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/in-the-scene-given%2C-i-like-all-the-different-buildings-inspired-by-ones-we-see-in-real-life.-although-it-has-some-kind-of-perspective%2C-i-feel-like-the-depth-is-kind-of-inconsistent.-when-looking-at-walter%2C-he-seems-very-big-as-opposed-to-the-foreground-and-buildings.-some-of-the-buildings-also-are-inconsistent-with-the-sidewalk%2C-mostly-with-the-nike-on-near-the-bottom.-overall%2C-i-like-the-use-of-different-types-of-color%2C-and-the-overall-setting. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-drawing-has-potential-but-i-think-you-could've-drawn-some-windows-or-something-on-the-buildings-and-if-he-is-sitting-on-the-tree-you-couldve-added-some-branches-and-leaves-to-show-that-its-a-tree.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-art-and-colors-and-the-character-design-it-really-inspires-me%F0%9F%A4%A9 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-their-style-of-clothing-underwater.-it-makes-me-wonder-if-they-wanted-to-end-up-there-or-if-they-have-clothes-that-magically-stay-dry.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-its-defiance-of-science%2C-with-melting-planets-and-irregularly-shaped-objects.-the-image-has-great-use-of-space-to-show-the-vastness-of-the-world. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow.-the-drawing-is-amazing.-the-visual-perspective-of-the-entire-drawing-is-amazing.-the-road%2C-the-sun%2C-the-mountains%2C-the-trees%2C-etc.-the-use-of-lines-and-shapes-are-also-fantastic.-the-birds-are-cool-and-the-sun-setting-behind-the-mountains-is-awesome.-although%2C-i-do-think-that-the-sun-is-too-big%2C-but-it's-still-fine-and-cool.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-setting-and-character-what-i-think-would-make-it-better-if-it-had-some-3d-and-depth-over-all-its-pretty-good. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-prespective-and-how-you-can-really-tell-its-3d-i-think-you-could-have-emphasized-the-bear-a-little-more-because-it-was-hard-to-tell-that-it-was-the-character.-i-love-the-color-and-shading 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-this-image.-the-small-cramped-(very-full-desk)%2C-the-character's-blank-expression-staring-into-the-computer-screen%2C-the-sketchy%2Fshaky-lines-in-your-drawing%3D-all-give-a-sense-of-frustration-or-at-the-very-least-discomfort.-your-title-is-bad-boss%2C--but-this-image-makes-me-think-of-the-possible-effects-the-bad-boss-is-having-on-an-employee.-great-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good%2C-but-it-could-be-saucier. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-inserting-and-i-like-how-the-drawing-is-3d 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-use-of-3d-and-the-shadowing-its-really-good. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-attention-to-detail-and-shading.-i-would-recommend-that-you-maybe-put-things-on-the-counter-because-usually-there-are-lot-of-things-there.-you-could-add-shading-on-the-cabinets-and-draws.-i-am-excited-to-see-where-your-story-and-character-go.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-cool-story--add-faces-it-looks-scary--this-is-something-i-would-watch 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-lighting-is-really-nice-here%2C-it-looks-dramatic-and-solemn.-the-blurring-on-the-background-nicely-emphasizes-the-crying-form-of-the-character%2C-though-i-feel-as-though-the-gaussian-blur-is-too-strong.-i-think-maybe-the-lineart-could-use-a-bit-more-care-and-variety-in-line-thickness-(though-that's-probably-just-me-being-nitpicky-because-i-like-doing-lineart-lol.)-this-does-a-really-good-job-in-establishing-the-mood-though%2C-with-it's-use-of-lighting-and-cool-colors.-the-wood-texture-is-also-interesting-to-see.-i-like-how-everything-emphasizes-the-character-and-their-unique-stand-out-design%2C-and-i'm-curious-as-to-what-kind-of-room-this-is-and-it's-significance-to-the-story-and-the-protagonist's-dead-friend.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it-the-color-is-perfect-and-amazing-the-concept-is-amazing-and-i-love-the-picture-the-frame-work-conveyed-everything-i-need-to-know.-however-maybe-making-the-colors-on-the-girl-a-little-bit-brighter-so-she-pops-more. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-picture-and-the-angle%2C-could-you-add-more-depth%3F-idn-but-your-perspective-shows-just-what-it-needs-to 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-is-amazing.-the-color-and-the-characters-look-so-cool.-the-visual-perspective-is-also-used-very-well.-it-shows-how-big-the-animal-is-compared-to-the-person.-the-ship-in-the-background-is-also-very-cool.-the-color-is-used-well-and-the-visual-perspective-used-for-it-is-also-very-good.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-he-character-is-the-way-he-stands-and-his-detailed-clothes.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-it-frames-the-cowboy-and-the-buildings-get-smaller-to-show-perspective%2Fdepth.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-framing-and-lines. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-use-of-making-the-character-in-a-look-small-in-a-giant-world-is-a-great-detail.-making-someone-small-with-big-dreams-is-a-really-great-touch-as-well.-shading-is-done-well%2C-though-looking-beyond-the-doors%2C-it-starts-to-become-bland.-though-the-detail-s-great. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-drawing-is-absolutely-incredible-it-goes-into-detail%2C-but-a-minor-thing-is-that-the-reflection-is-cut-off-so-you-cant-see-the-facial-expressions-but-you-can-still-clearly-see-that-her-reflection-is-trying-to-get-her-attention. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-its-a-robot.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-money-has-no-value.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-imagination- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-color-the-depth-is-really-cool-too.-maybe-have-a-little-bit-more-detail-but-that-is-about-it. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-characters-are-the-fact-that-they-are-constructing-trains.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-the-world-and-if-this-is-a-common-occurrence%2C-and-why-do-narwhals-specifically-construct-trains%2C-and-what-the-trains-are-used-for.-the-image-also-has-a-great-use-of-shading. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-robot-needs-more-color-it-is-way-too-light-and-it-needs-more-demotions. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/thats-a-great-drawing.-john-looks-very-happy-cooking. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-he-stands-out-among-the-other-random-people-in-the-drawing.-the-use-of-perspective-for-the-hq-is-very-good%2C-too.-it-really-shows-how-big-the-building-is-compared-to-the-people.-however%2C-the-drawing-itself-doesn't-stand-out.-i-don't-know-what-the-two-things-on-the-sides-are.-the-hq-looks-good%2C-though.-i-also-like-how-you're-making-the-people-walk-into-the-hq.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-futuristic-cowboy-for-some-reason-that-makes-me-laugh-is-it-a-comedy-idea-by-chance%3F-but-i-like-how-you-backdrop-a-future-with-the-cowboy-standing-in-the-middle-it-shows-a-sense-of-exploration-for-the-character.-i-really-liked-how-you-showed-perspective-and-depth- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-angles-and-perspective-are-done-well-i-think-the-only-think-that-needs-to-be-worked-on-is-the-size-of-the-characters-relative-to-their-surroundings-and-other-characters.-(i-don't-really-know-if-it's-intentional-but-the-main-robot-looks-giant-compared-to-the-control-panel-which-makes-it-seem-ridiculously-big) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-cool-drawing--this-will-make-it-even-better-if-you-added-shading--how-does-this-show-how-he-wants-to-live-does-he-want-to-be-a-cook%3F-good-story 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-you-shading-and-perspective.-i-would-recommend-that-you-show-why-there-are-leaving-the-city.-i-would-show-them-leaving-because-i-thought-they-were-walking-to-the-city-until-i-read-your-description.-i-am-very-excited-to-see-where-your-story-and-character-go.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing%2C-could-you-use-shading-for-a-flair%3F-idn-but-i-like-your-landscape-and-i-think-i-saw-your-character-post 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawing-it-looks-great--im-looking-forwards-to-that-zoo-story 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-way-you-shaded-the-trees.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-variation-to-the-buildings.-i-think-that-the-lines-on-the-road-should-get-smaller-as-they-get-farther.-i-really-like-the-way-the-whole-scene-fits-together. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-love-most-about-the-character-is-how-she-expresses-her-happiness.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-it-it's-very-detailed-and-resembles-a-normal-home.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-lines-and-dimensions.-good-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-perspectives-they-really-add-to-the-design%2C-i-think-you-could-have-added-more-shading-to-the-drawing-or-at-least-finished-the-building.-i-love-the-detail-of-the-charactors 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-really-great-use-of-3d!-i-really-like-the-depth-and-how-the-characters-react-when-they're-in-the-subway-train. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-the-bird-is-different%2Funique.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-looks-pretty-peaceful.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-color. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-showed-the-face-of-lily-showing-her-wants-and-sadness-that-she-is-unable-to-get-those-wants.-the-world-is-nice-but-i-would-say-you-should-add-tone-and-maybe-texture-too-so-you-can-make-your-drawing%2Fstory-a-little-better.-but-overall-awesome-job-on-creating-the-birds. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-donkey-is-great%2C-but-you-could-have-used-more-shading-and-ways-to-add-perspective.-also%2C-the-palm-tree-kinda-looks-like-its-in-the-middle-of-the-ocean.-the-theme-is-pretty-cool-overall 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-drawing-is-the-best-one-i-have-seen-so-far.-i-love-the-demetions-and-the-colors. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-colors-and-graphics-the-placing-is-amazing-the-color-is-great.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-is-super-sick-and-the-detail-is-amazing.-maybe-add-more-diminution.-the-setting-is-so-cool.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing%2C-i-like-the-theme%2C-but-could-i-see-the-character-better%3F-i-do-like-how-your-landscape-is-themed-of-your-character 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-your-work-good-job 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-pictures-are-great-but-i-think-you-couldve-just-consolidated-them-into-one-and-maybe-give-more-backstory-on-whats-going-on.-great-drawing-overall. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-its-a-different-perspective%2C-how-there-are-cars-on-the-bulidings. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-art 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-really-cool--make-it-better--add-color--this-will-probably-make-a-good-story--- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-their-energy-and-exploritative-feel.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-it-creates-a-sense-of-sheltered-community-while-still-feeling-like-a-place-of-adventure.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-line-that-complements-this. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-shading.-the-dept-was-very-good.-i-also-liked-how-you-turned-the-paper-to-fit-your-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-art-looks-really-cool-and-the-perspective-is-done-really-well.-i-think-the-only-thing-that-would-be-good-to-work-on-is-the-proportion-of-the-people-relative-to-the-people-in-the-front.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-details- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-like-a-good-cartoon-with-a-story--its--reflection-in-the-water 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-your-characters-and-detail-to-your-character.-i-would-recommend-that-you-add-more-to-the-background%2C-it-is-very-bland.-you-should-add-more-fading-or-perspective.-i-am-excited-to-see-where-your-character-and-story-go.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-straightforward.-i-guess-you-could-say-that's-a-good-and-a-bad-thing.-the-use-of-lines-and-visual-perspective-is-fantastic.-the-bamboo-forest-looks-very-realistic-because-of-that.-although%2C-that's-it.-it's-just-several-bamboo-stalks-and-that's-it.-there's-even-a-random-space-in-the-paper-with-nothing-in-it.-there's-no-characters%2C-or-anything-else-in-it.-besides-that-though%2C-the-bamboo-forest-itself-is-very-good-and-i-really-like-the-perspective-of-the-bamboo-stalks-as-well.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-is-very-detailed-and-the-color-is-well-done%2C-i-just-cant-see-the-character 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-gave-us-a-little-bit-of-a-hint-with-your-description-about-john.-it-shows-john's-wants-and-gives-the-character-a-humble-feeling-because-of-the-life-style-they-want.-i-like-how-you-used-perspective-with-this-drawing-great-job. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-mushrooms-they-look-good.-the-person-does-too. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-setting-is-really-nice-and-i-like-how-simple-it-looks.-maybe-add-a-bit-more-shading-and-dimension.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-people-in-the-back-are-in-black-to-highlight-sophie-even-more-that-she-is-different. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-did-a-good-job-of-adding-depth-to-your-picture%2C-but-i-didn't-understand-what-your-story-is-about.-maybe-you-could-have-added-it-in-the-description-or-tried-to-show-it-more-in-the-picture-so-that-the-story-is-clearer%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-way-their-face-expresses-their-eagerness-to-explore.--what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-way-you-show-the-city-from-a-far-away-point-of-view.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-shading-and-mood. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-use-of-color-as-well-as-the-drawing-itself-is-amazing!-the-use-of-shading-definitely-adds-to-it-as-well.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-you-used-the-mushrooms-to-represnt-the-forest-and-the-diffrent-shadings-of-the-musshroom-and-why-is-this-boy-in-this-mushroom-forest-what-is-his-goal-what-does-he-have-to-find-or-is-he-just-trapped-there-very-nice-work 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-the-drawing-i-think-the-lines-could-be-a-little-bit-more-to-define-the-picture-a-bit-better-there-also-could-be-a-bit-more--depth-and-shading.--other-wise-it-is-really-cool. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-concept-and-the-drawing-you-can-tell-they-are-ambitious-and-ready-for-an-adventure. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-feel-like-the-drawings-could-be-less-square-like-but-other-wise-i-like-the-idea. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-lighting-is-super-cool%2C-its-kinda-hard-to-make-everything-out-though- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-color-and-content-of-your-drawing.-are-the-snakes-the-character-we-are-following%3F-i-like-the-use-of-light-to-spotlight-the-snakes.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-drawing-it-looks-cool 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-all-the-color.-i-think-you-should-have-used-different-paper.-i-think-it-looks-very-good. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-and-the-colors-are-really-cool- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-enjoy-the-style-and-color%2C-the-background-is-also-very-interesting 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it-you-could-use-more-detail.-but-i-like-it-overal. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-attention-to-detail-on-the-body's.-i-like-how-the-background-shows-that-the-room-is-dark-and-it-is-night-time.-this-image-has-a-great-use-of-depth. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-colors-and-designs-of-the-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-attention-to-detail-with-the-reflection-in-puddle-and-overall-how-neat-it-is. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/oh-wow%2C-this-does-a-really-good-job-at-establishing-the-atmosphere-and-mood-of-the-setting.-there-is-little-contrast-which-creates-a-whimsical-or-soft-atmosphere%2C-and-the-little-contrast-that-does-exist-emphasizes-the-structure-well.-i-feel-as-though-it's-a-bit-uncomfortable-for-my-eyes-however%2C-as-the-point-painted-with-the-darkest-values-is-awkwardly-placed-at-the-top-center-of-the-page%2C-on-the-roof-of-the-structure.-i-can-understand-this-is-because-of-lighting%2C-so-perhaps-the-lighting-could-have-changed-to-place-more-emphasis-on-the-main-subject-of-the-painting%3F-i-feel-it's-a-bit-strange-that-it-feels-like-there-is-emphasis-on-that-particular-part-of-the-structure.-this-work-does-a-good-job-though-at-expressing-it's-setting%2C-and-i-like-the-painting-style.-whether-this-is-just-a-rough-concept-painting-or-an-artistic-choice%2Fstyle%2C-it's-very-pleasant-and-well-painted. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-is-very-well-done.-i-like-it-very-much.-i-wish-the--trees-had-some-detail%2C-also-the-forest-could-use-some-shading. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-he-likes-time-traveling.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-he-can-time-travel.-the-image-has-great-use-of-showing-the-future-or-what-time-of-place-he-is-in. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-thought-of-the-theme-and-the-details-in-the-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-character-design 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job%2C-does-mark-spend-time-with-the-bees-or-does-he-no-like-them%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-monkey-and-the-trees-look-realistic-and-this-drawing-reminds-me-of-tarzan 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-happy-your-character-looks-and-the-background-is-sick. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-cherry-blossom.-i-really-like-the-depth-in-the-painting. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-background-looks-and-the-lakes-waves-look-great. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-color-and-watercoloring 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-idea-of-an-alien-cooking-is-really-cool-to-think-about. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-their-triangular-shape-which-points-to-a-sense-of-adventurous-action-in-this-scene.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-it-feels-alive-and-full-of-energy.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-shape. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-depth-and-the-use-of-3d-its-very-nice-and-i-love-the-character-art-style. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-surroundings-draw-your-eye-to-evan%2C-but-not-before-dragging-you-all-around-the-scene-until-you-focus-on-him.-the-color-and-contrast-of-the-scene-along-with-his-body-language-and-facial-expressions-suggest-that-he-is-happy-and-peaceful.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-your--drawing-looks--like-it-looks-great-and-very-detailed-and-i-like-how-creative-it-is-im-asking-myself-if-thats-a-alien-or-a-type-of-monster-and-is-it-baking%3F--- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-art-style 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-thought-of-the-theme-and-the-details-in-the-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-attention-to-detail-the-building-fronts-look-very-nice.-i-think-that-you-should-make-your-buildings-look-more-3-dimensional.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-variation-to-the-ghosts.-i-really-like-the-style-of-are-that-you-use%2C-i-think-that-it-looks-great. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-title-and-art.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-amazing-i-wish-i-can-draw-like-that- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this!-it-feels-like-a-manga-panel-since-it's-in-b%26w-which-is-really-cool.-and-the-facial-expression-is-also-really-well-done.-the-only-thing-is-that-i'm-kind-of-confused-what's-she's-reaching-out-to.-is-she-looking-into-a-mirror-or-to-the-viewer%3F-but-this-is-very-nice-to-look-at-good-job-%3Ad 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-art-work.-your-character-blends-in-with-this-setting! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-neat-and-colorful-the-illustration-is.-the-setting-is-very-clear-and-the-tone-it-gives-off-is-really-nice.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-how-your-world-is-like-an-enlarged-lake-or-pond-and-how-your-character(s)-are-living-in-this-city-that-lives-in-a-pond.-you-did-an-amazing-job-of-perspective-and-depth-great-job. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-road-mark-walks-on-seems-infinite%2C-which-makes-me-think-that-he-is-upset%2C-or-lonely-(which-may-not-have-been-what-you-were-going-for-but-if-it-was%2C-this-is-great)-so-it-adds-a-bit-of-personality-to-him.-i-also-really-like-the-background-and-how-large-and-far-the-buildings-look.-cant-wait-to-see-what-the-bee-man-does-next. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-thought-of-the-theme-and-the-details-in-the-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-use-of-an-open-plain-to-show-a-%22free%22-type-of-curiosity.-i-wonder-if-you-could-also-play-with-the-sizing-and-proportion-of-the-character-compared-to-the-tree-to-amplify-the-%22pure%2Ffree%22-atmosphere%2Ffeeling-more 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-don't-know-if-the-snake-represents-the-yin-yang-thing-but-i-like-the-drawing 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-idea-is-interesting%2C-but-i-think-you-could-have-added-more-detail-to-the-picture-to-make-it-more-obvious-as-to-whats-going-on.-maybe-it-would-help-if-added-color-or-showed-more-about-what-the-other-world-looks-like. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/youre-image-has-great-use-of-color-and-depth%2C-but-maybe-you-could-add-more-detail-to-the-image%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-good-drawings.-at-first-i-thought-he-was-in-a-bar-but-then-i-saw-it-look-like-a-house-or-office.i-really-like-this-one.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-you-used-the-diffrent-shapes-to-create-the-mountains-it-really-looks-like-you-took-your-time-and-i-really-liked-how-you-used-shading's-to-represents-the-birds-i-really-like-how-you-drew-the-birds-and-why-is-the-bird-born-withouth-wings-and-cant-fly. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-the-most-about-this-character-is-the-attention-to-detail-on-the-body.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-the-background-portray-how-the-bird-feels.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-colors-and-shapes-to-express-the-tone. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-thought-of-the-theme-and-the-details-in-the-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-it-looks.-it-feels-like-it-came-out-of-a-children's-book%2C-with-the-wonky-shapes-and-the-fantastic-setting. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-prospective-and-shading.-i-would-recommend-that-you-add-some-people-walking-or-buying-from-the-stands.-i-would-recommend-that-you-don't-put-the-words-on-the-light-pulls-because-that-is-not-how-it-is-supposed-to-be.--i-am-excited-to-see-in-what-way-your-character-and-story-go. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-mushrooms-they-look-realistic.-one-thing-you-could-have-added-is-color-to-the-back-round-also%2C-i-a-little-confused-about-the-floating-mushroom. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-detail-in-this-drawing 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/yessir.-the-snake-is-so-good%2C-did-you-use-procreate-to-make-this.-i-love-it. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-thought-of-the-theme-and-the-details-in-the-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-the-girl-walking-in-the-back. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-simple-everything-is%2C-choice-of-colors-and-selection-is-very-nice.-looking-at-this-makes-me-feel-at-ease.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-above-view-and-the-setting.-maybe-add-a-little-more-shading-and-dimension.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-art 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/placing-your-detailed-character-in-the-foreground-this-way-makes-it-clear-that-they-are-the-focal-point--while-adding-other-character-silhouettes--in-the-background--helps-us-get-a-feeling-that-they-are-certainly-a-part-of-a-world%2Faesthetic.-the-placement-of-sophie's-hands-in-her-pockets-is-a-great-use-of-visual-language-to-convey-that-she-feels-insecure-or-left-out.-awesome-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-style-of-the-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-shapes-of-the-snakes-and-colors. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-creativity-and-the-depth-perception 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/in-the-abandoned-house-with-the-closeup-of-dave%2C-i-can-see-a-good-use-of-shape.-his-torso-is-shaped-like-a-square%2C-firm-and-sturdy.-as-for-his-head%2C-it's-a-circle-which-makes-him-somewhat-approachable.-when-moving-on-to-the-second-picture%2C-dave%2C-along-with-the-road-and-cactus-seem-very-flat-and-sometimes-out-of-place%2C-whereas-the-house-looks-more-3d.-in-this-case%2C-i-would-draw-in-a-consistent-3d-fashion-to-better-fit-the-depth.-overall%2C-still-has-good-use-of-what-we-learned-with-shape%2C-and-depth. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-emotion-in-the-face-and-body-movement.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-framing-around-the-child.-the-image-had-a-great-use-of-perspective-and-shading.-i-recommend-adding-color.-great-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-character-but-where-is-the-background-world%3F-where-is-the-depth%3Fi-do-like-your-character-structure 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-curiosity-portrayed-by-the-drawing.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-the-expanse-of-the-island-makes-the-character-look-small-in-the-drawing.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-shading-too. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-art-style-in-your-drawing.-i-think-your-background-could-use-more-detail.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-sicko-mode 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-thought-of-the-theme.-i-also-like-the-detail-for-the-kitchen-and-your-thought-of-your-characters-name-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing-of-the-cracked-ship-and-how-descriptive-john's-room-looks.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the--body-language-of-the-characters-is-amazing-you-could-really-tell-what-you-are-trying-to-convey.-i-have-no-critiques-it-is-amazing-.-the-color-palette-matches-perfectly- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-zoo-is%2C-in-fact%2C-crazy%2C-i-was-not-lied-to.-in-all-seriousness-the-detail-on-the-animals-is-fantastic%2C-and-the-lines-are-very-clean.-82-out-of-17%2C-crazy-zoo-is-crazy 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-style--and-facial-expression 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-picture 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-really-good.-i-like-that-it-looks-like-hes-on-a-subway-in-space.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-looks-like-it-has-very-detailed-writing-for-the-characters%2C-i-just-cant-read-it 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-colors-you-used.-i-also-really-like-the-background. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-think-that-this-story-is-very-thought-out-and-the-drawing-is-very-colorful. