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Isis

The character's concept is very interesting. However, I feel as though she could be fleshed out or developed a bit better. Is there a particular reason her peers laugh at her dreams? Maybe a reason she's passionate/knows a lot about the ocean? Overall, I think she seems like a protagonist an audience can easily relate and connect to. Combined with the narwhal construction worker dream concept, she definitely isn't a dull character.

Rhoslyn

The idea is very creative and unique, it catches my attention! The one thing I would recommend is to clarify who the main character is, is it the girl or the narwhal? Who are we focusing on? Your drawing is very nice!

Frida

What I found most interesting about this character was how she is a fish construction worker! Its so cool

Noah

It's interesting that she is working on trains. It makes me wonder about how her peers think about her.

Fin

What I found most interesting about Luna was her dreams in build a train underwater! The idea and physical depiction of you character is awesome, and makes me curious to learn more about her story and how she will set out on her mission!
One thing I am wondering about within you potential story as it relates to your character is the connection between the real world and the dream world of being a narwhale. I think there is great potential in connecting a young girl's dreams to a imaginary character like a narwhale, but I think that you'll just have to be really clear in emphasizing who your ultimate main character is, the girl in the real world or your narwhale! (That way you avoid any possible confusion!) Your story and ideas are so awesome and I'm excited to see how this story will develop!

Chessie

Your character is amazing!! I love the idea that Luna has a dream that she is a narwhal who can't swim, and that it relates to her life in the real world. Your story makes me what to know if there was a reason that Luna imagined a narwhal, or if there is a mentor in her life that appears in the dream that guides her to be more confident in herself.

Isabella

Good job. What I found most interesting was the drawing of your character when she was dreaming (the narwhal drawing). It is a very nice drawing with lots of color! It makes me wonder what if Luna's dream came to life?

Kahiau

I like the depiction of Luna in her dream, I am curious about her portrayal in the real world. It makes me wonder if she is the only one living in this dream world. The idea also makes me question if the Narwhal character still lives and continues on while Luna is awake in the real world. For example does Luna come back into the dream world to find that the Narwhal character has been promoted, or fired? Also are these Lucid dreams and does Luna control the Narwhal in the dreams?

Lucas