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I think that your stories show the scene well. I think that you should add more to the middle of the story. I think that you should explain more about what happens when he runs into the gas station because this could be a simulation where he is being taken care of in the outside world or something like ready player one where he needs food and water still. I think that your story is very suspenseful and could go in many directions.

Graham

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