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-art 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-so-cool-you-are-extremely-talented- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-its-a-visual-depiction-of-a-cliff-hanger.-even-without-seeing-the-majority-of-the-characters-face%2C-you-can-clearly-see-what-their-emotions-are-by-looking-at-his-body-language%2C-and-the-colors%2Fcontrast-of-his-surroundings.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-shading-of-the-blue-wifi-and-the-signals-it-gives-under-it%2C-i-think-you-could-have-a-room-where-you-can-use-one-point-perspective-or-try-to-make-the-cellphone-tower-bigger-compared-to-the-signal.-i-like-the-educational-aspects-to-it. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-drawing!-what-is-in-kato's-world%2C-is-it-different%2C-unlike-ours%3F-nice-buildings 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-used-vibrant-colors-in-your-picture-and-used-depth-in-your-picture. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-plants-have-a-lot-of-detail-and-look-really-nice-in-this-setting.-maybe-shade-a-bit-more-to-and-add-a-little-more-dimension.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-can-see-the-shapes-that-make-up-the-character.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-detail-to-the-objects-in-your-drawing.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-lines-that-are-drawn-softer-to-make-the-photo-be-less-consistent.-i-think-that-your-amount-of-buildings-look-great-on-the-photo.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-did-the-room 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nothing-bad-about-the-art-or-anything-to-be-honest%2C-the-perspective-is-amazing-and-the-unique-art-style-makes-it-even-better. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this.-its-really-good.-you-did-a-great-job-on-the-crow.-and-i-love-the-cars-in-the-back.-its-interesting-that-the-reflection-of-the-person-is-different-then-what-we-see. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-trash-bags-with-feet 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing-the-drawing-looks-really-detailed--the-only-thing-i-would-change-is-the-eraser-marks-they-look-weird-on-the-drawing-and-add-some-dark-shading-on-it-so-it-could-look-more-realistic.-but-it-looks-good 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-it-had-a-lot-of-color.-i-think-you-could-have-added-more-detail-also%2C-possibly-clouds-would-be-nice.-over-all-i-really-enjoyed-it.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-colors-in-this-one%2C-i-also-can-tell-what-its-about-very-quickly. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-they-were-able-to-escape.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-its-still-standing-after-an-invasion.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-art. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-angle-of-the-shot-is-done-really-well-along-with-the-hint-of-shading.-what-if-in-your-%22final-shot%22-you-could-play-with-the-focus-of-the-background-to-further-highlight-your-character-or-brighten-your-character's-surrounding-%22aura%22-to-highlight-your'-character's-emotion%2Fpersonality 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-incorporated-old-timey-clothes-for-the-character-and-showed-how-he-lives-in-a-big-household-with-no-one-around-him.-my-first-thought-about-the-character-was-since-he-is-alone-he-is-independent-but-also-wealthy.-i-also-like-that-even-though-you-didnt-do-your-research-you-still-showed-an-old-household-for-people-in-history.-you-used-depth-well-in-this-drawing-great-job. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-way-all-the-colors-allows-me-to-guess-the-characters-personality. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-of-your-character-is-really-well-done.-i'm-not-a-big-fan-of-anime%2C-but-the-drawing-style-of-anime-has-always-impressed-me.-though-there's-no-clear-sign-of-what-is-going-on-in-the-photo.-what-is-she-reaching-out-for%3F-what-is-her-personality%3F-other-than-that%2C-it-looks-really-well-done. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-beautiful!-i-love-how-soft-the-lines-are-and-the-colors-in-this-are-really-cohesive-%3A) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-good-drawings%2C-nale-looks-happy-and-thats-cool.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawing-and-detail-the-you-put-into-the-background-and-character.-i-did-not-notice-the-reflection-until-i-read-the-description%2C-maybe-make-it-bigger-or-put-the-whole-reflection-not-cut-some-of-the-head-off.--my-eye-was-drawn-to-the-crow-not-the-character-so-i-would-recommend-that-you-put-the-crow-more-back-or-zoom-out-a-little.-i-am-excited-to-see-where-your-character-and-story-go.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-and-the-drawing.-i-also-really-like-the-detail-and-effort-that-you-guys-put-into-this- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-concept!-why-doesn't-she-sing-or-dance%3F-keep-it-up- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-buildings-detail!-i-think-the-buildings-have-good-depth-but-maybe-try-to-make-the-character-smaller-than-the-buildings%2C-unless-this-character-is-a-giant%3F-i-like-the-idea-and-its-very-creative. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-detail-in-their-face-and-emotion.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-different-dimensions-and-details!-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-texture-and-line-work.-good-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing-its-very-detailed-but-i-cant-tell-whos-the-imaginary-friends-and-whos-real.-i-also-cant-tell-what-some-of-the-stuff-in-the-picture-is.-the-setting-of-the-drawing-is-amazing-though. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-drawings-and-detail%2C-maybe-you-could-show-what-village-belongs-to-what%3F-idn-but-i-like-the-camera-perspective-and-the-art-style. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-you-used-diffrent-shapes-for-example-you-used-the-triangles-as-trees-and-i-really-liked-how-you-used-your-shading-that-we-learned-this-week-i-really-love-this-image-i-would-also-like-to-see-more-of-this-robot-and-how-the-story-plays-out 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-cool.-the-camerawork-makes-ajax-look-tiny%2C-and-his-dark-silhouette-really-helps-him-pop-out-in-the-scene.-wonderful-detail-on-the-rocks-and-tree-segments.-all-in-all%2C-a-very-good-drawing%2C-21-out-of-13. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the--image-has-a-great-use-of-tone%2Fshading%2C- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-is-good%2C-but-without-the-description-i-probably-couldn't-tell-what-was-going-on.-also-i-can't-really-find-puff-in-your-drawing-if-they're--in-the-drawing.-overall-your-shading-and-general-art-skills-are-pretty-good 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-space-and-visuals.-the-image-really-brings-my-attention-to-the-center%2C-which-is-what-i'm-assuming-you-were-going-for.-the-use-of-visual-perspective-is-great-as-well.-my-eyes-instantly-went-to-the-center-of-the-picture-and-i-ignored-everything-else%2C-so-that's-done-really-well.-the-lines-in-this-picture-were-also-used-extremely-well.-i-do-have-to-say-though%2C-it-is-very-hard-to-understand-what's-happening%2C-even-with-the-explanation.-in-fact%2C-i'd-say-that-the-explanation-makes-it-even-more-confusing.-besides-that-though%2C-the-picture-itself-is-very-good-and-so-is-the-characterization.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-well-done%2C-a-lot-of-effort-was-put-into-the-garden-box-but-i-think-it-could-be-better-if-it-was-bigger-and-more-individual-plants-in-one-and-i-love-the-details-to-show-the-ground 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-did-a-good-job-of-using-depth-in-your-picture%2C-but-i-think-if-you-added-some-shading-to-help-direct-the-viewers-eyes-towards-the-characters-then-it-would-look-even-better. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-character-and-cat-are-super-cute-and-the-characters-hair-has-nice-detail.-maybe-blend-in-the-shading-a-bit-more-and-add-some-dimension.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-tried-to-use-depth-in-the-picture-with-the-road%2C-but-i-really-don't-know-at-all-what's-going-on-in-this-image. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-guys-made-that-one-guy-super-buff-but-i-can't-really-tell-where-he's-at-in-the-setting-so-you-could-draw-some-more-details 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first%2C-glad-to-see-someone-use-lucian-as-an-alternative-to-lucifer.-second%2C-the-lines-used-in-this-frame-quite-accurately-depict-the-character-and-his-surroundings.-the-only-thing-it-misses-is-a-little-bit-of-color. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-drawing%2C-but-its-a-little-hard-to-see-with-all-the-overlapping-lines. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-both-of-the-character's-heads-are-looking-in-different-directions.-it-suggests-that-the-different-heads-have-different-personalities.-i-like-how-the-two-portals-are-similar%2C-but-also-spaced-out-and-have-different-characteristics-to-suggest-that-they-lead-to-different-places.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-image-has-a-great-use-of-space%2C-also-what-are-the--boxes%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-close-up-is-great!-i-feel-like-the-character-is-desperately-trying-to-get-the-viewer's-attention-and-the-look-in-their-eyes-confirms-the-body-language-as-well. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-world-and-setting-but-what-you-could-do-better-is-show-more-of-the-outside-other-than-that-its-pretty-good-with-shapes-and-3d 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-i-love-that-art.-my-favorite-part-is-the-city-for-sure-i-love-that.-overall-its-great-*chefs-kiss* 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-and-think-that-it-will-be-an-interesting-story. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/absolutely-love-the-mushrooms%2C--however-i-think-that-they-would-be-even-better-with-some-more-color!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/a-lot-of-effort-was-used-to-draw-this-which-i-can-appreciate%2C-i-only-wish-that-the-objects-were-fully-colored-in-which-you-may-be-able-to-do-on-a-computer 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-of-the-birds-and-their-colors-are-really-good%2C-but-the-setting-doesn't-really-have-any-detail-so-you-could've-added-something-else.-i-also-like-the-colors-of-the-mountains. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-art! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawing-it-looks-really-detailed-and-looks-good-something-i-would-change-is-the-dark-shadings-look-kind-of-weird-and-looks-weird-over-the-lines-but-everything-looks-really-good. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-perspective-and-good-detail%2C-only-thing-is-that-it-needs-some-color. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-creative-idea%2C-and-the-drawing-you-chose-to-make.-what-is-the-donkey-doing-in-the-picture-though%3F-is-he-falling%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/beautiful-landscape%2C-amazing-coloring%2C-and-i-love-that-wind%2Fsnow-effect. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-did-a-really-great-job.-the-picture-looks-really-good%2C-but-i-think-if-you-make-the-crows-a-bit-smaller-then-you-could-direct-the-viewers-eyes-more-towards-the-character-rather-than-the-crows. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing%2C-maybe-there-could-be-more-depth%3F-idn-but-i-like-your-concept. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-coloring-is-amazing!-what-do-the-portals-lead-to%3F-they-sound-really-cool! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-drawing-and-how-john-is-making-a-cake-or-something%2C-i-think-you-could-have-erased-more-of-the-eraser-lines%2C-and-i-love-the-fit 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-all-the-color-the-framing-is-perfect-i-could-tell-that-you-want-us-to-focus-on-him-and-him-looking-at-the-ship.-however-it-took-me-a-little-bit-to-figure-out-what-he-was-looking-at-cause-of--the-overlay-of-the-creature.-maybe-you-could-define-the-ship-a-little-more.-otherwise-the-color-is-amazing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-lighting-is-amazing-and-your-style- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-way-you-drew-it.-one-thing-is-its-hard-to-see.-but-over-all-i-really-like-it. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-way-you-used-contrasting-ideas-to-amplify-your-character's-environment.-i-see-that-you-intentionally-made-the-window-view-very-dark-compared-to-your-character's-surroundings-but-have-you-thought-about-playing-with-the-lighting-of-the-inside-too%3F-to-make-the-contrasting-%22worlds%22-more-apparent. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-you-used-the-diffrent-shapes-to-represent-the-table-it-looks-liked-you-use-depth-of-thougth-i-really-liked-the-drawings-i-really-love-this-picture- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-the-clear-emotion-she-expresses.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-how-you-gradually-made-the-mountains-smaller-to-show-and-perspective.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-lines-and-shapes.-i-recommend-adding-more-depth-into-your-world-by-adding-shade-and-texture-to-the-surrounding.-great-work! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-background-and-visual-display. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-characters-emotions-are-really-well-portrayed-in-the-characters-face-and-body-language.-i-like--how-the-shading-and-detailing-of-the-background-draws-your-eye-to-the-main-character%2C-but-you-can-still-see-enough-detail-to-get-an-insight-into-the-characters-life.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-setting-feels-well-established.-i-love-how-the-structure-the-construction-narwhals-are-working-on-is-warped-and-has-bent-edges-rather-than-straight-ones.-the-composition-is-nice-and-many-things-seem-to-wrap-or-point-towards-the-structure-(narwhal-horns%2C-construction-tape...)-i-feel-as-though-tone-and-pen-pressure-could-have-been-better-applied-though-to-place-larger-emphasis-and-direct-the-viewer's-eye-more.-overall%2C-this-is-nice-and-the-round-shapes-give-a-pleasant-and-maybe-playful-feel. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-picture-the-story.-i-think-that-you-can-add-more-color-but-other-than-that-i-think-that-you-did-a-good-join. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-there's-like-some-lights-coming-out-of-the-city.-maybe-if-the-water-had-a-little-more-detail-it-would-look-a-lot-better.-i-also-like-the-drawing-of-the-space-needle 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-trees-and-how-you-shaded.-confused-why-they're-lines-going-through-the-trees-but-the-dimension-is-there.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/these-are-really-good-drawings.-i-wonder-what-is-going-on-in-this-frame 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-and-land-looks-pretty-well-done%2C-i-would-make-sure-to-erase-any-sketch-lines-from-the-character-to-make-him-more-clean-looking-and-then-make-the-house-more-detailed-and-have-him-standing-outside-so-it-looks-bigger 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-did-yours-so-detailed.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-abstract-it-is%2C-maybe-you-could-say-how-he-got-into-a-cloths-dryer.-i-really-like-the-art. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/he-looks-really-cool!-what-his-struggle%3F-keep-up-the-amazing-artwork!- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-magic-person.-whats-that-gate-thing-behind-them.-its-a-great-drawing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-different-types-of-demetions-and-shading-you-did.-i-looks-like-the-girl-is-connected-to-the-sidewalk-so-working-to-defferinciate-the-difference-between-side-walk-and-person.-but-over-all-a-very-good-drawing.%2C 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-she-likes-to-live.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-seems-pretty-normal.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-thought. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-trees-are-made-and-i-like-the-silowet-of-a-person-in-the-forest.-i-feel-that-you-could-added-more-enphoces-on-the-charater%2C-also-what-are-the-lines-for%3F-i-feel-that-they-draw-your-attention-away-from-the-trees. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-its-very-creative-to-paint-it%2C-however-its-makes-it-a-little-difficult-to-see-for-me. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-depth-and-detail%2C-only-thing-is-that-it-could-use-some-color. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-color-pallette-you-used-is-very-ethereal-and-serene-which-suggests-that-your-%22witch-like%22-character-is-either-%22good%22-or-lost-in-a-world-unlike-their-own.--or-maybe-in-a-dream%3F- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-is-to-the-point%2C-and-very-easy-to-understand.-dave-is-a-beautiful-character%2C-and-i-cant-wait-to-see-what-he-does-in-this-house.-11%2F10 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-how-you-did-the-shading-and-how-you-made-it-seam-so-realistic.-- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-you-chose-to-revolve-your-story-around-a-school-girl-that-explores-her-city.-it-shows-a-sense-that-the-character-is-very-extroverted-which-can-also-make-them-impulsive.-but-i-like-how-you-showed-the-characters-and-how-they-act-in-this-town. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-of-the-guy-and-fire-comes-out-of-his-hand.-if-you-could've-added-something-it-would-be-to-add-some-detail-to-the-background.-i-also-really-like-how-the-stairs-are-above-the-clouds.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-shading-and-tone-of-the-character-and-their-land.-i-would-recommend-that-if-you-want-the-person-in-the-back-make-it-a-tad-darker.-i-was-confused-on-what-the-little-thing-are-around-the-lake-below-the-mountains.-i-am-excited-to-see-you-story-progress.--- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-your-shading.-one-thing-i-got-confused-with-is-the-little-girls-eyebrows-also%2C-and-the-other-girl-doesn't-look-like-she-has-arms.--over-all-i-liked-that-there-was-a-lot-of-detail.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-story-idea%2C-but-i-think-you-could-make-your-picture-look-better-if-you-add-a-background-and-show-more-depth. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-character-is-so-happy-in-the-human-world- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-art-overall-i-would-only-make-the-foliage-a-little-more-detailed-and-it-will-be-perfect 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-colors! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-drawing 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-used-the-curved-lines-to-show-the-path-that-the-girl-is-taking-this-has-a-really-depth-of-thougth-the-thing-that-i-liked-more-is-the-backround-because-it-is-very-nice- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-got-to-love-the-art-and-the-title.-it-looks-good. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-just-amazing%2C-one-of-the-best-ive-seen.-why-cant-they-go-through-the-portal-now%3F-and-how-do-they-know-it-goes-to-another-world%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-the-buildings-looked.-i-think-that-you-should-enlarge-the-street-lamps.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-design-to-the-buildings-on-the-far-right-and-left.-i-really-liked-how-you-drew-the-scene-it-looks-very-3-dimensional. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-what-you-did-her-with-all-of-the-depth.-i-think-you-could-maybe-add-a-bit-more-shading-and-define-your-shapes-a-little-more.-i-love-all-of-the-little-details.--the-frame-work-is-amazing-and-you-can-really-tell-you-want-us-to-look-at-her.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-amount-of-detail-and-use-of-color-in-this-1-image-makes-it-on-par-with-a-picture-book.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-drawing.-it's-amazing.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-lighting%2C-color%2C-and-characterization.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-city-in-the-background.-it's-beautiful-and-is-extremely-realistic.--what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-their-facial-expression.-it-suits-them%2C-the-scene%2C-and-the-mood-very-well.-the-character-being-in-the-center-also-makes-my-eyes-instantly-go-to-her%2C-as-she-is-more-centered-in-the-frame.-however%2C-i-do-think-that-you-should've-made-her-character-a-bit-more-brighter-in-this-image%2C-to-make-her-stand-out-a-bit-more.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-depth-and-perceptive-of-the-kitchen%2C-however-for-me-it-would-be-easier-to-see-if-the-lines-where-a-bit-more-bold-and-specific.-other-than-that-great-work! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-your-cat-drawing%2C-i-love-cats-so-much!i-think-the-shading-could-have-looked-a-bit-more-realistic%2C-and-i-love-how-the-drawing-gives-off-the-vibe-of-alex-cares-for-the-cat. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-the-character-is-that-she-is-adventurist.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-there-are-all-kinds-of-places-to-explore.-the-image-has--a-great-use-of-imagination- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-detail%2C-could-use-some-color-and-a-little-more-depth%2C-but-other-than-that%2C-it-is-really-good. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-art%2C-i-would-improve-on-the-perspective-though-a-bit-more 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-can-really-tell-that-these-characters-care-for-each-other%2C-and-the-whole-room-has-so-much-personality-(not-to-mention-the-amazing-artwork).- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-made-it-look-so-far-with-the-trees- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/seems-fun! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-shaded-the-trees%2C-park%2C-and-school.-i-think-if-you-could've-added-some-color-to-the-trees-and-maybe-have-added-some-details-to-the-school.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-story-idea-is-really-interesting.-i-think-you-also-did-a-great-job-of-using-depth-and-framing. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-took-advantage-of-the-depth-perception-in-this-image%2C-the-only-part-that-looks-a-little-weird-is-at-the-end-of-the-fence-where-it-doesn't-seem-to-get-smaller.-i-really-like-the-cleanness-of-the-image. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-line-art-and-the-use-of-color-but-the-image-itself-is-looking-a-little-flat.-have-you-tried-playing-with-shading-and-value-with-the-use-of-color%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-image-and-how-the-main-character-is-a-bug%2C-but-maybe-some-color-would-make-it-come-to-life-more. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character's-eyes-are-so-expressive!-the-subtle-positioning-shift-and-eye-placement-of-the-character-on-the-left-implies-that-they-are-%22listening-in%22--or-spying-on-the-conversation.-super-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/we-have-been-discussing-shot-angles-in-our-visual-language-options.-we-all-agree-that-this-image-provides-your-character's-view-of-their-world-in-a-way-that-evokes-a-sense-of-wonder-and-possibly-loneliness.-it-feels-like-your-character-is-contemplating-or-self-reflecting-on-what-it-to-come-or-what-may-be-out-there-ahead-of-them.-great-job-applying-all-of-that-in-one-shot! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/our-group-loves-your-ideas-about-a-world-where-portals-exist-and-provide-potential-access-into-other-worlds.-great-start! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-perspective-is-really-well-done!-it's-as-though-we-are-seeing-this-world-from-granny's-point-of-view-which-is-great.-perhaps-consider-making-it-more-clear-whether-the-rubbish-runners-are-antagonists-or-protagonists-by-exaggerating-their-qualities-that-make-them-bad%2Fgood.-such-creativity! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/beautiful-drawing!-lily's-emotions-are-clearly-visible-which-makes-me-empathizes-with-them.-the-perspective-is-well-done-but-maybe-consider-changing-the-angle-so-that-lily-seems-even-more-lonely%2Flonging%2Finferior-etc.-you-could-do-this-by-making-them-further-away-from-the-other-bird-or-by-using-a-low-angle.-the-image-is-gorgeous! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-various-amounts-of-shading-throughout-the-image.-one-thing-you-might-want-to-work-on-however-is-making-your-character-stand-out-more-so-that-we-know-where-to-look.-the-story-this-image-tells-is-very-sweet-and-seems-to-show-puff's-personality.-cute! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-angle-and-perspective-are-excellent!-i-like-how-we-can-see-exactly-how-the-character-fits-into-their-environment.-i-especially-like-that-the-shading-is-darker-near-the-focal-point-which-draws-our-eye-towards-it.-great-work! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-3d-effect-on-the-buildings-is-well-done!-consider-working-with-tone-and-shading-to-draw-our-eye-more-to-the-focal-point-of-the-image.-although%2C-the-characters-are-positioned-in-front-of-the-buildings-and-they-have-more-detail-than-the-world-around-them.-this-draws-our-eye-to-them-which-is-very-good. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-uses-depth-and-perception-really-well.-given-that-the-character-is-small%2C-it-shows-that-they-might-feel-insignificant-in-their-world.-if-this-was-not-intentional%2C-perhaps-consider-making-your-character-stand-out-more.-very-good-angle-too! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-use-of-space%2C-you-created-the-illusion-of-depth.-love-the-cowboy-design-as-well.-well-done 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ooh%2C-i-like-the-pose-of-the-character%2C-very-dynamic-and-captivates-their-personality!-the-plot-of-the-story-and-the-world-is-very-interesting-to-me%2C-i-love-how-it-takes-what-is-normally-seen-as-the-villains-or-enemies-and-warps-it-into-the-main-protagonist%2C-showing-that-there-is-more-to-it-than-what's-on-the-surface.-very-cool! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-angle-that-you-drew-this-in!-i-love-her-expression-too%2C-she-seems-really-content.-but-i-did-notice-the-%22how-she-wants-to-live%22-and-not-%22how-she-lives%22%2C-is-this-just-her-fantasy-or-am-i-overthinking-it%3F-either-way%2C-awesome-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow%2C-i-love-the-lighting%2C-it-really-sets-the-mood-for-this-drawing!-just-a-little-detail%2C-but-i-like-how-the-shine-in-her-eye-stands-out.-it-brings-our-attention-to-her-face.-well-done! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/aww%2C-she-looks-so-cute!-i-love-the-hazy-background%2C-really-gives-off-a-slightly-mysterious-vibe.-overall-i'm-getting-a-mysterious%2C-adventurous-vibe-from-this-drawing.-very-nice! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-way-you-mapped-out-the-characters%2C-their-expressions%2C-and-their-body-language-really-helped-to-show-their-personality-even-if-they-aren't-saying-anything.-the-background-is-very-detailed-and-gives-us-a-peek-on-how-the-world-looks%2C-too.-great-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-face-on-the-character!-you-guys-seem-to-have-a-good-set-style-for-your-story.-design-kinda-reminds-me-of-cristina-from-stein's-gate.-room-behind-her-is-really-great-too!-to-improve-it-just-a-bit-would-recommend-making-the-desk-behind-her-more-clear-as-it-can-show-a-lot-of-personal-elements-like-what-she-works-with.-for-example%2C-if-she-is-a-programmer-a-keyboard-and-computer-with-code-on-it-would-help-to-establish-what-she-does.-also-would-like-to-know-what-she-is-reaching-out-towards.-overall%2C-great-design%2C-love-the-character%2C-and-would-be-interested-to-know-more-about-what-this-character's-story-is.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-how-the-character's-more-calm-blue-contrasts-with-the-vibrant-red-environment!-the-character-design-really-reminds-me-of-ori-from-ori-and-the-blind-forrest.-the-world-building-leaves-a-lot-of-intrigue-for-how-blue-will-somehow-get-on-the-moon.