I like how detailed your drawing is. How can you add more detail to his story to make his character development more clear? I really like how you used a backstory and worked it into your story,

Sam

Time travel is one of my favorite concepts and this story looks to be very interesting. There's so much to wonder about too. What time is this set in? What causes the parrot abs, is it a major trait in this world? Where did he get the power to control time? I would be interested to see the full story of how the relationship with the daughter developed and how losing his family affected his life.

Tristan

This idea is amazing and all of your information is there you really can tell that this person really cares about changing himself and that is really cool this character is amazing and has so much potential. however I would like to get some more back story on his little girl and who kidnapped her and why he has to save her. Other than that i can really see threw this character and that is so cool

Hadarya

I love the drawing and how interesting the story sounds and I wonder if he will save his daughter.

Dilan

He sounds like an interesting character but will we hear about his backstory? It seems to be a rather important part of who he is. Also why does he still act tough? Is he worried that he is going to have to fight someone or something? This seems like a good start to a revenge film.

Aidan

I love that the bird has abs!
I really like the character's motivation, and its really cool that you gave him the ability to turn back time, but (it seems like) he won't be able to save his family and will have to face the consequences of his actions. It will be interesting to see where his journey takes him and the internal conflict he will have to face. I can't wait to see where you take this!

Katie

This character really seems to be realistic. Very interesting characteristic traits. It makes me wonder how his story would end!

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Ayush

This guy is AWESOME. He has realistic struggles and an extremely cool design to boot. I can't help but wonder what got his family killed. Love it!

Duane

I like the depth and complexity of this character, and the emotions captured in the art. I’m curious about how the character is able to change or interfere with the past.

Adrianne

1. I found the name to be very interesting
2. It makes me wonder what he wants to save his daughter from and it sounds like there is time travel involved (the drawing is SO cool)

Bella