I think you did an amazing job but i think you could have explained the story more. but i think you did a good job

jacob

I really like the drawing of the anime character and especially his surprised expression.
I think you could've added some more internal features about your characters but other that that I really like it.

Yusuf

Really good drawings
Tell the people about how he is in the inside dont just show us
add color
this could make a really good story

Diego

Your drawings are amazing it looks so good good job on that
I liked how you described the character from the inside and outside
What I would change is the way you talked about the character because that paper was kind of hard to understand.

Victoria

Your drawings are amazing it looks so good good job on that
I liked how you described the character from the inside and outside
What I would change is the way you talked about the character because that paper was kind of hard to understand.

Victoria

Good art so far, I wish the roles of the characters and the relationship between them would have been expanded upon a bit more to make the story more clear. other than that the characters seem very well done

Hunter

I like the art but for some the names will be sort of hard to pronounce
how does this character rise

Preston

I really like your drawing and its featuers, I wish he would have described characteristics, and also I wish he would have described the characters in general. but I really love the art.

mia

I love the idea of a second character! have you thought about developing the avatar more by adding things like a struggle or goal

cindy

really nice drawings i like the concept where did the virus come from and i could read your script but you kept on moving the paper a lot really good tho

antonio

I love the idea of a second character! have you thought about developing the avatar more by adding things like a struggle or goal

cindy

the art is amazing. just wow i love it. I was i little confused with who the character was and what the avatar was for. but i like your ideas alot.

Maddie

Its cool. I would change you shuould use the drawing and put them in the spark. And nut just hold up paper.

Julieanne

I like how you added that his true power is friends, so Im interested to see how that will change the story in anyway. You should create a backstory on the virus overlord to show the reader/watcher the conflict in the story.

Gabriel

really well done...where did the virus overlord come from? fantastic art so far as well. i like this idea of not being afraid of anyone....i wonder how he will learn this? look forward to more!

tim

Fantastic work, i love this idea of friends being a true power. I can't wait to see how this story develops. really cool artwork. It makes me wonder what the key conflict in the story will be...and who is the virus overlord?? in the next next week try and find a video editing tool so you can submit just your picture with audio as we will be doing storyreels starting week 4

Brit