-can't-wait-to-see-story-progresses%2C-seems-out-of-this-world! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-color-palette-and-perspective!-would-like-to-know-more-about-who-the-character-is-and-what-their-story-will-be.-overall-can't-wait-to-see-if-this-place-will-be-in-the-story-and-what-type-of-magic-they-will-interact-with.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-like-the-environment!-how-the-trees-are-shaded-and-the-leaf-shapes-really-remind-me-of-the-jungle-book.-can't-wait-to-see-how-this-monkey-shares-his-ideas-with-his-community.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-character-design-and-color-palettes-within-the-drawing!-also-the-live%2C-laugh%2C-love-sign-is-great.-would-like-to-know-more-about-who-the-elderly-lady-is-and-what-role-she-plays-to-the-pink-girl.-story-seems-to-be-coming-along-great%2C-keep-up-the-good-work! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-shapes-of-the-buildings-they-have-a-lot-of-character.-the-posing-of-the-fire-character-is-also-really-good-as-you-can-sense-her-adventurous-spirit.-the-modern-buildings-do-confuse-me-on-how-they-are-tribal-or-nomadic-nations-if-they-have-permanent-houses.-world-seems-to-really-be-coming-together-and-would-love-to-see-how-story-progresses.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-most-like-about-your-character-is-her-mission--overcoming-a-fear-is-tricky-and-can-feel-impossible.--i-hope-she-becomes-an-inspiration-for-other-puffins-like-her. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-setting-looks-super-interesting...very-futuristic!-i-love-how-you-made-the-main-character-the-biggest-and-the-main-focus! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-angle-of-this-image...great-use-of-depth-as-well! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-looks-like-a-super-cool-story...i-love-this-setting!-how-did-you-make-the-flowers%3F-it-truly-looks-like-they-are-glowing! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-looks-like-a-super-interesting-setting.-great-use-of-depth-and-shapes! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-artwork...great-use-of-depth! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-artwork-is-awesome!-i-love-how-you-slightly-blurred-the-background-to-give-more-of-a-focus-to-revasar. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-use-of-color%2C-as-the-bedroom-has-the-same-color-scheme%2C-but-your-character-stands-out-as-he's-wearing-bright%2C-loud-colors-which-adds-a-nice-contrast-to-the-cool-colors-of-the-room.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-little-wifi-dude's-design%2C-as-it-seems-to-match-his-personality.-i-also-love-how-the-square-character-in-the-background-seems-to-be-very-different-from-lwd.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-drawings%2C-lots-of-good-detail-too!-im-excited-to-see-where-you-take-the-story-from-here.-you-could-add-a-bit-more-of-a-storyline-or-twist. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-use-of-line%2C-as-it-gives-the-illusion-that-the-entrance-is-3-d%2C-and-the-shading-is-nicely-done.-i-also-found-it-interesting-how-outside%2C-and-building-is-shrouded-in-darkness%2C-but-once-you-pass-through-the-doors%2C-everything-is-more-brighter.-the-shading-also-conveys-ajax's-story-in-a-way%2C-as-the-brightness-beyond-the-doors-is-what-his-goal-is.- 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-name-of-your-puffins%2C-very-cute!-can-you-explain-on-how-he-goes-from-falling-off-a-cliff-to-helping-people.-is-he-helping-people-or-puffins%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-character-i-wonder-what-she-will-learn-in-the-story%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-the-characters-attire-reflects-what-she-was-based-off%2C-the-world-looks-so-magical! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-te-reflection-has-a-different-personality-from-the-actual-character 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-this-character-is-that-i-am-able-to-see-that-the-bird-is-sad-and-wants-to-fly 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-is-that-i-can-see-what-would-be-the-gates-of-heaven-which-is-very-important-for-the-plot 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/woah!-so-cool%2C-what-i-like-most-about-it-is-the-detail-especially-in-the-background!-%3A) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-this-the-background-because-i-think-that-it-could-be-used-for-an-interesting-setting 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/so-so-so-pretty!-i-love-how-atmospheric-your-drawing-is-with-its-use-of-colors%2C-perspective%2C-and-even-the-haze-in-the-foreground.-it's-very-notable-how-well-your-character-fits-this-environment-as-well%2C-the-way-their-colors-and-attire-match-their-surroundings-truly-makes-it-feel-like-they're-in-a-completely-different-world-and-society.-amazing-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/so-well-done!-i-love-the-perspective-and-attention-to-detail%2C-those-plus-the-variety-in-houses-and-shops-makes-this-feel-like-a-more-realistic-neighborhood.-nicely-done! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/so-much-variety!-i-love-the-different-types-of-thoughts-going-through-her-head-and-how-the-amount-of-page-they-covers-represents-how-much-more-she-focuses-on-them-than-school.-there's-a-great-use-of-detail-in-your-drawing%2C-it's-very-attention-grabbing! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-sweet!-i-love-the-variety-of-plants-basil-is-caring-for-and-how-happy-she-is-tending-to-them.-the-use-of-detail-is-very-notable%2C-good-job! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/so-surreal!-i-love-that-you-can-vividly-see-her-personality-in-this-drawing%2C-and-the-atmosphere-with-its-shapes%2C-lines%2C-and-colors-support-why-very-well.-well-done! 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-is-so-pretty!-even-if-this-isn't-the-setting-of-the-story%2C-it's-well-detailed-and-i-especially-like-the-splashes-of-color. 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/sybil-sounds-like-such-an-in-depth-character!-i-enjoy-how-she-has-such-a-built-back-story.-i-wonder-how-she-got-the-job-she-works-at%3F-how-does-that-job-play-a-role-in-her-recovery-from-her-trauma%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/skye-sounds-like-a-very-eventful-character!-i-enjoy-how-they-have-a-unique-passion%2Foccupation.-i-wonder-how-they-got-to-another-planet%3F-what-made-them-want-to-pursue-what-they-pursue%3F-how-did-they-leave-earth-originally%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ash-is-such-an-eventful-character%2C-they-really-peak-my-interest!-i-love-how-smart-ash-is-as-a-lead-character.-what-will-convince-ash-to-open-up%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/kyra-and-her-story-is-so-unique!-i-like-how-she-still-wants-to-pursue-what-she-enjoys-rather-than-giving-into-her-mother.-i-wonder%2C-how-will-her-doppelganger-help-her-to-develop-in-the-story%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/almond-is-such-a-stand-out-character!-i-think-it's-interesting-how-there's-more-to-him-than-just-being-an-alien.-will-his-occupation-come-into-play-during-his-development%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/chip-humphrey-sounds-like-such-a-sweet-character!-i-like-how-chip-humphrey-has-to-learn-a-balance-like-that%2C-i-wonder-what-he-will-have-to-encounter-to-learn-he-needs-that-balance%3F 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-ideas-are-all-so-creative.--my-favorite-is-the-second-one%2C-about-the-flesh-eating-plants-%E2%80%94-i-think-that-that-would-make-for-a-fantastic-story!--your-drawings-are-all-fantastic! 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-first-idea-about-the-wifi-guy!--it-seemed-super-cute-and-interesting%2C-and-i-love-how-creative-the-design-is!--it-makes-me-wonder-what-his-journey-would-be. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/all-of-your-ideas-are-so-interesting!--my-favorite-one-was-the-secret-store-aisle.--i-wonder-why-that-aisle-would-be-there-and-what-would-happen-after-the-character-finds-it. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-first-idea!--my-favorite-is-the-aquarium-one.--it-seems-like-it-has-the-potential-to-be-really-funny%2C-but-also-very-interesting. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-her-design.--it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-it-represents-her-as-a-person. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-their-design.--it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-who-they-are-and-why-they-choose-to-present-themself-that-way. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-his-hat.--it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-why-he-wears-it. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-he-was-ambitious.--it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-exactly-his-ambitions-are. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-snow.--it-really-contrasts-nicely-with-the-bright-colors. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-art-style%2C-the-water-color-was-a-good-choice.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/oh-my-god-your-perspective-is-so-good!!!--i-really-love-all-the-details-on-the-buildings%2C-the-camera-angle-is-also-really-cool!-a-few-of-the-details-on-the-buildings-are-just-a-little-bit-out-of-perspective-but-you-don't-really-notice-unless-you-are-looking-super-closely.-i-wonder-what-the-significance-of-this-particular-street-is-to-your-character%3B-does-he-live-or-work-here%3F-where-is-he-headed%3F-the-road-seems-to-come-to-a-sudden-stop-and-i-am-not-sure-if-it's-intentional-or-not%2C-but-if-not-it-might-be-better-to-continue-the-street-to-the-end-of-the-page-or-to-add-a-turn-in-the-road-to-make-it-feel-a-little-more-life-like.-i-really-love-this-image%2C-great-job!!! 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-general-idea-in-the-description%2C-but-it-is-a-little-hard-for-me-to-tell-what-is-going-on-in-your-image%3B-it-may-just-be-because-your-image-is-sideways%2C-but-maybe-a-little-more-explanation-could-help%2C-or-a-little-more-detail-in-the-image-itself.-also%2C-just-a-tip-for-shading-things-in-with-pencil%2C-it-might-be-better-to-use-smaller-pencil-strokes-to-help-it-feel-more-uniform-and-polished.-but-i-really-do-like-your-concept-of-choosing-between-two-worlds%2C-and-from-what-i-am-getting-from-the-image%2C-it-seems-like-the-two-worlds-are-going-to-be-very-different%2C-which-seems-super-cool!-it-makes-me-wonder-what-connections-he-has-to-both-worlds-and-what-makes-each-option-so-tempting-for-him! 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job!-i-love-these-unique-characters-and-drawing-styles.-i-like-how-technological-your-world-looks. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-awesome!-nale's-pose-and-position-in-the-camera-really-capture-her-personality.-will-the-story-take-place-mostly-in-the-school-and-the-park%2C-or-are-you-planning-to-expand-your-town-to-include-other-locations-as-well%3F-really-great-picture%2C-can't-wait-to-see-more! 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job!-i-love-the-unique-shapes-and-background.-i-also-like-the-character's-hair. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character's-pose-is-great!-i-would-just-be-a-little-bit-more-careful-with-the-perspective-next-time%2C-and-keep-the-character's-lineart-a-little-more-consistent.-other-than-that%2C-it's-really-great!- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-you-used-this-image-to-show-a-connection-between-them-and-another-character.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-you-clearly-based-your-character-off-of-something-and-this-image-shows-the-connection-between-them.-looking-at-this%2C-i-wonder-if-this-might-be-the-character's-safe-place-or-if-they-are-able-to-discover-a-lot-here. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-there-is-a-lot-happening-in-the-background-of-the-image-representing-the-many-accomplishments-of-your-character.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-background-of-your-image-showed-some-of-what-is-beyond-the-doors%2C-but-left-a-lot-unknown%2C-showing-how-much-there-is-to-explore.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-background-tried-to-make-the-image-seem-very-normal-while-your-character-is-anything-but-normal.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-image-has-a-great-use-of-background-and-lighting-to-frame-the-character-and-give-us-a-glimpse-of-their-personality. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-concept.--im-very-excited-to-hear-how-she-ended-up-in-this-position.-your-image-has-a-great-use-of-depth-with-her-in-the-front-as-the-focal-point%2C-and-the-backdrop-of-trees-behind-her. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-all-the-small-details-and-shading-you-incorporated-into-this-image.-i-really-like-the-idea-and-detail-of-shelah's-reflection-in-the-puddle-waving-at-her-for-attention.-the-image-has-a-really-great-use-of-depth-and-perspective-showing-her-walking-away%2C-the-crow-flying%2C-and-the-cars-behind-her. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-mood-that-your-drawing-has!-is-the-main-character-the-mushroom%3F-it-is-super-cute!-i-also-think-that-watercolor-was-a-good-choice-for-material.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-way-you-framed-your-character-arlo-within-the-trees-and-showed-depth-with-perspective.-the-image-really-shows-a-forest-of-big-trees.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-space-and-perspective-using-arlo-in-the-middle-as-the-farthest%2C-and-progressively-the-trees-become-bigger-when-they-get-closer. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-colors-and-mood-of-this-piece!-i-looked-up-1348-and-apparently-that-is-when-the-black-plague-started-spreading-in-europe.-is-that-going-to-be-incorporated-into-your-story%3F 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-made-john-look-happy-in-the-way-she-wants-to-live-her-life.-she-seems-very-happy-in-her-world-as-such.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-perspective-with-her-behind-the-table-and-the-rest-of-the-kitchen-behind-her. 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-can-see-this-character-attached-to-strings%2C-and-being-in-their-world-which-seems-to-be-just-like-ours.-your-image-has-a-great-use-of-space-showing-proportion-with-the-character%2C-buildings%2C-and-strings.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-what-if-idea-is-super-cool!-i-also-love-the-character-design%2C-each-character-looks-super-unique-%3A) 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-design-is-super-cute!-i-wonder-if-adding-color-would-create-more-depth-to-the-setting.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-color-scheme!-i%E2%80%99m-getting-a-sort-of-dystopian-vibe-from-the-setting%2C-some-more-detail-would-help-to-make-that-more-clear-though.-your-character-is-really-cool-too%2C-i-love-their-belt-pouch-things-%3A) 2021-10-25 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-happy-and-comforting-energy-this-has!-i-can-tell-that-your-main-character-is-adventurous-and-cheerful-from-their-design! 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-color-and-shape 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-character%2C-and-i-saw-them-on-week-2.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-great!-i-love-anime-drawings.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-reflection-almost-trying-to-get-her-attention.-i-wonder-why-the-crows-want-to-say%3F 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-mouse!-i-wonder-why-he-likes-his-house-orderly-and-comfy%3F 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-drawing-is-well-developed- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept!-i-wonder-if-you-could-give-more-backstory-on-this%3F 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-expression-in-the-eyes%2C-i-can-feel-their-pain 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-use-of-space%2C-those-buildings-look-very-realistic-thanks-to-the-shading-well-done 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work-on-the-pose-of-the-robots-and-the-composition-of-the-picture...look-forward-to-this-story 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-use-of-line%2C-as-my-eye-is-drawn-to-your-character%2C-who-it-seems-like-the-lines-are-pointing-at.-i-also-like-how-the-trees-are-much-bigger-than-arlo-as-it-helps-portray-his-size%2C-or-how-he-may-be-feeling-in-this-scene.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-use-of-space-that-you-used-in-the-background%2C-it-portrays-the-idea-that-sunlight-is-shining-through-the-scene-from-the-unseen-horizon.-i-also-loved-that-you-used-water-colors%2C-and-the-color-palette-is-very-nicely-thought-out%2C-as-my-eye-is-drawn-to-your-character-who-is-wearing-green.-i-think-that-it-was-clever-that-the-only-other-green-items-in-the-drawing-are-the-lilypads.-it-really-helps-the-viewer-understand-your-intention-of-having-the-character-be-based-around-the-lilypads.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawing-is-very-good!-there's-lots-of-shading-going-on-which-helps-portray-the-shadows-and-lighting-of-the-scene.-your-narwhals-are-very-cute%2C-and-i-love-that-one-of-them-is-wearing-a-hard-helmet%2C-as-that-one-really-stands-out.-this-picture-makes-me-curious-about-why-the-narwhals-are-building-a-train%2C-and-how-this-affects-their-world.- 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-detail-in-this-world%2C-great-work-trying-3d-perspective-on-the-building.-keep-at-it!-i-look-forward-to-the-story-of-this-world 2021-10-24 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-city-looks-super-cool!-why-did-you-choose-a-city-to-be-the-environment-of-a-flower-or-is-that-for-contrast-purposes%3F 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-drawing-the-cat-and-person-they-look-really-good!-maybe-add-something-to-the-background-that-sets-it-apart-from-other-rooms-so-we-can-tell-it-their-personal-unique-room%2F-environment. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-colors!!!-the-details-are-amazing! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-perspective-on-your-drawing!!-does-your-character-live-in-the-bamboo-forest%3F-is-it-a-koala%3F-love-your-name-by-the-way 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-drew-your-character-looking-out-the-window-and-the-rest-of-the-characters-are-facing-away.-i-really-like-how-your-world-is-spacelike.--the-image-has-a-great-use-of-line-and-shape.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-use-of-color-and-how-you-used-it-to-set-the-tone.--the-world-looks-like-a-jungle-home-and-that-evan-loves-being-there-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-tone-and-line 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-really-good.-love-the-idea-about-the-blue-sweater!!- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-drew-your-characters-in-a-robotic-world%2C-and-you-added-a-window-to-give-a-peek-about-the-outside-setting.--the-image-has-a-great-use-of-shape-and-color 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow!-i-really-love-your-character.-i-also-really-love-the-idea-of-a-childish-assassin.-great-job! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-she-drew-jeff-facing-the-city.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-shape 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-your-character!!-it-would-be-nice-to-hear-more-about-him%2C- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-the-details-of-her-school.-i-like-most-about-the-world-looks-rainy-dark%2C-and-gloomy-the-image-shows-a-great-use-of-tone 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-looks-confident-and-ready-to-do-whatever.-the-setting-is-unclear%3B-where-is-he%3F-a-garage%3F-workshop%3F-outside%3F-i-can't-tell.-is-that-a-robot-or-a-3d-printer%3F-the-shot-doesn't-really-do-much-for-me-either.-i'm-confused. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-realllyyy-good.-the-character-is-very-expressive%2C-and-subverts-expectations-in-a-big-way.-the-world-is-incredibly-detailed-and-the-camera-shots-give-a-nice-overview-of-the-place.-really-good! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-can't-really-tell-what-the-character-is-trying-to-express-here%3B-the-world-looks-nice-though!-very-detailed.-this-image-makes-everything-look-big%2C-which-is-weird-because-your-character-looks-kinda-big-himself....- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-world-certainly-looks-like-a-bamboo-forest.-however%2C-that-said%2C-i-think-you-could-have-fleshed-out-the-left-sie-more.-also%2C-where's-your-character%3F-is-this-first-person%3F 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character's-facial-expression-establishes-the-mood%2C-and-fits-in-well-with-the-setting.-and-speaking-of-the-setting%2C-it-looks-very-cozy-and-definitely-a-coffee-shop%2C-absolutely.-setting-your-character-off-to-the-left-allows-the-setting-to-stand-out-better. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there-are-awesome!-you-can-easily-tell-what-each-character-is-doing-and-what-kind-of-world-they-live-in.-absolutely-love-how-everything-is-such-a-large-scale%3B-reminds-me-of-a-dungeon-or-cave.-can't-wait-to-see-more! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-is-very-expressive%2C-but-the-world-itself-confuses-me.-i'm-not-sure-what-i'm-looking-at-aside-from-the-clues-you've-given-out.-the-area-looks-very-expansive. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/given-that-it-seems-to-be-first-person%2C-the-character-gives-a-nice-first-person-perspective-to-everything.-or-is-it-the-duck%3F-the-world-is-very-jungle-y.-i-can't-help-but-wonder-what-kind-of-foilage-is-around.-the-use-of-first-person-here-makes-things-really-immersive.-if-there-was-more-stuff-on-the-side%2C-it-would-make-the-character-feel-kinda-vulnerable.-nice! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-worl-is-really-cool-and-vibrant.-the-character-also-looks-expressive-as-well.-really-good-job-on-her-worl. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/did-you-use-paint-for-this.-if-so-so%2C-you-really-did-a-great-job-on-this!!!!! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-is-very-good%2C-anatomy-needs-a-little-work-but-the-overall-drawing-is-really-good. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-use-of-shading-and-anatomy-really-works-here.-this-anime-style-you-drew-is-awesome.-keep-it-up. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-color-and-shaping-makes-feel-like-all-dark-and-mysterious. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-those-and-the-color%3B-great-use-of-pen-and-water-colors.-the-desperation-of-those-pose-really-sets-the-mood. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-composition-of-this-looks-really-good.-water-color-really-suits-this. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-coloring-is-amazing-and-the-use-of-tone-is-awesome-as-well.-really-amazing-job. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-use-of-shading-makes-the-world-seem-descent-and-empty.-the-sun-could-use-a-little-more-lighting-however.-intentional-or-not-this-art-is-amazing. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-lighting-on-the-flowers-and-good-job-with-the-character-pose. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-great-composition-and-use-of-mist%2Ffog-to-set-the-mood 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-showed-different-character-details-%2C-good-work-on-the-eyes-%2C-i-wish-we-could-see-the-world- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-i-love-the-energy-of-this-storm-%2C-feels-alive- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-love-the-characters-facial-expressions-%2C-i-feel-for-him 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-use-of-space-and-depth-%2C-this-reminds-me-of-wizard-of-oz-!-well-done- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-i-love-your-line-work-and-shadows.-there-is-so-much-energy-in-the-image-%2C-can%E2%80%99t-wait-for-me- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-immediately-interested-in-this-scene-because-of-the-buildings%2C-the-sign%2C-and-the-two-characters-standing-in-the-foreground.--while-the-business%2C-old-joe%E2%80%99s-attorneys%2C-appears-to-be-a-traditionally-named-company%2C-i-see-two-female-characters-in-the-scene.-i-am-now-curious-to-learn-what-is-going-on%3B-and%2C-i-appreciate-how-the-artwork-immediately-provokes-some-further-thought.-%3A) 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-the-character-is-a-platypus%2C-and-i-love-how-the-world-looks!-the-trees-and-the-waterfall-bubbles-are-really-well-drawn. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-beautiful.-you've-really-captured-a-spirit-of-mysticism-and-mist.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-color-match-and-the-combination-of-light-and-shadow-is-so-good!! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-perspective-and-proportions-are-great!- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i'm-really-curious-to-hear-more-of-her-story.-i-like-the-shape-and-variety-of-your-trees.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-look-of-your-character%2C-and-the-way-you've-colored-the-illustration.-i'm-curious-what-level-of-%22didn't-have-a-home%22-you-mean.-do-they-not-sleep-anywhere%3F-no-park-bench%3F-no-shelter%3F-if-so%2C-i'm-guessing-they-don't-live-in-our-world%3F-is-it-an-animation-world-like-%22duck-amuck%22%3F-if-so%2C-the-set-of-monsters-u-is-a-great-choice!-or-is-it-more-of-an-imaginary-world-like-inside-out.--on-the-other-hand%2C-if-they-do-live-in-our-world%2C-maybe-you-could-draw-them-where-they-spend-their-time.-school%3F-library%3F-work%3F-i'm-so-curious-about-their-story%2C-use-the-background-to-tell-us-about-their-world.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/that's-some-really-great-perspective-in-the-kitchen.-the-head-shape-and-wings-are-giving-me-an-insectoid-vibe-for-john%3F-i'm-really-curious-about-john's-story-that-they-just-being-able-to-cook-in-a-comfortable-kitchen-is-one-of-their-big-desires.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/there's-so-much-wonderful-detail-and-realistic-styling-for-amora.-to-bring-the-same-level-of-detail-to-the-background%2C-try-focusing-on-where-the-road-meets-the-buildings.-there's-usually-a-sidewalk-and-doors-there.-the-addition-of-other-streets-between-the-buildings-could-also-enhance-the-perspective.-she-needs-to-inhabit-a-world-as-real-as-she-is.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-lush-and-tropical.-the-background-is-very-evocative-of-the-jungle-book.-evan-looks-a-little-like-he's-hanging-out-in-bagheera's-tree%2C-waiting-for-his-friend.-was-that-what-you-were-going-for%3F- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawing-is-very-minimal%2C-but-you've-provided-just-enough-clues-to-make-me-think-agu-lives-in-japan.-the-scribble-style-in-which-you've-drawn-agu-can-be-very-powerful%2C-with-the-shape-and-energy-of-the-scribbles-conveying-so-much-emotion.-i'm-curious-to-see-what-you-do-with-that-later.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-way-you-used-perspective-to-show-the-road-disappearing-into-the-city.-i-wonder%2C-is-jeff-an-annual-or-perennial%3F-he-looks-like-he-could-be-an-aster-(native)-or-a-daisy-(invasive)%3F- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/so-cool-that-you-collaborated.-and-basically-i-love-everything-about-this.-especially-how-you-blurred-the-background-out-slightly-leading-to-the-hazy-moon.-and-the-rim-light-around-the-edge-of-the-character-is-quite-the-touch....the-transparent-ghost-hands-are-wicked! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow....incredible.--love-the-composition-as-i-feel-like-i'm-sitting-there-with-them-onlooking-the-city.-i'm-not-sure-how-you-did-it-but-i-also-feel-that-almond-is-an-'outsider'%2C-maybe-it's-the-lighting%2Fcolor...i-love-the-progressive-use-of-color-around-the-city.-just-really-good-stuff.-i-can't-wait-to-see-this-as-a-story 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-about-this-image-is-how-well-you-have-played-with-light-in-this-illustration.-the-one-strong-beam-of-light-entering-the-dark-room-really-helps-in-creating-a-mysterious-scene! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-well-depicted.