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This story is interesting, what I feel is there could be more minor beats you could add to the plot, adding up the coherence. Like how the watch switches on and transports him, or like why he gets into a fight with the pirates sailing in the ship. Adding such beats would give clear explanation and understanding to the viewers.

Ayush

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