I like how this is kind of like a human pov version of the bee movie. Will there be a turning point for character development for him? what will his conflict be?

Sam

I really like your character & the goal he is trying to achieve, saving the bees. But what this makes me wonder what happened to the bees in the first-place? Is this set in a world where we killed all the bees due to pesticides?. I think you guys did a really great job with your character, maybe some more info on the situation.

Elijah

I think this idea has alot of potential in terms of saving a species. I think that it could have a deeper plot like a great force stopping him instead of a few people. I love the attention to age and height.

Parker

What I found most interesting about this character was the importance and attention to is age. It make me wonder more about how this will play a role in the story.

Will

The most interesting part is how he wants to save the bees and I like how he likes bees so much

Emma

the thing i found most interesting is you showed what he looked like from 7 to 72 this makes me wonder how this contributes to the story

Michael

I like that your character has a age change, but why? what part of your story does that tie into?

Alana

Great character, nice drawing. How exactly do you plan to make him save the bees, and how aggressive can he be while in an argument about what he wants?

Jeffrey

needs a little more story line and more detail for the character a little more effort on the drawing

jackson

Can mark change his age or does he just develop through out the short? also I think you have some good internal characteristics but i would add more external characteristics

Kaelyn

This concept is excellent! I thought it was incredibly interesting that people were happiest when bees were alive. It makes me wonder what happened to the bees in Mark's world. Is this a depiction of our current situation, set a few years in the future, or is it a dystopian/utopian society where bees have a completely different significance? How many years does Mark spend trying to save the bees, and to what avail? Does he succeed in the end? Who does he encounter that disagrees with his views (family members, friends, etc.)?

Dylan

What I found the most interesting was how all of what he wants to do was save the bees but then you said how they eventually went away; It made me think more about how the people interacted with him because his passion was to save the bees and that was how he spent his time.

David