-the-expression-on-lily's-face-is-clearly-visible.-the-only-thing-that-i-would-recommend-is-the-change-of-view.-you-can-lower-the-camera-to-show-exactly-how-lily-is-viewing-her-world-and-is-wishing-to-join-the-world-above. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/beautifully-illustrated.-getting-complete-sense-of-what-you-were-attempting-to-achieve-through-this-image.-reduction-in-the-size-of-crows-(proportionate-to-the-surrounding)-would-help-the-viewers-to-focus-primarily-on-your-main-character-instead-of-the-large-crows. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-perfectly-used-your-knowledge-about-perspective.-the-only-thing-i-feel-you-could-change-is-highlighting-the-main-character%2C-since-there-are-various-actions-going-in-the-background%2C-usage-of-contrast%2C-light-and-color-would-certainly-help-the-viewer-to-focus-on-the-main-character. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/woww!-this-illustration-of-your-looks-amazing.-i-like-the-way-you-took-effort-in-creating-not-only-the-objects-in-the-room-but-also-to-the-view-from-the-bedroom.-this-i-age-has-great-use-of-texture-and-blends.-the-only-thing-i-feel-is-the-correction-of-the-character's-posture-(sitting-on-the-bed).- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-daniel's-ride-back-home-is-in-this-area-that-looks-like-space.-it's-a-very-interesting-concept-if-it-is-space.-i-really-like-your-composition-and-how-you-used-the-space-to-show-the-entire-view. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-idea-of-ziggy-being-a-stubborn-person-who-just-wants-to-discover-alien-life.-in-my-opinion%2C-it-makes-the-character-feel-so-real-when-they-have-this-flaw-they-must-overcome%2C-this-being-that-ziggy-must-seek-help-to-accomplish-their-goal. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-idea-of-a-character-being-a-clown%2Fjester-despite-them-being-scared-and-nervous.-as-they-are-a-mini-jester%2C-it-makes-me-wonder-what-this-other-character-as-a-prankster-does-to-prevent-them-from-having-their-quiet-environment.-- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-that-dmv-just-wants-to-find-their-happiness-with-their-glasses.-but-it-makes-me-wonder-why-exactly-their-glasses-is-stopping-them%2C-why-they-need-to-be-more-responsible. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-idea-of-bob-being-this-confident-person%2C-despite-them-feeling-lost-and-confused-on-the-inside.-i-also-loved-the-idea-that-as-their-confidence-becomes-their-weakness-as-they-are-over-confident-which-prevents-them-from-listening-to-others. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-your-design%2C-as-well-as-your-entire-concept.-your-drawing-of-amelia-really-shows-how-she-is-a-shy-person-and-wanting-to-overcome-her-fears.-i-wonder-if-there-will-be-someone-out-there-that-believes-and-listens-to-her%2C-or-can-even-see-animals-too. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-that-kiko-just-wants-to-express-their-music-despite-how-they-may-seem-to-be.-i-do-begin-to-wonder-what-about-having-and-not-having-passion-for-art%2C-and-if-it-is-really-something-that-kiko-must-learn.-why-is-there-no-point-in-art-if-they-don't-have-a-passion-for-it%3F 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-idea-about-there-being-no-seasons.-if-we-did-not-have-seasons%2C-certain-times-of-days-and-even-plants-or-foods-wouldn't-come-to-be!-i-wonder-what-exactly-what-happen-in-a-world-where-such-things-never-would-have-been. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/my-favorite-part-of-the-character(s)-who-are-a-part-of-your-'what-if-dragons-were-real-and-everyday-household-pets'-is-that-many-fun-scenarios-can-happen-between-the-owner-and-the-dragon.-it-makes-me-wonder-what-kind-of-situations-could-arise-in-this-time. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/my-favorite-part-of-the-character(s)-apart-of-your-'what-if-half-the-people-in-the-world-can-see-shapes-but-are-colorblind%2C-and-the-other-half-can-only-see-blobs-of-color'-is-that-two-people-can-view-the-world-in-two-completely-different-ways.-it-makes-me-wonder-how-they-will-interact-with-each-other. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-detail-on-the-flowers!--it-reminds-me-of-when-i-would-take-pictures-in-the-garden%2C-too.--your-design-for-basil-is-adorable. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/my-favorite-part-of-these-characters-apart-of-your-'what-if-people-used-machine-to-make-their-decisions'-is-that-they-trust-and-leave-their-decisions-and-choices-up-to-machines.-it-makes-me-wonder-just-what-kind-of-decisions-people-leave-in-their-hands. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-image-is-so-interesting!--there's-so-much-going-on%2C-but-in-a-good-way.--my-eye-is-drawn-to-it-and-i-immediately-wonder-what-is-going-on-here. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-image-has-a-great-use-of-color!--the-style-is-very-distinct-and-each-character-is-well-defined-through-their-colors.--it-feels-so-nice-and-cozy.--love-it! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-this-world-is-how-strange-it-seems-to-be.--the-rubbish-runners-really-grab-my-attention. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-image-has-a-great-use-of-leading-lines-and-lighting!--it-really-creates-an-atmosphere-that-makes-me-wonder-what-exactly-has-happened-here. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/my-favorite-part-if-your-'what-if-giants-lived-in-the-real-world-and-lived-in-our-natural-environment.'-it-makes-me-wonder-where-and-in-what-places-they-could-be-hiding. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/my-favorite-part-of-this-character-is-their-concept-and-love-for-seafood.-it-makes-me-wonder-what-about-seafood-does-jayla-like-so-much. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-all-of-this%2C-i-really-don't-have-any-notes%2C-the-use-of-shadows-is-wonderful%2C-and-you-can-imagine-the-candlelight-flickering-and-it's-shadow-being-cast.-i-love-this.-- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-art-is-really-pretty!-the-character-looks-like-she-certainly-belongs-in-this-village.-the-way-she-is-posed-and-upon-a-hut-makes-her-seem-curious-and-a-bit-mischievous%2C-i-am-excited-to-see-how-this-story-will-unfold! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-soft-lines-for-the-character-make-them-seem-friendly-and-welcoming.-the-image-gives-off-a-very-ominous-vibe.-what-i-like-most-about-the-character-are-the-cute-antennae.-the-world-seems-like-it-has-a-lot-of-mystery. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/excellent-details-and-story. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-both-images!-what-i-like-most-about-the-first-image-is-that-there-are-so-many-characters%2C-they-all-fit-in-well.-what-i-like-most-about-the-second-image-is-how-realistic-and-natural-the-expressions-and-poses-feel.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-bella%E2%80%99s-outline-design-and-all-the-different-personality-traits-she-has.-next-time-though%2C-you-should-draw-both-her-regular-look-of-the-character-and-the-look-you-put-with-the-personality-traits%2C-as-we-could-match-the-two-and-see-the-overall-design-of-your-character.-from-the-outline-though%2C-she-looks-pretty-cool. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-realistic-your-character-looks-and-how-his-personality-is-shown-through-his-outer-design. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-way-evan-looks-and-that-even-in-the-character-profile%2C-the-character-is-telling-himself-to-be-better-as-a-person-and-with-his-personality.-the-only-thing-i-would-change-is-that-maybe-when-describing-how-he-wants-to-be-more-confident%2C-maybe-you-should-look-a-little-more-worried%2C-but-this-was-still-good! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-design-of-your-character-and-the-use-of-colors-for-how-they-look-and-i-look-the-different-uses-of-shading-with-your-character. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-that-ruthord-is-a-relatable-character%2C-and-that-by-design-you-could-sorta-see-what-he-is-all-about.-next-time%2C-i-would-write-his-name-a-little-bit-bigger-on-your-paper%2C-but-that-has-nothing-to-do-against-the-design. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-design-of-your-character%2C-as-he-looks-like-a-nervous-character%2C-but-still-lovable-by-design.-i-also-like-that-he-is-one-of-the-few-clowns-that-looks-actually-kinda-cute.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-oscar-looks%2C-as-it-looks-like-nothing-i%E2%80%99ve-seen-before-in-a-character.-it-really-pops-up-as-a-sketch.-the-only-thing-i-would-do-is-add-color-to-the-drawing%2C-but-it-is-your-drawing-and-it-looks-great-either-way%2C-so-i-can%E2%80%99t-complain. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-your-world-looks%2C-with-it-having-a-tropical-like-setting-and-extraordinary-looking-palm-trees.-next-time%2C-i-would-make-it-just-a-little-more-colorful-in-the-background%2C-as-i-can%E2%80%99t-really-see-it-that-much. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-design-of-%E2%80%9Cstacy%E2%80%9D-and-how-she-looks-on-earth%2C-as-the-colors-really-make-the-drawing-pop-out.-the-only-thing-i-would-suggest-for-next-time-is-filling-in-each-of-the-shapes-with-color%2C-but-it-still-looks-great! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-expressions-%E2%80%9Cthe-assassin%E2%80%9D-has-and-how-his-house-is-nice-and-organized%2C-compared-to-the-world-he-lives-in.-next-time-though%2C-nothing-against-your-world%2C-but-you-should-take-the-picture-of-the-drawing-horizontally%2C-as-we-could-see-it-better-and-more-clearly. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-design-of-your-world%2C-as-the-shading%2C-colors-and-tone-look-excellent!-to-me-it-doesn%E2%80%99t-seem-rushed-as-all.-the-only-thing-i-would-suggest-for-next-time-is-that-you-should-make-the-cat-near-the-table-colored-a-bit-brighter%2C-as-i-couldn%E2%80%99t-recognize-what-the-was%2C-but-other-than-that-it-looks-great! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-design-of-your-world%2C-as-it-looks-pretty-magnificent.-even-without-color-is-looks-pretty-cool.-next-time%2C-you-should-draw-it-on-black-paper-as-it-would-make-the-drawing-pop-out-more. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-character%2C-is-she-a-giant-puffer-fish-and-is-she-in-the-sea-or-on-land%3F 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-did-a-great-job-on-the-perspective! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-use-of-shapes-and-good-perspective%2C-i-am-a-little-lost-on-what-is-going-on-but-i-like-it-a-lot- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-tone%2Fcolors-you-used-a-lot-it-really-conveys-a-sort-of-eerie-mysterious-feel 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/woah!-i-love-all-your-ideas!-my-favorite-is-probably-the-wind-one.-it-makes-me-wonder-if-it's-by-chance-the-wind-pushes-you-to-meet-someone-or-it-knows-that-you-need-to-meet-that-person-and-have-them-be-in-your-life 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-reaching-through-the-tv-screen!-it-makes-me-wonder-if-you-could-fully-enter-to-the-other-side 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-so-cool!-the-detail-is-amazing-and-looks-really-professional!-the-color-of-the-characters-and-the-background-go-together-so-well.-i-love-it%2C-amazing-job! 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-looks-amazing!-it-does-not-look-rushed-at-all-it-looks-really-detailed-and-professional-actually.-all-the-little-details-of-the-things-on-the-shelves-and-in-the-wood-make-this-look-really-great-and-well-done.-amazing-job!- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-icebox-idea!-it-makes-me-wonder-if-anyone-takes-advantage-of-the-power-it-holds-and-if-greed-becomes-a-huge-factor-in-this-story- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-looks-so-professionally-done!-the-shading-and-colors-are-amazing.-the-character-is-so-well-done-and-cute-and-i-love-all-the-little-details-throughout-the-picture.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-all-your-ideas!-my-favorite-part-was-what-if-every-time-you-fell-asleep-you-went-into-another-dimension!!-it-makes-me-wonder-about-all-the-adventures-they-go-on-in-those-worlds-and-how-they-live-in-their-day-to-day-lives-%3A) 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-what-if-all-internet-stopped-working!-it-makes-me-wonder-how-the-different-generations-would-react-and-what-they-would-do-about-it-%3A) 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-amazing!-the-drawing-looks-really-professionally-done-with-the-shading-and-colors-and-detail.-the-character-looks-really-cool-and-the-idea-of-the-reflection-is-really-interesting.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-them!-my-favorite-was-what-if-a-house-could-walk!-it-makes-me-wonder-about-all-the-adventures-it-could-go-through-and-the-lives-of-the-people-living-in-it 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-so-cute!-i-love-all-the-different-things-happening-in-the-picture-it-looks-really-interesting-and-eye-catching.- 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-shading-in-the-clouds-and-the-colors-all-look-amazing!-the-character-looks-really-cute-and-simple-which-is-great.-amazing-job!!-%3A) 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-clouds-drawn-look-so-colorful-and-live.-like-if-they-were-drawn-straight-out-of-a-children's-book. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-best-of-this-art-is-the-actual-character-expressions-and-pose.-i-can-instantly-tell-what-mood-and-personality-they-would-have.-which-is-very-hard-to-pull-of-in-some-cases%3B-really-nailed-it. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-bottom-one-is-my-favorite-out-of-the-2.-the-way-the-character-is-drawing-and-presented-with-her-expression-makes-it-feel-more-real-to-me.-the-world-she-lives-looks-flourishing-with-flowers-and-color.-the-use-of-lines-and-color-brings-a-sense-of-simplicity-to-it.-really-great-submission. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character--from-this-angle-looks-very-timid-and-calm.-it-looks-like-she's-getting-some-kind-of-blue-berry-from-pink-tree%3F-the-overall-drawing-is-really-good-and-the-use-of-lines-for-the-tree-makes-weird-and-unique.-since-its-a-alien-planet-it-would-make-sense.-great-art-and-use-of-shading-as-well. 2021-10-23 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-world-ajax-lives-in-looks-deselect-and-empty.-while-showing-how-expansive-and-big-this-world-is.-i-also-like-to-add-that-character-actually-fits-within-the-world%2C-he-is-model-super-well-while-not-being-detailed.-i-think-the-use-of-shading-and-lines-really-makes-it-cool-to-look-at.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-just-noticed-your-water-reflection-for-the-other-version-of-her%3B-nice-touch.-the-way-you-use-solid-colors-with-shaded-buildings-really-makes-it-amazing.-the-character-looks-somewhat-happy-and-the-world-seems-very-big-compared-to-her.-your-artstyleis-amazing-by-the-way. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-of-all-amazing-perspective-and-the-use-of-shading.--the-village-tribe-looks-a-little-empty-though-but-besides-that.-the-character-posture-looks-great.-she-looks-very-curious-and-amazed-at-the-same-time.-this-was-a-really-good-submission. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-how-happy-and-joyful-she-is.-the-world-also-shows-how-expansive-and-big-the-world-is%2F-having-a-school%2C-park-and-forest.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-lines-for-the-characters-and-background.-great-job. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow.....you-really-brought-your-idea-to-life.-great-use-of-color-and-line.-i'm-so-curious-what-they-are-buying-at-the-story%2C-seeds-for-their-body%3F%3F%3F 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-originality-of-this-concept%2C-the-use-of-space-and-garbage-is-admirable.--rooting-for-granny!-love-the-shadow-work-as-well 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-like-about-the-world-is-that-it-shows-from-the-%22behind%22-point-of-view.-i-can-see-the-back-of-him-also-with-the-front-of-the-picture.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-shapes-and-lines.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it%CA%BBs-in-nature.-it-has-a-lot-of-pretty-colors-and-different-types-of-plants.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-like-most-about-your-character-is-that-is-has-a-cool-personality.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-has-lots-of-different-shapes-in-it.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-color.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-i-can-see-the-whole-view-of-everything.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-shapes-too.-- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-he-looks-like-he-has-a-fun-personality.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it%CA%BBs-a-fun-to-explore-looking-world.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of---different-shapes.-- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-she-looks-very-happy.-i-like-the-way-you-did-your-character%CA%BBs-world.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-that-it-looks-fun-to-explore.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-shading.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/dave-is-cool.-i-like-your-setting-and-good-perspective. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool!-i-like-your-characters-and-the-setting-illustrates-your-story-well. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-nice!-you-have-great-perspective. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-really-cool!-i-like-the-perspective-where-you-can-see-all-the-buildings!-cool-character-too! 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool.-i-like-your-character-design-a-lot-and-you-have-a-great-little-kitchen-setting.-good-perspective. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/is-there-a-floating-castle%3F-idk-if-that-was-your-intention-but-i-kind-of-like-that-idea.-nice-work 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job!-it-is-very-clear-that-the-ship-and-the-palm-tree-are-in-the-front-and-the-castle-is-in-the-back. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-depth-and-layout.-use-more-colorrrr 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/such-a-cool-idea!!-i-really-like-the-roundness-of-those-narwhals 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/super-cool-use-of-shading.-i-really-like-the-eeriness-you-created-with-the-outfit-and-background 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-job-on-the-anatomy.-more-details-on-the-setting-would-be-cool-though 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-detail.-would-love-to-see-this-in-color-with-more-dimensions 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-houses-are-sooo-cute.-what's-the-story-though%3F-looks-like-an-empty-village-%3A( 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work%2C-i-remember-your-portal-story....i-wonder-why-he-is-so-shy-to-share-his-creation%3F-i-can't-wait-for-find-out-what-materials-are-needed-and-what-his-obstacle-will-be-in-the-story.-well-done! 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-concept%2C-i-can-relate-to-bob's-struggle....i-wonder-how-he-will-learn-to-listen-in-the-story%3F-i'l-be-curious-to-see-what-kind-of-obstacle-you-create-for-them 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-work%2C-great-drawing.-i'm-sad-your-video-got-cut-off%2C-perhaps-you-can-check-it-next-time.-i'm-interested-in-this-idea-of-being-scared-of-darkness%2C-can't-wait-for-more! 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-details-and-color-palette!-so-cool 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-use-of-color-but-maybe-smoothen-out-the-monkey%3F-like-add-more-intentional-details.-overall-super-cute!! 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-line-work-and-use-of-colour- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-use-of-depth-%2C-really-draws-my-eye-to-the-hq- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-perspective-and-tone-wow- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amaaaaaaaazing-perspective-%2C 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-depth-of-the-world-it-gives-me-a-pleasant-feeling.-i-also-think-the-houses%2Fbuildings-look-very-satisfying. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-image-is-awesome%2C-it-honestly-looks-like-a-background-from-the-jungle-book%2C-which-makes-me-feel-like-your-character-evan%2C-is-at-home.-i'm-interested-in-what-your-character-will-do-in-the-future-%26-the-other-set-pieces-you-will-use.-great-job! 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-image-is-great-representation-of-how-the-exercises-can-help-with-your-framing-%26-story.-i-agree-that-the-trees-being-framed-around-your-character%2C-arlo-draw-your-eyes-to-them.-i-also-like-how-you-describe-that-they-are-in-one-of-their-happy-places%2C-which-i-can-agree-with%2C-bring-happiness-%26-calmness.-very-excited-for-your-group.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-vibe-this-image-gives-off!-what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is%2C-they-fit-so-well-with-their-surroundings%2C-and-the-candle-adds-to-it.-what-i-like-most-about-the-world-is-the-rustic-and-mysterious-room.-the-image-has-great-use-of-lighting-and-tone. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i'm-very-interested-in-my-narwhal-train-construction-is-%26-what-your-story-is.-your-drawings-are-very-detailed-which-make-my-imagination-rises-up-even-more.-i'll-be-very-surprised-to-see-what-your-group's-story-is.-- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-awesome-image%2C-because-to-me-it-feels-like-we-are-in-the-right-place%2C-wrong-time-secenrio%2C-because-it-seems-like-your-character-is-doing-something-in-the-middle-of-the-night%2C-guided-only-by-a-single-candle-.i'm-interested-in-what-the-meaning%2Fstory-is-behind-this-photo%2C-%26-how-even-if-you-feel-that-you-were-rushed%2C-created-such-a-nice-photo%3F 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-awesome-image%2C-the-way-you-drew-everything%2C-bede's-real-friends%2C-imaginary-friends%2C-%26-the-environment-around-them-looks-amazing.-this-makes-me-wonder-what-happens-on-this-subway%3F-or-to-the-characters-in-your-story 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea%2C-its-so-creative-and-really-adds-to-the-uniqueness-of-the-story%2C-it-has-a-great-use-of-depth-and-shows-how-the-train-fades-away-in-the-distance%2C-i-would-like-to-know-more-about-the-characters 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-agree-with-this-being-beautiful-scenery-%26-a-awesome-view%2C-your-drawings-are-very-nice%2C-especially-with-your-character%2C-hikianalia.-i-interested-in-what-the-story-will-be-for-her.-very-excited-for-your-group. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-image-because-of-the-depth-and-the-art-style-looks-cool%2C-what-i-like-most-about-the-character-is-that-he-or-she-looks-like-a-friendly-robot-who-is-happy-about-what-they-do.-i-like-that-the-world-is-very-peaceful-and-straightforward-looking. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-it-reminds-me-of-the-calvin-and-hobbes-comics-so-i-like-it.-but-i-feel-like-it-could-have-some-more-personality. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-amazing!!!!!!!!! 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/on-the-road 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-it 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work%2C-i-really-like-the-stuff-you-put-in-the-background%2C-like-the-sign-posts-%26-that-mysterious-person-on-the-far-left.-i-wonder-what-those-tall-things-are-on-the-right-side%2C-are-they-towers%3F-i-wonder-were-your-character-is-going%2C-i-really-like-the-mysterious-aspect-of-this-image-because-we-don't-know-a-lot.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-inky-feel-and-the-way-it-looks 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-characters-art-and-the-reflection-under-it-which-seems-to-be-apart-of-something-later-to-come-in-the-story%2C-this-world-looks-very-peaceful-which-could-lead-to-a-unexpected-conflict.-the-image-has-a-great-use-of-depth%2C-shadows-and-sets-the-main-character-as-the-focus-of-the-art. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-colors-i-think-you-could-add-more-details.-i-like-the-monsters%2Falien 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-most-that-the-characters-are-portraying-the-emotions-that-they-are-feeling-really-well.-i-like-how-in-the-world%2C-you-can-see-that-it-is-supposed-to-be-bright-and-colorful%2C-but-because-the-scene-is-melancholy%2C-the-tones-are-darker.-the-image-uses-tones-and-contrast-really-well-to-show-where-our-eye-is-supposed-to-be-looking.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-colors-you-use%2C-and-the-drawings-are-great%2C-it-also-says-alot-about-the-world-and-time-period-this-world-is-set-in 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-colors-i-think-you-could-add-more-detail-bu-ti-like-the-monsters%2Faliens 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-great.-and-the-idea-is-nice 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-the-image-makes-use-of-depth-and-vanishing-point-to-show-the-main-focus%2C-i-like-the-vast-mountains-and-the-forest-and-it-adds-a-nice-aesthetic.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-color-and-the-monkey-but-i-think-that-you-could-maybe-add-more-detail-on-the-monkeys-face%2C 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-consept-and-exicution-i-think-that-you-could-work-on-the-story-a-little-more.-but-it-is-very-well-done 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-could-be-improved%2C-but-i-like-the-idea-and--the-sense-of-direction 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-the-colors-stick-out-and-show-the-theme%2C-great-depth-and-layering-which-leads-my-eyes-straight-to-the-captain-zork-and-his-space-ship.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-the-colors-stick-out-and-show-the-theme%2C-great-depth-and-layering-which-leads-my-eyes-straight-to-the-captain-zork-and-his-space-ship.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-the-character-is-actively-eating.-it-seems-like-he's-more-in-action-than-just-in-a-stand-still-picture.-i-really-like-the-detail-in-the-world-around-him.-the-scene-has-a-great-use-of-shading-to-display-the-room.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-perception-of-this-picture-and-i-really-like-the-colors 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-picture-is-great%2C-it-tells-a-lot-about-what-is-going-on-and-the-time-setting%2C 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-it-has-good-potencial- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art%2C-and-the-way-you-used-depth%2C-tone%2C-and-shape-was-nice. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-made-the-refelction-of-the-boy-in-the-water-i-dont-have-anything-bad-to-say-and-you-did-a-great-job 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-picture-i-think-you-could-maybe-add-color-an-di-think-you-did-a-great-job-drawing-it. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-the-most-in-this-picture-is-i-like-the-main-theme-of-this-creation. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-the-title-and-the-color-of-the-people's-faces-match.-one-thing-that-i-think-you-could-add-is%2C-some-vibrant-colors.- 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work%2C-i'm-so-curious-about-that-shadow-on-the-far-left%2C-is-that-another-character%3F%3F-and-the-signpost-his-hilarious%2C-i-think-he-should-not-go-where-it-says-%22death-ahead%22-haha.-this-should-be-a-fun-story-can't-wait-for-more 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow.....your-line-work-is-amazing%2C-i-just-love-how-fast-and-energetic-it-feels-(especially-the-cars)%2C-and-the-reflection-in-the-water-almost-gave-me-goosebumps.-your-composition-in-so-cool%2C-i-love-the-bird-way-out-front%2C-my-eyes-go-from-the-bird%2C-to-the-shelah%2C-then-to-her-reflection.-it's-perfect.