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The idea I found most interesting in this submission was 'what if the sun never rose'. It makes me wonder about how much daily life would change, and what would happen if the sun did rise one day.
Magda
I would love to see a story where the sun never rose. I wonder if this means that the sun has never risen before or if this is a new development.
Ava
I really liked the second and last ideas! The second makes me wonder about why a person would want to log into a digital world? Do they feel like their lives are missing something, do. they go online to talk to their friends or a romance interest? The last one interests me because it feels like a good premise for an apocalypse story. Without sunlight there can be drastic mood and health effects. Would the lack of sunlight help spread a rampant disease, create a vibrant new humanity that replaces the beauty of sunlight with vibrant neon streets, or would the lack of sunlight be metaphorically used for a character that looses someone important to them and after overcoming grief sees the sun again? You have good premises just remember how you can use the worlds you have created to tie in an emotional aspect that will help your audience relate to your story.
Audrey
The last idea about if the sun never rose is kind of interesting. Mostly because this idea has a real world counterpart (Alaska) and how some days its only the sun and some only the moon. You could research how life works and how you connect to your storyline if you choose to do this idea. I'm wondering how this story could bring Character growth or at all in this What if... Idea. The over all submission was really good, continue with that idea because it has a lot of potential.
Bryce
The idea I found most interesting was the digital world one!
Angela
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