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I like the fighting aliens is a good idea. I think the turn out will be sweet. good job.

Johnny

I like the idea a lot i think that this has a a lot of potential but i think it si a bit lacking in the emotions depart and maybe you could get a little bit more into why he has a big ego other than that i think you have a good base to build on

hadarya

What I found most interesting about this character was that, on the outside, he looks like an extremely strong guy, yet on the inside, he's lonely and doesn't have any friends. It's a pretty cool, smart, and unique idea. It makes me wonder more about why aliens are involved. To me, the aliens just seem too out of place. Like, the story could've probably made more sense if there weren't any aliens involved. It also makes me wonder more about how these aliens will be able to fit into the story and how they'll help the character to gain more friends and achieve his goals.

Zinedine

well done, sad it got cut off, next time check your video before upload or add an ending screen to avoid that. i'm curious what he needs to learn? either way you have an original concept here and i can't wait for more...i wonder why he's lonley? his ego? can't wait for more

Brit

A bodybuilder fighting aliens isn't something you see every day! Unique personality too. That said, though, the aliens seem like an outside threat rather than an internal flaw he needs to fix.

Duane

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