-can't-wait-to-see-this-story-come-to-life 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work%2C-i'm-fascinating-about-those-creatures-in-the-image-on-the-right%2C-are-those-insects%3F-i-really-like-the-way-you-did-the-owl-as-it-draws-my-eyes-up-towards-him.-super-nice-use-of-perspective. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-crazy-good%2C-maybe-being-rushed-is-good-for-you%3F%3F-i-feel-like-i'm-in-the-game-clue-but-in-1348....by-far-my-favorite-part-of-this-image-is-your-use-of-light-and-color%2C-you-have-a-wonderful-template-of-color.-and-the-character's-pose-feels-very-natural...i'm-dying-to-see-this-come-to-life.-sorry-i-don't-have-1348-references%2C-one-thing-i-would-do-is-google-image-search-%2214th-century%22-i-just-did-that-and-it-has-lots-of-good-references-for-visuals. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-this-looks-like-a-great-painting....i-just-love-the-character-pose-and-the-subtle-deformation-in-the-jacket-that-makes-it-look-like-a-windy-day....i-can-%22feel%22-the-character-thinking%2C-and-i-wonder-what-they-are-going-to-be-faced-with-in-the-story.-well-done 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool%2C-i-love-the-composition-of-this-image%2C-it-really-make-the-world-feel-huge-and-daunting...as-if-the-mountains-go-on-forever.-i-also-remember-him-from-last-week!-i-can't-wait-to-see-how-you-spin-this-into-a-story-next-week! 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow....the-texture-and-colors-in-this-image-are-remarkable.-the-faces-have-so-much-expression-i-find-myself-drawn-to-the-older-women's-face-as-she-seems-like-a-caring-person.--i'm-already-rooting-for-her.-and-the-eyes-of-the-other-girl-portray-a-sense-of-worry.-i-love-her-big-orange-eyes.-all-the-little-details-in-the-background-make-this-feel-like-a-world-that-exists.-incredible... 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-vibrancy-of-this-image.-it's-candy-for-my-eyes-i-don't-a-better-way-to-describe-it.-the-details-really-make-it-feel-like-a-real-place.-the-red-robot-is-also-somehow-adorable-not-sure-how-you-did-that.-it-also-has-good-use-of-space....my-favorite-part-is-that-machine-he's-playing-with%2C-is-that-fire-inside%3F%3F%3F-very-steampunk.-i-can't-wait-to-hear-these-characters-when-you-bring-them-to-life-in-future-weeks.-well-done. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-it%2C-right-away-this-reminds-me-of-a-robert-munsch-book%2C-there-is-so-much-energy-in-your-lines-it-makes-it-look-alive.-love-this-little-%22crunch-crunch%22-too-i-can-almost-hear-him-eating-%3A)-i-love-the-contrast-with-the-world-outside-i-like-that-black-sky-int-he-distance-it's-very-ominous.-i-can't-wait-to-see-where-this-goes. 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ooo-i-remember-your-story-from-last-week.-what-i-like-most-about-your-character-is-her-smile%2C-it-is-simple-yet-really-charming.-her-eyes-are-also-very-cool%2C-reminds-me-of-a-disney-character.-what-i-like-about-the-world-is-the-huge-mountains...i-look-forward-to-this-coming-to-life! 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-this-image-is-the-vibrant-colors-and-otherworldliness-of-it.-it-feels-just-alien-enough-while-also-being-familiar-to-me.-the-image-has-great-use-of-depth-thanks-to-your-layering-and-it-really-draws-my-eye-right-to-captian-zork.-what-i-like-about-the-world-is-the-haziness-of-it.-i-like-that-purple-thing-on-his-head-is-it-some-kind-of-transponder-or-is-it-another-eye%3F-great-job-brining-your-world-to-life! 2021-10-22 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow%2C-you're-drawings-are-amazing-and-the-character-profile-is-intriguing.-i-wonder-if-tumtum-is-a-one-and-only-creature-or-if-he-lives-amongst-others-like-him-people.--i'm-also-curious-how-wants-to-learn-about-humans-%26-their-stories-and-need-for-stimulation-fold-into-other-wants-%26-needs.-the-other-want-for-humans-to-respect-nature-and-amount-of-time-it-takes-has-definite-potential-to-develop-further-and-are-very-relevant-to-today's-times.-looking-forward-to-hearing-more! 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/incredible-drawings....i-love-this-character.-i-think-his-desire-to-protect-nature-from-humans-is-a-good-idea.-people-will-relate.-i-wonder-how-his-need-for-stimulation-will-connect-to-this-story.-i-also-wonder-how-learning-time%2Fresponsibility-will-connect-to-whatever-conflict-you-come-up-with.--can't-wait-for-more 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-that-what-your-character-displays-on-the-outside%2C-also-represents-the-inside.-she-is-very-relatable!-your-design-for-nale-is-amazing!-great-work! 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-most-interesting-part-about-your-character-was-her-name-and-her-living-situation.-great-job-on-this! 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-work%2C-love-the-glasses...what-i-found-most-interesting-is-this-idea-of-%22saving-your-past-self%22...i-love-the-idea-of-this-rotten-king-coming-after-him.-i-wonder-how-he-will-learn-to-control-his-power%3F%3F 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/super-fun-ideas....my-favourite-is-what-if-the-sun-and-moon-disappeared!!-it-makes-me-wonder-how-we-would-survive%2C-generate-energy...and-what-the-unexpected-consequences-would-be- 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-internal-descriptions-about-your-character-was-so-relatable-in-so-many-different-ways.-i-am-excited-to-see-his-story-unfold. 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-everything-about-the-character.-from-his-looks-all-the-way-to-his-personality.- 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-a-cool-idea-of-a-dog-wanting-to-go-to-the-park-but-no-one-is-there-to-take-him%2C-but-the-idea-is-very-basic%2C-you-might-need-to-add-some-interesting-about-blue%2C-for-example%2C-blue-can-turn-into-a-different-dog-breed%2C-one-day-he-changes-to-a-golden-retriever-but-forgets-how-to-change-back-to-his-original-self-and-gets-lost...-and-just-continue-the-story.-some-details-and-twist-into-the-story-and-bam-its-a-10%2F10. 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-was-the-idea-of-the-character.-the-answer-to-the-question-%E2%80%9Cwhat-that-they-want-to-do-most%E2%80%9D-is-a-question-many-kids-ask-these-days%2C-if-their-are-aliens%3F-will-they-ever-come-to-earth%3F-i-am-excited-to-see-how-the-story-goes!-a-question-i-have-is%2C-did-quam-every-try-to-go-to-earth%3F- 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-is-pretty-similar-to-many-people-nowadays%2C-i-am-curious-to-find-out-how-he-overcomes-his-fears.-something-else-i-wanted-to-know-was-if-the-character-is-based-on-a-real-life-character%3F 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-story-and-the-character%2C-i-am-curious-on-how-she-is-a-half-human-and-half-dog%3F%3F' 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-creative-idea-and-a-really-good-main-character-%3Ad-i-wonder%2C-those-dovie-ever-find-it-difficul-or-counfuse-to-see-the-worl-in-2-different-at-the-same-time%3F%3F 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-their-character-design-and-their-personality-%2C-tho-i-wonder-how-did-they-get-to-earth%3F%3Fand-how-did-they-became-a-postman%3F%3F 2021-10-21 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-details-on-your-character-description.-i'm-curious-to-know-more-about-steecky-and-if-they-are-one-of-a-kind-before-their-friend%2Frival-shows-up%3F-if-one-of-a-kind%2C-is-that-what-makes-steecky-so-independent%2C-being-an-%22other%22%3F-i-wonder-what-inciting-incidents%2C-obstacles-or-lessons-you-will-create-for-steecky's-inner-transformation-and-whether-they-become-more-confident-and-less-anxious-because-of-this-growth%3F-keep-going! 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-description-is-so-rich-that-i-cannot-wait-to-see-what-quam-and-her-world-looks-like!-does-quam-have-special-powers%3F-what-does-everyday-life-look-like-on-her-planet%3F-do-her-features-make-her-unique-and-one-of-many-within-her-alien-people%3F-what-is-her-motivation-for-wanting-to-go-to-earth%3F-your-profile-makes-me-curious-to-know-more.-keep-going! 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-internal-description-of-your-character-is-so-relatable-and-has-such-appeal.-i'm-curious-if-there-was-an-inciting-incident-to-cause-leo-to-become-insecure-or-if-what-s%2Fhe-is-struggling-with-is-typical-adolescence-or-if-its-due-to-feeling-like-a-unique-other%3F-i-wonder-how-you-are-going-to-design-leo's-character-and-whether-their-external-will-be-different-from-their-internal-features%3F 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-found-it-interesting-that-dot-is-conflicted----they-want-help-but-don't-want-to-ask-for-it.-it-reminds-me-of-a-dad-not-wanting-to-stop-and-ask-for-directions.-having-dot-play-off-that-stereotype-could-be-really-funny.-keep-going! 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-good-but-could-get-some-more-detail-and-get-a-louder-voice. 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/my-favorite-idea-was-the-if-words-were-currency.-it-was-by-far-the-best. 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-drawings-but-in-the-video-2-voices-are-over-lapped-and-it-is-hard-to-understand-the-story-line-of-the-video 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-their-design!--the-hat-is-really-such-a-creative-and-defining-aspect.--it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-it-ties-into-who-they-are-as-a-person. 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-you-have-done-a-great-job-developing-this-character...i-love-this-idea-of-steecky-needing-to-learn-to-enjoy-the-company-of-%22opposites%22...i-wonder-how-he-will-learn-this%3F 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-a-tree-type-character-in-a-suit.-the-idea-reminds-me-of-groot-from-guardians-of-the-galaxy-crossed-with-the-tree-people-from-lord-of-the-rings.-i-am-curious-if-all-the-plants-and-trees-are-alive-which-would-mean-the-mint-tea-comes-from-a-living-creature-similar-to-your-character.- 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-your-character-ben-kujo-has-a-short-temper-which-contrasts-his-cute-timid-external-appearance.-i-am-curious-about-what-business-he-has-because-he-is-wearing-a-suit-and-bowtie.- 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-her-desing-%2C-i-wonder-why-she-has-trust-issues.%3F%3F--she-has-a-good-backstory-wich-i-think-people-can-realate-too-and-away-a-love-her-desing-(-especially-the-hair-%3Ad) 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-such-a-cute-character-and-story-.-tho-i-wonder-cant-they-leave-the-forest-%3F%3F-i-hope-she-can-get-their-aventure--she-wants-%3Ad 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-character-%2Cand--its-such-a-creative-story%2C-i-wonder-how-did-they-grow-from-a-seed-%3F-cause-that-sounds-really-intresting--and-cool-%3Ad 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/my-favorite-what-if-was-the-backpack-leading-to-other-dimensions-it-has-a-ton-of-potential-for-some-fun-stories.-i-wonder-what-the-rules-of-a-world-with-these-backpacks-would-be-like-and-what-these-other-dimensions-look-like. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-this-is-kind-of-like-a-human-pov-version-of-the-bee-movie.-will-there-be-a-turning-point-for-character-development-for-him%3F-what-will-his-conflict-be%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-like-most-about-your-character-is-all-the-characteristics-you-have-for-your-character%2C-all-his-explicit-%26-implicit-characteristics%2C-his-wants-%26-needs%2C-%26-the-conflict-he-will-go-through.-i-wonder-how-is-journey-to-find-his-hat-go%2C-will-he-accept-the-help-from-other-people-%26-make-some-friends-along-the-way.-also-the-fact-that-jalen-is-an-object%2C-searching-for-another-object%2C-while-having-this-ego-%26-being-judgey-can-be-a-great-idea.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-detailed-your-drawing-is.-how-can-you-add-more-detail-to-his-story-to-make-his-character-development-more-clear%3F-i-really-like-how-you-used-a-backstory--and-worked-it-into-your-story%2C 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-stated-all-of-the-things-he-literally-needs%3B-not-just-morally.-what-is-his-conflict-going-to-be%3F-will-he-change%3B-and-how%3F-i-like-your-drawing-and-how-you-depicted-his-physicality. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/time-travel-is-one-of-my-favorite-concepts-and-this-story-looks-to-be-very-interesting.-there's-so-much-to-wonder-about-too.-what-time-is-this-set-in%3F-what-causes-the-parrot-abs%2C-is-it-a-major-trait-in-this-world%3F-where-did-he-get-the-power-to-control-time%3F-i-would-be-interested-to-see-the-full-story-of-how-the-relationship-with-the-daughter-developed-and-how-losing-his-family-affected-his-life. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawing%3B-she-is-really-pretty.-does-the-conflict-make-her-change-her-attitude%3F-what-is-her-main-motivation-to-change-for-the-better%3F-i-like-that-she'll-have-companions-to-help-her-out.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-idea-is-one-of-the-most-unique-i've-seen!-i-love-how-it-one%2C-relates-to-real-world-problems-like-discrimination-and%2For-racism.-the-personality-also-fits-him-perfectly.-an-alien-with-a-different-perspective-on-the-world-would-probably-be-naive-and-always-welcome-to-learn-more.-the-only-wonderings-i-have-is-trying-to-imagine-the-rising-action-or-conflict.-a-clear-backstory-somewhere-along-the-line-would-be-cool-too.-overall%2C-really-nice-idea%2C-and-interesting-topic-to-build-upon%2C-especially-as-a-postman. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawing%3B-it's-really-clear-and-detailed.-is-there-a-reason-that-puff-is-named-after-a-bird%3F-is-there-a-conflict-in-his-story%2Fis-it-going-to-be-that-puff-can't-fly%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing%3B-he's-really-cute.-i-really-think-you-should-give-them-a-name-so-the-story-doesn't-get-confusing.-i-like-how-they-have-to-learn-to-have-a-better-sense-of-self-worth. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-art-style%2C-how-could-she-hide-it-from-her%3F-i-love-the-idea-of-a-twin-and-i-like-how-you-structured-her-character 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-jerry-a-lot-i-find-him-very-intresting.-maybe-touch-more-on-the-world-he-lives-in-or-the-people-around-him-so-us-as-readers-can-know-what-his-everyday-day-to-day-life-looks-like.-but-other-than-that-you-did-amazing%2C-great-job! 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-making-a-sock-the-main-character.-i-think-you-should-also-work-in-some-more-detail-about-the-story.-how-does-he-get-lost%3F-how-does-he-get-home%3F-i-like-how-you-added-patterns-onto-the-sock-to-show-his-personality-more-through-his-external-features.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-characters-a-lot-and-i-love-the-artwork-your-drawing-skills-are-awesome!-maybe-touch-more-on-the-environment-or-what-the-world-looks-like-for-them%2C-in-order-for-us-readers-to-have-an-idea-of-what-their-world-is-liek-and-how-they-are-treated.-other-than-that-you-did-really-good-i-love-the-artwork-and-everything-about-it%2C-amazing-job! 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-what-you-did%2C-maybe-you-could-make-a-way-to-leave-the-forest%3F-i-love-your-character-and-the-idea-of-three-states-of-said-character! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-something-really-simple-but-also-unique-to-where-i-haven't-seen-it-before.-i-wonder-if-the-name-signifies-a-meaning-like-how-he-looks-bright-on-the-outside%2C-but-feels-blue-and-sad-on-the-inside.-how-would-the-conflict-be-resolved%3F-does-he-find-another-dog-to-bond-with%3F-will-his-owner-come-back%3F-overall-an-animation-could-portray-a-nice-short-story. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-character%2C-maybe-you-could-give-more-external-traits%3F-aside-that-i-do-like-what-you-already-have 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-find-this-very-interesting-character-will-he-ever-overcome-grief%3F-and-will-he-find-his-way-and-will-he-ever-find-a-friend%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-character-idea.--i-would-recommend-that-you-don't-put-all-the-gifs-because-it-took-away-from-what-you-were-saying.-i-couldn't-focus-what-you-were-saying-because--there-was-a-lot-of-distractions.-i-am-excited-to-see-how-your-character-changes-over-time. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-character-a-lot-and-i-love-the-scenario-you-put-him-in.-maybe-touch-more-on-the-character-itself-and-what-he-does-and-stuff-but-other-than-that-i-really-like-the-concept-and-the-scenario-you-put-him-in%2C-its-really-intresting- 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-character-was-really-good.-i-think-you-could-have-explained-why-she-wants-to-be-a-human.-is-it-because-there's-no-other-aliens-and-she-want-to-fit-in%3F-or-is-there-another-reason%3F-overall%2C-i-think-you-did-a-good-job! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art.-and-i-think-your-character-is-great 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-depth-in-description-of-your-character.-i-think-you-should-add-more-to-the-story-like-why-hes-relevant-and-why-he's-your-main-character.-what-is-the-conflict%2C-rising-action%2C-and-resolution%3F--i-really-like-your-sketching-style. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-can-draw%2C-that-drawing-is-very-good.--i-would-recommend-that-you-tell-us-what-the-conflict-will-be.-i-would-recommend-that-you-tell-us-just-the-main-points.-i-am-excited-to-see-how-your-character-changes-over-time.-- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-short-glimpse-of-this-wonderful-story-had-me-in-tears%2C-i-am-now-very-invested-in-the-adventures-of-jalen-and-his-quest-to-get-his-lost-hat.-i-want-to-know-why-jalen-loves-his-dear-hat-so-much%2C-and-why-he-is-willing-to-go-so-far-for-it%2C-but-other-than-that-*chefs-kiss*-it-is-beautiful. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-relatable-your-character-is%2C-especially-with-the-parents-vs-child-aspect.-this-makes-we-wonder-if-the-2-sides-well-resolve-this-disagreement-or-will-someone-else-intervene%3F-really-strong-start-to-you-character.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-relatable-your-character-is%2C-especially-with-the-parents-vs-child-aspect.-this-makes-we-wonder-if-the-2-sides-well-resolve-this-disagreement-or-will-someone-else-intervene%3F-really-strong-start-to-you-character.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-concept-of-the-sock-and-i-love-the-artwork.-i-have-a-few-questions%2C-like-what-does-the-sock-do%3F-what-is-the-socks-purpose-in-life%3F-maybe-talk-more-about-that-but-other-than-that-i-love-it-so-much 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-character-is-really-well-developed-and-detailed.-i-wonder-how-ruthord-will-change-though-out-the-story. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-i-love-this.-so-cool.-great-art-too.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-your-idea-sets-up-your-story-well-to-be-about-not-just-the-socks-struggles-but-his-strugles-about-being-alone.-i-thought-that-you-could've-talked-more-about-the-struggles-that-he-will-face-when-being-apart-from-his-pair.-i-think-that-he-could-be-more-complex-than-just-being-arrogant.-i-think-that-the-idea-you-have-is-great. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-you-drawing-and-how-specific-you-describe-your-character.-i-would-recommend-that-at-the-end-when-you-are-showing-the-other-characters-you-slow-that-part-down-because-i-could-not-really-see-the-characters.-i-would-recommend-that-you-would-show-her-stock-on-the-train.-i-am-really-excited-to-see-how-your-character-changes-over-time. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-plot-and-the-space-knight-is-something-i've-never-heard-of-it-i-really-like-the-art-its-funny-and-it-seems-very-interesting. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-details-are-super-clear-and-interesting.-what-i-found-most-interesting-is-how-he-likes-the-outside-learn.-how-might-they-learn-how-to-fly-would-there-be-any-conflict.-what-make-me-wonder-is-if-he-wants-to-explore-outside-his-take.-the-art-is-super-cute-and-has-a-lot-of-detail. 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-idea-for-both-this-character-and-his-story-is-really-cool.-i-wonder-if-you-will-expand-on-this-character-and-approach-him-more-like-a-bot-or-just-like-and-enigma-or-ego.--because-no-one-will-really-meet-or-see-wifi-i-wonder-how-he-overcome-this-challenge-himself 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-struggle-with-person-against-society%2C-i-think-that-this-has-amazing-potential-and-could-be-a-very-inspirational-short.-i-think-that-you-could-make-it-a-specific-snake-or-make-your-own!!-i-hope-this-character-overcomes-the-obstacles-and-is-at-peace-with-themselves. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-concept-of-your-character%2C-someone-who-wants-to-be-one-thing%2C-while-the-outside-aspect-of-them-is-conflicting-with-the-inside.-will-something-happen-to-john-to-make-him-make-this-decision-or-are-any-characters-gonna-help-him-change%3F.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-good-and-it-seems-like-it-will-be-a-fun-story!-it-does-feel-like-curious-george-a-little-too-much-though...- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-drawings. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/these-are-really-good-drawings%2C-i-like-the-exploring-space-idea-i-think-its-really-cool.- 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/--the-drawings-are-very-detailed-and-i-love-how-it-has-the-little-word-bubble.--however-i-think-that-the-video-left-on-kinda-a-cliffhanger-on-what-happens-next-but-i-also-like-how-there-are-different-pictures-on-whats-going-on. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing.-its-great.-but-i-want-to-hear-more-about-why-they-want-to-be-a-protector 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-video-was-really-good.-it-was-a-little-long%2C-but-you-gave-a-lot-of-details-and-did-a-really-good-job! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-here%2C-the-extra-visual-flairs-here-really-add-to-this!-kiko-is-a-really-interesting-character%2C-and-i-like-how-the-story-is-about-kiko-seemingly-overcoming-their-parents'-firm-grip-on-what-they-do.-i-do-think-you-could-revisit-what-the-lesson-is%2C-as-the-lesson-seems-to-be-more-really-that-you-shouldn't-let-those-above-you-stop-you-from-what-you-love%2C-rather-than-that-art-is-worthless-if-you-lack-passion. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-character-and-there-idea-that-they-are-almost-2-different-people-and-that-they-have-a-compliantly-diffident-personality.-i-feel-like-adding-some-conflict-would-help-him-find-his-path 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-seems-to-have-a-lot-of-depth-inside%2C-which-is-good-in-a-character.-however%2C-does-this-character-have-any-explicit-traits%3F-anything-they-like%2C-anything-they-are-passionate-about%2C-or-really-anything-that-doesn't-explicitly-relate-to-their-dead-friend%3F-this-seems-to-have-omori-vibes%2C-so-with-that-as-an-example%2C-the-protagonist-played-the-violin-which-was-implicitly-but-not-explicitly-tied-to-the-one-they-were-grieving-over.-overall%2C-i-think-they-are-a-good-character-inside%2C-but-could-use-more-development-on-the-surface. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-plot-points-and-how-thorough-you-made-them.-i-think-you-should-identify-some-obstacles-that-could-come-with-seeing-through-both-eyes-differently.-do-people-not-accept-her-because-she-has-the-abilities-of-both-types-of-people%3F-does-it-ever-physically-hurt-to-see-through-both-of-her-eyes-when-they're-so-different%3F-i-like-how-much-detail-you-put-into-her-personality.-- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-just-love-how-you-decided-to-animate-them!-i-do-however-feel-you-could-speak-a-little-louder.-aside-that-i-love-your-deep-backstory-to-your-character 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-plot-points-and-how-thorough-you-made-them.-i-think-you-should-identify-some-obstacles-that-could-come-with-seeing-through-both-eyes-differently.-do-people-not-accept-her-because-she-has-the-abilities-of-both-types-of-people%3F-does-it-ever-physically-hurt-to-see-through-both-of-her-eyes-when-they're-so-different%3F-i-like-how-much-detail-you-put-into-her-personality.-- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-idea!-i-wonder-how-john-and-jon-will-interact-will-each-othe%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawing.-how-do-they-learn-to-be-okay%3F-and-why-is-the-other-character-is-such-a-big-problem. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-different-drawings-of-the-character.-i-think-it-cut-off-at-the-end-so-i-couldn't-here-well%2C-nice-work! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-is-the-name-of-your-character%2C-which-is-really-unique-%26-the-struggles-they-are-going-through.-it-makes-me-wonder-if-something-happens-to-them-in-the-past-that-is-making-them-feel-this-way-or-will-something-happen-in-your-story-to-help-this-character%3F- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-brought-in-the-idea-of-an-old-tv-character-as-the-inspiration-for-your-character.-what-does-the-character-do%3F-does-he-get-in-a-lot-of-trouble-enough-to-almost-go-to-jail%3F-what-lessons-does-he-learn%3F-does-he-find-other-ways-to-gain-attention%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-that-you-described-him-very-well.-and-i-thought-maybe-you-could-have-what-he-is-most-afraid-of-and-gone-into-depth-about-the-plot.-but-over-all-i-liked-that-you-used-color. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-art-is-super-interesting-and-cool.-the-detail-is-super-clear.-does-it-effect-his-like.-how-might-it-be-challenging-for-him.- 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-that-you-described-him-very-well.-and-i-thought-maybe-you-could-have-what-he-is-most-afraid-of-and-gone-into-depth-about-the-plot.-but-over-all-i-liked-that-you-used-color. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-arc-is-well-laid-out%2C-but-the-description-of-the-external-does-not-seem-to-match-the-art.-other-than-that-it-is-well-done 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-layout%2C-i-feel-like-you-could-a-lil-moore-deali-on-the-people-and-not-all-of-them-to-be-sicks.-i-like-the-characteristics. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-art-is-as-amazing-as-ever.-i-love-the-story-about-the-character.-i-want-to-hear-more-about-why-they-have-a-pipe-sticking-out-of-their-chest. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/beautiful-animation%2C-it-really-helps-make-these-kind-of-videos-much-more-engaging!-i-was-a-little-lost-on-what-this-story-will-be-about-(other-than-the-magnificent-captain-zork)%2C-but-honestly-other-than-that%2C-this-was-a-fantastic-video-(i-also-really-enjoyed-the-humor). 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-drawing--and-name-inspiration.-it-makes-me-wonder-if-there-were-more-ideas-to-help-her-with-her-problems.-i-liked-the-creativity. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-his-external-features-(metal-bucket%2C-big-jacket%2C-etc).-i-think-if-you-could've-added-some-more-color-to-your-character-then-it-would-look-a-lot-better.-you-could've-added-some-internal-features-as-well-for-example-he's-kind%2C-hes-selfish%2C-he's-arrogant%2C-he's-lonely.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/beautiful-animation%2C-it-really-helps-make-these-kind-of-videos-much-more-engaging!-i-was-a-little-lost-on-what-this-story-will-be-about-(other-than-the-magnificent-captain-zork)%2C-but-honestly-other-than-that%2C-this-was-a-fantastic-video-(i-also-really-enjoyed-the-humor). 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-fighting-aliens-is-a-good-idea.-i-think-the-turn-out-will-be-sweet.-good-job.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/first-off-i-really-like-the-animation-you-guys-did%2C-i-love-all-the-drawings-and-the-description-of-it.-i-feel-like-maybe-you-should-focus-on-characters-and-explain-some-more-about-them-because-right-now-all-you-really-explained-was-your-scene-and-didn't-touch-base-on-any-of-your-characters-so-i-feel-like-maybe-you-should-do-that.-but-other-than-that-you-did-really-well 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-character-has-a-really-good-personality.-i-wonder-if-he-is-the-only-chicken-in-his-community-or-if-everyone-is-chickens-or-other-animals.-also.-i-was-a-bit-confused-why-he-seems-like-he's-still-in-his-egg.-is-it-because-he-uses-it-to-hide-and-it-helps-him-feel-safe-or-is-it-another-reason%3F- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ti-found-intresting-is-about-her-personality%22s-that-she-has-it-makes-me-wonder-what-bella-would-do-in-the-next-short- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-but-i-think-that-you-could-improve-the-pictures-more.-but-overal-i-like-this-one-alot. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/im-only-10-seconds-in-and-i-love-how-you-played-your-character!-what-is-her-want%3F-and-i-like-how-you-gave-her-a-voice-and-made-a-showcase-feel-like-a-conversation! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-art-is-really-beautiful-and-has-a-lot-of-detail.-how-does-this-effect-her-life.-do-other-people-judge-them-or-do-they-even-know.-the-story-is-super-interesting. 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-a-character-vs-world-type-plot-but-because-your-character's-main-goal-is-mostly-just-survival-(which-i-feel-like-is-a-more-physical-goal%2Fdevelopment)-have-you-thought-about-building-the-character-more-emotionally%2Fmentally%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/sophie-sounds-sweet-and-relatable!-why-doesn't-she-sing-and-dance%3F-i-think-this-world-and-the-message-she-needs-to-learn-is-very-good-and-profound!- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-amazing-idea-and-the-art-is-so-good-too!-i-love-how-intricate-the-story-is-and-how-it-kind-of-represents-real-life-people.-amazing-work! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-will-be-really-good-when-its-done--tell-the-people-more-about-the-other-character-as-well--add-color--really-cool-drawings 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-animation.-very-detailed-internal-features. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-amazing-idea-and-the-art-is-so-good-too!-i-love-how-intricate-the-story-is-and-how-it-kind-of-represents-real-life-people.-amazing-work! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-character-%26-the-goal-he-is-trying-to-achieve%2C-saving-the-bees.-but-what-this-makes-me-wonder-what-happened-to-the-bees-in-the-first-place%3F-is-this-set-in-a-world-where-we-killed-all-the-bees-due-to-pesticides%3F.-i-think-you-guys-did-a-really-great-job-with-your-character%2C-maybe-some-more-info-on-the-situation.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-line-of-this-is-great-but-i-also-think-there-should-be-more-details-about-the-setting-hes-in.-all-in-all-good-story 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawings%2C-where-is-the-home-located-what-is-the-scenery%3F-and-who-is-the-main-character%3F-i-love-the-idea. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-that-your-idea-would-make-a-great-story.-i-thought-you-could've-gone-more-in-depth-with-his-problems-and-who-he-is-on-the-inside.-i-think-that-you-should-make-your-character-more-complex-so-the-story-isn't-simple.-overall-i-think-that-your-story-shows-a-lot-of-promise-and-will-be-great! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-character-drawings%2C-i-think-that-they-could-be-detailed-a-little-bit-more-but-this-is-our-first-draft.-i-was-wondering-what-the-hands%2Fpaws(%3F)-were-at-the-bottom-of-the-second-image.-i-like-your-idea-for-what-he-needs-to-learn%2C-i-think-it-has-alot-of-potential. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-character-and-his-traits.-i-recommend-you-turn-the-music-off-because-it-was-hard-to-hear-what-you-said.-i-was-confused-on-some-of-the-characters-because-they-all-looked-different.-i-am-excited-to-see-how-your-character-changes-over-time.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-drawing-of-the-character-is-really-good.-why-do-they-want-to-play-their-music%3F-if-they-have-no-passion-for-art%2C-what-is-their-passion%3F-also-i-really-like-the-personality-of-this-character-they-seem-really-fun 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-said-it-in-the-perspective-of-the-snake.-why-is-its-brother-venomous-but-there-not%3F-aren't-they-the-both-the-same-kind-of-snake%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-jim-and-that-he-has-to-find--a-new-job.-he-seams-like-a-cool-person-and-a-kind-person.-i-wish-that-you-will-make-him-life-like-and-give-him-some-friends. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-the-best-one-i-have-seen- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-giving-a-ghost-the-appearance-of-a-teenager-with-victorian-style-clothes-that-is-quiet-unique.-some-things-you-could-ask-yourself-to-create-a-better-story-is....-how-does-the-ghost-actually-become-friends-with-the-ghost-hunter%3F-do-they-do-things-together-like-do-they-clean-the-mansion-together%3F-how-else-could-the-business-man-be-scared-off-or-dealt-with%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-detailed-drawing-and-the-emotions-that-they-had-really-cool-something-i-would-change-so-it-can-stand-out-is-adding-some-color-to-it--great-job. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-detailed-drawing-and-the-emotions-that-they-had-really-cool-something-i-would-change-so-it-can-stand-out-is-adding-some-color-to-it--great-job. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-is-cool.-why-was-his-hat-stolen%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-a-potato-spy%2C-it-seems-pretty-funny-with-the-killer-bean-like-character.-it-gives-me-a-few-other-ideas-about-like-what-does-the-rest-of-the-world-look-like%3F-what-is-the-goal-of-humphrey%3F-other-than-the-unclear-conflict%2C-this-idea-looks-interesting-to-put-into-a-story. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-you-added-designs-on-the-sock.-i-though-maybe-you-could-have-made-it-look-torn-and-old.--but-over-all-i-liked-the-plot-of-the-story. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-noticed-that-her-personality-is-pretty-solid-and-i-also-noticed-that-the-obstacle-she-faces-was-really-nice-and-adventures-and-i-love-you-picture-for-you-character.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-story-sounds-interesting%2C-as-well-as-the-internal-description%2C-but-the-external-description-is-vague%2C-but-the-arty-is-really-well-done. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-the-idea.-its-very-creative-and-unique.-only-thing-that-could-be-improved-on-is-dragging-out-the-video-too-long%2C-i-personally-think-the-picture-shows-a-lot-which-could-cut-out-some-time-explaining.-very-creative-idea-and-it-makes-me-wonder-how-this-character-will-progress. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-sketches-in-this-one%2C-i-think-that-you-could-speak-a-little-louder-cause-i-cant-hear%2C-but-overall-i-like-the-story-and-the-character 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-stacy!-how-is-she-going-to-work-around-being-figured-out%3F-i-think-her-story-has-lots-of-potential-and-can-be-great! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art%2C-the-character-traits-were-well-explained-and-i-like-how-it-contrasts-with-other-characters-to-make-the-story-more-interesting-and-unique. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-drawing-i-really-like-your-concept-it-seems-very-intresting-and-i-would-definetly-want-to-know-more-about-the-2nd-bart-simpsons-something-i-would-change-is-ading-a-backrounds-and-adding-color 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-this-idea-and-art-work-its-a-very-great-story-and-a-very-great-plot-and-really-like-the-artwork. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-concept-of-the-character's-world-being-in-black-and-white-in-the-beginning-when-they-can-not-find-or-%22see%22-happiness.-this-is-great-visual-language.-if-they-find-joy-or-comfort-from-the-bleakness--the-addition-of-color-in-their-environment-will-speak-for-itself! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-really-beautiful.--it-makes-me-wonder-if-the-character-might-have-some-sort-of-realization.-maybe-they-are-over-coming-something.-i-think-the-whole-story-is-super-interesting. 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-did-an-amazing-job-but-i-think-you-could-have-explained-the-story-more.-but-i-think-you-did-a-good-job 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-the-sock-getting-in-a-relationship.-i-wounded-hoe-he's-gonna-find-her%2C-and-how-his-journey-will-continue.-i-love-the-drawings-and-the-characteristics. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-way-you-described-her-personality%2C-and-looks.-the-concept-is-really-good-too. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/to-start-off%2C-i-think-a-story-focusing-on-gender-has-room-for-social-commentary-on--our-societies-binary-perception-on-gender-and-gender-expression%2Ci-dont-get-how-them-singing-plays-into-it%2Cor-how-getting-sick-ruins-them-presenting-as-a-man 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-and-idea-is-very-nice!-i'd-like-to-know-more-about-her-and-her-story-though%3B-maybe-include-more-details-about-her-like-her-age-or-how-she-got-to-earth.-very-great-work! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-that-people-can-relate-to-this-and-that-is-really-cool.-i-like-how-much-development-you-are-talking-about-giving-him-and-i-think-it-is-cool-that-the-story-involves-him-fixing-himself. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-the-topic.-i-think-that-you-could-improve-by-not-explaining-a-little-more-eon-the-problem.-i-also-like-the-digital-drawing-and-the-sketch. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-interesting.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-drawing-of-the-anime-character-and-especially-his-surprised-expression.--i-think-you-could've-added-some-more-internal-features-about-your-characters-but-other-that-that-i-really-like-it.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-don't-understand-whats-going-on-are-they-fighting-playing-etc--i-wonder-what-they-are-doing- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-how-to-the-point-everything-was%2C-but-the-bed-sheet-ghost-thing-was-a-little-confusing.-overall-though%2C-i-really-liked-how-many-traits-he-has%2C-good-and-bad-(as-far-as-i-can-tell-that-can-be-a-hard-thing-to-get-right). 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-drawing-and-the-personality.-i-really-like-how-you-showed-his-details-and-explained-the-plot-and-the-obstacles-he-faces.-it-kind-of-reminds-me-of-%22boss-baby%22- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-good-drawings--tell-the-people-about-how-he-is-in-the-inside-dont-just-show-us--add-color-this-could-make-a-really-good-story- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawings-are-amazing-it-looks-so-good-good-job-on-that-i-liked-how-you-described-the-character-from-the-inside-and-outside--what-i-would-change-is-the-way-you-talked-about-the-character-because-that-paper-was-kind-of-hard-to-understand. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-very-good-concept!-i'd-like-to-see-more-of-his-struggle-and-the-solutions-he-comes-up-with-to-his-owner-being-gone.-keep-it-up%2C-blue-sounds-cool!- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-story.-seems-like-a-good-character.-good-drawings. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-drawings-are-amazing-it-looks-so-good-good-job-on-that-i-liked-how-you-described-the-character-from-the-inside-and-outside--what-i-would-change-is-the-way-you-talked-about-the-character-because-that-paper-was-kind-of-hard-to-understand. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-all-your-descriptions-of-nick%2C-is-physical-%26-emotional-features%2C-including-his-challenges.-this-makes-me-wonder-about-if-there-is-a-conflict-that-happens-in-nick's-story%2C--that-could-affect-how-he-feels-inside.-i-really-like-the-internal-features-that-you-choose.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-idea!-i-wonder-how--archie-will-learn-how-to-not-have-a-self-centered-mindset%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-concept%2C-maybe-you-could-make-her-want-more%2C-aside-that-i-like-how-you-portraid-your-character-to-seem-almost-friendly 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-was-surprised-to-know-john-is-a-monster-i-like-that-idea%2C-but-maybe-instead-of-attacking-people-he-could-like-them.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-character%2C-she-seems-fleshed-out-and-doesn't-feel-2-dimensional.-her-writing-seems-simple.-but-realistic%2C-which-i-as-a-person-in-the-audience-appreciate.-i-suppose-it-may-help-to-expand-her-character-in-other-ways%2C-though.-is-there-anything-else-she's-passionate-about%2C-like-hobbies%3F-maybe-those-could-be-based-off-activities-she-did-with-her-dad-when-he-was-still-alive%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-agu-is-so-cool.-how-you-thought-of-adding-how-he-got-his-sword%3F-i-think-you-should-add-why-he-is-fighting-the-dragon%3F-i-am-excited-to-see-how-this-character-changes-over-time.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-jalen-the-bird-as-he-seem-like-a-very-kind-person-as-it-seems-like-a-cool-character.-i-hope-you-will-add-some-more-personality-to-him-to-make-him-seam-more-life-like.-i-love-the-story-idea-though-as-it-seams-to-be-very-cool. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-agu-is-so-cool.-how-you-thought-of-adding-how-he-got-his-sword%3F-i-think-you-should-add-why-he-is-fighting-the-dragon%3F-i-am-excited-to-see-how-this-character-changes-over-time.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-this-story-is-super-cool--and-you-are-really-giving-depth-to-the-character-maybe-explain-a-little-bit-more-as-to-why-they-are-depressed-and-why-she-looks-so-happy-and-really-is-not-the-drawing-is-really-cool-and-i-think-you-could-give-more-emphasis-to-the-character-but-other-than-that-solid-idea. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-art-so-far%2C-i-wish-the-roles-of-the-characters-and-the-relationship-between-them-would-have-been-expanded-upon-a-bit-more-to-make-the-story-more-clear.-other-than-that-the-characters-seem-very-well-done 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-what-if-question-here-is-some-seriously-powerful-stuff.-i-love-the-concept-art-here%2C-this-is-all-very-lovely-and-gorgeous%2C-color-choice-is-extraordinarily-on-point.-i-genuinely-see-no-problem-with-this%2C-besides-the-color-aspect-not-too-heavily-playing-part-in-the-story-as-a-whole-it-seems%2C-being-more-so-just-a-catalyst-for-a-different-and-not-related-problem. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-duality-of-your-character.-i'm-not-really-sure-what-the-old-world-is-or-why-it-would-be-a-motive%2Fstruggle-to-build-on. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-that-the-idea-was-very-thought-out.-i-think-that-you-could've-gone-more-in-depth-when-describing-the-%22monster's%22-problems.-i-think-that-your-monster-should-have-more-complicated-problems-than-somebody-saying-no.-overall-i-thought-that-it-would-make-a-great-story. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-the-plot-could-go-in-many-different-directions.-maybe-you-could-have-added-more-detail-to-the-drawings-and-added-color.--over-all-i-really-like-the-plot-and-thought-it-seems-fun. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-sketch%2C-the-video-cut-off-halfway-through%2C-and-i-think-the-story-has-potential. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-can-see-that-this-character-was-made-with-a-lot-of-thought-and-hard-work!-however-i'd-like-to-know-why-she-has-trust-issues.-love-the-drawing! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-nice-drawings-it-has-a-lot-of-potential-how-did-you-even-make-that-ths-is-very-amazing-everything-is-great-i-would-not-change-anything- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-animations.-i-also-think-it-could-have-been-okay-without-the-intro-and-outro.-i-also-like-that-the-character-is-different-than-some-others-i-have-seen. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-fleshed-out-she-is!-she's-a-very-interesting-character.-i-just-want-to-see-the-whole-character-design-with-the-jacket.-good-job!- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-connected-a-sort-of-human-like-person%2Fcharacter-with-plants-giving-them-traits-such-as-them-being-happier-in-the-sun-and-also-how-there-is-fungi-or-patches-of-moss-growing-on-his-skin.-some-questions-you-could-ask-yourself-are....-what-conflict-does-he-experience-in-the-story%3F-does-something-happen-to-his-home%3F-how-do-the-relationships-with-others-effect-how-he-acts-in-different-situations%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-your-idea-of-combining-an-apocalypse-with-with-a-character-lacking-self-confidence-is-an-interesting-idea.-i-didn't-see-anything-about-what-johnny-is-like-on-the-inside.-what's-some-of-his-other-personality-traits-besides-low-self-esteem%3F-is-he-funny-or-serious%3F-is-he-quiet-and-shy-or-outgoing-and-loud%3F-is-he-something-else%3F-i-think-once-you-expand-on-this%2C-you'll-have-a-really-interest-character! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-a-lot-i-think-that-this-has-a-a-lot-of-potential-but-i-think-it-si-a-bit-lacking-in-the-emotions-depart-and-maybe-you-could-get-a-little-bit-more-into-why-he-has-a-big-ego-other-than-that-i-think-you-have-a-good-base-to-build-on-- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that%2C-on-the-outside%2C-he-looks-like-an-extremely-strong-guy%2C-yet-on-the-inside%2C-he's-lonely-and-doesn't-have-any-friends.-it's-a-pretty-cool%2C-smart%2C-and-unique-idea.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-why-aliens-are-involved.-to-me%2C-the-aliens-just-seem-too-out-of-place.-like%2C-the-story-could've-probably-made-more-sense-if-there-weren't-any-aliens-involved.-it-also-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-these-aliens-will-be-able-to-fit-into-the-story-and-how-they'll-help-the-character-to-gain-more-friends-and-achieve-his-goals.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-but-i-think-it-could-use-some-more-thought-into-it-but-i-think-you-did-to-good-job-overal 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-characters-features-fit-in-to-the-description.-maybe-theres-could-be-like-a-break-through-moment-in-his-life.-it-makes-me-wonder-if-it-effects-his-daily-life--.-the-art-is-super-nice. 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/how-is-the-character-going-to-grow%3F-what-lessons-will-he-learn%3F-why-is-he-so-cold%3F-does-he-live-in-antarctica%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-but-i-think-it-could-use-some-more-thought-into-it-but-i-think-you-did-to-good-job-overal 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-character%2Cshe-seems-believable-and-i-think-she-could-exist-in-the-real-world. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-but-i-think-it-could-use-some-more-thought-into-it-but-i-think-you-did-to-good-job-overal 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-character%2Cshe-seems-believable-and-i-think-she-could-exist-in-the-real-world. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-looks-so-cute%2C-very-interesting.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-am-super-interested-in-the-underlying-message-in-reference-to-your-character's-views.-so-many-times%2C-people-tend-to-lead-with-%22counting-themselves-out%22-before-anyone-else-has-an-opportunity-to-hurt-them.-i-am-crazy-about-this-character-and-the-story-you-create-around-them! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-idea.-it-could-be-improved-by-going-more-into-depth-about-the-personality-traits-and-how-they-effect-the-character-in-the-environment.-other-than-that-its-a-great-concept. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-find-this-character-interesting%2C-it-seems-like-he-could-have-an-interesting-character-arc%2C-along-with-a-good-moral-if-done-right 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-backstory-of-the-movie-and-the-drawing-of-the-2nd-story-house.-maybe-if-the-house-had-some-color-it-would-look-a-lot-more-colorful.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art-but-for-some-the-names-will-be-sort-of-hard-to-pronounce--how-does-this-character-rise- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-put-a-lot-of-personality-into-your-character-and-i-like-how-you-show-that-he-is-muscular-in-the-drawing.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-how-you-told-us-everything-about-the-character--something-i-would-change-it-adding-some-color-and-sketching-first-with-pencil-then-draw-it-over-it-so-it-could-look-much-better-but-everything-looked-good. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-cool-story-add-color--how-did-that-all-start--this-is-something-i-would-watch- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-concept-of-being-able-to-see-color-out-of-one-eye-and-black-and-white-out-of-the-other.-i-love-your-description-of-the-characters-and-how-in-depth-you-talked-about-her.-i-think-maybe-you-could-give-detail-about-what-the-world-is-like-for-her%2C-i-have-a-few-question-about-what-the-people-are-like%3F-or-what-school-is-like-for-her.-but-other-than-that-excellent-job-with-your-character 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea%2C-i-appreciated-the-humor-of-the-zombies-and-this-could-make-the-character-a-more-likable-and-unique-character.-having-a-clear-goal-for-the-character-and-the-obstacles-he-has-to-face-is-also-very-good-and-i-think-it-will-put-a-good-message-through. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/im-on-this-one-but-im-gonna-review-this-as-well.-i-really-love-the-bird-design%2C-but-i-think-you-could-go-a-little-deeper-into-a-backstory-for-the-bird.-i-also-really-love-the-story. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/is-interesting- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-are-such-a-good-artist.--is-he-going-to-go-throught--character-development-and-what-will-make-that-happen%3F--what-does-he-need-the-most.-i-am-excited-to-see-how-you-the-chracter-changes-overtime.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-concept-of-being-able-to-see-color-out-of-one-eye-and-black-and-white-out-of-the-other.-i-love-your-description-of-the-characters-and-how-in-depth-you-talked-about-her.-i-think-maybe-you-could-give-detail-about-what-the-world-is-like-for-her%2C-i-have-a-few-question-about-what-the-people-are-like%3F-or-what-school-is-like-for-her.-but-other-than-that-excellent-job-with-your-character 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-story.-good-drawing.-love-snakes! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-drawing-and-its-featuers%2C-i-wish-he-would-have-described-characteristics%2C-and-also-i-wish-he-would-have-described-the-characters-in-general.-but-i-really-love-the-art. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-is-nice%2C-but-maybe-the-snake's-outer-image-could-be-shown-more%2C-but-the-art-is-nice 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-detailed-the-drawings-of-the-characters-are%2C--but-is-there-a-reason-why-the-first-character-is-so-bad-at-communicating%3F--also%2C-is-there-a-reason-why-the-second-character-looks-and-dresses-the-way-she-does.--i-think-the-personality-of-the-first-one-is-really-interesting-and-could-help-make-a-really-good-story 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-a-second-character!-have-you-thought-about-developing-the-avatar-more-by-adding-things-like-a-struggle-or-goal 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-elevator-drawing.-i-also-think-you-could-have-went-a-little-more-in-depth-of-the-drawing-about-your-character.-lastly%2C-i-like-how-she-is-different-on-the-outside-than-the-inside.-looks-good 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-nice-drawings-i-like-the-concept-where-did-the-virus-come-from-and-i-could-read-your-script-but-you-kept-on-moving-the-paper-a-lot-really-good-tho 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-of-a-second-character!-have-you-thought-about-developing-the-avatar-more-by-adding-things-like-a-struggle-or-goal 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/while-the-idea-sounds-fun%2Cits-a-potato-in-a-suit-who-is-a-spy!-id-pay-to-see-a-90-minute-feature-film-starring-chip!-but-he-looks-punchable%2Ci-want-to-punch-him-in-his-smug-little--face 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-good%2C-very-interesting.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-personality-that-you-made-but-i-feel-that-you-could-have-gone-into-more-detail-about-the-characters-settings.-i-like-the-drawing-of-the-character-because-i-feel-that-it-looks-very-well.-i-feel-like-you-could-give-the-character-a-name-to-add-some-personal-connection-to-your-character-and-make-them-feel-more--alive. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-description-of-inside-and-outside-andrew-and-a-character-seeking-revenge-and-amazing-plot.-but-i-wonder-where-do-the-robots-come-from%3F--how-will-he-stop-them%3F-who-will-get-revenge-on%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-it-is-so-cool-she-seems-to-care-so-much-about-the-animals-and-it-seems-as-if-she-really-wants-to-get-over-her-fears-and-social-awkwardness.-my-questions-is-why-do-you-think-she-had-these-anxieties-is-it-beacuse-she-can-see-these-animals-and-others-cannot-%3F-over-all-the-idea-is-really-there-and-i-love-it. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/how-did-preston-get-separated-from-his-pair-and-why--does-this-sock-talk- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-relatable-your-character-johnny-is%2C-with-all-the-emotions-going-on-inside.-something-you-can-work-on-is-how-the-whole-moving-thing-could-affect-the-story-%26-relationship-between-his-parents-%26-him.-otherwise%2C-really-nice-character-%26-nice-idea.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-very-interesting%2C-looks-like-you-took-your-time-on-this-drawing.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-drawing-it-looked-great--i-liked-how-you-had-everything-so-detailed.-something-i-would-so-to-it-so-it-could-be-more-better-is-add-some-color. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-organized-add-color-add-more-to-the-story-this-is-something-that-i-would-watch-- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-details-and-drawing-about-jeff.-i-also-noticed-that-he-has-a-goal-in-mind-and-my-question-is-that-does-he-have-obstacles-that-he-faces.-other-then-that-i-love-details-and-personality-to-this-drawing.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing-because-its-very-colorful-and-quite-detailed-but-the-%22blobs-of-color%22i-think-you-could-go-more-into-depth-on.-the-concept-is-very-good-and-i-wonder-if-she-actually-sees-things-in-detail. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-style-is-very-nice-and-cute!-i-like-your-character-but-i'd-be-nice-if-you-included-more-detail-and-story-in-your-video%3B-whats-their-goal%3F-whats-their-obstacle%3F-i'm-curious-to-know-what-the-story-is.-very-nice-work! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow-this-is-really-interesting!-i-think-that-their-motivations-for-not-being-able-to-find-a-home-are-a-bit-weak.-i-love-the-plight-they-need-to-face!- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-idea!-how-are-you-going-to-show-the-dogs-thoughts%3F-will-bluey-talk-or-will-there-be-a-narrator%3F- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-art-style-but-some-questions-you-could-ask-yourself-to-expand-your-story-is....-is-there-any-other-conflict-other-than-his-struggles-with-himself%3F-how-will-he-overcome-the-self-esteem-and-other-problems-he-has%3F-will-he-eventually-be-able-to-make-friends-that-help-him-through-the-story-and-also-help-with-his-struggles%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good-art-so-far%2C-which-we-got-a-summary-of-the-characters-and-story-than-the-beginning-of-it-to-make-it-more-clear-though.-other-than-that-great-start. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-mystery-buit-but-i-think-you-could-do-better-but-i-like-how-you-added-multiply-pictures 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-gave-him-a-lot-of-external-features-and-described-him-really-good-i-think-if-you-could-give-him-some-more-internal-features-(ex.-he's-selfish%2Fhe's-selfless) 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-way-you-drew-the-pictures.--maybe-you-could-have-added-colors-and-you-could-have-added-them-saying-things.-i-really-like-the-plot-and-there-expressions. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawing-of-lawry.-i-also-think-that-you-could-have-went-a-little-more-into-description-of-what-he-is-like-and-what-he-does-in-the-pixar-shorts. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character's-concept-is-very-interesting.-however%2C-i-feel-as-though-she-could-be-fleshed-out-or-developed-a-bit-better.-is-there-a-particular-reason-her-peers-laugh-at-her-dreams%3F-maybe-a-reason-she's-passionate%2Fknows-a-lot-about-the-ocean%3F-overall%2C-i-think-she-seems-like-a-protagonist-an-audience-can-easily-relate-and-connect-to.-combined-with-the-narwhal-construction-worker-dream-concept%2C-she-definitely-isn't-a-dull-character. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-idea-is-good%2C-although-i-wasn't-able-to-understand-much-of-the-wants%2Fneeds-part-so-maybe-go-more-into-depth-on-that-part.-besides-that-its-a-great-character. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-character-design-in-this-one.-but-i-think-it-could-be-worded-a-little-differently%2C-like-how-it-says-he-cant-do-anything-on-his-own-and-he-always-needs-support-seems-kinda-backwards-to-me.-besides-that-though-i-like-the-character 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-art-is-amazing.-just-wow-i-love-it.-i-was-i-little-confused-with-who-the-character-was-and-what-the-avatar-was-for.-but-i-like-your-ideas-alot.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-internal-design-is-really-well-done%2C-and-the-only-problems-i-have-are-that-the-feet-look-like-they-are-90-degrees-to-far-to-the-right%2C-and-the-eyes-are-to-big.-other-than-that-its-really-good. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-this-idea-has-alot-of-potential-in-terms-of-saving-a-species.-i-think-that-it-could-have-a-deeper-plot-like-a-great-force-stopping-him-instead-of-a-few-people.-i-love-the-attention-to-age-and-height. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-one-person-being-able-to-see-two-different-aspects-of-life.-i-fell-like-she-is-gonna-have-multiple-problems-due-to-her-cockiness%2C-so-i-think-she-would-feel-more-validated.-i-really-like-the-colors-and-the-opposite-perspective. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-you-made-it-clear-on-your-topic.-some-room-for-improvement-is-i-would-make-his-hair-more-obviously-fluffy.---overall-i-really-love-how-you-made-it- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-hair-should-be-less-crazy 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-eyes!-i-think-this-concept-is-very-interesting 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-video-collage!-drawings-are-amazing.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-one-person-being-able-to-see-two-different-aspects-of-life.-i-fell-like-she-is-gonna-have-multiple-problems-due-to-her-cockiness%2C-so-i-think-she-would-feel-more-validated.-i-really-like-the-colors-and-the-opposite-perspective. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-if-found-intresting-was-your-explaing-of-the-character-some-room-for-improvment-would-be-your-art-drawing-you-should-of-made-something-more-better-but-its-still-good- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-is-that-he-wants-popularity........while-being-in-a-zombie-apocalypse.-it's-a-very-unique-idea-and-there's-a-lot-that-can-be-done-with-that.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-you-meant-by-popularity%3F-does-he-want-to-be-popular-for-stopping-the-apocalypse%2Fkilling-the-most-zombies%2C-or-does-he-just-want-to-be-popular-in-general%3F--it-makes-me-wonder-more-if-he's-scared-of-the-zombie-apocalypse-stopping-him-from-achieving-popularity%2C-or-just-something-else. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-that-the-character-was-very-well-thought-out.-i-think-that-you-should-add-more-to-the-setting-and-explain-that-more.-i-would-want-to-hear-more-about-the-struggles-that-the-character-faces.-i-thought-the-drawing-was-very-descriptive-and-in-depth.-- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-dog's-name%2C-but-maybe-the-art-could-convey-the-theme-a-little-more%2C-but-the-theme-is-nice 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-but-i-think-it-could-use-alittle-more-color-but-overal-i-love-this-one. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/looks-cool%2C-very-interesting.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/while-i-get-that-i-should-feel-sympathetic-towards-danny--but-thanks-to-him-the-economy-is-ruined%2C-the-housing-market-has-crashed%2Ceveryone-has-lost-their-jobs.-danny-is-literally-worse-than-hitler 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-idea-is-amazing-and-all-of-your-information-is-there-you-really-can-tell-that-this-person-really-cares-about-changing-himself-and-that-is-really-cool-this-character-is-amazing-and-has-so-much-potential.--however-i-would-like-to-get-some-more-back-story-on-his-little-girl-and-who-kidnapped-her-and-why-he-has-to-save-her.-other-than-that-i-can-really-see-threw-this-character-and-that-is-so-cool- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-seems-like-a-very-funny-story%2C-i-like-the-idea-and-originality-but-it-kinda-also-seems-a-bit-like-toy-story.-i-wonder-how-this-story-will-be-different-from-toy-story. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-quite-like-the-concept-here!-the-drawing's-really-well-done%2C-very-expressive.--so-do-you-think-the-story-you're-telling-here-could-only-be-told-with-socks%3F-this-story-still-very-much-reminds-me-of-toy-story%2C-so-i-don't-really-see-a-problem%2C-i'm-just-highlighting-that-question-so-maybe-you-could-think-a-bit-deeper-about-it.-i-must-say-though%2C-the-concepts-you-have-here-are-quite-unique. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-do-really-like-the-drawing.-i-also-think-you-could-have-explained-it-for-a-little-longer.-i-also-like-the-theme-that-she-is-an-alien-in-disguise. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-of-the-donkey-liking-cake.--i-think-that-the-drawing-of-the-donkey-could-maybe-have-more-details.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-story-has-a-lot-of-potential--spend-more-time-on-your-drawing--speak-more-clearly--funny-story- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-idea-and-the-message-of-your-story.-your-character-is-adorable-as-well.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it-is-very-interesting-but-i'm-wondering-how-did-humans-start-only-seeing-colorful-blobs-and-black-and-white-detailed-shapes-i-wonder-how-the-world-came-to-being-this-diverse- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-very-unique-is-that-you-robot-has-human-characteristic-and-emotions-which-i-find-very-creative-and-all-lot-of-thought%2C-other-then-that-i-love-the-drawing-and-the-clay-form.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-idea-is-very-creative-and-unique%2C-it-catches-my-attention!-the-one-thing-i-would-recommend-is-to-clarify-who-the-main-character-is%2C-is-it-the-girl-or-the-narwhal%3F-who-are-we-focusing-on%3F-your-drawing-is-very-nice! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-sock-looks-great-i-like-how-you-added-sports-balls-on-them-and-its-creative.-i-think-that-you-should-add-some-color-so-it-could-stand-out-to-people-and-make-a-cool-background.-but-everything-looks-detailed.-- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-looks-like-its-struggling-or-going-through-a-hard-time.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-described-the-characters-setting-of-grief-and-their-struggles-as-well-it-brings-a-problem%2Fconflict-to-the-story-such-as-will-he-ever-overcome-his-struggles-and-grief%3F-could-you-connect-this-character-with-others-in-the-real-world%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-art-in-this-one%2C-but-you-just-kinda-left-the-plot-line-of-the-monster-nursery-home.-i-also-like-the-in-depth-backstory. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-how-you-chose-different-images-to-portray-jalen's-character%2Fstory.-is-your-story-going-to-be-more-lighthearted%2F-comedic%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/excelente.-me-gusto-el-idea-de-que-afuera-miraba-mal%2C-y-por-adentro-es-amable.-%3A-) 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-character-is-really-great%2C-but-i-think-you-could-have-clarified-the-story.-what's-your-what-if-question%3F-other-than-that%2C-i-think-you-did-a-really-good-job! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-concept-the-art-is-beautiful-it-looks-like-you-really-took-your-time-to-do-this-the-audio-was-clear 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-story-of-how-they-need-to-work-to-go-to-school%2C-i-also-like-the-art-design%2C-but-i-think-you-could-have-gone-into-more-depth-with-there-personality.-you-could-help-distinguish-characters-by-adding-in-more-looks-to-distinguish-them.---i-like-the-idea-thought-because-it-is-very-clean-and-concise-and-done-well. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-a-monster-that-doesnt-want-to-be-a-monster-but-i-think-ive-seen-this-idea-before 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-do-really-like-the-coloring-for-the-drawings.-i-also-think-in-parts-of-the-shadow-it-could-be-a-little-more-instructional.-i-also-think-that-you-added-good-detail-to-the-main-character. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-that-it-was-very-neat.--i-think-maybe-you-could-have-added-colors.-i-liked-how-you-guys-put-boom-and-crash-in-the-picture.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-character!-the-conflict-is-an-amazing-idea.-i-really-like-the-title-of-your-video-as-well.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-cool.-i-would-change-you-shuould-use-the-drawing-and-put-them-in-the-spark.-and-nut-just-hold-up-paper. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-a-potato-in-a-suit.-the-inner-feelings-really-add-emotion-to-the-character.-what-part-of-this-story-has-to-do-with-being-a-spy%3F-will-this-lead-to-difference-approaches-to-other-characters%3F-the-idea-is-very-creative. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-of-a-monster-that-doesnt-want-to-be-a-monster-but-i-think-ive-seen-this-idea-before 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-backstory-and-design-of-the-bird. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-that-the-burb-is-a-murdererererer 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-character! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-loved-the-concept-of-the-character-it-is-so-straight-forward-and-it-is-so-cool-how-you-made-him-so-recognizable-.-his-fear-is-the-dragon-is-it-the-dragon-that-really-scares-him-or-is-it-the-fact-it-might-destroy-all-that-he-loves-maybe-you-could-give-a-little-more-depth.-overall-the-concept-is-amazing-and-i-cannot-wait-ot-see-where-it-goes. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-character! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-character-designed-both-internally-and-externally-is-well-done%2C-i-have-no-feedback. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-is-that-she-has-two-opposite-personality-traits.-she's-fearless-and-a-leader%2C-yet-is-lonely-and-has-no-friends-and-her-goal-is-to-be-accepted-by-others.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-why-you-chose-to-giver-her-these-traits.-to-me%2C-they're-counter-intuitive-to-each-other.-i-wonder-how-you'll-be-able-to-make-a-story-out-of-it.-- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-did-the-befining-and-how-you-made-it-clear-how-you-said-how-the-carachter-was-feeling.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-that-the-drawing-is-nice.-detailing-internal-features-are-a-great-idea.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-idea-but-i-think-that-it-could-be-better-by-adding-better-concept-but-i-like-the-creative-idea. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-drawing-style-a-lot.-the-story-is-great!-maybe-add-more-detail-to-the-story%3F- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-character! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-have-really-nice-drawings-speak-more-clear--you-have-a-really-good-story-- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-art%2C-but-the-character-could-use--some-more-internal-conflicts%2C-but-the-idea-is-nice. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/he-seems-like-a-good-character!-is-shy-his-only-trait%3F-i'd-love-to-learn-more-about-him 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-color-of-the-hair.-very-nice-drawing.-looks-so-cool.--so-interesting-about-the-hair-color.-took-your-time-on-this.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-good! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-amazing-such-awesome-colors-and-pictures-and-a-great-character.-i-wonder-if-shes-the-only-one-with-something-like-that-good-job 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-cool%2C-itx-very-disorganised. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-amazing-such-awesome-colors-and-pictures-and-a-great-character.-i-wonder-if-shes-the-only-one-with-something-like-that-good-job 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-you-should-build-the-world-around-them-and-not-just-focus-on-the-character.-the-character-design-is-good. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-your-idea-and-thoughts-about-amara%2C-in-my-opinion-i-love-your-plot-to-your-story-and-theme.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-added-that-his-true-power-is-friends%2C-so-im-interested-to-see-how-that-will-change-the-story-in-anyway.-you-should-create-a-backstory-on-the-virus-overlord-to-show-the-reader%2Fwatcher-the-conflict-in-the-story. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-that-the-visuals-were-very-informative.-i-thought-that-you-could've-added-more-information-about-the-story.-i-thought-that-you-could've-set-the-scene-better.-i-think-that-the-characters-you-had-could-be-great! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-concept-and-drawing-alot.-maybe-speak-a-little-louder.-other-than-that-i-love-the-detail-and-the-zoom-to-show-what-i'm-looking-at.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-thought-that-the-visuals-were-very-informative.-i-thought-that-you-could've-added-more-information-about-the-story.-i-thought-that-you-could've-set-the-scene-better.-i-think-that-the-characters-you-had-could-be-great! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-art-in-both-of-these-pictures%2C-i-do-think-that-if-the-second-one-is-supposed-to-be-scary-you-should-change-the-design-a-little-cause-it-just-looks-like-a-normal-person-who-wears-black.-i-also-really-like-the-storys-for-them.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-art-is-amazing-and-in-good-detail--although-i-wonder-how-she-became-a-jester- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-art-and-the-detail.-i-think-coloring-your-work-would-add-a-nice-touch.-i-love-how-you-included-the-time-and-many-different-pictures-of-him. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-second-what-if%3F-and-i-specifically-like-the-drawings-of-the-people.-i-think-that-maybe-you-could-be-a-little-more-specific-for-the-first-what-if%3F-i-really-like-the-description-of-debby-and-how-she-has-different-color-eyes.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-creative-concept.-great-drawing-and-will-probably-lead-to-a-good-story 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-dont-understand-it-verry-much.-maybe-somthing-thats-more-dramatic 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-your-concept-i-find-it-really-intresting-and-how-you-put-a-charcater-that-views-the-world-diffrent-than-others-something-i-would-give-feedback-on-is-your-audio-because-i-can-hear-you-but-i-struggle-to-hear. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-draw- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-think-the-description-of-the-characters-is-very-clear-and-super-interesting.-is-there-gonna-be-any-conflict-because-i-think-that-would-add-a-lot.- 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-character-is-already-interesting%2C-i-only-wonder-what-the-setting-will-be-like-which-could-greatly-affect-the-story.-does-everyone-else-have-unique-attributes-like-this-or-is-it-just-her%2C-and-if-so-does-she-decide-to-hide-it-or-tell-people-about-it. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing.-also-how-you-took-your-time.-the-bird-looks-so-good!-wow!-very-interesting-how-the-character-is-a-ghost-pirate.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-character%2C-well-thought-out.-only-issue-is-you-started-repeating-yourself-at-the-end.-also-what-is-the-what-if%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-drawing.-also-how-you-took-your-time.-the-bird-looks-so-good!-wow!-very-interesting-how-the-character-is-a-ghost-pirate.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-very-interesting-and-a-good-idea- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-is-that-his-goal-is-to-become-warm.-it-shows-him-eating-ice-cream%2C-probably-meaning-that-he's-always-cold%2C-which-is-why-he-wants-a-heater%2C-i'm-assuming.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-his-personality.-why-is-he-this-way%3F-does-he-just-eat-cold-food-all-the-time-and-now-he-wants%2Fneeds-a-heater%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-he'll-seem-to-be-following-the-common-trope-of-thinking-he-can-do-everything-himself-and-will-end-up-learning-that-he-can't-and-has-to-accept-help.-i-like-that-a-lot.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-his-friend-got-in-trouble-with-the-government.-he-would've-had-to-had-done-something-really-bad%2C-right%3F-if-so%2C-then-why-is-this-character-trying-to-save-his-friend%2C-is-what-i'm-wondering.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/it's-a-very-interesting-and-unique-concept.-i-wonder-how-you'll-be-able-to-expand-upon-it-and-flesh-it-out-into-a-full-story.-i-also-wonder-what-you-meant-by-%22blobs-of-color.%22-i-didn't-really-understand-that-part.-in-the-eye-that-she-sees-color%2C-are-the-shapes-definite%2C-or-indefinite%3F- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wonderful-work%2C-wow....i-feel-like-your-character-is-already-alive-%3A)-i-find-this-craving-for-validation-interesting...i-wonder-how-she-can-turn-her-unique-observation-powers-into-an-advantage.-also-how-will-her-observation-powers-will-connect-to-the-obstacle-in-the-story%3F-that-is%2C-why-will-her-abilities-help-her-learn-what-she-needs-to-learn-in-the-end-of-her-story%3F-i-also-wonder-what-the-climax-of-the-story-will-be.... 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/we-love-the-way-your-character's-image-is-so-removed-from-the-content-of-the-experience-they-are-having-in-the-summary.-this-type-of-imagery-will-add-a-lot-of-extra-inquiry-from-your-viewers.-cool-take! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-is-so-adorable!-i-can't-wait-to-see-how-the-artwork-expands-after-you-apply-the-visual-language-ideas-from-week-3! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-wonderful-way-to-convey-human-life-experiences%2Fobstacles-through-the-eyes-of-a-character-that-all-viewers-will-relate-to.-with-empathy.--your-story-has-so-much-potential-to-have-a-useful-outcome-through-the-learning-experience-your-character--will-have-as-your-story-progresses.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-your-character-design-and-the-visual-language-you-employed-to-create-expression.-your-figure-and-drawing-is-successful-in-it's-ability-to-provide-exactly-how-your-character-is-feeling.-excellent! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-nice.-i-like-the-story-idea.-what-will-her-own-style-of-dancing-be-like%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/maybe-make-the-eyes-a-little-smaller-but-other-then-that..its-beautiful 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-how-she-is-like-a-normal-teen-but-different-on-the-inside 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-this-is-a-cool-idea!-teaching-people-kindness-is-a-good-idea%2C-great-job! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-think-its-absolutely-perfect. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-cool-character-idea-and-drawing!-i-haven't-heard-of-a-moral-of-kindness-being-delivered-like-that-before%2C-i'm-really-curious-how-the-story-will-turn-out! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-the-character-ideas-and-think-it-has-a-lot-of-potential. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-he-was-6'1-like-dang-why-that-tall-%22it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-if-he-just-listens-to-the-people-and-never-fulfilled-his-dream 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/holy...these-are-all-awesome-ideas-i-could-never-pick.-i-think-the-humans-in-aquarium-hits-me-most-right-off-the-bat...but-maybe-more-potential-with-surgically-removing-someone-from-their-head...it-makes-me-think-what-the-consequences-are...what-might-go-wrong%3F-amazing-work! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-the-character's-imaginary-friend-is-them-from-their-past-life.--it-makes-me-wonder-if-the-character-will-ever-realize-who-their-imaginary-friend-really-is. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-he-is-isolating-himself.--it-makes-me-wonder-if-he-will-overcome-his-grief. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-he-treats-everyone-like-bananas-so-that-it-helps-with-his-anxiety.--it-makes-me-wonder-if-he-could-face-his-anxiety-with-treating-everyone-like-bananas. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-she-is-half-human-half-dog.--it-makes-me-wonder-if-there-are-more-people-like-her. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-well-done...where-did-the-virus-overlord-come-from%3F-fantastic-art-so-far-as-well.-i-like-this-idea-of-not-being-afraid-of-anyone....i-wonder-how-he-will-learn-this%3F-look-forward-to-more! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/well-done%2C-sad-it-got-cut-off%2C-next-time-check-your-video-before-upload-or-add-an-ending-screen-to-avoid-that.-i'm-curious-what-he-needs-to-learn%3F-either-way-you-have-an-original-concept-here-and-i-can't-wait-for-more...i-wonder-why-he's-lonley%3F-his-ego%3F-can't-wait-for-more 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/darn-it-got-cut-off-in-the-end-%3A(-please-check-your-video-next-time-before-you-upload.-this-character-is-adorable%2C-and-i-already-am-rooting-for-rubin-to-become-ceo!-or-maybe-he-finds-a-way-to-buy-the-whole-company%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-concept%2C-i-think-people-are-going-to-really-fall-for-this-character.-his-struggle-is-really-sad-and-so-we-will-all-be-wanting-him-to-win-in-the-end.-i'm-sad-your-video-got-cut-off-in-the-end-%3A(-next-weeks-try-to-test-it-first.-you-are-onto-something-here 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nicely-done%2C-clear-vocals....i-want-to-know-how-they-learn-to-be-responsible%2C-i-wonder-what-will-happen-to-him%3F-i-look-forward-to-this-as-it-develops.-why-will-the-audience-root-for-him%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-well-done-(good-drawings-and-clear-vocals)...what-i-found-interesting-is-this-idea-of-the-'limits-of-the-world'%2C-i-wonder-how-help-will-allow-them-to-get-around-this%3F-can't-wait-for-more! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-good-concept%2C-next-time-you-can-just-click-download-to-export-your-actual-video.-look-forward-to-more 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting!-who-wouldn't-want-to-stay-young-forever%3F-i-love-this-idea...i-wonder-what-will-make-him-realize-he-must-grow-up%2C-maybe-some-kind-of-party-(dance%3F-13%2B-movie%3F-driving-a-car%3F)-that-he-wants-to-see%3F---ps.-i-hope-in-future-weeks-you'll-find-a-video-edit-tool-so-you-can-upload-actual-videos-instead-of-filming-screen-so-you-story-will-look-as-good-as-it-can-be. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/hilarious%2C-this-will-become-my-favorite-story-i-know-it.-i-wonder-how-you'll-get-me-to-care-about-his-wants%3F-maybe-a-dramatic-opening-to-the-story%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-happened-to--the-character%C2%B4s-farm%3F--how-is-the-character-that-strong%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-is-the-character%C2%B4s-obstacle-and-goal%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ooo-i-wasn%E2%80%99t-expecting-the-doppelg%C3%A4nger-part!!-that%E2%80%99s-a-super-great-idea!- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/yesss-the-superpower-snakes-!!!!-i-love-this-so-much 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this!!-the-different-ways-to-draw-amara-are-great-(my-favorite-is-the-tiny-mushroom)! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/awww-puffs-adorable!-i-wasn%E2%80%99t-exactly-sure-what-the-conflict-that-puff-faces-is-(not-being-able-to-fly%3F)-but-i-am-very-invested-in-puffs-story-anyway!! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-idea-a-ton!-is-singing-and-dancing-just-normal%2Fexpected-in-the-way-it-is-now-or-is-this-like-a-world-where-people-would-literally-break-out-into-song-or-dance-while-shopping%3F-and-would-that-make-sophie-uncomfortable-or-sad%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-description-of-your-character!!!-i-think-you-did-good-explaining-their-personality- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-design-of-the-character.-the-obstacle%2Cneeds-and-the-story-sounds-very-interesting.-amazing-work-%3A) 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-idea-and-drawing.-i-love-how-they-take-two-forms.-i-can't-wait-to-see-what-the-magical-forest-looks-like.-i-wonder-why-they-are-stuck-in-the-magical-forest-and-what-kind-of-magic-is-there...who-does-the-mushroom-want-to-meet%3F-i-also-wonder-how-they-will-realize-what-they-need-to-learn-in-your-story. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool%2C-i-think-this-character-concept-is-very-realistic-and-relatable.-i-would-like-to-get-more-visuals-for-external-side-of-things.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-he-has-strengths%2C-weaknesses%2C-and-a-goal-in-mind.-i'm-really-excited-to-see-this-story-unfold.-great-effort-and-artwork-as-well! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-idea-of-two-clowns%2Fjesters-that-are-opposites.-it's-almost-like-a-juxtaposition%2C-and-i-think-there-are-many-great-ideas-that-can-stem-from-it!-great-artwork-as-well! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-the-ability-to-summon-creatures-from-constellations.-this-is-a-very-clever-and-unique-idea%2C-and-i-think-there-is-a-lot-of-potential.-it-seems-that-you-have-your-story-planned-out-with-strengths%2C-goals%2C-and-weaknesses%2C-and-i'm-excited-to-see-how-it-turns-out!-great-artwork-as-well! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/very-cool%2C--hyped-to-see-more-of-the-character.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-he-struggles-with-overcoming-paranoia.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-causes-this-paranoia-and-how-he-overcomes-it.-since-he-is-an-athlete%2C-does-the-paranoia-stem-from-athletics-and-sports%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-he-struggles-with-overcoming-grief.-this-is-different-from-a-lot-of-the-%22always-happy%22-pixar-movies-and-story-lines%2C-and-think-it-could-be-very-interesting-and-unique.-amazing-artwork-and-descriptions! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-the-importance-and-attention-to-is-age.-it-make-me-wonder-more-about-how-this-will-play-a-role-in-the-story. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-originality-of-this-idea...never-thought-a-sock-could-be-arrogant.-it-makes-me-wonder-who-he's-going-to-befriend-in-his-search-for-his-pair%3F-underwear%2C-tshirts%3F-i-could-imagine-this-being-a-great-comedy....the-first-comedy-ever-about-clothes%3F%3F%3F-can't-wait-to-see-how-you-pull-this-off 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-how-she-wants-love-from-her-family.--does-she-not-already-have-that%3F--also%2C-it-makes-me-wonder-why-is-music-not-allowed%3F 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/awesome-concept%2C-and-i-love-the-design-with-the-words-on-the-outside-and-inside%2C-love-it. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/aww%2C-i-love-it%2C--and-it-sounds-awesome-that-she-can-turn-into-a-dog%2C-may-have-misheard-that%2C--anyway-awesome-concept-of-story-and-character. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-sounds-awesome-and%2C-somewhat-scary%2C-also-it-sounds-like-an-unpopular-kid-wanting-to-be-popular. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-design%2C-and-this-seems-like-it-could-go-so-many-different-ways. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/where-is-the-house-located-and-who's-your-character-it-seems-like-a-good-story-(introduction-to-one)--but-i'm-not-sure-who-the-character-is. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/they-look-really-good-and-they-seem-awesome%2C-where-is-he-tube-plugged-up-to%2C-like-the-soil-since-he%2Fshe-is-part-plant.--again-awesome. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-bee-wants-to-open-a-cat-caf%C3%A9.--it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-bee-is-going-to-make-her-cat-caf%C3%A9. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-the-character-design%2C-it's-very-cute.-and-i-really-like-the-plot.-and-it-makes-me-wonder-how-the-character-will-overcome-their-obstacle-which-is-the-prankster.-like-will-they-get-out-of-their-comfort-zone-or-will-they-make-a-compromise-or-will-they-run-away-to-a-quiet-place%3F- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/ecin-drawing 2021-10-20 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/sorry-i-really-don't-have-imagination-so-i-used-techno-and-the-others-as-an-inspiration-but-we-will-change-some-stuff-up.--yes-it-is-techno!! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-hope-johnny-wins-the-apocalypse-and-becomes-popular.- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-the-character-your-style-is-soooo-pretty.-i-just-wanted-to-suggest-that-maybe-you-should-add-some-more-traits-to-your-character-to-make-them-more-fun!- 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-hope-in-the-end-johny-wins-the-apocalypse-and-becomes-popular.-even-though-johny-isn't-confident-hopefully-he-goes-through-character-development-and-becomes-confident. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-fact-that-it's-the-character-speaking%2C-and-the-different-character-poses.-i-think-the-story-could-be-really-interesting%2C-and-i'm-really-curious-about-your-world-building. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/oh-my-gosh%E2%80%94very-good-silhouette-and-body-language%E2%80%94the-external-features-of-ali-suit-their-personality-super-well%E2%80%94and%2C-they-have-good-contrast-and-dynamics-with-the-other-clown-character-you-made.-so%2C-does-the-other-clown-character-drag-them-along-on-their-pranks-and-escapades%3F-what's-ali's-ideal-%22calm%22-environment%3F-do-they-have-any-belongings-that-they-value%3F-will-the-pickpocket-clown-take-it%3F-do-they-want-to-stop-the-other-clown-from-pickpocketing-others%3F-can-humans-see-them%3F-anyways%2C-very-solid. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-awesome-story-idea!!-i-like-how-on-side-outside-he-looks-shy-but-on-the-inside-he-his-different! 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/okay%2C-so-first-of-all%2C-i-want-to-say-that-the-art-is-amazing.--second%2C-i-love-the-plant-puns.-third%2C-i-love-the-concept-of-a-plant-person-that-isn't-actually-a-plant%2C-but-just-has-plant-like-features-and-does-plant-like-things.-arlo-is-definitely-a-main-character-i'd-immediately-latch-onto. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-such-a-unique-and-cool-character.-i-love-that-he-is-a-monkey-because-it-adds-a-lot-to-his-character. 2021-10-19 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-this-video%2C-so-much-fun.-sounds-like-a-great-way-to-start-a-story....i'm-curious-more-about-your-characters-wants%2Fneeds-but-i-guess-we'll-find-out-soon.-it-makes-me-wonder-what-these-animals-are-going-to-get-up-to%3F%3F-can't-wait-for-more.-nice-choice-of-music! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-most-interesting-part-is-how-he-wants-to-save-the-bees-and-i-like-how-he-likes-bees-so-much 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic-work%2C-i-love-this-idea-of-friends-being-a-true-power.-i-can't-wait-to-see-how-this-story-develops.-really-cool-artwork.-it-makes-me-wonder-what-the-key-conflict-in-the-story-will-be...and-who-is-the-virus-overlord%3F%3F-in-the-next-next-week-try-and-find-a-video-editing-tool-so-you-can-submit-just-your-picture-with-audio-as-we-will-be-doing-storyreels-starting-week-4 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job!-i-love-this-idea%2C-and-i-think-it-symbolizes-limitations-people-face-in-real-life. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/super-good-submission.-zombies-and-self-doubt...what-could-possibly-go-wrong%3F%3F-%3A)---what-i-found-most-interesting-is-this-idea-that-%22confidence-takes-time%22%2C-that's-pretty-deep.-i-think-your-story-has-a-chance-to-be-both-funny-%2C-quirky-and-also-deliver-a-strong-message-in-the-end.-can't-wait 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-character-idea-and-drawing!-i-haven't-heard-of-a-moral-of-kindness-being-delivered-like-that-before%2C-i'm-really-curious-how-the-story-will-turn-out! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/cool-character-and-great-drawing!-it-was-really-cool-how-you-didn't-stick-exactly-the-outline-but-told-us-about-the-qualities-of-the-characters-through-a-story!-it-makes-me-wonder-what-the-birds-thought-process-was-after-falling-off-the-cliff-that-made-it-want-to-help-people%2C-and-what-the-bird's-story-will-be! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-job!-it's-interesting-to-think-about-a-stork-not-being-good-at-its-job.-i-wonder-how-he-discovers-the-good-qualities-about-himself. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/amazing-vocal-delivery-and-drawing!-i-can-really-see-the-character's-personality-and-the-way-she-like-draws-into-herself!-the-dancing-style-idea-also-sounds-really-cool-i'll-love-to-see-more-of-that-in-the-coming-weeks!-also-what-a-cool-story-you-seem-to-be-building-up-to! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-character-and-world-to-go-along-with-it!-i'd-love-to-hear-more-about-her-and-her-journey-as-this-workshop-progresses.-the-drawing-you-made-was-great%2C-and-from-what-you-said-she-seems-to-have-a-lot-of-room-to-grow-and-a-lot-of-interesting-stories-to-follow-her.-i-think-your-vocal-delivery-could-be-worked-on-some-though%2C-you-seemed-somewhat-hesitant%2C-all-in-all-great-submission-though! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/seems-like-a-good-character!-lots-of-thought-into-traits-and-a-nice-moral-to-go-along-with-it!-your-video-is-rotated-and-seems-kind-of-blurry%2C-making-it-hard-to-see-your-drawing%2C-but-that's-just-technical-issues%2C-nice-job!-it-could-use-more-drawings-demonstrating-the-characters-traits%2C-but-that's-no-necessary.- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-this-character-and-how-his-traits-are-able-to-impact-his-life-and-others-around-him.--is-he-going-to-go-through-character-development-that-will-be-able-to-impact-the-story-and-resolution%3F--i-really-love-the-drawing-you-did-for-this-character-because-it-helps-to-relate-his-physical-attributes-to-his-personality.-- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-really-liked-about-your-character-is-her-traits-will-impact-her-journey-to-go-to-the-moon-and-how-she-will-be-able-to-change-as-the-story-progresses.--do-you-know-what-kind-of-character-development-that-you-want-her-to-go-through-that-is-relatable-to-the-audience%3F--also%2C-i-really-liked-the-drawings-you-did-for-her. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-the-character%CA%BBs-clothes-and-physical-attributes-match-their-personality-and-who-they-are-on-the-inside.--i-am-wondering-how-these-somewhat-more-negative-traits-will-affect-their-journey-in-the-story-and-how-it-will-impact-their-growth-as-a-person.-- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-the-deep-parts-of-the-character-you-created-and-how-he-can-be-a-relatable-character-for-different-people.--i-was-wondering-if-his-shyness-or-his-wish-to-learn-will-impact-his-journey-in-the-story-in-positive-or-negative-ways.-- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-information-you-have-already-created-about-the-character.--but-i-was-wondering-if-there%CA%BBs-is-some-deeper-information-about-your-character-that-you-could-include-that-could-make-it-more-personal-when-people-try-to-relate-to-the-character.--also%2C-would-your-character-have-a-name%2C-or-would-they-remain-nameless-for-the-purpose-of-the-reel%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-profile-you-were-able-to-come-up-with-and-being-able-to-create-a-very-deep-and-round-character.--i-like-how-their-physical-appearance-doesn%CA%BBt-match-their-personality-inside-because-this-can-be-relatable-for-many-people.--i-really-love-the-drawing-you-created-for-this-character%2C-it%CA%BBs-very-well-done. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-an-interesting-struggle-of-a-character-wanting-something-and-having-the-challenge-of-how-they-can-have-influence-and-perseverance-to-reach-their-goal%2Fwant.-i-like-the-conflict-you've-created-between-want-and-freedom-to-pursue-the-want.-i'm-curious-about-what-kiko-needs-to-learn.-it-sounds-like-they-already-know-this-lesson%2C-but-need-to-find-a-way-to-convince-others-of-the-importance-for-them-to-be-able-to-pursue-that-lesson.-or-am-i-misunderstanding-their-lesson%3F-curious-what-obstacles-kiko-will-encounter-and-what-they-and-their-parents-will-learn-from-this-conflict. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/-i-like-her-design%2C-it-definitely-conveys-a-shy-and-timid-girl%2C-but-i-am-curious-as-to-why-people-think-she-is-crazy.-is-she-spacey%3F-does-she-believe-in-a-lot-of-things-commonly-accepted-to-be-fake%3F-or-is-it-just-because-she-believes-animals-are-real%3F-i-would-be-careful-to-flesh-her-hobbies-and-interests-out-more%2C-as-well-as-other-aspects-of-her-personality-besides-shyness-and-introversion%2C-to-make-sure-that-she-doesn't-become-a-stereotype%2C-but-other-than-that-i-think-she-definitely-has-the-potential-to-be-a-great-character%2C-especially-considering-what-(from-what-i-gathered-from-this-video)-your-plot-is-going-to-be-based-around! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-it.-the-concept-is-unique-and-i-wonder-how-she-came-to-learn-animals-were-real-in-the-first-place.-i-wonder-how-she-will-%22prove%22-this-to-others%3F- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-they-know-animals-exist-when-nobody-else-does.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-that-is.-were-they-told-in-a-dream%3F-can-she-see-them%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/1.-what-i-found-most-interesting-was-your-character's-journey-and-arc-throughout-the-story.-it's-very-well-thought-out-and-it-connects-to-sybil's-own-backstory-and-personality.-2.-this-makes-me-wonder-if-working-at-the-senior-center%2C-where-the-residents-become-magical-creatures-at-night%2C-helps-her-on-her-journey%2C-as-since-the-residents-are-older-they-probably-have-a-different-view-on-death-as-they've-already-experienced-loss-in-their-lives.- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/1.-i-love-your-character's-design%2C-as-the-drawing-reflects-her-personality-and-portrays-that-sweet%2C-caring%2C-vibe.--2.-i'm-curious-to-find-out-what-she-is.-is-she-a-human-with-powers%2C-or-is-she-a-magical-being%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/1.-i-love-how-detailed-you-are-about-your-character.-rachel-seems-like-a-real-person-that-i-would-know%2C-and-interact-with.--2.-i-am-very-curious-to-find-out-what-issue-rachel's-people-are-facing%2C-and-how-her-family's-past-connects-to-it. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/1.-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-your-character-is-his-job-position.-i-bet-as-a-mailman%2C-and-specifically-being-an-alien%2C-he-has-a-variety-of-stories-to-tell-from-his-experience-on-earth-(some-good-and-some-bad-probably).-2.-this-makes-me-wonder-why-he-came-to-earth%3F-does-he-have-a-fascination-with-humans%2C-and-wants-to-learn-more-about-them%2C-or-has-he-come-to-warn-them-of-some-threat%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/1.-i-love-the-design-of-your-character.-his-personality-reminds-me-of-baymax-from-big-hero-6.-as-for-a-name-suggestion%2C-the-name-wifi-seems-to-fit-him.-2.-i-wonder-how-he-works.-does-he-work-like-the-internet-going-to-people's-houses%2C-or-does-he-control-the-internet-from-a-headquarters-of-some-kind%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wesley-is-adorable%2C-love-this-original-idea....so-sad-that-your-video-got-cut-off-short-next-time-please-check-your-video-before-uploading-so-we-can-see-it-all.-i-look-forward-seeing-how-this-will-develop.... 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-interesting!-it-will-be-cool-to-see-how-cody's-dyslexia-affects-his-day-to-day-activities%2C-and-how-he-manages-to-overcome-this.-good-job! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/1.-what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-they're-cheery-nature%2C-and-how-outgoing-they-are.-they-seem-like-a-person-that-i-would-want-to-be-friends-with.--2.-this-makes-me-wonder-how-the-wren-(or-ren)-character-interacts-with-them-because-from-what-you're-character-describes%2C-it-seems-like-they-have-very-different-personalities-from-each-others.- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/interesting-idea!-i-am-wondering-what-the-old-world-is%2C-and-how-he-arrived-in-the-new-world.-good-job! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-cool-drawings!-it-will-be-interesting-to-see-how-they-learn-their-limits-and-gain-confidence.-good-job! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-a-really-cool-idea!-i-love-the-idea-of-the-trees.-the-story-has-some-really-cool-fantasy-elements-to-it.-good-job! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-chose-a-universal-theme-that-many-people-can-identify-with.-i-am-curious-to-learn-what-obstacles-you-will-have-basil-encounter-and-what-she-will-learn-from-each%3F-and-whether-you-will-show-her-have-vulnerability-and-self-compassion-as-she-grows-from-this-lesson%3F- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-drawing!-it-will-be-interesting-to-see-what-situation-forces-her-to-learn-these-lessons-and-overcome-her-obstacles.-good-job! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/good-idea%2C-that-is-a-valuable-lesson-to-learn.-it-will-be-interesting-to-see-how-the-character-learns-this-lesson%2C-and-to-see-if-they-make-it-into-the-olympics.-good-job! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-character-is-so-cool!-i-like-the-incorporation-of-evil-ai.-good-job! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/wow%2C-you-have-a-very-clear-and-wonderful-script-for-your-story.--i-love-that-you-have-fleshed-out-iris's-different-ages-and-what-she-is-like-for-each-of-them.-it-makes-me-wonder-who-the-%22you%22-character-is%3F-i'm-fascinated-by-your-title%3A-loverstwoenemies%2C-and-if-that-means-that-these-two-characters-are-enemies-turned-lovers-or-vice-versa-or-what-the-relationship-is-between-iris-and-'you'-and-what-iris's-obstacle-and-turning-point-will-be-and-what-she-will-learn.-excellent-work-on-your-teaser! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-description-of-andrew's-external-%26-internal-characteristics-and-a-very-clear-want-and-obstacle.-your-video-cutoff-so-i'm-not-sure-what-stops-andrew%2C-but-it-makes-me-wonder%3A-1)-what-is-the-robot's-purpose%2C-2)-who-controls-the-robot%2C-and-3)-does-this-obstacle-cause-andrew-to-re-evaluate-his-want-and-change%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-above-and-beyond....my-fav-line-was-%22bro-this-is-healthy%22%2C-i-look-forward-to-hearing-the-summary-of-your-story-in-future-weeks-as-there-are-so-many-characters-to-learn.-your-comedic-timing-is-clearly-jumping-out-of-the-video%2C-i-can't-wait-for-the-final-submission.-will-you-have-voices-in-it%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was.-that-she-is-in-outor-space-%22it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-if-she-lands-people-think-shes-a-alien- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-is-they-have-blue-hair-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-will-happen-to-them-in-the-story-and-what-obstacles-they-will-face-%E2%80%8B 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-job!-how-does-he-want-to-help-though%3F-what-does-he-describe-as-a-%22life-of-luxury%22%3F-how-does-he-think-he-will-get-rewarded-for-his-help%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-like-how-you-included-each-of-your-own-drawing-interpretations-of-what-daniel-would-look-like.-daniel's-wants%2C-needs-and-obstacles-are-very-universally-appealing%2C-and-it-makes-me-wonder-what-low-point-daniel-will-reach-and-how-it-will-transform-his-outlook-on-life. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-as--he-lives-in-an-apocalypse--%22it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-if-he-meets-more-people-to-fignt-with-him 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/fantastic%2C-the-choice-between-work-and-family...a-classic-tale.-great-drawings!-i-wonder-what-will-happen-in-the-story-that-helps-him-learn-that-family-is-more-important-than-work-and-he-should-not-neglect-his-kids%3F-what-i-found-most-interesting-is-that-he's-middle-aged%2C-you-are-the-first-submission-like-that.-also-next-time-check-your-submissions-before-you-upload-as-the-end-got-cut-off%2C-and-the-music-is-louder-than-your-voice-so-it-was-slightly-hard-to-hear. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-is-the-name-agu-which-i-think-is-really-unique.-it-makes-me-wonder-why-that-name-was-chosen-and-what-is-the-meaning-behind-it. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-liked-the-artwork-and-animation!-i-think-next-time-you-could-leave-a-little-information-out%2C-but-overall-really-good-job!---------------------------- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-their-eyes-change-color-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-if-they-will-go-on-any-adventures-in-the-story-%E2%80%8B 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-story.-because-it-sounds-like-many-people-can-relate-to-this.-i-hope-to-see-what-he-achieves.- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-well-its-drawn-and-how-cute-it-is!- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-how-put-together-he-seems%2C-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-conflict-or-lesson-he-will-face-in-your-story%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-how-he-can-be-happy-in-his-situation.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-he-became-homeless.-was-he-born-into-homelessness%3F-did-something-bad-happen-to-him%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-it.-though-you-said-external-twice-and-all-of-the-characteristics-you-described-seemed-more-internal.-good-job! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/really-good-character-i-enjoyed-this. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-how-she-is-a-fish-construction-worker!-its-so-cool- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-she-is-a-ghost-pirate-%22it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-if-she-had-found-more-of-her-crew-on-the-way-to-become-a-pirate 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-concept-and-how-people-can-relate-to-the-characters-feelings. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/10%2F10.-keep-up-the-good-work-brodiee.- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-character-design!-the-human-connection-idea-is-awesome%2C-i-can't-wait-to-watch-this-when-it's-finished!-%3C3 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-she-is-a-ghost-pirate-%22it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-if-she-had-found-more-of-her-crew-on-the-way-to-become-a-pirate 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-your-character-idea-of-a-shark-who-cannot-have-what-s%2Fhe-wants.-that-sets-up-quite-the-challenge-and-i'm-curious-to-know-what-will-wesly-do-and-how-will-s%2Fhe-grow-from-this-obstacle-and%2For-low-point-that-s%2Fhe-reaches-in-the-story.-i-also-want-to-know-if-this-is-a-drama%2C-comedy-or-what-genre%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-cool-but-talk-louder-next-submissions-please 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-nice-your-going--pro- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-how-much-information-you-gave%2C-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-you-will-keep-us-engaged-during-the-story-and-making-it-interesting%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-idea.-it-sounds-really-entertaining- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-the-uniqueness 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-is-the-green%2Fyellow-eyes-that-i-think-would-make-him-stand-out-in-a-group-of-people.-it-makes-me-wonder-if-the-reason-he-feels-like-he-doesn%E2%80%99t-fit-in-is-because-of-the-color-of-his-eyes. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-he-was--6'1-like-dang-why-that-tall-%22it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-if-he-just-listens-to-the-people-and-never-fulfilled-his-dream 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-their-external-design.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-where-they-live%2C-what-they-do%2C-and-how-old-they-are. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/you-did-an-amazing-job-describing-the-external-and-internal-features!-awesome-art-as-well. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-he-was--6'1-like-dang-why-that-tall-%22it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-if-he-just-listens-to-the-people-and-never-fulfilled-his-dream 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoy-how-the-character-looks-because-it-is-visibly-obvious-that-you-can-see-exactly-how-they-feel-in-the-moment.-very-expressive%2C-which-i-think-is-awesome!-i-do-think-that-maybe-a-couple-more-unique-features-could-really-help-distinguish-this-character-a-lot-from-others%2C-but-besides-that-i-think-they-look-cool! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/nice-work%2C-definitely-a-unique-character...so-sad-that-it-got-cut-off!-please-check-your-upload-next-time-for-submitting-it.-i-wonder-what-he-needs-to-learn%3F%3F-i'm-so-curious.-but-this-idea-of-avenging-this-brothers-death-from-killer-robots%2C-where-did-the-robots-come-from%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-is-his-love-for-cake%2C-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-that-will-be-relavent-in-your-story-plot%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-way-you-presented-this-character-is-great-!-i-could-already-start-to-see-how-evan-lives-in-his-community.- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-design%2C-they-look-so-cute-and-you're-drawing-skills-are-amazing!- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-your-art-work-and-your-character-looks-funny 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-way-you-presented-this-character-is-great-!-i-could-already-start-to-see-how-evan-lives-in-his-community.- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-love-the-design%2C-they-look-so-cute-and-you're-drawing-skills-are-amazing!- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-how-you-give-it-a-story...sounds-like-a-disney-movie-your-going-pro- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/its-is-very-good-nice 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-this-because-its-showing-courage-and-confidence.-i-love-the-story-so--far.-and-i-would-like-to-see-what-would-happen-%3A) 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-drawing-and-how-interesting-the-story-sounds-and-i-wonder-if-he-will-save-his-daughter. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-like-the-characteristics 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-how-cute-your-character-is-but-i-do-wonder-if-their-issues-effect-them-being-a-clown-or-if-they-ever-wanted-to-be-a-clown 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/great-character!-there-is-so-much-potential-in-it!-why-does-he-want-to-convince-his-father-that-mushrooms-aren't-a-threat%3F-does-he-love-to-study-mushrooms%3F-loves-to-eat-them%3F-do-they-talk-to-him%3F-will-his-father-exterminate-them-soon%3F-why-does-his-dad-think-that-mushrooms-are-a-threat%3F-good-job! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-could-relate-to-this-but-not-dancing.-good-idea-and-story-%3Ad 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-their-blue-sweater.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-the-character-can-become-more-confident.-%E2%80%8B 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-overall-character-design%2C-the-different-color-eyes-are-awesome-and-i-like-the-hair.-the-apocolypse-idea-has-me-wondering-if-their-alone-or-if-they're-with-other-people. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-how-she-is-like-a-normal-teen-but-different-on-the-inside 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-danny-is-a-printer-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-what-does-a-printers-emotions-look-like-and-how-do-people-or-things-treat-him-for-taking-away-the-value-of-money-%E2%80%8B 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-that-she-was-hawaiian.--it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-she-would-do-if-she-made-her-own-music-for-herself-if-she-was-braver. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/love-ur-story--realy-insiyering 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-dogs-name-is-very-cool-and-the-story-would-be-nice. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-if-it-had-babies%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-really-enjoyed-the-appearance-of-the-first-character-and-i-think-the-personality-is-interesting.-i-really-want-to-see-the-shenanigans-that-happen-when-the-character-tries-to-make-a-friend! 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was-how-they-change-change-their-personality.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-how-the-two-character-express-their-feelings-to-each-other.-%E2%80%8B 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-most-interesting-about-this-character-was%2C-that-he-seems-like-a-very-big-jerk.-it-makes-me-wonder-more-about-why-he-is-popular-if-he-acts-like-that%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/this-is-really-cool-and-if-i-may-ask-they-go-by-they%2Fthem-if-may--not-wrong-and-i-think-that-that-is-very-unique-because-a-lot-of-people-are-choosing--gender-conforming-characters-which-is-fine.--what-kind-of-cancer-do-they-have-and-how-long-have-they-had-it%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-liked-the-drawings-but-its-interesting-the-differences-between-internal-and-external--features. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/i-love-the-concept-of-your-character-and-it-makes-me-wonder-in-what-ways-their-peers-makes-them-feel-alienated. 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/will-she-overcome-her-issues%3F-it-makes-me-wonder... 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/your-character-of-a-potato-in-a-suit-and-with-the-special-position-of-a-spy-really-triggers-imagination!-why-is-the-character-being-a-spy%3F-is-it-because-it-needs-to%2C-or-only-because-it-wants-to%3F 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/why-dose-she-hide-her-ears-!--she-should-own-her-differences--love-the-story- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/what-i-found-interesting.-is-how-brave-and-diligent-she-sounds-like%2C-it-makes-me-wonder-is-she-will-do-what-she-loves%2C-i-believe-she-will-do-it-with-her-intelligence.-- 2021-10-18 https://www.s1.storyxperiential.com/system-comments/the-thing-i-find-most-interesting-is-the-story-line. 2021-10-18